caoxuemei的作文帖

pochun111UID: 2608867

你好 3月19号分到一组 可我的作文你现在还没改呢 是忘了吧 麻烦你了

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16# pochun111 改好了，不好意思哦。好像搞错了。我都迷迷糊糊的。

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15# crazylu
这天的我都没有写完呢。贪玩了今天。你的我今天晚上会看完给你回复的。呵呵。

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童鞋， 多谢你的修改，不过你改的是我26号的作业，哎，也怪我不好，两天的作业连在一起了

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加油

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Do you agree or disagree that improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country.! Y* Y( |9 U( D' V! W
The development of county is up to various aspects of a country, involving economy, culture, industry, agriculture and so on. As a university student, I think that the function of schools plays a critical role in development of country. It means (that) improved schools 应该是improving school. is the most factor in successful development of country. % o, T7 I$ c0 l) j2 [$ g, m

2 e" G0 }! A# ^1 \7 f! b3 pFirst of all, successful educational system provides science and technology to citizens provide的用法里有和to 搭档吗？我记得只有with ,for.. . The correlation between technology and success of country “is surprisingly strong”, observed University of Beijing economist 有点怪，可以换成economist frm UNI of BEIjing,in one economy of international study. Our society abounds with the examples. For instance, my hometown where set at countryside in Hebei province, once is a prosperity state换个什么词吧？state用在这里太大，用place。。 with 个人认为用for比较恰当，因为的意思producing plastics. Yet they do not try to invest in education, study new technology or new material, 缺点什么。。建议in order to
meet the ..meeting the update markets need. Meanwhile, it 指代不明。。make their youth drop out of school and work in factories ; The knowledge and development are ignored. 建议这句话整体改一下，突出教育被忽视，孩子们都去工厂而不是学习。。
In the more than 20 years since then, while other places of Hebei province have had a drastic change in the industry and economy, my hometown is still in economic stagnation. Such a vivid example that 去掉evokes the principle: giving up study is to give up development .
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Moreover, the knowledge that schools give broadens horizon读不通。。. From sociology to history, from economics to psychology, schools expose various fields to students. Thus people who attend classes could keep themselves informed of what is going on in the world, and avoid being limited. History has filled with these miserable examples. Such as the destruction of the Qing Dynasty by cling to dated society to prove that backward knowledge and limited thought can vanquish a whole country. 0 o+ k) t) U# s. l' H" N5 ?

* T1 t( R5 w+ Z. t* A) e9 \9 U0 tFinally, with education keep improving, cultural qualities of the people什么意思？ could constantly be improved. The people more peaceful, the country more stable不能这么写吧？ 如果我的话我写more peaceful the people are ,more stable a country is，, then the nation would more prosperous. 有了前面的，这句可以去掉。Compare A family with harsh surroundings to B family with harmonious environment: A family could not communicated with each other well; and fight with each other all day, then no one focuses on the construction of the family. B family (which )with a close relationship concentrate on the family’s strength in a 改an united effort to meet the all of the problems which the family face. Then the result  is loomed ,B family have being developed well than A family (have).The homFamily is a microcosm of a country. 有这句话的话最好后面再发展一下。。不然最好去掉，有点突兀。
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To sum up, technology, broaded horizon, up-dated thought, and cultural qualities of the people are 去掉all benefited from the schools improving. Therefore, improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country.

不好意思，前天考试所以没来得及批改作业，对不住了。。
我觉得你的有的词用的不错，建议语法上注意一下，句子最好可以再简洁点，清晰表达最重要哦，加油加油

caoxuemeiUID: 2629828

Some people think one's working is more important than being with one's family.& V
When it comes to the correlation between family and working, there are a wide diversity of opinions. Depending on different experience and motional concern, a fair proportion of people think that working is more important than being with family, but others disagree. As a set designer with six years working experience, I think treating both of them as some in one’s life is wise.
The correlation between family and success is “surprisingly strong,” observed University of Beijing researcher Zhiqing Zhang in a 100,000 people study. Once being a failure in family, people could hardly take a credit that he/she could success in career. In nowadays, our life fills with this kind of examples: once my ex-leader Ning Xu could be view as a successful person, in addition to a higher position in our theater, he own two restaurants and one factory. But he is weak in family. After divorced for five years, his world collapsed. He lived in a disordered situation, and aggressive instead of good temper. Finally, with gambling away all his fortune, he was faired by our theater. In our country, this is an unwritten rule: when employer knows that a employee’s family has some question, he will fair the person. That is to say, if one can not do a family, how can he do something else what others assign.

Secondly, successful in family is proving to be a bonanza for successful in career. To a large degree, the achievement of working is determined by how harmonious we are living in how much support the members of your family gives. Take my self for example: I have a good family. Last year, an American professor invited me to go to America for taking a degree. Definitely I was caught on the horns of dilemma. The flourishing working in our country and the future which is uncertain if going to America, which one I should chose? I called my father. He told me to pursuit what I really want to obtain. Then I decided to get a trying. On the one hand, he help me making a decision when I can not look over the working situation; in addition, he care about what I really want rather than what I will achieve. This is family: when you are in trouble, they give you a hand immediately; when you are in dilemma, they give you the most suitable advice; when you fail in working, they treat you as usual. They stay still in home waiting for you at any time.
To sum up, being with family will be worthwhile, for the benefits that the family confers on working. For both of rational or emotional concerning, family is an important portion in one’s whole life, as important as working. Dedicating in working or being with family is not paradox.

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11# caoxuemei

The development of a country is up to its various aspects of a country, involving economy, culture, industry, agriculture and so on. As a university student, I think that the function of schools plays a critical role in development of a country. It means improved schools is the most (the most WHAT factor? The question is missing a word here - and you just blindly copied it.) factor in successful development of a country. (Some of these questions circulating around contain very obvious errors. Learn to identify.)

First of all, a successful educational system provides science and technology to citizens. The correlation between technology and success of a country “is surprisingly strong”, observed one? University of Beijing economist in one economy of international study?. Our society abounds with the examples. For instance, my hometown, where set at the countryside in Hebei province, was once is a prosperous state (A 'state' is a 州 in the USA, the approximate equivalent of a 省 in China, so if your hometown is part of a province then it can't be a state.) with producing plastics production. Yet they (Who?) do not try to invest in education, to study new technologies or new materials, or to meeting the updated markets needs. Meanwhile, it make their youth drop out of school and work in factories ; The knowledge and development are ignored.  In the more than 20 years since then, while other places of Hebei province have had a drastic change in the industry and economy, my hometown is still in economic stagnation. Such a vivid example that evokes the principle: giving up study is to give up development. (Excellent example, very relevant and specific, but 'giving up study' isn't exactly the same as 'improving schools'. You need to phrase your example in a way that corresponds with the question. The part about 'invest in eduction, study new...' is still okay, but the next part about school drop-outs needs more relevance with 'improving schools'. For example, you can say that the local government never tries to improve the schools as it didn't care about the drop-out rate. The keywords 'improving schools' need to get into there. You also need to get the conclusion back to the 'country' level, instead of stopping at 'development'. In summary, think about how to make your example and conclusion more relevant to the question.)

Moreover, the knowledge that schools gives broadens one's horizons. From sociology to history, from economics to psychology, schools expose various fields to students. Thus people who attend classes could keep themselves informed of what is going on in the world, and avoid being limited. History (of what?) has is filled with these miserable examples, such as the destruction of the Qing Dynasty by clinging to a dated society, to prove that backward knowledge and limited thinking can vanquish a whole country. (Again, your ideas in examples are promising, but you need to phrase the example along the question's keywords, to make the relevance obvious.)

Finally, with the education keep continuously improving, cultural qualities of the people? (Now this is getting a bit too influenced by your native language.) could constantly be improved. The people more peaceful, the country more stable, then the nation would more prosperous. (You need at least one verb in here to make a proper sentence.) Compare A family A with harsh surroundings to B family B with harmonious environment: A family could not communicated with each other well; and fight with each other all day, then no one focuses on the construction of the family. B family with a close relationship concentrates on the family’s strength in a united effort to meet the all of the problems which the family faces. Then the result  is loomed? (This doesn't quite mean 'obvious'..rather it means 'exaggeratedly obvious'..) ,B family have being developed well than A family.The homFamily? is a microcosm of a country. (What does the two families example, or the 'microcosm' sentence have to do with 'education' or 'improving schools', anyway? This example goes awry because it was not focusing on the keyword 'education', but on the results - 'people more peaceful', blah blah - of education instead.)

To sum up, technology, broadened horizons, up-dated (It's either 'updated' or 'up-to-date'.) thinking, and cultural qualities of the people are all benefited from the schools improving. Therefore, improving schools is the most factor in successful development of a country.

总结：

语法方面问题不是很大，表达上来说有一些受中文影响的地方需要注意。你的语言其实有些非常出彩的地方，且不说是学来照用的还是真的自己能用，照用能用对，也可算是好的表现。论述上来说在举例方面很有想法 - 但是要注意例子和问题的相关，要让你的例子来说明问题，而不是例子说明你觉得例子能说明的东西。总体来说我觉得你很有潜力，因为你有相当不错的语感。但是我对备考完全没有经验，不能就‘2个月如何系统备考’之类的方面给你建议，这方面版面上有很好的备考指南可以参考。。

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Some people think one's working is more important than being with one's family.when it comes to the correlation between family and working, there are a wide diversity of opinions. Depending on different experience and motional concern, a fair proportion of people think that working is more important than being with family, but others disagree. As a set designer with six years working experience, I think treating both of them as (the)some in one’s life is wise.--->I think that it would be wise for one to treat both work and family as the same. 首段很点题

The correlation between family and success is “surprisingly strong,” observed (by)University of Beijing researcher Zhiqing Zhang in a 100,000 people study..??是10万人的学习么. Once being a failure in family说不好但是好像不对, people could hardly take a credit that he/she could success in career...这观点.... In nowadays, our life fills with this kind of examples: once my ex-leader Ning Xu could be view(ed) as a successful person, in addition to a higher position in our theater, he own(ed) two restaurants and one factory. But he is weak in family-->but he did not have a successful family. After divorced for five years, his world-->life collapsed. He lived in a disordered situation, and aggressive instead of (in) good temper. Finally, with gambling away all his fortune, he was faired by our theater. In our country, this is an unwritten rule: when employer knows that a employee’s family has some question, he will fair the person. That is to say, if one can not do a family--->if one cannot keep his or her family stable, how can he do something else what others assign
观点很特别，句子有些问题

Secondly, successful用名词 in family is proving to be a bonanza for successful用名词 in career-->success in one's family proves to be a bonanaza in carreer. To a large degree, the achievement of working is determined by how harmonious we are living in how much support the members of your family gives. Take my self for example: I have a good family. Last year, an American professor invited-->introduced me to go to America for taking-->to study a degree. Definitely I was caught on the horns of dilemma. The flourishing working in our country and the future which is uncertain if going to America,没谓语啊 which one I should chose? I called my father. He 。At that time my father told me to pursuit what I really want to obtain. Then I decided to get a trying. On the one hand, he help(ed) me making--make a decision when I can not look over the working situation; in addition, he care about what I really want rather than what I will achieve. This is family: when you are in trouble, they give you a hand immediately; when you are in dilemma, they give you the most suitable advice; when you fail in working, they treat you as usual. They stay still in home waiting for you at any time.语法问题不算少，句子很多是简单句组成
首段你的观点是2个都重要但是文章就说明了家庭的重要性。基本语法有错的时态，单三形式
To sum up, being with family will be worthwhile, for the benefits that the family confers on working. For both of rational or emotional concerning, family is an important portion in one’s whole life, as important as working. Dedicating in working or being with family is not paradox.

caoxuemeiUID: 2629828

It is better to use own knowledge and experience to solve question, or ask other people for advice?
When people were not in a good situation or had something to have to make a decision, they always wonder if solve question according to their experience and knowledge or ask others for advice. For youths like me, a university student, making decision without suggestion is somewhat the expression of immature. But for some people with abundant of experience, raveling problems out by themselves is rather than consulting advices blindly. So, for different circumstance people in, there are no matters how to settle question; the suit one is the best one.
For one thing, people without experience, like youths; or do not excel at a certain scope in which they get a problem, are supposed to ask an advice. For instance, when I was in middle school, attending a common high school or going to an art school mattered. Though I enjoyed drawing very much, I did not know what a real drawing is. Therefore still it was difficult to decide which one is better to a 13 years old child. Fortunately, the advice of father gives throws over my situation a light: I am a gifted child in art, choosing an art school is better. I found it right when I am qualified for a super famous art university in 20 years old. It is to say consulting when people have no experience could look over circumstance clearly, by this, facilitate the progress of solving problems
For another, people with amount of experiences, are rather handling problems according to what ideas they have than relying on others’ opinion. Take my father for example again: once he was a painter, but he changed his career to business when I was born. For him, being a father means more responsibility, however the position of painter can not afford a stable life for me. Finally, throwing out others’ dissuading, he changed his direction of career. Let me making a conclusion before to judge if my father’s chose is successful or not: no one knows others clearly than themselves, if people could picture a map of those life, they could solve problems by themselves.
To sum up, whether asking others’ advice or dealing with problems, it depends on different individual situation. The key of making a wise solution is figuring out what the current conditions they stay in when a problem coming: without or full of experience and knowledge.

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Do you prefer serious movies or amusing movies?
Nowadays, Movies are placed in a critical role for daily life. No matter youth or elder, watching movie is kind of perfect way to relax. Basic different style of movies, people could choose serious or amusing movie. Which is better? As a movie fan, according on different mood or situation I would choose distinct movie.

On the one hand, I love serious movies that could take me in the story but not apart of them. For example, May favorite movie Rain Man, stared by Dustin Hoffman and Tom Cruise describes love among members of family. The reason of why the movie touched me is nothing to do with tons of exiting actions, magnificent scenes or funny story, but is extending my thought to redefined family. Though this type of movie is sometimes less-than-exciting, when the feeling of lonely is looming, or being confused by something happened in life, those movies could throw over the direction of life a light. Few other art forms can compare with inspiring movies.

On the other hand, the various pressure people are under in the faster pace of life need an outlet to escape from rigid condition. Then amusing movie would work. For example, my favorite comedy “Everybody Loves Raymond,” when I feel upset I will watch it .That real make me laugh until get cramps. I feel recharged after a blow of laugh. I should say there is no better way to help people escape from reality temporarily than amusing movie. More over, pressure may lead to mental problems if people do nothing to balance it. So, comedies can serve as a powerful medicine for people mental health. Like my Raymond.

To conclude, each of these two kinds of movies no doubt has its indispensable function in people’s life. People can choose either of them in distinct condition. Nobody in the world would watch serious movies or amusing movies exclusively.

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Do you prefer serious movies or amusing movies?
9 F2 n2 o+ I9 }) w) Z" @  oNowadays, Movies are placed in a critical role for daily life. No matter youth or elder, watching movie is kind of perfect way to relax. Basic different style of movies, people could choose serious or amusing movie. Which is better? As a movie fan, according on（to） different（dinstinct 不同的意思） mood or situation I would choose distinct （different）movies.
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+ n+ P" Y# Y6 X; NOn the one hand, I love serious movies that could take me in the story but not apart of them. For example, May favorite movie Rain Man, stared by Dustin Hoffman and Tom Cruise describes love among members of family. The reason of why the movie touched me is nothing to do with tons of exiting actions, magnificent scenes or funny story, but is extending my thought to redefined family(but its deep thought which has redefined my view of family
考虑到原来的句子可能不太正确). Though this type of movie is sometimes less-than-（not so）exciting, when the feeling of lonely is looming（when we feel lonely and dark）, or being (are)confused by something happened in life(what we encounter in life), those movies could throw over the direction of life a light. Few other art forms can compare with inspiring movies.
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2 @7 ^( z. ]' Y) U; M$ sOn the other hand, the various pressure people are under（suffered） in the faster pace of life need an outlet to escape from rigid condition. Then amusing movie would work. For example, my favorite comedy “Everybody Loves Raymond,” when I feel upset I will watch it .That real（really） makes me laugh until I get cramps. I feel recharged after a blow of laugh. I should say there is no better way to help people escape from reality temporarily than watching amusing movie. More over, pressure may lead to mental problems if people do nothing to balance（modulate 压力不是 可以平衡 的 应该用 调节这个词） it. So, comedies can serve as a powerful medicine for
（tool to keep）people‘s mental health. Like my Raymond.
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( h: R1 m0 y% `) F$ e) ITo conclude, it has no doubt that each of these two kinds of movies has its indispensable function in people’s life. People can choose either of them in distinct condition. Nobody in the world would watch serious movies or amusing movies exclusively.
Distinct 文中用了好几次，但我觉得用在这些情况下不合适 因为它是 明显的 突出的 这种不同的意思

文章结构十分清楚，论点鲜明，不过论证不太有力，“我“喜欢的东西不能作为一种论证来论述 世界上没有人会只看一种电影。

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Nowadays, Movies are placed in a critical role for (in people’s) daily life. No matter youth or elder, watching movie is kind of perfect way to relax. Basic different style of movies, people could choose serious or amusing movie. Which is better? As a movie fan, according on different mood or situation I would choose distinct movie.

On the one hand, I love serious movies that could take me in (into) the story (stories) but not apart of them. For example, my favorite movie Rain Man, stared by Dustin Hoffman and Tom Cruise describes love among members of family. The reason of why the movie touched me is nothing to do with tons of exiting actions, magnificent scenes or funny story, but is extending my thought to redefined family. Though this type of movie is sometimes less-than-exciting, when the feeling of lonely is looming, or being confused by something happened in life, those movies could throw over the direction of life a light. Few other art forms can compare with inspiring movies. (wow，这个例子讲的太到位了，认真学习)

On the other hand, the various pressure people are under in the faster（不需要比较级吧）
pace of life need an outlet to escape from rigid condition. Then amusing movie would work. For example, my favorite comedy “Everybody Loves Raymond,” when I feel upset I will watch it .That real make me laugh until get cramps. I feel recharged after a blow of laugh. I should say there is no better way to help people escape from reality temporarily than amusing movie. More over, pressure may lead to mental problems if people do nothing to balance it. So, comedies can serve as a powerful medicine for people mental health. Like my Raymond. （例子语言稍微夸张了一点，但是感觉这样更有说服力）

To conclude, each of these two kinds of movies no doubt has its indispensable function in people’s life. People can choose either of them in distinct condition. Nobody in the world would watch serious movies or amusing movies exclusively.

感觉楼主的表达非常到位，特别是例子，恰到好处，非常有说服力。
只不过这种明确在问哪一个好的题目，写成这样的结构不知道好不好，我没有经验，也没有写过这样的。