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TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

Meeting the individual needs and interests is a proper way to unearth the student’s potential, which often leads them to a great success in the realm. And also, to participate into the cooperation in modern society, a student has to be an expert in some specific area. Under this two premises, meeting the students’ needs and interests is the way to implement effective education as will be elaborated below.

To begin with, the individual needs and interests should be clarified here. Of course, they are some specifics which reflect the students’ characteristics and special interests or curiosities in the certain realm. However, these individual needs and interests shouldn't be only an impulse which are not stable and can't endure a long time. So, the first thing the education has to do is giving them the ability to find out in what realm their interests lie. That's why some basic education is conveyed to the students to help them refine the real needs and interests which are worthwhile to be met.

Meeting the students' individual needs and interests triggers their inner potential efficiently and make them accomplished in the certain realm. It is true that interests are the best teachers, Kai-Fu Lee, the antecedent vice president of Google is a vivid example to explain this. Suffered one year of boring study in a discipline of social science in the university, he tried to learn many courses in other area and finally found that it is in computer science that his interest lies. After changing to the realm of computer science, his potential capability burns up and make him such a successful figure now. Through Lee's experience, we could see that strong contrasts are suggested whether the individual needs and interests are met. His excellent transcripts and the preeminent performance in practical projects acclaim the effectiveness of individual-oriented education.

One of the purposes of the education is to provide talents to the practical society. In the modern deeply developed world, specialists who have unique competence to finish the specific problem are widely required, and can be cultivated in the education meeting the individual needs and interests. Referring to the job market, students who indentified their own interests, and earned a lot of knowledge both in theory and practice in the university always find admirable jobs, while their counterparts are still wandering what kind of jobs to be taken. Nowadays almost all work needs cooperation between adept specialists. Everyone is just a spike in the whole project and required to do his/her specific job perfectly, so as to make the project an accomplishment. Otherwise, students who dabbles many realms, without any further study in their interested area may suffer superseding in the practical society. By conducting the students to find their interests and making great effort to meet these interests, the education can suppress this tragedy, and thus be effectiveness both to the students and the society.

In addition, it is not so proper for the speaker to claim that meeting the individual needs and the interests is the “only way” to make the education effective. To help the students to set the world perspective and value system is also a main egg in education’s basket, and it could be achieved by formal standard education and this also makes the education effective. On the other hand, with limited resource, to meet each student’s needs and interests may be unrealistic contemporary in some area to some extent.

One flaw can’t abstruse the virtues. Meeting the individual needs and interests, benefiting both students and society, is undoubtly the way to make the education effective.

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TOPIC: ISSUE51 - "Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."

Meeting the individual needs and interests is a proper way to unearth the student’s potential, which often leads them to a great success in the realm. And also, to participate into the cooperation in modern society, a student has to be an expert in some specific area. Under this【these】 two premises, meeting the students’ needs and interests is the way to implement effective education as will be 【will be可去】elaborated below.

To begin with, the individual needs and interests should be clarified here. Of course, they are some specifics which reflect the students’ characteristics and special interests or curiosities in the certain realm. However, these individual needs and interests shouldn't be only an impulse which are not stable and can't endure a long time. So, the first thing the education has to do is giving them the ability to find out in what realm their interests lie. That's why some basic education is conveyed to the students to help them refine the real needs and interests which are worthwhile to be met.

Meeting the students' individual needs and interests triggers their inner potential efficiently and make them accomplished in the certain realm. It is true that interests are the best teachers, Kai-Fu Lee, the antecedent【former 会不会好些】 vice president of Google is a vivid example to explain this. Suffered one year of boring study in a discipline of social science in the university, he tried to learn many courses in other area and finally found that it is in computer science that his interest lies. After changing to the realm of computer science, his potential capability burns up and make him such a successful figure now. Through Lee's experience, we could see that strong contrasts are suggested whether the individual needs and interests are met. His excellent transcripts and the preeminent performance in practical projects acclaim the effectiveness of individual-oriented education.【这句不错】

One of the purposes of the education is to provide talents to the practical society. In the modern deeply developed world, specialists who have unique competence to finish the specific problem are widely required, and can be cultivated in the education meeting the individual needs and interests. Referring to the job market, students who indentified【identified】 their own interests, and earned a lot of knowledge both in theory and practice in the university always find admirable jobs, while their counterparts are still wandering what kind of jobs to be taken. Nowadays almost all work needs cooperation between adept specialists. Everyone is just a spike in the whole project and required to do his/her specific job perfectly, so as to make the project an accomplishment. Otherwise, students who dabbles many realms, without any further study in their interested area may suffer superseding in the practical society. By conducting the students to find their interests and making great effort to meet these interests, the education can suppress this tragedy, and thus be effectiveness both to the students and the society.

In addition, it is not so proper for the speaker to claim that meeting the individual needs and the interests is the “only way” to make the education effective. To help the students to set the world perspective and value system is also a main egg in education’s basket, and it could be achieved by formal standard education and this also makes the education effective. On the other hand, with limited resource, to meet each student’s needs and interests may be unrealistic contemporary in some area to some extent.

One flaw can’t abstruse 【应该是obscure吧……】the virtues. Meeting the individual needs and interests, benefiting both students and society, is undoubtly【undoubtedly】 the way to make the education effective.


总体不错，虽有些小错， but one flaw cannot obscure the splendor of the jade!

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TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."


Whether students should have skepticism in their studies is a long discussed question, and the author here states that they should. As far as I am concerned though skepticism may cause unstable situation, I agree basically with the author that students should bring skepticism into their learning.

Turning first to the way, time has changed and skepticism will not trigger chaos necessarily. Comparing with the turbulence aroused by ignorance and skepticism based on overall understanding on the issue there are essential differences. Now we are capable to reach various information which helps us to know or even respect the differences and thereby chaos would not happened as usually as it did. Besides skepticism would enable students to think over the problems thoroughly and then, do deliberate investigation. When they have questions in the problems, as a human nature they may, at the same time find and dig information from all available channels. In this course students learn the knowledge not passively but passionately. They find the answers and solve the problems on their own. They have changed their passive learner identities into active problem solver identities. They may taste the satisfaction of achievement. We can imagine students could accordingly cultivate their critical thinking over the issues their came across.

However excessive questioning would results in unstable condition. There are times when people cannot get to know all aspects to the problems especially issues related to national securities. The disadvantages would emerge when they conflict with some others’ interests. Consider the protest for Iraq war, people keep questioning whether the war is just and other matters attaching to the warfare like loss of lives and scandal about inhumanely treating the prisoners of war. Allow me to put people's concern away firstly, the protests could somehow stall the work and ordinary life of other people. Factories' production goes down and hundreds of citizens have no way to get to their positions right on time for the roads are jammed or even there are no buses to take. Hence excessive skepticism would causes chaos and damages.

Finally the most significant object in education is not about skepticism, but the process of individual judgment and investigation for evidence. Through this they would learn to know when they should bring skepticism and, how far should they go on questioning. As mentioned above, students would therefore form a habit of thinking on their own in the process of deliberate investigation. What we need kids to learn in education is the knowledge no less than the ability to judge, to question, to search and to make conclusion themselves.

To sum up students should bring certain question with them while they are absorbing knowledge rather than accept it passively, but not excessive skepticism that questions everything without a course. We should notice the crucial point that it is the spirit of individual thinking that matters.

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TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."


Whether students should have skepticism in their studies is a long discussed question, and the author here states that they should. As far as I am concerned though skepticism may cause unstable situation, I agree basically with the author that students should bring skepticism into their learning.

Turning first to the way, time has changed and skepticism will not trigger chaos necessarily. Comparing with the turbulence aroused by ignorance and skepticism based on overall understanding on the issue（，隔开比较好，为什么这里突然出现ignorance??等于skepticism??） there are essential differences. Now we are capable to reach various information which helps us to know or even respect the differences and thereby chaos would not happened as usually as it did. Besides skepticism would enable students to think over the problems thoroughly and then, do deliberate investigation. When they have questions in the problems, as a human nature they may, at the same time find and dig（有点别扭，是不是应该改成as a human nature, they may, at the same time, find and dig 我也不是很确定？？可以讨论一下，如果我不对希望你能告诉我。） information from all available channels. In this course students learn the knowledge not passively but passionately. They find the answers and solve the problems on their own. They have changed their passive learner identities into active problem solver identities. They may taste the satisfaction of achievement. We can imagine students could accordingly cultivate their critical thinking over the issues their came across.

However excessive questioning would results in unstable condition. There are times when people cannot get to know all aspects to the problems especially issues related to national securities. The disadvantages would emerge when they conflict with some others’ interests. Consider the protest for Iraq war, people keep questioning whether the war is just and other matters attaching to the warfare like loss of lives and scandal about inhumanely treating the prisoners of war. Allow me to put people's concern away firstly, the protests could somehow stall the work and ordinary life of other people. Factories' production goes down and hundreds of citizens have no way to get to their positions right on time（，） for the roads are jammed or even there are no buses to take. Hence excessive skepticism would causes chaos and damages.
【这一段的例子描写很精彩，不过我感觉与观点联系得不是很好，首先人们对于protest我觉得跟skepticism还是不一样的吧??
根据你后面描写的chaos的场景，你应该是指示威游行吧，那么换成protest demonstration或者parade是不是好一些。
另外例子跟学习似乎没什么关系，当然这一点有些吹毛求疵~~】
【有个想法，一二两段按照分别按照“学而不思则罔，死而不学则殆”的观点安排，我始终觉得导致unstable condition的说明有点过~~欢迎讨论！！！】

Finally the most significant object in education is not about skepticism, but the process of individual judgment and investigation for evidence. Through this they would learn to know when they should bring skepticism and, how far should they go on questioning. As mentioned above, students would therefore form a habit of thinking（，） on their own（，） in the process of deliberate investigation. What we need kids to learn in education is the knowledge no less than the ability to judge, to question, to search and to make conclusion themselves.
【这段的观点不错】

To sum up students should bring certain question with them while they are absorbing knowledge rather than accept it passively, but not excessive skepticism that questions everything without a course. We should notice the crucial point that it is the spirit of individual thinking that matters.

总体感觉挺好的~
上面主要写了一些我认为的问题，如有不当，请指出~~

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感觉写得时候思路受限，展不开~~
自己好好修改了一下，还是这个样子，狠拍吧！！！从各方面！！

TOPIC: ISSUE43 - "To be an effective leader, a public official must maintain the highest ethical and moral standards."

Politics and moral, differing from each other in some extents, both aim at regulating people's behavior. a political system would benefit from introducing some moral principles and become more sufficient, and it's on what the speaker's claim bases. Broadly speaking, a public official should keep his/her ethical and moral in high level to be an effective leader, but things should be assured not to extend to another extreme.

A public official with high ethical and moral standards is usually beloved by the general public, which makes their relationships smooth and the political activities easily to be implemented. For popular masses, the basic moral feelings are the most direct early criteria adopted to verify a politician and his actions, and the one thought to be moral is admired. Taking Zhou Enlai, the first and most respectable minister of the People's Republic of China, he is greatly accepted not only for his remarkable political wit, but also for his high moral. The procession in his funeral, spontaneously gathered by the people, stretched about ten miles is a vivid approbation for this sublime leader. In his tenure, with the strong buttress offered by general public, China reinforced its foundation and made great progress in many realms such as economic, education, science, humanity and so on. What's more, his charisma is also admired abroad, and helped to develop the relationship between America and China through the famous Ping-pong interaction.

Also, officials with high ethical and moral standards tend to propose acceptable and practical policies. Taking the people's places to make effort to eliminate the inequities, poverties, and environment pollutions, makes the policies admirable and often end with a smooth implementation. On the other hand, polices without any consideration for the public issues, aiming at increasing the GDPs solely, may seem aggressive at first glance, but is doomed to fail eventually. Nowadays the unbalance and unfriendly developments of the world receives the nature’s alert. This may have something to do with the economic pressure, to some extent, reflects the immortalities of officials in profound. They partially pursuit for political feats, and pay little attention to improve the citizen’s residential standards, as well as protect the natural environment. Fortunately, the problems are getting more consideration, but attentions are different from solutions, morality officials are eagerly needed to redirect both our society and the nature back into the balance orbits.

However, an official is not essential to be a moralist, otherwise things may turn to the opposite end. Sometimes the general public extends the moral standards too far for public officials. Bill Clinton was once pushed to be the summit of immoral leaders because of his improper sexual relationship with Monica Lewinsky. No defence for him, the America’s economic was keeping stable increasing while the society was broadly harmonious during his presidency. The extraordinary approval rating also suggested him an effective leader. As supervisors, people should maintain the morality criteria with in some extent and not be so grave, giving the public officials reasonable private area if his/her actions have no harms to the public, otherwise their effectiveness may be disturbed.

Used properly, moral standards give so much support to the political realm. Leaders with high ethical and moral standards are required to make politics more effectiveness, especially in this unbalance and uproar world in the contemporary.

suchana03UID: 2764281

Politics and moral, differing from each other in some extents, both aim at regulating people's behavior. a political system would benefit from introducing some moral principles and become more sufficient, and it's on what the speaker's claim bases. Broadly speaking, a public official should keep his/her ethical and moral in high level to be an effective leader, but things should be assured not to extend to another extreme.开头第一句可以修改一下，上来直接讲politics什么的有点突兀

A public official with high ethical and moral standards is usually beloved by the general public, which makes their relationships smooth and the political activities easily to be implemented. For popular masses, the basic moral feelings are the most direct early criteria adopted to verify a politician and his actions, and the one thought to be moral is admired. Taking Zhou Enlai, the first and most respectable minister of the People's Republic of China, he is greatly accepted not only for his remarkable political wit, but also for his high moral. 到底怎么high moral了？没分析The procession in his funeral, spontaneously gathered by the people, stretched about ten miles is a vivid approbation for this sublime leader. In his tenure, with the strong buttress offered by general public, China reinforced its foundation and made great progress in many realms such as economic, education, science, humanity and so on. What's more, his charisma is also admired abroad, and helped to develop the relationship between America and China through the famous Ping-pong interaction.结尾可以总结一下

Also, officials with high ethical and moral standards tend to propose acceptable and practical policies. Taking the people's places to make effort to eliminate the inequities, poverties, and environment pollutions, makes the policies admirable and often end with a smooth implementation. On the other hand, polices without any consideration for the public issues, aiming at increasing the GDPs solely, may seem aggressive at first glance, but is doomed to fail eventually. Nowadays the unbalance and unfriendly developments of the world receives the nature’s alert. This may have something to do with the economic pressure, to some extent, reflects the immortalities of officials in profound. They partially pursuit for political feats, and pay little attention to improve the citizen’s residential standards, as well as protect the natural environment. Fortunately, the problems are getting more consideration, but attentions are different from solutions, morality officials are eagerly needed to redirect both our society and the nature back into the balance orbits.这一段是观点+例子，从第2句开始可以详细分析

However, an official is not essential to be a moralist, otherwise things may turn to the opposite end. Sometimes the general public extends the moral standards too far for public officials. Bill Clinton was once pushed to be the summit of immoral leaders because of his improper sexual relationship with Monica Lewinsky. No defence for him, the America’s economic was keeping stable increasing while the society was broadly harmonious during his presidency. The extraordinary approval rating also suggested him an effective leader. As supervisors, people should maintain the morality criteria with in some extent and not be so grave, giving the public officials reasonable private area if his/her actions have no harms to the public, otherwise their effectiveness may be disturbed.

Used properly, moral standards give so much support to the political realm. Leaders with high ethical and moral standards are required to make politics more effectiveness, especially in this unbalance and uproar world in the contemporary.总阶段缺少标志词，和开头的问题一样，显得突兀，看了也不知道这一段的作用，直到读完才明白
语言没大问题，思路清晰，就是段落标志再明显些

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TOPIC: ISSUE115 - "It is through the use of logic and of precise, careful measurement that we become aware of our progress. Without such tools, we have no reference points to indicate how far we have advanced or retreated."

    While I agree that logic, precise and careful measurement can reflect progress, excessive emphasis on that might inevitably overlook the assessment other indicators can bring about, especially in terms of abstract matters. Therefore, in my view, we need to seek a balance between the different references we use, whether it is research or social progress, as discussed below.
    Admittedly, precise measurement is a common tool to assess progress, especially in scientific research. For instance, in the research development of hybrid-rice, a most direct way to judge whether a cultivating method works is the quantity of rice an acre of land is able to produce. The more rice a piece of land produces, the more successful the hybrid technology is. As a result, measurement is a popular instrument for scientists to be aware of their progress.
    Similarly, a nation's progress is reflected by precise measurement as well. GDP, a measurement of economic power is used to indicate a country's speed of development. One that maintains a relatively constant high level, as is the case of China, is generally believed to enjoy steady economic progress. And per capita income level is an indicator of social welfare. The higher the income level, the more material benefits the citizens are likely to enjoy. Therefore, careful measurement enables a country to be aware of its economic and social progress on a whole.
    Nevertheless, it does not amount to the conclusion that precise, careful measurement alone is the only way for us to know our progress. After all, while productivity, economy and income can be measured, intangible social benefits and mental happiness, which are also vital indicators of progress, cannot find reflection in logic measurement.
In science, social benefits are another indicator. After all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to improve human's living conditions. If a research result is potentially harmful, and then whatever precise measurement is used, it cannot be called a success. A case in point is the invention is insecticide. Though this chemical research product is highly effective in killing insects in large numbers, it is now discovered to bear a major responsibility for the depletion of ozone layer, leading many environmentalists to question whether it is a social bless or a human disaster. Therefore, though it stands out if measured by the number of insects to be killed with only one droplet, the insecticide’s damage to atmosphere poses a threat to human survival, which, seen from another angle, even indicates a retreat of quality of life.
It is the same with a nation’s progress. A society with rapid economic development but a diminishing sense of happiness is not believed to have been ** progress. After all, the ultimate purpose of economic advancement is to improve citizens’ life. And a nation where its residents suffer mental unhappiness due to high working pressure cannot be said to achieve social progress. Because the mass population is the subject of society and their living conditions are a direct criterion for evaluation a nation. As a result, people’s abstract mental state cannot be measured through logics and precision. Therefore, in assessing a country’s progress, individual feeling that cannot be measured directly also needs to be considered.
In sum, precise measurement renders a convenient instrument to quantify productivity and total economic volume. Yet, without a fair understanding of the function of abstract matters in evaluation, we are at risk of missing the right judgment.

jst.sunnyUID: 2751721

TOPIC: ISSUE115 - "It is through the use of logic and of precise, careful measurement that we become aware of our progress. Without such tools, we have no reference points to indicate how far we have advanced or retreated."


While I agree that logic, precise and careful measurement can reflect progress, excessive emphasis on that might inevitably//既然might了又为何inevitably？// overlook the assessment other indicators can bring about, especially in terms of abstract matters. Therefore, in my view, we need to seek a balance between the different references we use, whether it is research or social progress, as discussed below.

Admittedly, precise measurement is a common tool to assess progress, especially in scientific research. For instance, in the research development of hybrid-rice, a most direct way to judge whether a cultivating method works is the quantity of rice an acre of land is able to produce. The more rice a piece of land produces, the more successful the hybrid technology is. As a result, measurement is a popular instrument for scientists to be aware of their progress.

Similarly, a nation's progress is reflected by precise measurement as well//感觉这里把is reflected改为can be reflected更好//. GDP, a measurement of economic power is used to indicate a country's speed of development. One that maintains a relatively constant high level, as is the case of China, is generally believed to enjoy steady economic progress. And per capita income level is an indicator of social welfare. The higher the income level, the more material benefits the citizens are likely to enjoy. Therefore, careful measurement enables a country to be aware of its economic and social progress on a whole.
Nevertheless, it does not amount to the conclusion that precise, careful measurement alone is the only way//把alone去了怎样？// for us to know our progress. After all, while productivity, economy and income can be measured, intangible social benefits and mental happiness, which are also vital indicators of progress, cannot find reflection in logic measurement.

In science, social benefits are another indicator. After all, the ultimate aim of scientific research is to improve human's living conditions. If a research result is potentially harmful, and then whatever precise measurement is used, it cannot be called a success. A case in point is the invention is insecticide. Though this chemical research product is highly effective in killing insects in large numbers, it is now discovered to bear a major responsibility for the depletion of ozone layer, leading many environmentalists to question whether it is a social bless or a human disaster. Therefore, though it stands out if measured by the number of insects to be killed with only one droplet, the insecticide’s damage to atmosphere poses a threat to human survival, which, seen from another angle, even indicates a retreat of quality of life.

It is the same with a nation’s progress. A society with rapid economic development but a diminishing sense of happiness is not believed to have been ** progress. After all, the ultimate purpose of economic advancement is to improve citizens’ life. And a nation where its residents suffer mental unhappiness due to high working pressure cannot be said to achieve social progress. Because the mass population is the subject of society and their living conditions are a direct criterion for evaluation a nation. As a result, people’s abstract mental state cannot be measured through logics and precision. Therefore, in assessing a country’s progress, individual feeling that cannot be measured directly also needs to be considered.
In sum, precise measurement renders a convenient instrument to quantify productivity and total economic volume. Yet, without a fair understanding of the function of abstract matters in evaluation, we are at risk of missing the right judgment.

总体感觉不错，就科学和社会两方面分别讨论。不过在word中明显感觉你论证段中赞成的那两段要比反对的那两段短，看起来十分不舒服，其实在论据中随便再写写就能把各段的字数弄得基本差不多了。另外你只提到了progress没提regress，在论证段的开头或结尾加上这点吧还是。语言方面不算太好，但比我强。

jst.sunnyUID: 2751721

TOPIC: ISSUE8 - "It is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public."
WORDS: 531          TIME: 02:58:44          DATE: 2010/3/14 16:58:37

Should political leaders to withhold some information from the public as the speaker asserts? I concede with the speaker to the extent that the action do not hurt the benefit of the public or is for the public's advantage in the long run, considering some information's opening to public do nothing good to society and even is harmful.

In the first place, informations about the problem that will lead fear or hysteria in society should be keeped unkown to society as long as it can be sovled secretly. Just imagine what a situation will the society be and how peaple and mass media will react if the national defence system is attacked by hackers, where they from and what they want to do still unknown, and, more seriously, the system have not be restored, which means the whole contry is exposed to enemy without the ability to couterattack if they are to take advantage of it. Whatever, the public's hysteria, fear, and anger will attribute nothing to the  reinstatement of defence system.So information like this had better be released after the problem being sovled.

In the second place, it is important and necessary for political leaders to survive in the political game to withhold information from the public. Inessential things, which have nothing or little, if any, to do with political affairs in itself, must be concealed in order not to used by political enemy. For example, a political leader is always grunting when sleep or sniffling because of something, which will not weaken his or her ability dealing with political business, however, the publicity of these things will damage indisputably  his or her impression in the electorate. Publicity of a political leader's every detail privacy will undoubtedly undermine his or her reputation and finally put an end to his or her political life.

Another reason I assent to the speaker has to do with confidentiality. Confidential information related to the security of country's regime, defence and economy should be held back from public. One can never make public his or her base line before negotiating with an economic competitor if he or she want to maximize your interest in the negotiation. If a political leader fails to keep these information secret, he or she will not go very long to see his or her end of political life.

Admittedly, some information is often necessary and even desirable to withhold from the public, nevertheless, political leaders should never make use of his or her power to get pesonal interest or do harm to public by deceive his or her citizen. Take example for Nixon, 37th president of the US, who became the first president to resign from office, trying to achieve personal interest in the Wategate scandal and finaly lose the presidency. Any political leader who conduct an business not transparently, and that business is excluded from the three conditions mentioned above, will abandon by his or her people in any democratic society.

To sum up, withholding some information from public should be permited if only it is for the public's benefit, at least not harm peaple's interests. For the deed that keep information secret for personal interest must be forbided.

sunmintijmuUID: 2692476

TOPIC: ISSUE8 - "It is often necessary, even desirable, for political leaders to withhold information from the public."
WORDS: 531          TIME: 02:58:44          DATE: 2010/3/14 16:58:37

Should political leaders to withhold some information from the public as the speaker asserts? I concede with the speaker to the extent that the action do not hurt the benefit of the public or is for the public's advantage in the long run, considering some information's opening to public do nothing good to society and even is harmful.

In the first place, informations(information) about the problem that will lead fear or hysteria in society should be keeped(去掉) unkown to society as long as it can be sovled（solved） secretly（properly？）. Just imagine what a situation will the society be and how peaple and mass media will react if the national defence system is attacked by hackers, where they from and what they want to do still unknown, and, more seriously, the system have not be restored, which means the whole contry is exposed to enemy without the ability to couterattack if they are to take advantage of it. Whatever, the public's hysteria, fear, and anger will attribute nothing to the  reinstatement of defence system. So information like this had better be released after the problem being sovled.

In the second place, it is important and necessary for political leaders to survive in the political game to withhold information from the public. Inessential things, which have nothing or little, if any, to do with political affairs in itself, must be concealed in order not to used by political enemy. For example, a political leader is always grunting when sleep or sniffling because of something, which will not weaken his or her ability dealing with political business, however, the publicity of these things will damage indisputably  his or her impression in the electorate. Publicity of a political leader's every detail privacy will undoubtedly undermine his or her reputation and finally put an end to his or her political life.

Another reason I assent to the speaker has to do with confidentiality. Confidential information related to the security of country's regime, defence and economy should be held back from public. One can never make public his or her base line before negotiating with an economic competitor if he or she want to maximize your interest in the negotiation. If a political leader fails to keep these information secret, he or she will not go very long to see his or her end of political life.

Admittedly, some information is often necessary and even desirable to withhold from the public, nevertheless, political leaders should never make use of his or her power to get pesonal interest or do harm to public by deceive his or her citizen. Take example for Nixon, 37th president of the US, who became the first president to resign from office, trying to achieve personal interest in the Wategate scandal and finaly lose the presidency. Any political leader who conduct an business not transparently, and that business is excluded from the three conditions mentioned above, will abandon by his or her people in any democratic society.

To sum up, withholding some information from public should be permited if only it is for the public's benefit, at least not harm peaple's interests. For the deed that keep information secret for personal interest must be forbided.
总体感觉还不错，观点表达的也算清楚，不过作者倾向于withhold information，是不是有点一边倒呢？另外注意单词的拼写和简单的语法。需要细心。

sunmintijmuUID: 2692476

TOPIC: ISSUE47 - "Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
WORDS: 415          TIME: 01:20:39          DATE: 2010-3-14 16:19:42

Does society not place enough emphasis on the intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills, as speaker assert? While the speak might overlook the benefits of nurturing certain emotions and feelings, I agree that it is by way of our heads other than our hearts that we can best ensure the well-being of our society.

However, the emotions and feelings are also important in our quatidian life.On the one hand, adimittedly, the development of the society and technology depends on whether enough attention has been paid to the intellect- that is, on reasoning and other congnitive skills. Thomas Edisan invented bulb which turn out to be the deviration of today's illumination apparatus and digital and electronical era. In addition, in the history of discovering the chemical elements, alkali metals were discovered because batteries were invented and used in chemistry experiment; the discovery of the elements Rd. and Cs. was
attributed to the technique adavancement in the realm of optics. Although, there are chances for these so great results and the scientists paid so much efforts to invent or discover them, there is no doubt that all of the scientists are intellect. Everyone believe that the intellect is so important to promote the development of the society and technology.
On the other hand, all persons are the human being who have a great deversity of emotions. We can laugh, cry, depressed when we encounter diffirent things in our quatidian life. We don't like and we can not live without emotion. The workers who do their job with the light in some manufacting line could reduce the tense and fatigue from the whole day work. It is known that the efficiency  not only is related to the intellect but also
have association with the emotions and feelings. As a head of Psycologist at my university said " I can not only give the knowlege to the students in my department, more important also guide them how to be in a proper psycological condition to handle the difficults both in the study and life. Although I hope all of the students will be excellent, it is more important that they are "normal" persons in the society.In sum, the balance of the intellect and emotions and feelings is very inportant. The society could not be developed without intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills. At the mean time, the society could
not be maintained if the persons do not have the normal emotions and feelings.

meredithpc0426UID: 2754868

TOPIC: ISSUE47 - "Society does not place enough emphasis on the intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills."
WORDS: 415          TIME: 01:20:39          DATE: 2010-3-14 16:19:42

Does society not（去掉更顺） place enough emphasis on the intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills, as speaker assert? While the speak might overlook the benefits of nurturing certain emotions and feelings, I agree that it is by way of our heads other than our hearts that we can best ensure the well-being of our society.

//However, the emotions and feelings are also important in our quatidian(quotidian) life. On the one hand, adimittedly, The development of the society and technology depends on whether enough attention has been paid to the intellect- that is, on reasoning and other congnitive skills. //这个例子和你上面的观点有什么直接关系呢？// (前面一句删掉，不如从Intellectual的正面入手)Everyone believe that the intellect is so important to promote the development of the society and technology. After all, it is Thomas Edison who invented bulb which turn out to be the deviration of  illumination apparatus, (leading us to) today's digital and electronical era. In addition, in the history of discovering the chemical elements, alkali metals were discovered because batteries were invented and used in chemistry experiment; the discovery of the elements Rd. and Cs. was attributed to the technique adavancement in the realm of optics. Although, there are chances for these so great results and the scientists paid so much efforts to invent or discover them, there is no doubt that all of the scientists are intellect. //是不是有点偏题啦？//最好加一段总结//The development of our society would be one of those dreams in our fairytales, sweet but unachievable, if not those emphasis placed on intellect and reasoning capacity. And we would still confused about  questions like where we come from and absurdities including ghost, and supernatural things.
On the other hand, all persons are the human being who has a great deversity of emotions. We can laugh, cry, feel depressed when we encounter diffirent things in our quatidian life. We don't like and we can not live without emotion. The workers who do their job with the light(delight??) in some manufacting line could reduce(worker reduce吗？) the tense and fatigue in a whole day’s work. It is known that the efficiency  not only is related to the intellect but also have association with the emotions and feelings. As a specialist in psycology at my university said :" I can not only give the knowlege to the students in my department, more important also guide them how to be in a proper psycological condition to handle the difficults both in the study and life. Although I hope all of the students will be excellent, it is more important that they are "normal" persons in the society.”
That is to say, the balance of the intellect and emotions and feelings is very inportant. The society could not advance without intellect-that is, on reasoning and other cognitive skills. At the mean time, the society could
not be survive, let alone thrive if the persons do not have the normal emotions and feelings.(这点的论证有点薄弱哦~~)

结构语言都还可以 但是可能有点头重脚轻了...最后能把合并的观点论证下就最好了
另外，思路需要再清晰些~！！

小风吹雪UID: 2720062

TOPIC: ISSUE130 - "How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society."
WORDS:720   TIME:3H    DATE: 2010-3-15  13:19:00
ps:第一次写issues，没限定时间，请猛拍~~~~
outline:
pos:不完全同意以上看法。社会化并不是最重要的，同时，并不是所有家长与社会不知道如何教育孩子建立好社会。
1承认孩子是社会的未来。但是社会的命运不仅仅是由儿童的社会化决定的。教育的作用。
2首先澄清better 社会的定义。better社会是道德并且多样的。社会的性质促使其发展。成人要做的是合理教导孩子遵循社会发展规律，遵守社会化的伦理道德和保证个性多样性。
3大部分成人做到了，少部分人扼杀多样性，不对。
总结,社会命运由多方面影响。我们可以做好教育孩子，使其成才。

When human beings put their sights on the future, it is unexceptionable that the children become the focus attended by general public. However，socialization of children is at best a important factor determining the future of society. And the claim that we have not yet learned how to raise children who can create a better society is partially compellent.
In despite of my views against the issue topic, the importance of raising children should be admitted in the sake of that they will be the real host of world in future when all was said and done. "Youth is rich, nation is rich; youth is strong, nation is strong", noted Qichao Liang, a leading ideologist of Qing period and a pioneer in the reformation of China's society。
The destiny of society is not merely determined by the socialization. Many factors contribute a lot to the destiny of society and the social relationship between people is not only one among them. For example, the development of technology and the spirit of human being play a vital role in the developing of society. And education is the way to achieve. After the World War 2, the Japan government puts the education first and wants to utilize the education to let it out of the shadow of failure of war. Now the Japan becomes one of the most developed countries in the word. The education, without doubt, played a substantial role form failure to greatness. Its counterpart China awake from the Confucius education which pays little attention on the science developed all-round education and achieved a great success which made China one of most influential countries in the world today.
When it comes to the problem of raising children, we must clarify what is the real ‘better’ society. A better society should be defined as one characterized by greater tolerance of diversity, greater recognition of creativity and greater loyalty of morality. We see individual plays an extremely important role in human society, particularly some elites. We know Caesar’s exertion to the Roma Empire, the Aristotle of ancient science. All these people put the society forward.         
But we must say that it's the principle of society itself who make this development. It is the instinct of the people who have a genius curiosity to work out those questions and doubts and want to live a happy lazy life and so on that made the society go forward. People wanders why does the sun just appear in daytime and the moon in night, can we remain young forever and no die. Just the curiosity to this question made we know more and more about of the cosmic and pharmacy, the society develops relevantly. The summer is so hot and the winter so cold, can we live in spring for all four seasons. The air-conditioning came into being.
The adults’ responsibility is to educate the children to keep to the morality of society and to inspire their diversity, in according with the principle of social development. One competent education should contain both two sides resulted by the attributes belonged to human beings that person in society is either one molecule of the special combination of society or one individual who are different with others and independent with others.
Fortunately, most of the adults actually know the way to bring up children to contribute to a better society. Merits such as honesty, persistence, probity, kindness and so on are the core lessons inculcated by parents and school systems. However, some parents are not satiated by the existing way of bringing up society and are dedicated to explore a more specific pattern ignoring the diversity to determine the final vocation of children. The ideas of these people are perilous. If utilize this specific pattern, there will not have plumbers, electricians, drivers, and cleaners, but solely the scientists, politicians, millionaires, businessmen. In such case, our society will definitely result in an irretrievable chaos and stagnancy.
On all accounts, one nation’s development is more complex than what the issue topic thinks about. The problem is related with all sides of the society, although the side of raising children is special significant one. However, any single factor or even several factors cannot be recognized to determinate the destiny of the whole society. With the effort of whole society to create wholesome environment to the children, especially well awareness of morality and diversity of family and school education, the children will become our society’s backbone.

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31. "Money spent on research is almost always a good investment, even when the results of that research are controversial."

The development of both basic and practical research through history helps people and the society made huge progress. As a result I generally agree with the speaker’s assertion that it is a good investment to allocate money on research. However, it is hard for us to predict whether the results of research, especially basic research, are controversial or not.

The first reason for my fundamental agreement is that the basic research helps people get rid of ignorance and transformed the original society into a highly civilized one. Basic scientific research on physics, chemistry and biology serves as a tool for mankind to explore unknown areas of the nature and explain the mysterious natural phenomenon. With the help of basic scientific research people were finally freed from the fear of the nature. For instance people thought that lightning express violent rage of the nature before Franklin unlock the secrets of it from the perspective of physics. Basic humanities research on philosophy, historiography and ethics, serves as a tool for mankind to help people truly understand themselves.

The basic research also provide theoretical basis for practical research which convert abstract theories to useful inventions. As a student major in biotechnology, a subject that applies biological theory on agricultural and medicine, I have a strong sense of the benefits of biotechnology. For example the genetically modified rice is an important application of biotechnology on agricultural. With the help of alien the GM rice has the ability to resist unfavorable weather such as drought and extraordinary high temperature. More importantly the higher output per acre than traditional rice ensure that even the farmlands decrease sharply because of desertification and soil erosion the total output of the rice will not be effected. Also the applications of biotechnology on medicine create new-fashioned medicine thus make it possible to cure fatal diseases like cancer and AIDS.

Although people have benefit a great deal from the development of both basic and practical research, some results of research also fueled fierce debate among the public such as human clone and nuclear weapons. Some people may argue that we should not spend money on the research whose results are controversial. However the investment happens before the results of research come out. It is hard to make a judgment of the results before it actually come out while we also lack standards of judgments. One cannot say the results of research is controversial just because it violates traditional moral and ethical principles for the reason that moral and ethical principles can be revised along with the development of technology. In the past time dissection and organ transplant all caused enormous controversy because they all violated the moral and ethical principles enacted by Christian Church. But they all accepted by the public nowadays.

Considering the significance of research for humankind it is reasonable even necessary for governments to spend money on research. More importantly governments need to establish clear standard and specific institution to evaluate the results of research so as to prevent the potential negative effects caused by the results of research.

199054UID: 2552741

楼上是我的一篇习作，因为写的时候没有限时，所以也没有记时间，恳请楼主帮忙修改一下，万分感谢