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发表于 2010-3-8 20:39:50 |只看该作者 |倒序浏览
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TOPIC: ARGUMENT203 - The following appeared in a newspaper feature story.

"At the small, nonprofit hospital in the town of Saluda, the average length of a patient's stay is two days; at the large, for-profit hospital in the nearby city of Megaville, the average patient stay is six days. Also, the cure rate among patients in the Saluda hospital is about twice that of the Megaville hospital. The Saluda hospital has more employees per patient than the hospital in Megaville, and there are few complaints about service at the local hospital. Such data indicate that treatment in smaller, nonprofit hospitals is more economical and of better quality than treatment in larger, for-profit hospitals."
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DATE: 2010-3-8 20:00:14


The author asserts that treament in larger, for-profit hospitals is of worse quality and more expansive than the treatment in smaller, for-profit hospitals. To bolst the argument, the autho compares the data from two different hospitals. However,
carefull consideration of the evidence supporting to the argument reavels that it lends on little reliable to convince us.

First, the author provide us with the average length of a patient's stay in the hospitals. However, we cannot obtain more information about their patients such as the age , heathy condtions, and the ill of different people. As we all know, different ill needs different lengeth of patient’s stay.Without this information, the conclusion can be discarded.

Second,
though the author point out the cure rate among patients in the two hospitals, the author does not show the number of patient and the excat cure rate in the two hospitals .Maybe there are one throusand people in the Megaville hospitial and only one hundred in the Saluda hosptial. In addtion, the cure in Megaville is 98%, and the Saluda is 99%. In this way ,we can believe that the Megaville is better than the Saluda.


Third,
the author only tells us that few complaints about service at the local hospital. Nevertheless, there is no information on the complains about the Megaville. It is entirely possible that there is no complain about the Megaille and all paients are content the service at Megaille. Besides the number of employees per patient cannot indicate anything.More employees per patient does not mean super qulity of service.


In sum, the argument is unreliable. More informantion on the two hospitals should be supplied and it would be useful to do a study on much more hospitals. We will be convinced if the aothor can get together more informations.
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The author asserts that treament (treatment)in larger, for-profit hospitals is of worse quality and more expansive than the treatment in smaller, for-profit hospitals. To bolst (bolster)the argument, the autho(author) compares the data from two different hospitals. However,
carefull (careful)consideration of the evidence supporting to the argument reavels (reveals)that it lends on little reliable to convince us.

First, the author provide (加s)us with the average length of a patient's stay in the hospitals. However, we cannot obtain more information about their patients such as the age , heathy(healthy) condtions, (conditions)and the ill of different people. As we all know, different ill needs different lengeth(length) of patient’s stay.Without this information, the conclusion can be discarded.

Second,
though 让步好the author point(加s) out the cure rate among patients in the two hospitals, the author does not show the number of patient and the excat (exact)cure rate in the two hospitals .Maybe there are one throusand (thousand)people in the Megaville hospitial(hospital) and only one hundred in the Saluda hosptial(同上). In addtion, (addition)the cure in Megaville is 98%, and the Saluda is 99%. In this way ,we can believe that the Megaville is better than the Saluda.

Third,
the author only tells us that few complaints about service at the local hospital. Nevertheless, there is no information on the complains (complaints)about the Megaville. It is entirely possible that there is no complain about the Megaille and all paients are content the service at Megaille. Besides the number of employees per patient cannot indicate anything. More employees per patient does not mean super qulity(quality) of service.

In sum, the argument is unreliable. More informantion (information)on the two hospitals should be supplied and it would be useful to do a study on much more hospitals.(这的确是文章的一个错误,不过在正文段没有提及) We will be convinced if the aothor (author)can get together more informations(不能加s).

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