Issue 208 by dgxy08 [big fish]

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when it comes to the issue about the relations between a society's values and behaviour of its people, I advocate that a society's values determine the behaviour of its people and the behaviour of the people reflect the society' values.

What does a society's values mean? In my view, a society's ideas and values is composed by the values of the people who live in it. Values play a significant role in the life of people, for the reason that society's values delegates the main steam of values which decide how people to work, how people to study, and how people to live. People who can work without values could be called machine not human.

A society's ideas and values can be told by the people'attitudes and interests, which can be revealed from their working and living style and education they obtain. Though ideas are abstract, it will reflect on the way people find the result of problem they meet. For example, the democracy which American hold on was present by the civil war, which help the black people win the freedom. Another way the society's values reflects is the education, which will convey their main stream values to their youth. Different counties have different courses in the education system, especially the social courses, which is serving for the values supported by the governments.

Beside, to some extent, the appearance and behaviour of its people reveal a society's ideas and values for the reason that their attitudes and interests can be told from the way people look, dress, and act.The dress is on behalf the popular culture which is one of the branchs in a society's values. People would dress differently at different times in the same county for the reason that the society's values will change with times.

Consequently, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that a society' value is an abstract thing, which must be reflected by concrete things such as education, work, study and the way people look, dress, and act..

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when it comes to the issue about the relations between a society's values and behaviour of its people , I advocate that a society's values determine the behaviour of its people(换个词，e.g residents or citizens) and the behaviour of the people(这里句式尽量变一下，可以用题目里面的the way people ….) ,(这里加上 on the contrary或者in reverse更好一些吧),reflect the society' values.
感觉对于speaker’s notion， 你没有进行直接表态，但是感觉你的意思是没有让步的同意， 这样我感觉不太好，如果有个让步就有东西可写了，而且那个claim确实有可攻击之处~
What does a society's values mean? In my view, a society's ideas and values is（are） composed by the values of the people who live in it. Values play a significant role in the life of people, for the reason that society's values delegates(这里delegate不是非常合适，用reflect 或者mirror会更好一些吧) the main steam of values which decide how people to work, how people to study, and how people to live（语法有问题，to 貌似是不需要的，而且只需要how people work, study and live 就行了，字数最好不要这样凑）. People who can work without values could be called machine not (instead of) human.
这一段论述了Value对human beings的重要作用，其实是可要可不要的，因为这不是讨论的重点，重点在于人们的行为是否能够准确得反映一个社会的价值。
A society's ideas and values can be told by the people's attitudes and interests, which can be revealed from their working and living style and education they obtain（连续两个被动态读起来好不舒服丫，错倒是没错）. Though ideas are abstract, it will reflect on the way people find the result of problem they meet. For example, the democracy which American hold on was presented by the civil war(Civil War Battle), which help the black people win the(the 应该可以去) freedom. Another way（用point, realm, field替换下） the society's values reflects is the education, which will convey their（the） main stream values to their youth(可以试着用用看inculcate). Different countries have different courses in the education system, especially the social courses, which is serving for the values(served with values) supported by the governments.
想表达的应该是社会价值影响人们的行为，所以从行为推知社会的价值是可取的。语言上好像表达得不是太好，多看看范文就好啦~
Beside, to some extent, the appearance and behaviour of its people reveal a society's ideas and values for the reason that their attitudes and interests can be told from the way people look, dress, and act. The dress is on behalf of
(在这里 on behalf of 也不是很好)the popular culture which is one of the branches in a society's values. People would dress differently at different times in the same county for the reason that the society's values will change with times. （我不这么认为，一个社会的价值应该不会变得很快，至少不会有fashion变得那么快）

Consequently, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, which sometimes intertwine to form an organic whole and thus become more persuasive than any one of them（模板的痕迹哦~这句话好像在陈向东那本书上看到过，自己改写过一些吧，不过语法上好像有点问题，become前面找不到主语诶）, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that a society' value is an abstract thing, which must be reflected by concrete things such as education, work, study and the way people look, dress, and act..
整篇文章思路还算是比较连贯的，但是语言要加油啦，另外字数也太少了，下次建议写Issue之前多想想，或者看看别人的想法，这样我感觉会好一点~胡乱扯的，请多指教~