phoenix小组组员10号Issue144习作

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题目：ISSUE144 - "It is the artist, not the critic,* who gives society something of lasting value."
*a person who evaluates works of art, such as novels, films, music, paintings, etc.

Is it the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value, as the speaker maintains? I concede that the artists' works represents the value of our society to some extent. However, we should not overlook the vital role that the critics play in forming the society's value.

Admittedly, it is the artist's creative work that provides us with masterpieces that characterize our society and enrich our spiritual life. The great beauty in life needs the excellence of artists to discover and express, in the form of magnificent and immortal artworks. Consider, for instance, Luxun, one of the greatest revolutionary soldiers of proletariat in China and litterateur, his work such as "A Madman's Diary " which revealed the darkness of the society and the political situation in old china greatly shocked the ruling classes in that time. Luxun ultimately woke up billions of compatriots to fight for freedom and liberty with his masterpieces, to some extent, he influenced the course of Chinese history.

However, the functions of the art critic can not be overlooked. First, consider, critics can help us understand and interpret art; a critic who is familiar with a particular artist and his or her works might have certain insights about those works that the layperson would not. A critic 's evaluation of an art work serves as a filter,which helps us determine which art is worth our attention and time. For example, a new novel by a best-seling author might nevertheless be an uninspired effort , and if the critic can call our attention to this fact we gain time to seek out more wothwhile literature to read.


Moreover, a critic can provide feedback for artists; and constructive criticism, if taken to heart, can result in better work. Any informed person would agree that although art is the product of the artist'sauthentic passion, and a manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulse, the artist should also take others' advices into consideration. As far as I concerned, only that shaped by the concern for intergrating feedback from all criticism can really become a art. Conversly, work that just mirrow the artist's spirit might be just regarded as a craft, not a art, or it may lead to such absurd phenomenon that all people who create objectives which reflect the creator's spirit and passion could be regarded as artists. How ridiculous it sounds!

In sum, both the artist and the critic contribute in giving the society something of lasting value, they depend on each other. We should be inclined to neither.It is just under the interaction of artist and critic that we human species build our core value about arts.

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Is it the artist, not the critic, who gives society something of lasting value, as the speaker maintains? I concede that the artists' works represents/represent the value of our society to some extent. However, we should not overlook the vital role that the critics play in forming the society's value.

Admittedly, it is the artist's creative work that provides us with masterpieces that characterize(社会的特征是艺术巨著？貌似不恰当） our society and enrich our spiritual life. The great beauty in life needs the excellence of artists/brilliant artists (excellent 有点儿过，谁敢说自己是excellent的？） to discover and express in the form of magnificent and immortal artworks. Consider, for instance,(这两个重了，一个就行）/Consider Luxun, one of the greatest revolutionary soldiers of proletariat in China and litterateur/literature. His(句子太长，断开） work, such as "A Madman's Diary ",(句子太长了，把书名和句子拆开） which revealed the darkness of the society and the political situation in old china greatly shocked the ruling classes in that time. Luxun ultimately woke up billions of compatriots to fight for freedom and liberty with/because of his masterpieces. To some extent, he influenced the course of Chinese history.(例子叙述有些累赘，建议精简一下，着重写作品的价值和意义，和你本段的TS想对）

However, the functions of the art critic can not be overlooked. First, consider,（删） critics can help us understand and interpret art/artistic works. Generally, (逻辑连接） the critic who is familiar with a particular artist and his or her works might have certain insights about those works that the layperson would not. A critic 's evaluation of an art work serves as a filter,which helps us determine which art is worth our attention and time. For example, a new novel by a best-seling author might nevertheless be an uninspired effort , and if the critic can call our attention to this fact we gain time to seek out more wothwhile literature to read.(没读懂...)


Moreover, a critic can provide feedbacks for artists; and constructive criticism, if taken to heart,(to 指代不明,既然是建设性意见，还有什么理由不接受？所以if也不适合） can result in better work./being informed with feedbacks or constructive criticism, artists promise to attain a better result. Any informed（这个想表达什么意思？） person would agree that although art is the product of the artist'sauthentic passion, and a manifestation of the artist's unique creative impulse, the artist should also take others' advices into consideration. As far as I concerned, only those artistic works that shaped by the concern for intergrating feedback from all criticism can really become a art. Conversly, works that just mirrow(没查到...) the artist's spirit(只包含艺术家自己思想的作品就不可以么？反驳的例子好像有不少....) might be just regarded as a craft, not a art, or it may lead to such absurd phenomenon that all people who create objectives which reflect the creator's spirit and passion could be regarded as artists. How ridiculous it sounds!(基于上面的疑问，这个结论也有问题）

In sum, both the artist and the critic contribute in giving the society something of lasting value, and they depend on each other. We should be inclined to neither of them.It is just under the interaction of artist and critic that we human species build our core value about arts. (结尾谈到了建立人们关于艺术的核心价值正是由于艺术家和批评家的互动所产生的.1我暂且认为这时对主题的升华，如果是这样的话我不敢妄加评论；2 如果这时作者随意写的，那么就有问题了，这个结论在整篇文章中并没有涉及到，根据结尾不出现未经论证的观点的依据，觉得作者有必要紧扣题目）

结构中规中矩，没什么可说的

注意问题：1句子的严密性
              2 例子论述的有效性

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