issue150~强烈球拍啊，自己的第一篇issue啊~

绿竹猗猗UID: 2762429

ISSUE150 "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

As the development of television and worldwide computer connections, people can easily get information of a great many places they want to be familiar with. Even from the media, people who have never been there can know more than others who have visited the place themselves. However, mass of media can only be an aid, it can never replace tourism. In fact, the general sensible impact can never bu substituted by verbal discriptions, pictures, videos and so on. Having recognised that visiting personally is a common as well as a basic necessity of human being, in order to indulge one's curiosity, people choose to visit a place in person instead of learning about it on TV or through the internet, eventhough that provides large scale of material concerned with the place. Bird's Nest, Beijing National Stadium of the 29th Olympic Games, is the world's largest steel structure. Before I went there, I have skiped so many backgrounds of it, including the sketches, various photos, plenty of compliments and critics, even the 360-degree art, my friend also sent me a small model of the Nest. In spite of so many knowing about the stadium, I still wanted a personal tourism. In fact, the more I knew, the more I looked forward the visit. Eventually when I stood in front of the tremendous Nest, I was shocked by the spectacular momentum. Just like me, we human being really want to explore
The unknown by themselves, which is our instinct.
Furthermore, each people has his own angle to observe a place, yet his angle may not satisfy yours.The Terracotta Army, only two hours' drive from my home, is a magnificent place. I have visited there twice, but I pay more attention on the manufacture of it, instead of the history in detail on the official introduction. However, the former Russian president Vladimir Putin, once worked for the KGB( national security agency of the Soviet Union), asked five distinctive questions on his first tour there. The questions are: Why the shoes of each warriors are different from
others? Why there are two rings on the back of the warriors? Why no stirrups on the terra cotta horses? Why the horsres are so short in Qin Dynasty? What is the usage of the bump on the wheel? The experience in intelligence agency and the charisma of a great leader formed his unique angle of observing. Therefore, people need tourism rather than information from the media to content himself.
Moreover, every new tour to a same place will have a new feeling. Ma Weidu, an expert of Chinese antique, visit the Forbidden City frequently, though he knows much more about it than most people. He says that everytime he goes there, crowded or not crowed, rainy or sunny, he will have different feelings.
It is true that the techniques of television and worldwide computer connections is developing rapidly, such as the 3D, virtual reality and so on. Avatar, a 2009 American science fiction epic film, with fantastic 3D techniques, discribles another world just like a real one. We must admit that even if people stay at home, he can get enough information about the outside world. Yet the media cannot offer us tacthal sense, which we human being need to perceive the world. Though it may satify our tacfile, our inner curiosity cannot be satisfied either.
In sum, internet and TVset make our lives more convinient and provide us a large quantity of information. However, because of our instinct curiosity and own characteristics, we cannot be pleased without personal tourism.

kulewy531UID: 2603031

ISSUE150 "Because of television and worldwide computer connections, people can now become familiar with a great many places that they have never visited. As a result, tourism will soon become obsolete."

As the development of television and worldwide computer connections, people can easily get information of a great many places they want to be familiar with. Even from the media, people who have never been there can know more than others who have visited the place themselves. However, mass of media can only be an aid, it can never replace tourism. In fact, the general sensible（用得不对，自己查查） impact(这个概念前面没有提到过，有点跳跃) can never bu substituted by verbal discriptions, pictures, videos and so on. Having recognised that visiting personally is a common as well as a basic necessity of human being, in order to indulge（这个词有点贬义） one's curiosity（这个观点有待用例子证明，而且前置定语这么长不太好）, people choose to visit a place in person instead of learning about it on TV or through the internet, eventhough that provides large scale of material concerned with the place. Bird's Nest, Beijing National Stadium of the 29th Olympic Games, is the world's largest steel structure. Before I went there, I have skiped so many backgrounds of it, including the sketches, various photos, plenty of compliments and critics, even the 360-degree art, my friend also sent me a small model of the Nest. In spite of so many knowing about the stadium, I still wanted a personal tourism. In fact, the more I knew, the more I looked forward the visit. Eventually when I stood in front of the tremendous Nest, I was shocked by the spectacular momentum. Just like me, we human beings really want to explore. （例子用得很好）The unknown by themselves, which is our instinct.（这句话话不太理解，而且和上下问不太沾边啊）


Furthermore, each people has his own angle to observe a place, yet his angle may not satisfy yours.（逻辑有点发散啦，要扣住“传媒”和“亲身经历”的比较，下一段也是，还有Furthermore和moreover用得太生硬了， 干脆不要）The Terracotta Army, only two hours' drive from my home, is a magnificent place. I have visited there twice, but I pay more attention on the manufacture of it, instead of the history in detail on the official introduction. However, the former Russian president Vladimir Putin, once worked for the KGB( national security agency of the Soviet Union), asked five distinctive questions on his first tour there. The questions are: Why the shoes of each warriors are different from others? Why there are two rings on the back of the warriors? Why no stirrups on the terra cotta horses? Why the horsres are so short in Qin Dynasty? What is the usage of the bump on the wheel? The experience in intelligence agency and the charisma of a great leader formed his unique angle of observing. Therefore, people need tourism rather than information from the media to content himself.

Moreover, every new tour to a same place will have a new feeling. Ma Weidu, an expert of Chinese antique, visit the Forbidden City frequently, though he knows much more about it than most people. He says that everytime he goes there, crowded or not crowed, rainy or sunny, he will have different feelings.
It is true that the techniques of television and worldwide computer connections is developing rapidly, such as the 3D, virtual reality and so on. Avatar, a 2009 American science fiction epic film, with fantastic 3D techniques, discribles another world just like a real one. We must admit that even if people stay at home, he can get enough information about the outside world. Yet the media cannot offer us tacthal sense, which we human being need to perceive the world. Though it may satify our tacfile, our inner curiosity cannot be satisfied either.（这句话没读懂，所以搞不清这个让步逻辑是怎么回事）

In sum, internet and TV set make our lives more convinient and provide us a large quantity of information. However, because of our instinct curiosity and own characteristics, we cannot be pleased without personal tourism.（结尾段可以写长点，把每段的中心意思都重现一下）