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馋MEUID: 2761685

3-18
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and televisions have more negative effects than positive effects on young people.

Movies and televisions,especially in the modern socaiety,is becoming an indispensable part of people's entertainment activities,for the reason that it can reduce  pressure and refresh people's mind.While the problem of whether they have more negative effctes than positive effects on the younger generation has triggered a heatibg debate,in which one group people claim it is the case,while others hold the oppisite view.Personally,I am standing on the latter that they bring us more benefits .

The first point of mine stand on the fact that TVs and movies ,as a form of  entertaiment activities,has brodened people's horizon and give them an easier access to the lastest information.It goes without the saying that movies and TVs has greatly make our life abundant and colorful.To be more specific,people are able to learn different cultures and  get to know various customs through TVs though they cannot afford the air tickets.Nevertheless,Tvs has satisfied their needs and give their eyes a feast ,especially young people,who always have a keen disire for knowledge,Tvs and movies enable them to expand their outlooks ,which can put them into a favorable position in the job market in their future.


With the first point naturally breezes the second one----Educational programmes and movies can cultivate the sense of responsibility of the young .Owing to the variation of Tvs and movies,younger gernaration have more chioces in deciding what kind of movies they want to watch.Nowadays ,educational movies seem to be well-recieved all over the world. Take the movie CONFUCIUS for example,people may have different feeling after they have watched it,but one thing is certain---they get to know more about this historical great minds.To the youngs,they realize that the importance of traditional Chinese culture and raise the awarness  of learin the essence of Confucius's theory.

Admittedly ,some movies may contains violent and unhealthy contents,but this along doesn't provide suffucient evidence that movies and Tvs bring us more disadvantages than benefits.

All in all,I strongly believe that the advantages of Tvs and movies outweigh their demerits 。


30分钟，时间紧最后没写完就收尾了，请多指教！:mad:
请问怎么复制不到WORD里啊，不知道字数够不够

馋MEUID: 2761685

可以了，333，真吉利啊:L

馋MEUID: 2761685

Movies and televisions,especially in the modern socaiety,is becoming an indispensable part of people's entertainment activities,for the reason that it can reduce  pressure and refresh people's mind.While the problem of whether they have more negative effctes than positive effects on the younger generation has triggered a heatibg debate,in which one group people claim it is the case,while others hold the opposite view.Personally,I am standing on the latter that they bring us more benefits .

The first point of mine stands on the fact that TVs and movies ,as a form of  entertaiment activities,has broadened people's horizon and give them an easier access to the latest information.It goes without the saying that movies and TVs have greatly make our life abundant and colorful.To be more specific,people are able to learn different cultures and  get to know various customs through TVs though they cannot afford the air tickets.All they need to do is  to just turn on the Tv and throw themselevs to the sofa,,they can truely get close to the authentic foreign life styles .As a consequence,Tvs has satisfied their needs and give their eyes a real feast ,especially those young people who  have a keen disire for knowledge,Tvs and movies enable them to expand their outlooks ,which can put them into a favorable position in the job market in their future as well


With the first point naturally breezes the second one----Educational programmes and movies can sometimes cultivate the sense of responsibility of the young and inspire their thoughts.Owing to the variation of Tvs and movies,younger generation have more choices in deciding what kind of movies they want to watch.Nowadays ,educational movies seem to be well-received all over the world. Take the movie CONFUCIUS for example,people may have different feeling after they have watched it,but one thing is for sure---they are bound to get to know more about this historical great minds.To the young,they will realize the importance of traditional Chinese culture and raise the awarness  of learin the essence of Confucius's theory.

Admittedly ,some movies may contains violent and unhealthy contents,but this along doesn't provide sufficient evidence that movies and Tvs bring us more disadvantages than benefits.

All in all,I strongly believe that the advantages of Tvs and movies outweigh their demerits and they will continue to contribute to the spiritual life of the society.

自己修改完毕，困，望大家多多指正不足，一起改进哈！

馋MEUID: 2761685

3-19
今天不写了，做了套barron,脑细胞枯竭
。。。:mad:

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Movies and televisions,especially in the modern socaiety,is becoming an indispensable part of people's entertainment ,for the reason that it can reduce  pressure and refresh people's mind.While the problem of whether they have more negative effctes than positive effects on the younger generation has triggered a heatibg debate,in which one group people claim it is the case,while others hold the opposite view.Personally,I am standing on the latter that they bring us more benefits .


The first point of mine stands on the fact that TVs and movies ,as a form of  entertaiment activities,has broadened people's horizon and make them
easier to access the latest information.It goes without the saying that movies and TVs have greatly make our life abundant and colorful.To be more specific,people are able to learn different cultures and  get to know various customs through TVs though they cannot afford the air tickets.All they need to do is  to just turn on the Tv and throw themselevs to the sofa,,they can truely get close to the authentic foreign life styles .As a consequence,Tvs has satisfied their needs and give their eyes a real feast ,especially those young people who  have a keen disire for knowledge,Tvs and movies enable them to expand their outlooks ,which can put them into a favorable position in the job market in their future as well

the first point naturally breezes the second one----Educational programmes and movies can sometimes cultivate the sense of responsibility of the young and inspire their thoughts.Owing to the variation of Tvs and movies,younger generation have more choices in deciding what kind of movies they want to watch.Nowadays ,educational movies seem to be well-received all over the world. Take the movie CONFUCIUS for example,people may have different feeling after they have watched it,but one thing is for sure---they are bound to get to know more about this historical great minds.To the young,they will realize the importance of traditional Chinese culture and raise the awarness  of learin the essence of Confucius's theory.
这段例子不错，可以支持论证。

Admittedly ,some movies may contains violent and unhealthy contents,but this along doesn't provide sufficient evidence that movies and Tvs bring us more disadvantages than benefits.这段感觉写得太匆忙了，可以这么说，但我觉得或者放到第一段，或者放到结尾段，这样放在这，既不是论点又不是结尾，感觉没什么用啊

All in all,I strongly believe that the advantages of Tvs and movies outweigh their demerits and they will continue to contribute to the spiritual life of the society.
这篇文章你主要就是两个论点，我认为论据似乎可以再多些，从各个角度来支持，你的两个论点我还感觉有些相似，一个说开阔眼界，一个说增长知识，那我认为这样的话更像是一个论点。或许可以是让人们放松，带来欢乐吧。 这是我的一些见解吧

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5# cp19880313
嗯，我也觉得论点有些重复，可能第二点改成让人放松的比较好，谢谢啦

馋MEUID: 2761685

3-20
University students should be required to take basic science classes even if they are not part of the field of the study。

Science,as a basic course in the process of learning,has arosed a bitter debate in which one group people argure that university students have their freedom to choose the classes they want to attend,while another group claim sicence  should be regarded as a  necessary course for everyone.Personally,I am standing on the latter for the following reasons:

To begin with,science serves as the  solid foundation of the  techonological advancement  and the symble of  power to a country.To bemore specific,a country without  sicence development and progress is on the upper-side .Since sicence is able to strenthen the economical status and enhance the productivity of a nation,government is bound to pay more attention to scientific research.Nevertheless,university students are playing an indispensable part in the process of scientific resreach,therefore,they have the responsibility to devote themselves to the science in order to improve the economy of their own countries.

In addtion,sicence enable students to expand their outlooks and spark some creative ideas ,which will put them to an advantangeous  positions in their future career.As science includes numorous aspects and practical theory ,which is closely related to our daily life,students who posses a wide range of sicence  knowledge are likely to be more innoitive and competitive than thrie peers.According to a latest survey conducted by Miami University ,students who have learnt scicientific course can perform better  in thrie job positions than those who don't.

From the above discussions ,it is obvious that scientific course  is essential to both the students and the whole nation,so why don't we double our efforts to learn it well?I strongly believe  that science is bound to contiune to contribute to our future life .


写的太短了，272个字:mad:

馋MEUID: 2761685

太戳了，尽低级错误跟错别字
。。。


自己改一下

Science,as a basic course in the process of learning,has arosed a bitter debate in which one group people argure that university students have their freedom to choose the classes they want to attend,while another group claim sicence  should be regarded as a  necessary course for everyone.Personally,I am standing on the latter for the following reasons:

To begin with,science serves as the  solid foundation of the  techonological（technological） advancement  and the symble （symbol）of  power to a country.To be more specific,a country without  sicence development and progress is on the upper-side .Since sicence is able to strenthen the economical status and enhance the productivity of a nation,the government is bound to pay more attention to scientific research.Nevertheless,university students are playing an indispensable part in the process of scientific resreach(research),therefore,they have more social responsibility to devote themselves to the science in order to improve the economy of their own countries.

In addtion,sicence(science无语) enables students to expand their outlooks and spark some creative ideas ,which will put them to an advantangeous(advantagous)  positions in their future career.As science includes numorous(numerous) aspects and practical theory(theories0 ,which is closely related to our daily life,thus students who posses a wide range of sicence  knowledge are likely to be more innoitive (innovative)and competitive than thrie(their) peers.According to a latest survey conducted by Miami University ,students who have learnt scicientific course can perform better  in thrie job positions than those who don't.These findings reveal the importance of science course for students as well
From the above discussions ,it is obvious that scientific course  is essential to both the students and the whole nation,so why don't we double our efforts to learn it well?In a nutshell,I still firmly hold the belief that the significance of sciences should never to be negleted as long as our society is to be perfected.

馋MEUID: 2761685

3-23

Young people should try different job before they decide which job or career they will do in the long term


Few issues have been arosed more bitter controversy than the one that whether young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or carrer they will persue in the future.Some people claim that it is unnecessary for them to try so many jobs,while others argue they should do so for their own benefits.From my perspective,the scale of justice will no doubt incline to the latter.

To begin with,diifferent jobs  leads to better understandings of their furture career for young people.Since most of the young people have no experience in working ,they are unlikely to form a specific idea about what  kinds of job they are going to pursue.What is more,they lack maturity and sufficient consideration in  the view of their ages.To some extent,they are easily influenced by their peers 's occupation or the incomes of the job rather than their own interests .According to a latest survey conducted by London University,87% graduates are not clear about what their ideal job are handling .Most of them just take it for granted that their jobs just need to be paid by  a high salary.However,once they have make attempts on different occupations,they are bound to get to know the detalis and requirement of their ideal job discriptions.By doing so ,they may know whether they are really into the job and what they need to do in order to qualify this job.


In addition,various job experiences are essential to young people 's life .While in different job positions,young people will meet different people and doing different kinds of work ,which can broaden their outlooks and give them different angles when percieving a certain subject.The more young people sees and experiences,the more comprehensive and justified his thought would be.For example,a young man who has been a salesman in a wooden funiture exporting company may be  welcomed in mobile exporting company since the two jobs share common similarities.Therefore, young people will be more competitive in the job market and perhaps a certain kind of job experience will benefit his whole life.
To sum up ,various job experiences no doubt enable young people to understand their roles better and give them a brodening horizion in choosing  their future job careers.

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自己改了一下里面的错别字

Few issues have arisen more bitter controversy than the one that whether young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will pursue in the future. Some people claims that it is unnecessary for them to try so many jobs, while others argue they should do so for their own benefits. From my perspective, the scale of justice will no doubt incline to the latter.

To begin with, different jobs  leads to better understandings of their future career for young people .Since most of the young people have no experience in working ,they are unlikely to form a specific idea about what  kinds of job they are going to pursue .What is more, they lack maturity and sufficient consideration in  the view of their ages. To some extent ,they are easily influenced by their peers 's occupation or the incomes of the job rather than their own interests .According to a latest survey conducted by London University,87% graduates are not clear about what their ideal job are handling .Most of them just take it for granted that their jobs just need to be paid by  a high salary. However, once they have make attempts on different occupations, they are bound to get to know the details and requirement of their ideal job descriptions .By doing so ,they may know whether they are really into the job and what they need to do in order to qualify this job.


In addition ,various job experiences are essential to young people 's life .While in different job positions, young people will meet different people and doing different kinds of work ,which can broaden their outlooks and give them different angles when perceiving a certain subject .The more young people sees and experiences ,the more comprehensive and justified his thought would be. For example, a young man who has been a salesman in a wooden furniture exporting company may be welcomed in mobile exporting company since the two jobs share common similarities .Therefore, young people will be more competitive in the job market and perhaps a certain kind of job experience will benefit his whole life.
To sum up ,various job experiences no doubt enable young people to understand their roles better and give them a broadening horizon in choosing  their future job careers.

我是chineseladyUID: 2662783

Few issues have arisen more bitter controversy than the one that whether young people should try different jobs before they decide which job or career they will pursue in the future首句太长了而且很模板. Some people claims that it is unnecessary for them to try so many jobs, while others argue they should do so for their own benefits. From my perspective, the scale of justice will no doubt incline to the latter观点最好在首段直接提出来，词汇没什么，不过一看就模板了

begin with, （having) different jobs  leads to better understandings of their future career for young people .Since most of the young people have no (working) experience in working ,they are unlikely to form a specific idea好 about what  kinds of job they are going to pursue这里最好说下是long term job点题.What is more, they lack maturity and sufficient---> they are less mature and lack consideration in  the view of their ages. To some extent ,they are easily influenced by their peers 's occupation or the incomes of the job rather than their own interests 这句貌似跟主题没什么关系，问的是different job and long time job, 跟朋友工作不发生关系.According to a latest survey conducted by London University,87% graduates are not clear about what their ideal job are handling .Most of them just take it for granted that their jobs just need to be paid by  a high salary--->most of them believe that their jobs should be the one with high salary. However, once they have make时态问题 attempts on different occupations, they are bound to--->will get to know the details and requirement of their ideal job descriptions .By doing so ,they may know whether they are really into the job and--->or what they need to do in order to qualify this job最后一句没明白，这段写的有些偏离，主题句说different jobs lead to better understand....文中没提到具体例子而且没说明differents job是怎么让人理解未来career的

In addition ,various job experiences are essential to young people 's life .While (being)in different-->various job positions, young people will meet different people and doing different kinds of work ,which can broaden their outlooks好 and give them different angles when perceiving a certain subject .The more young people sees and experiences ,the more comprehensive and justified his用复数比较合适 thought would be. For example, a young man who has been a salesman in a wooden furniture exporting company may be welcomed in mobile exporting company since the two jobs share common similarities .Therefore, young people will be more competitive in the job market and perhaps a certain kind of job experience will benefit his whole life。题目问的是long term job instead of benefit one's whole life.跟上段一样没扣题

To sum up ,various job experiences no doubt enable young people to understand their roles better and give them a broadening horizon in choosing  their future job careers. 总体看有些写走题没扣题上，得围绕主题写。第二段的主题句很好不过文章没围绕主题句，么有实在例子。语法词汇一般，有模板痕迹

馋MEUID: 2761685

3-24
Do you agree or disagree that improving schools is the most factor in successful development of country

Schools,as a place for cultivating  talents and competent people,has always played a significant role in our daily-life.The problem of whether improvement on schools is the most important factors has cause quite a stir.Some people disapprove of this idea as they argue that it may influence a country little,while others hold the opposite view.Personally,I believe schools are indeed the most essential element which determine the development of a country.

The first point of mine stands on the fact that schools are the major source of developing
potential talents for the society.Since schools are the necessary steps for most of the children,they have to attend their classes and carry on their study in their schools .Therefore,schools naturally becomes the best place for students to begin their elementary education .Moreover,as some children are likely to pursue their further education and achieve higher,schools are a must.Nevertheless,it is universally acknowledged that most of the scientists ,economists,biologists,politicians all have an excellent academic backgrounds in their schools,so it is no exaggerated to say that the development of a country largely depends on the schools's operation.

In addition,schools not only serves as   a place for study,but also a place where students can develop their spirit of teamwork and learn how to cooperate with others,which is an important skills in both their life and study.As school is composed of numerous students and a couple of staff members,students have  to understand how to get on well with others and communicate with others in a right way.Once students have form an systemetic ways  how to conduct their behavior and obey the rules ,they are bound to be  self-awaress and responsible in the society.

Admittedly,some environmental problems and social healthcare issues are affecting the development of the country as well ,but  I still hold the belief that talents are the foundation of a well-developed country and thus  more emphasis should be placed on the school education.

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Schools,as a place for cultivating talents and competent people。。？没理解,has always played a significant role in our daily-life-->our country更扣题.The problem--->issue of whether improvement on schools is the most important factors单数复数问题 has cause quite a stir.Some people disapprove of this idea as they argue that it may influence a country little,while others hold the opposite view.Personally,I believe schools are indeed the most essential element which determine the development of a country

The first point of mine stands on the fact that schools are the major source of developing potential talents for the society.Since schools are the necessary steps for most of the children,they主语问题前后不一致 have to attend their classes and carry on their study in their schools .Therefore,schools naturally becomes主谓问题 the best place for students to begin their elementary education .Moreover,as some children are likely to pursue their further education and achieve higher..没写完??,schools are a must...??.Nevertheless,it is universally acknowledged that most of the scientists ,economists,biologists,(and) politicians all obtained have an excellent academic backgrounds from in their schools,so it is no exaggerated to say that the development of a country largely depends on the schools's operation. 可以多说些他们是怎么benefit 国家的

In addition,schools not only serves as  a place for study,but also a place where students can develop their spirit of teamwork and learn how to cooperate with others,which is an important skills in both their life and study.TS长就比较忌讳的而且句子中没提到country，都是如何如何对自己有好处。As school is composed of numerous students and a couple of staff members,students have  to understand how to get on well with others and communicate with others in a right way.Once students have form an systemetic ways (about) how to conduct their behavior and obey the rules ,they are bound to be  self-awaress and responsible in the society。例子不算充分只是最后点题了下没有具体而且前半部分说的偏离主题

Admittedly,some environmental problems and social healthcare issues...?题目和你的文中都没提到过这个，这个太突然了 are affecting the development of the country as well ,but  I still hold the belief that talents are the foundation of a well-developed country and thus  more emphasis should be placed on the school education.
语法：单三单复数，句子结构。例子跟上一篇类似没有具体，点题不够充分，一般结尾不出现新事物

馋MEUID: 2761685

13# 我是chineselady 嗯，语法错误要注意，之前考雅思的时候论点没有例子的习惯，现在发现T 的要例子 的，以后论点后面的例证会提到的，谢谢啦，

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3.26  (08.11.7NA)
For successful development of a country, should a government focus its budget more on very young children education rather than on universities?

When it comes to the issue whether more emphasis should be put on young children education or on universities,many people will face a dilemma,since both sides are critical to the development of a country.From my perspective,more bugdets should be placed on the young children education instead of universities.

The first point of mine stands on the fact that to the younger generations,basic education in school is the beginning  stage of their community life .If they can do well in this stage,they are more likely to succeed in their later study and life,which will lead to better ways to contribution  to their country from a long run.To be more specific,once more budgets are distributed to the elementary education,young children are bound to get better education facilities,like the updated labs,microphone rooms,which enable them to get a better academic environment.As a result ,young children can learn more efficiently and make greater achievement  to the society.To take  U.S as an example,it highly attach importance to the basic education among young children and regards young children as the stars of the future.Consequently,those youngs study harder in order to devote to the country.Numerous talents and intelligences from various fields spare no efforts to  make this country  more stronger and powerful.


In addition,more people can gain access to basic education  and make contributions to the society once government focus budgets on it.According to a lastest survey conducted by NYU,more than 70%fail to get admission to universitese even though  they have finished their compulsory education.This result clearly demonstrates that it is unnecessary to highlight higher education because of the various career choices these days.It is universally acknowledged that what we once called the "real brains" now comes not only from universities,but all aspects of  the society.Therefore,people just need to recieve their elementary education since what matters is their interests not their levels of edcucation.As long as goverment focus on their compulsory education,their future career choice is largely depends on themselves.No matter he or she is a teacher or a baker,they  are all important factors to the society.

All in all,i firmly believe that young children education ought to be highly stressed,so why don't we double our efforts to it in order to make our nation more stronger?


超时7分钟，罪过罪过啊，sad