Issue112，还有19天~终于写了第一篇~脑袋中没货……真叫一个愁 有拍必回~

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终于狠下心来写了一篇，脑袋中没有例子，太难写了~老描述 老说概念，本来就表达不好，好郁闷，背不下来东西~知识面窄，要想办法了~
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TOPIC: ISSUE112 - "Some educational systems emphasize the development of students' capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, but students would benefit more from an education that also taught them to explore their own emotions."
WORDS: 412          TIME: 01:09:10          DATE: 2010-3-4 18:24:00
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中文提纲：
开头段：引出句+解释explore emotion的涵义+立场（两个都很重要，没有偏向）
标准段：判断一个因素是不是必要的话要看他是不是符合教育的目的——全面认识这个世界
理性段：A.教育的基本作用——获得知识，一研究员要靠主观想象做实验的话那好恐怖
过渡段：当今教育忽视了感性的教育，感性是有助于理解这个世界的
感性段：感性也很重要（好啰嗦啊）物理学家靠对称的概念发现电磁规律，美术家肯定要靠感性感觉才能画画
结论段：转述开头段
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    There exist an impassioned controversy nowadays concerning the issue of the mode of education.We often find ourselves involved in a dilemma whether we should reach for development of students' critical thinking or exploring of their emotions, which refers to understanding both the determinants and consequences of moods and emotions. It is of great significance to emphasize the capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, while the competence in exploring their emotions can not be neglected.
    The criterion for estimating , in an eductional system, wether a factor is necessary or not is to check if it is consistent with the aim of education, cultivating personality and creative intelligence. As to this issue, exercise of logical thiking can benefit the rational or precise knowledge of the world, and the cultivating of emotions can provide a more sensible view. Development of IQ is not the only factor determining the success of education, while the EQ, mental maturity plays an critical role during the study process to which we should pay attention as well.
     As a threshold matter, the cultivation of academic ability, which including critical thinking, literature, arithmaitic, physics, and so forth, proves to be the fundemental function of edcation systems. There is no denying that we should enrich our knowledge during the process, which is a common sence. Considering the research in history,biology,chemistry,among the various factors, critical thinking and logical reflection, in most cases, makes the most considerable contribution to the advancement of science. On the contrary, if a professor conduct a research utilizing objective imagination, the consequences will be dreadful. Zidane, a famous French football player, fouled out the match field, consequently, putting an end to loss of championship in The World’s Cup 2006. He became annoyed for an Italian player’s insulting words and fight against him. If only he could control his emotion ,the tragedy would be avoided.
    Yet, the contemporary education's overlooking of guidance as to the exploating our emotions can have detrimental consequences. Such ignorance leads to a warm bed for the imbalance of many students' growth, becoming more and more apathetic to things around them. However,instead of lack of humanity, perceptual knowledge will benefit a more comprehensive understanding of the world.
    Aside from the development of academic aptitude, it is essential for the students to have a perceptual knowledge of the world around us. Based on the intuition concept that the world is symmetric, Faraday, a physical scientist, establish the theory of electromagnetism. Those who are contributing to fine and performing art must have a good cognition of things around.
    Without rational concept of the world,we cannot analyze it with an objective view and conclude compelling conclusions. Without perceptual knowledge, we can not develop ourself in all respects and only lead to apathy. Thus, the advancement of the two can not pale in importance compared to each other. It pays to make progress on two aspects.

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最好段之间空行。方便阅读；
There exists an impassioned controversy nowadays concerning the issue of the mode of education. We often find ourselves involved in a dilemma whether we should reach for development of students' critical thinking or exploring of their emotions, which refers to understanding both the determinants and consequences of moods and emotions. It is of great significance to emphasize the capacity for reasoning and logical thinking, while the competence in exploring their emotions cannot be neglected.

The criterion for estimating , in an educational system, whether a factor is necessary or not is to check if it is consistent with the aim of education, cultivating personality and creative intelligence. As to this issue, exercise of logical thinking can benefit the rational or precise knowledge of the world, and the cultivating of emotions can provide a more sensible view. Development of IQ is not the only factor determining the success of education, while the EQ, mental maturity plays an critical role during the study process to which we should pay attention as well离得太远了.


As a threshold matter, the cultivation of academic ability, which including critical thinking, literature, arithmaitic, physics, and so forth, proves to be the fundamental function of education systems. There is no denying that we should enrich our knowledge during the process, which is a common sense似乎多余. Considering the research in history, biology, chemistry, among the various factors, critical thinking and logical reflection, in most cases, makes the most considerable contribution to the advancement of science历史不算吧. On the contrary, if a professor conduct a research utilizing objective imagination, the consequences will be dreadful.
强调学生的主体地位，用教授举例不适合。
Yet, the contemporary education's overlooking of guidance as to the exploring our emotions can have detrimental consequences. Such ignorance leads to a warm bed for the imbalance of many students' growth, becoming more and more apathetic to things around them. However, instead of lack of humanity, perceptual knowledge will benefit a more comprehensive understanding of the world.

Aside from the development of academic aptitude, it is essential for the students to have a perceptual knowledge of the world around us. Based on the intuition concept that the world is symmetric, Faraday, a physical scientist, establishes the theory of electromagnetism {it seems that it should be owed to Maxwell}. Those who are contributing to fine and performing art must have a good cognition of things around.
Without rational concept of the world, we cannot analyze it with an objective view and conclude compelling conclusions. Without perceptual knowledge, we can not develop ourselves in all respects and only lead to apathy. Thus, the advancement of the two can not pale in importance compared to each other. It pays to make progress on two aspects.

作者提到一些忽视情感方面的影响， 但论述不多。 能否考虑教学中如何体现，比如通过艺术课程之类。
另外举例电磁场不太合适，这种对称美似乎不是学生阶段就能领悟的。
最后，个人认为平衡观点不好写，还不如抓住一个方面深入论证。纯属个人意见啊。

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2# qisaiman

谢谢你~
我也觉得平衡不好写~看ETS的专才通才那个范文，平衡结构中间部分要写四大段，额~
嗯  还是谢谢 等下去拍你