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题目：ARGUMENT188 - A new report suggests that men and women experience pain very differently from one another, and that doctors should consider these differences when prescribing pain medications. When researchers administered the same dosage of kappa opioids-a painkiller-to 28 men and 20 women who were having their wisdom teeth extracted, the women reported feeling much less pain than the men, and the easing of pain lasted considerably longer in women. This research suggests that kappa opioids should be prescribed for women whenever pain medication is required, whereas men should be given other kinds of pain medication. In addition, researchers should reevaluate the effects of all medications on men versus women.
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In this argument, the author recommends that men and women are different in pain treatment, women should take kappa opioids(ko) for pain while men need to consider other kinds of pills and researchers should revaluate the effect on men and women of all medications. To substantiate this claim, the author cites a research about the same usage of ko between 28 men and 22 women who have extracted wisdom teeth and takes the results that the women complained less pain than man and men had a longer time in pain, for evidence. A close scrutiny, however, reflects that this argument is predicted on several dubious evidence and precarious assumptions.
First of all, there is a threshold problem in this research, the sample size of the research involving 28 men and 22 women is far from sufficient and representative, nor the author provides any information about whether the patients are randomly selected. Even if that is the case, the results that women felt less painful and had a shorter time of pain is ridiculous. It is highly possible that women chosed possess a larger threshold of pain than men; It is also likely that women merely complain about pain; Meanwhile, there is a possibility that the pathological changes of wisdom teeth in women are slighter than men studied. Without taking these possibilities into consideration , the author's notion is undoubtedly ungroundless.
In addition, the author presumptuously assumpt that other medicines will be better for men while he ignores making any comparisons between ko and other pills. Perhaps, ko maybe the most effective medicine for men's pain treatment. This probablity as mentioned above, if true, would lead the argument less persuasive.
Finally, the author makes a gratuitous assumption that researcher should revaluate the effects of all medications on men and women. The author overlooks whether ko is representative of all other medicines. It is highly possible that it is the unique attribute of ko leads to the dissimilarities between the pain treatment between men and women. Lacking more information about the differences between ko and other pills, the author's assumption is invalid.
In sum, it is imprudent for the author to conclude that men and women are different in pain treatment, women should take kappa opioids(ko) for pain while men need to consider other kinds of pills and researchers should revaluate the effect on men and women of all medications. To make this argument logically reasonable, the author have to provident the credibility of this survey and more information about the difference between men and women. To evaluate the conclusion more persuasive, the author also need to point out comparisons between ko and other possible pills for pain treatment.