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Should the collage and university require their faculty to work outside the academic
world in professions related to the course they teach in order to improve the quality
of teaching?The author tends to give the answer yes while from my perspective of view,
this issue is so complex that it need a case by case analysis before the final decision
can be made for though practical experience can insofar benefits the instruction there
are certain academic fields having not relevant professions and too much outside work
can weaken the quality of the course.

Knowledge contained in the textbook often lags current development for we are now in
an unprecedented era of information explosion in which science and technology changes
so rapidly that some today's up-to-date ideas or findings will be obsolete tomorrow.
For example,solar energy industry develops so rapidly that a large number of papers
published and many new theory are introduced while what the cousre contains are obsolesent.
According to the report made by the Chinese Academy of Science,more than 10000 papers
about the solar energy are published in 2009 of which 40% have significant effect on its
development.Requiring the faculties to working outside will be conducive to broaden their
horizon and have a better knowledge of what skills employers really need,which will benefit
their students when those cutting-edge knowledge and skills are added into their regular
courses.

Teacher's practical experience also plays a critical role in helping students to asjust
from campus to job market.Tt is far more difficult for the graduate to find a satisfactory
job than ever due to lack of practical skills and rather than lack of job vacancies.Graduates
will inevitably face a much more fierce competition in society than in college,which will
make some of them feel uneasy.Professors who have outside work experience will have a clear
and exact understanding of job market as well as what is employer's really need.Therefore,they
can offer useful suggestion to their students helping them to be relieved.  

However,pay undue attention to working experience will be less an complement to the
course than undermining the instruction. Scince a person's energy is limited too much outside
work occupies professor's time which should have been concentrated on preparing for courses,
which impairs the intstruction quality.According to a recent survery conducted by pedagogy
department in FuDan University,among the top professors in China,83.8% of them have so many
social activities such as adressing lectures, running a company,etc to participate in.On the
contrary,only 5.3% of them teaches undergraduates and 12.3% of them give lectures to graduates.  
Moreover, a survery about the student's satisfaction about their courses shows that university
students especially those who are in the class of professors with a high reputation are more
likely to complain that when they have something to discuss with their professor they often
cannot find their professor.Peraps we had better encourage those professors to spend more time
with their students rather than take part in social activities.  

Moreover,there are certain disciplines such as theoretical mathematics requires deducting and
formulating models which needs devoting to laboratory rather than working outside.Social works
will hamper appearance of new theories.If Newton had involved in outside work Newton's three   
Laws of motion would have been nonexeist.Furthermore,there are some disciplines such as philosophy,
archaeology which have no relevant professions.Thus,it is impossible to require those researchers
to work outside.   

In sum,before the university and college made the final judgement it is necessary for them to take
into account both the negative and positive effects of the working outside requirement.

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Should the collage and university require their faculty to work outside the academic
world in professions related to the course they teach in order to improve the quality
of teaching?The author tends to give the answer yes while from my perspective of view,
this issue is so complex that it need a case by case analysis before the final decision
can be made for though practical experience can insofar benefits the instruction there
are certain academic fields having not relevant professions and too much outside work
can weaken the quality of the course. （这里，用的“it is so ```` that ````,即是说，so后面的就是that 的后面那个情况的原因，但是你再加了一个for, 后面又跟一个原因，我就有点搞不懂了。  我觉得，complex 指的就是for 后面的那个内容吧，不如把它们放到一起说了）




Knowledge contained in the textbook often lags（behind) current development for we are now in
an unprecedented era of information explosion in which science and technology changes
so rapidly that some today's up-to-date ideas or findings will be obsolete tomorrow.(一般来说，第一句是主题句。你这一句似乎离“教授出校工作”这个主题稍微有点远。)
For example,solar energy industry develops so rapidly that a large number of papers
published and many new theory are introduced while what the cousre contains are obsolesent(就算是有很多新论文，教材也不能就没用了吧？）.
According to the report made by the Chinese Academy of Science,more than 10000 papers
about the solar energy are published in 2009 of which 40% have significant effect on its
development.Requiring the faculties to working outside will be conducive to broaden their
horizon and have a better knowledge of what skills employers really need,which will benefit
their students when those cutting-edge knowledge and skills are added into their regular
courses.（问题是，教员出校工作有机会去读这些论文吗？ 不出校工作就不可以读到这些论文么）

Teacher's practical experience also plays a critical role in helping students to asjust
from campus to job market.Tt is far more difficult for the graduate to find a satisfactory
job than ever due to lack of practical skills and rather than lack of job vacancies（我觉得这个比较没有必要,).Graduates
will inevitably face a much more fierce competition in society than in college,which will
make some of them feel uneasy.Professors who have outside work experience will have a clear
and exact understanding of job market as well as what is employer's really need.Therefore,they
can offer useful suggestion to their students helping them to be relieved.  (这段很清晰，不妨举点儿具体的例子）

However,pay undue attention to working experience will be less an complement to the
course than undermining the instruction. Scince a person's energy is limited too much outside
work occupies professor's time which should have China,83.8% of them have so many
social activities such as adressing lectures, running a companybeen concentrated on preparing for courses,
which impairs the intstruction quality.According to a recent survery conducted by pedagogy
department in FuDan University,among the top professors in ,etc to participate in.On the
contrary,only 5.3% of them teaches undergraduates and 12.3% of them give lectures to graduates.  
Moreover, a survery about the student's satisfaction about their courses shows that university
students especially those who are in the class of professors with a high reputation are more
likely to complain that when they have something to discuss with their professor they often
cannot find their professor.Peraps we had better encourage those professors to spend more time
with their students rather than take part in social activities（结尾，归到校外工作比较好吧，光说社会活动，似乎还不够）.  （这段不错，这个数据太有用了）

Moreover,there are certain disciplines such as theoretical mathematics requires deducting and
formulating models which needs devoting to laboratory rather than working outside.Social works
will hamper appearance of new theories.If Newton had involved in outside work Newton's three   
Laws of motion would have been nonexeist.Furthermore,there are some disciplines such as philosophy,
archaeology which have no relevant professions.Thus,it is impossible to require those researchers
to work outside.   

In sum,before the university and college made the final judgement it is necessary for them to take
into account both the negative and positive effects of the working outside requirement.

你在第一段说要case by case, 但是后面是乎不是在case by case 的讨论，而是说了，出校工作有什么好处，又说了它有什么坏处。 这样的话，我觉得你的立场就不太明了了。


虽然，我说了这么多，但是我是写作文是很烂的。你的长句很多，虽然有一些问题，但还是不错的。  加油！！