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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.

Nowadays, movies and televisions have become ubiquitous to our lives, I concede that the TV programs and movies will not only only contribute but also do harm to the young people. The young people may addict into some TV progams and cannot get rid of them. As is for me, nevertheless, I take the opinion that televisions and movies have more positive effects.

First of all, watching TV and movies would make people feel happy, it is true that the current young people often under quantities of pressures that they usually feel anxious or depression. A best way to relax themselves is to watch some comedies shown by televisions. Watching TV is a kind of recreation which would amuse people and give people entertainment. Take myself as an example, I would like to watch a soup opera ,which is called Friends, when I feel unhappy. The amusing words in this opera,and the interesting things they have done, all of which would make me forget the unhappiness and get back to my work vigorously.

In addition, not all the programs on televition and movies are useless, we can always learn abundant knowledge from the scientific TV programs or the movies, such as the nation geography. Also, the TV programs and movies have the advancement compared with the books for the lessons given by the televisions are vivid and lively, while the book can merely give the lesson by decribing in words or pictures. For the yound people, they would rather learning from the TV or movies.

Finally, TV programs are the fastest way to transport the information, which is fairly significant for both the individual and society. On one hand, by watching TV, people would get the newest invention and product, then people can catch the trend of the development precisely. As a reslut, young people who can catch up with the trend can apparently become successful. On the other hand, when facing some tremendous catastrophy, television is a most immediate route to spread the information. For instance, we live in a period when the earthquack happens frequently, and the influence of the earthquack is lethal. In many countries, televisions have been used as a best way to tell the young people to be careful about the earthquack for the televisions is possible to spread the news to the majority.

To sum up, I insist that televisions and movies have large numbers of advancement for the young people that they should not be viewed as useless for some bad effects. People should view a same thing in various point of views, and then come to a conclusion.

馋MEUID: 2761685

Nowadays, movies and televisions have become ubiquitous to(用in是不是比较好一点啊) our lives, I concede that the TV programs and movies will not only only contribute（用的有点怪） but also do harm to the young people. The young people may addict into some TV progams and cannot get rid of them. As is（不要is） for me, nevertheless（不用加这个词）, I take the opinion that televisions and movies have more positive effects.. w5 u  @% C) |7 S

( V' J7 A$ }8 ]) Y+ o% H( sFirst of all, watching TV and movies would make people feel （不要feel）happy, it is true that the current young people （加上are）often under quantities of pressures that they usually feel anxious or depression(改成depressed). A (The)best way to relax themselves is to watch some comedies shown by televisions. Watching TV is a kind of recreation which would amuse people and give people entertainment(好像没这样用的吧). Take myself as an example, I would like to watch a soup opera ,which is called Friends, when I feel unhappy. The amusing words in this opera,and the interesting things they have done, all of which would make me forget the unhappiness and get back to my work vigorously.4 T8 o& P" z+ K) F
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In addition, not all the programs on televition and movies are useless, we can always learn abundant knowledge from the scientific TV programs or the movies, such as the nation geography. Also, the TV programs and movies have the advancement（什么意思啊） compared with the books for the lessons given by the televisions are vivid and lively, while the book can merely give the lesson by decribing in words or pictures. For the yound people, they would rather learning from the TV or movies.
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Finally, TV programs are the fastest way to transport （trasmit）the information, which is fairly significant for both the individual and society. On one hand, by watching TV, people would get the newest(lastest) invention and product, then people can catch the trend of the development precisely(有点怪). As a reslut, young people who can catch up with the trend can apparently become successful. On the other hand, when facing some tremendous catastrophy, television is a most immediate route to spread the information. For instance, we live in a period when（是不是要用where啊，不确定） the earthquack happens frequently, and the influence of the earthquack is lethal. In many countries, televisions have been used as a best way to tell （inform）the young people to be careful about the earthquack for the televisions is possible to spread the news to the majority.
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To sum up, I insist that televisions and movies have large numbers of advancement（advantages?） for the young people that they should not be viewed as useless for some bad effects. People should view a same thing in various point of views, and then come to a conclusion.
我也是新手，我觉得你写的挺长的，论点也挺好，就是有些固定的词组搭配可能不准确，加油吧！

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3.19作业

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你word文档里面没有作文啊，你再发一遍吧~~

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改好了哦～

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修改。
童鞋不用帮我改了，昨天的作文写丢了...TT

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3.24作业有点晚，见谅了。

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3.24 （09.01.10）- R+ Z/ _9 n" bDo you agree or disagree that improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country., D  Q: e" P.

Today, many countries are doing something (这个表达太不pro了吧，)to improve schools in order to become successful（不是国家变得成功，是发展的成功啊）. There is a hot discussion about whether improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country. It is true that people can live a better life by studying in schools. So, I believe that it is good for a country to improve schools for the following reasons.（live a better life浅显了点，最好具体点）

First, improving schools is helpful to the students in the schools. By building a huge library which contains quantities of books, students can read more books in school. They can learn more knowledge from the variety of books. In addition,students will more likely to concentrate on their study if the school provide better conditions for them.They don’t have to worry about some other things and they would have more time to study hard. So, improving schools is helpful to the country because the students can learn better in the school. （内容有点空泛，最后一句learn better in school最好能和 development of country 联系起来）

Second, improving schools is helpful to the people when they are at work.People who learn math will learn much more about this major in a better school and many complex problems can be solved by them easily. It is obviously that companies prefer offering jobs to these people and give them high salaries.（表达还是不顺畅，上句可以这么说： The well-educated persons are more welcomed by our society and being competent in their later career,thus contribute more in their position）Furthermore,people whose major is biology have never done some experiments in their school cannot do well in their jobs. They can hardly come to some great discovery and contribute to the country.
这两个例子都感觉怪怪的，的确可以说明学校学习对今后职业发展的重要性，但是题目是从国家发展的层面上来讨论的，我觉得有必要有必要把例子和这个topic扯上关系。

Third,improving schools is helpful to people’s daily life. It will make people live longer. For instance, sometimes people would get ill and they have to take some medicine in order to recover fast.While sometimes the pills are made in America and people wouldn’t know the function of the pill if they don’t know English.It is horrible to imagine the result of taking some wrong pills. That will cause some lethal impacts on people.

As far as I am concerned, the fact that improving schools is helpful to the development of country is evident. People will do better in their jobs because of learning more from the school.Moveover,the knowledge learned from a better school will lead people to beocome healthier.Therefore,I argue that improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country.
耗时五十分钟，思考分析十分钟。

文章语法没有什么问题，关键是内容没有联系主题，细节和例子都是为了更好的支持中心论点，如果你举出的例子，描写的细节最终没有落到论点上，那么文章会很散，内容也没有意义。 （个人观点）

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3.26作业

chailybaiUID: 2741896

Nowadays，government is spending more money on the education in order to contribute to the development of the country.And there is a fierce discussion on whether a government should focus its budget more on the children education or on universitis.It is obviously that people cannot be accepted by universities without the primary education.So,I hold the opinion that a government should focus its budget more on young children education.
（第一段观点明确，条理清楚。。不错~~）
First,focusing the budget more on young children education can make people happy.By improving the quality of the school,better teachers can be employed and the children would receive better education.They are more likely to feel comfortable during the study.In addition,primary schools could become better in many aspects such as the school yard,the classroom and the gym.The children’s parents won’t have to worry about their children for they are living and studying in a beautiful and safe school.
这一段也没什么大问题，我就是觉得说make people more happy这个理由有点牵强，happy其实是mental and physical heath 的体现吧
Second,focusing the budget more on young children education can lead people to success.With （devoting）more money on the developing of the school,schools have the oppotunity to offer children many kinds of classes after school like painting or dancing,which will benefit to the students through all their lives.Futhermore,many great people said that their mental perspective had been formed since （when）they were young.Einstein,who has ever conceded that all of his great discovery owed to his childhood education。（最好还是不要举爱因斯坦的例子吧，毕竟他是在学校受歧视然后自学成才的代表人物啊~~~）
Third,focusing the budget more on young children education can make people become easy going in their afterward lives.For the（with） better condition of the school, children would have more interest in studying in the beautiful classroom and discussing with each other.For instance, I used to study in a primary school which is rather poor that the classroom was too cold to stay in the winter,and I didn’t like to study in the classroom.However,the condition of the school became better after the government funding it, and after that I would like to study in the classroom and discuss with my classmates.

To sum up, I have to say that government should focus its budget more on young childen because this decision will make people happy.Besides, they can become successful in the future for the better primary education.A university cannot become successful without the support of the successful primary schools.

文章语法，用词都没有什么大问题。但是我觉得你的1，3点理由其实都是基于improvement of the school conditions的基础之上的，这样的话它们其实可以合并成一段。或者把对第三点理由的阐述换一个角度，这个理由其实是很有说服力的，但是后面说的硬件设施的改善对教育的重要性感觉脱离了主旨而且有些重复，比如强调打好基础对未来学习生活的重要性之类的。
其次，感觉楼主作文模板的痕迹蛮重的，比如每段开头都是一样的句式，其实可以适当变换一下吗~~

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