issu56 当务之急与百年大计 第20多篇了……下礼拜二考，求拍！

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TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
WORDS: 376
TIME: 00:40:57
DATE: 2010/4/13 16:01:34

Government is in charge of the social resources, and its intention to use them largely decides the benefits of the whole society. In order to bring out the best benefits, whether more resources should be given to immediate problems or future problems is a complex issue. I propose that the government should carefully weigh the importance of pressing issues and the future worries, and that relatively more attention should be paid to the former ones.

解决紧急问题对人民对政府都有益
Addressing urgent existing problems is of great significance. From the citizen's perspective, it can relieve the tensions caused by the problem and help to ameliorate the situation of people concerned, especially when the problem affects a majority of people. Say if half the people of a country are in destitute and starving, naturally it is the utmost task for the government to treat poverty and increase food production to feed them, otherwise the basic rights of people---the rights to survive---cannot be ensured, let alone any other human rights. On the other side, solving immediate problems is helpful to the government in terms of maintaining regime stability and legitimacy. Generally speaking, immediate problems are usually more concrete and easily perceived than future worries, and by addressing them, the government can demonstrate an effective and powerful image to its people, thus assuring and consolidating the society and the regime.



为什么还要关心未来呢？因为未来的问题可能很大
Given all the benefits of solving immediate problems, why would any administration cares about anticipated problems in the future? Because certain future issues are the consequences of present actions and are matters of life and death. Any disrespect or disregard of such matters would mean catastrophe in the future. The most typical issue is environmental protection. Honestly speaking, many contemporary Chinese are little concerned about pollution because they are faced with far more serious problems, like social security, housing and health care. But in recent decades China experienced consequent environment deterioration of industrialization without environment conscience. Were the government continue to be laisser-faire on environment issues, Beijing is likely to be buried in sands in the near future, probably in this century. Therefore, while putting much resource to solving government should also take commensurate measures to prevent future problems.



讨论两种情况……这样写觉得结构一下子散了……
Furthermore, when dealing with the relation between urgent problems and future worries, two exceptional circumstances should be taken into consideration. In the first scenario, immediate problems should be given priority to anticipated problems when the anticipated "problems" are not really problems, or are of little probability to happen. In North Korea where people can barely support themselves, it is morally irresponsible for the government to invest a big sum of money on the development of nuclear weapons every year just to threat the imaginative enemies. In the second scenario problems concern are of both immediate and future importance, such as the issue of economic development, should be given the top priority. For China, for example, to achieve a stable and healthy economic growth has always been the prior task of the government. Without a strong economy, little impetus and resources could be employed to solve other problems.


In sum, it is understandable that governments pay more attention to addressing immediate problems for it is conducive to both the people and the regime. Yet disregard of negative current trend could lead to future problems, therefore government should also keep an eye on possible problems.

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我来越版看了下，希望AW版主们谅解~

Government is in charge of the(delete) social resources, and its intention to use them largely decides the benefits of the whole society(expressing not the right meaning, you'd say 'its appraoch to use them' or else). In order to bring out the best benefits, whether more resources should be given to immediate problems or future problems is a complex issue(not a proper structure, your subject is not consistent with 'in order to'). I propose that the government should carefully weigh the importance of pressing(not proper use) issues and the future worries, and that relatively more attention should be paid to the former ones. (这一段主要看的语法，这几个地方都是蛮明显的，希望能理解）

Addressing urgent existing problems is of great significance. From the citizen's perspective, it can relieve the tensions caused by the problem and help to ameliorate the situation of people concerned, especially when the problem affects a majority of people. Say if half the people of a country are in destitute and starving, naturally(not good habit of supporting your view) it is the utmost task for the government to treat poverty and increase food production to feed them, otherwise the basic rights of people---the rights to survive---cannot be ensured, let alone any other human rights(这是第一层的核心，是论证的焦点，不应该轻描淡写放在otherwise之后）. On the other side, solving immediate problems is helpful to the government in terms of maintaining regime stability and legitimacy. Generally speaking, immediate problems are usually more concrete and easily perceived than future worries, and by addressing them, the government can demonstrate an effective and powerful image to its people, thus assuring and consolidating the society and the regime.（这一段主要看了你的论证过程，我能领会你的论点，但论证并非特别有力）

Given all the benefits of solving immediate problems, why would any administration cares about anticipated problems in the future? Because certain future issues are the consequences of present actions and are matters of life and death（这是上一句的原因？）. Any disrespect or disregard of such matters would mean catastrophe in the future.（这句话是否表达的负责任，any,,,,,,,,,,,catastrophe?） The most typical issue is environmental protection. Honestly speaking, many contemporary Chinese are little concerned about pollution because they are faced with far more serious problems, like social security, housing and health care. But in recent decades China experienced consequent environment deterioration of industrialization without environment conscience. Were the government continue to be laisser-faire on environment issues, Beijing is likely to be buried in sands in the near future, probably in this century. Therefore, while putting much resource to solving government should also take commensurate measures to prevent future problems（这才是原因吧！）. （这一段你对论点的支持的逻辑显然不很清晰）

Furthermore, when dealing with the relation between urgent problems and future worries, two exceptional circumstances should be taken into consideration. In the first scenario, immediate problems should be given priority to anticipated problems when the anticipated "problems" are not really problems, or are of little probability to happen. In North Korea where people can barely support themselves, it is morally irresponsible for the government to invest a big sum of money on the development of nuclear weapons every year just to threat the imaginative enemies. In the second scenario problems concern are of both immediate and future importance, such as the issue of economic development, should be given the top priority. For China, for example, to achieve a stable and healthy economic growth has always been the prior task of the government. Without a strong economy, little impetus and resources could be employed to solve other problems. （其实我并不觉得这一段的意义非常大）

In sum, it is understandable that governments pay more attention to addressing immediate problems（我不认为这个说法得到了什么论证支持） for it is conducive to both the people and the regime. Yet disregard of negative current trend could lead to future problems, therefore government should also keep an eye on possible problems.

可能我说的问题多了一些。我觉得对于我们中国学生而言AW要想做到语言通畅的同时，能论证有力，的确是异常困难的。也没有看的十分仔细，其实这些问题都是大家最常见的问题。尤其是逻辑的方面，可能更多的人还未能真正理解英文的尤其是学术英文的逻辑。我希望你不要因为我改的原因失去自信，希望你能理解我所挑选出来的地方。对于我们来说，可能理解好文章的逻辑到底在何处，比写出这样的文章，难度更大。

starshaneUID: 2616355

2# 笑看红尘

Government is in charge of the(delete) social resources, and its intention to use them largely decides the benefits of the whole society(expressing not the right meaning, you'd say 'its appraoch to use them' or else). In order to bring out the best benefits, whether more resources should be given to immediate problems or future problems is a complex issue(not a proper structure, your subject is not consistent with 'in order to').
嗯对我也发现了…低级错误………
In order to bring out the best benefits, whether the government should give more resources to immediate problems or future problems is a complex issue.

I propose that the government should carefully weigh the importance of pressing(not proper use) issues and the future worries, and that relatively more attention should be paid to the former ones. (这一段主要看的语法，这几个地方都是蛮明显的，希望能理解）

Addressing urgent existing problems is of great significance. From the citizen's perspective, it can relieve the tensions caused by the problem and help to ameliorate the situation of people concerned, especially when the problem affects a majority of people. Say if half the people of a country are in destitute and starving, naturally(not good habit of supporting your view) 嗯明白了
it is the utmost task for the government to treat poverty and increase food production to feed them, otherwise the basic rights of people---the rights to survive---cannot be ensured, let alone any other human rights(这是第一层的核心，是论证的焦点，不应该轻描淡写放在otherwise之后）. On the other side, solving immediate problems is helpful to the government in terms of maintaining regime stability and legitimacy. Generally speaking, immediate problems are usually more concrete and easily perceived than future worries, and by addressing them, the government can demonstrate an effective and powerful image to its people, thus assuring and consolidating the society and the regime.（这一段主要看了你的论证过程，我能领会你的论点，但论证并非特别有力）

Given all the benefits of solving immediate problems, why would any administration cares about anticipated problems in the future? Because certain future issues are the consequences of present actions and are matters of life and death（这是上一句的原因？）. Any disrespect or disregard of such matters would mean catastrophe in the future.（这句话是否表达的负责任，any,,,,,,,,,,,catastrophe?）
这两句话连起来是第一句的原因，因为未来的问题是现在造成的，现在不注意未来可能有严重问题。
The most typical issue is environmental protection. Honestly speaking, many contemporary Chinese are little concerned about pollution because they are faced with far more serious problems, like social security, housing and health care. But in recent decades China experienced consequent environment deterioration of industrialization without environment conscience. Were the government continue to be laisser-faire on environment issues, Beijing is likely to be buried in sands in the near future, probably in this century. Therefore, while putting much resource to solving government should also take commensurate measures to prevent future problems（这才是原因吧！）. （这一段你对论点的支持的逻辑显然不很清晰）最后一句是结论，应采取的措施。

Furthermore, when dealing with the relation between urgent problems and future worries, two exceptional circumstances should be taken into consideration. In the first scenario, immediate problems should be given priority to anticipated problems when the anticipated "problems" are not really problems, or are of little probability to happen. In North Korea where people can barely support themselves, it is morally irresponsible for the government to invest a big sum of money on the development of nuclear weapons every year just to threat the imaginative enemies. In the second scenario problems concern are of both immediate and future importance, such as the issue of economic development, should be given the top priority. For China, for example, to achieve a stable and healthy economic growth has always been the prior task of the government. Without a strong economy, little impetus and resources could be employed to solve other problems. （其实我并不觉得这一段的意义非常大）
FOR THE SAKE OF COMPLEXITY……

In sum, it is understandable that governments pay more attention to addressing immediate problems（我不认为这个说法得到了什么论证支持） for it is conducive to both the people and the regime. Yet disregard of negative current trend could lead to future problems, therefore government should also keep an eye on possible problems.

可能我说的问题多了一些。我觉得对于我们中国学生而言AW要想做到语言通畅的同时，能论证有力，的确是异常困难的。也没有看的十分仔细，其实这些问题都是大家最常见的问题。尤其是逻辑的方面，可能更多的人还未能真正理解英文的尤其是学术英文的逻辑。我希望你不要因为我改的原因失去自信，希望你能理解我所挑选出来的地方。对于我们来说，可能理解好文章的逻辑到底在何处，比写出这样的文章，难度更大。

论证上，我考虑是把B1写得更加清楚，用更大篇幅或许会有力点，
现在这样主要是想写平衡观点，给后面留了篇幅
逻辑上的错误，可能我水平有限，达不到更高complexity了
THANKS FOR YOUR ENLIGHTMENT!