【1010G精英组】ISSUE&ARGU 习作 by D组

寂寞公路UID: 2759715

逻辑链
第一组：Dr.N治疗à专门治运动，吃抗生素à比平时快40%
第二组：Dr.A治疗à一般外科医生，吃糖片à无明显提高
àà防止二次感染à肌肉拉伤应该多吃抗生素
逻辑攻击点：
1、两个平行试验不平行，包括人数、治疗条件、被实验者状况等等。
2、没有说明抗生素是否能够让治疗提高，糖片是否有影响。
3、肌肉拉伤者不一定就能够二次感染。


The letter writer seems to present an obvious idea that antibiotics should be taken into consideration when treating with muscle strain. By making a comparison of diagnosed process of two groups with muscle strain, the final conclusion seems to be reasonable. However, some logical mistakes appear throughout this letter.

For one thing, two controls that the arguer quoted are not parallel. Dr, Newland, the doctor treated the first patient is specialized in sports medicine. That could make a great contribution to his treatment process. No wonder that the patients he treated are 40 percent quicker in recuperation. The exact numbers of two groups are not shown to us, which could be different. What’s more, these two different groups of people may be in different body conditions. It is possible that the first group are physically better than the second one.

Secondly, the writer didn’t give us a statement that antibiotics can cure secondary infections, and sugar can’t. The argument never presented a clear relationship between these pills and secondary infections, and neither could we deduce that the medicines make contributions to secondary infections. Plus, antibiotics sometimes have bad effects to the pill-takers, and sugar may be what these patients need most.

Finally, the whole argument is based on these patients suffering second infections or at least they containing potential of second infection. However, it is not proved yet. It is only an assumption by the author that second infection can make muscle strain worse. If the experiment is taken in an aseptic hospital, these muscle-strainers can fortunately immune from infection. In this condition, what the writer eager to prove is totally wrong.

In conclusion, several logical fallacies make the argument less cogent. The arguer can make it better by providing experiment with equal numbers and equal conditions in different groups. A brief introduction of antibiotics is needed to clarify that it can cure secondary infection. Besides, basic knowledge about muscle strain leading to secondary infection is quite necessary.

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The conclusion in this argument is that all patients suffered from muscle strain had better (have better 什么？) take antibiotics as part of their treatment（treatments）. In support of this point（不知道能不能这么用……）
，the arguer cites a study in which one group of patients  who took antibiotics  recover more quickly than the other group of patients who took sugar pills instead . This argument is unconvincing for several critical flaws .
     First of all, the statistics of the study  are incomplete and misleadingly vague. The argument fails to tell us the details of the two group of patients ,such as their health condition ,age and life habits. It is possible that the second group of patients are older than the first group or  suffer from more severe muscle strain . Moreover, the number of the patients of the group（groups） is unavailable .Therefore, lacking more specific information about the the two groups  of patients（这个做什么从句？感觉有点别扭） ,it is impossible to assess the reliability of the study.
    The argument is also weakened by the fact that it fails to establish a causal relationship between taking antibiotics and  quicker recovery from muscle strain. The argument relies on the assumption that secondary infections may extend the recuperation period of the patients who suffer from severe muscle strain,but there is no data available to indicate the proportion of those who become infected the second time .(水平有限，这个长句真是没看懂……好晕啊……)It is possible that only a fraction of them are likely to have secondary infections. Hence, even if antibiotics can protect people from being infected for the second time ,the arguer fails to convince us antibiotics will lead to quick recuperation.（我感觉后几句说的意思是相同的，留下一个就可以了吧）
     In addition ,the arguer fails to consider and rule out other factors that might lead to quicker recovery from muscle strain. To begin with ,common sense tell us that one will recover more quickly if he or she have a good life habit or have a slighter muscle strain. What is more, the level of the doctor one（这个one指的是什么？） turns to  will make a difference also. We are informed that the doctor of  the first group of patients  specializes sports medicine while the other doctor  who take charge of the treatment of  the second group is just a general physician ,there is a good chance the first doctor will give the patients more professional advise（后半句应该另起一句了，两句话没有什么连词）.
Finally , even if antibiotics are able to make patients recuperate quick ,that does not mean it is appropriate to every patient .As is  known to every one that antibiotics  do harm to our health because they have so strong side effects. And antibiotics will be fatal to the people who are allergic to it. consequently,advising all patients who are diagnosed with muscle straintaking antibiotics as part of their treatment is presumptuous. （我觉得后两个攻击点有一些重复，都是作者假设前提的错误，可以一起攻击（个人意见））
    To sum up,the conclusion draw in this argument is invalid and unwarranted . To substantial the claim ,the arguer should give more information about the two groups to make it more scientific. In addition ,the arguer should also establish a causal relationship between taking antibiotics and reduction of recuperation time from muscle strain.（最后总结挺到位的）
几点小建议：
1、长句太多了，我读着好晕……当然和我水平有关系……
2、我觉得攻击点不是很鲜明，也可能是我没有理解透
3、文章挺流畅的，加油！

liuyonghaoUID: 2724226

issue130 写得我好苦啊！！！！！

      The author assert that society's destiny  depends on how  children are socialized and we fail to learn how to raise them . Although I appreciate that we have not yet learned how to bring up children ,Ｉcan not agree with the statement that the extent of the socialization of children desides the destiny of the society .
     In my opinion,It is not the extent of the socialization of children but their values that take the most important role in creating a better society. Although through socialization children can learn their culture and how to live within it because socialization provides the resources necessary for acting and participating in the society ,it is equally possible that children might be misled during the period of socialization . For example ,due to the money worship  of the society ,getting rich has become the highest priority of many youngsters . Teachers and parents used to encourage students to be great scientists or artists, but now they  advice students to go in for finance, banking or other business that can bring about a big fortune as fast as possible. Stories of upstarts and speculators have succeeded  in stiring  up a great number of youngsters to drop out of school and become addicted into the stock market.How can they build a better society? Children should be told that their values are the most important to themselves and to construct a better society. Values are virtues, ideals and qualities on which actions and beliefs are based. Values are guiding principles that shape our world outlook, attitudes and conduct. These values include honesty ,general development of knowledge,perseverance in the face of difficulties,co-operation to achieve common goals, understanding and accepting differences between individuals and compassion for other beings(human, animal or plant) . All of them  reflect the development of any society or nation. We all know that  children  are the future of our society,Therefore ,children's values decide the destiny of the society.
      It is true that we have not yet learned how to bring up children because we fail to teach the children that values are the most important to them. One of the main problems with today’s education is that too much emphasis is placed on test score. It has become the most important criterion  for college enrollment. A student, however creative and intelligent, will not be admitted into a college even if his total scores are just one point less than required.We do not need to make our children first in the world in mathematics and science. What we need
to do is to teach them to be honest,to be tolerant of others,to persever when faced with difficulties ,to care for other beings and so on.For instance,we have not convince the children that violence is not a proper way to solve a dispute,which is the reason why violence exists almost everywhere.Many children start fighting because of stupid reasons and from a little argument and they end up in hospitals or even dead.All in all, there is a long way to go before we succeed in teaching the children the essence of the values I have discussed before.
       At last ,let us consider this story: God says to one child: Your task is to build a better world. The child asks: How can I do that? The world is such a large, vast place, so complicated now, and I am so small and useless. There is nothing I can do. But God says: Just build a better you.The story tells us that children should build their values first and then they can build a better society .All of my essay leads to the conclusion that we need to do more to teach the children who are the future of the society to build their values which are the most important to construct a better society.

sjxxjUID: 2745756

ISSUE130   占个挡

无论如何，还是写出来了，花了半天多的时间，就算有多烂，大家无情的批判

position:我部分同意作者的观点：即孩子的社会化程度对社会的发展有促进作用。但是，我认为：过多的强调当今社会不懂得怎么促进孩子的社会化是不当的。

1.总体上讲，一个国家中孩子的社会化程度的确是促进其社会发展的重要因素。
2.但是，作者断言孩子的社会化程度将决定社会的命运，也未免太夸张了。只能说，孩子的社会化程度只是推进社会发展的一方面因素。除此之外，还有其他的因素同样应该考虑
3.其实，作者一直在强调孩子的社会化程度，却忽视了对社会化本身的理解。我的理解是：社会化是作为一名社会成员融入到社会活动中并在其中扮演一定角色的现象与过程。(越写越像AUGRUMENT)

I agree with the author’s point partly: the degree of children’ socialization promotes the society development. However, inmy view, excessive emphasis on that the society cannot fosters children’s socialization is not correct. Except anxiousness, we should more focus on theunderstanding of socialization. Here are why:

As a whole, the children’ socialization is an important factor of development of society. On one thing, it is favorable for the society that children engage themselves into social activities. Forinstance, they can join the construction of city, and pay attention to thevarious city crisis, along with conferring with their companions and the old.On the other thing, children now do lack of interplaying with social groups.Surly, there are some causes we cannot overlook: first, nowadays, the majorityof young children lacks of playing mates while staying at home alone.Meanwhile, the education emphasizes more on the ability of individual’s thought, which weaken the children’s corporate spirit on some extend.Therefore, according to the traditional thought, the socialization is weakened.

However, the author asserts that the children’ socialization will decide the destiny of society, which seems to be exaggerate. Because, there is more other equivalent important factors , such aschildren’ values, their temperature, ability of solving problem alone and soforth, propelling development of society besides the one the author emphasizes.The children’s various abilities can be compared to the vertical bars of a box which can hold the water( compared to the prosperity of society). Only when those bars share equal length can water be to the most. Confronted to theassertion of the children’s socialization, we should calm down.

However, while the author thinks the socialization of children serious all the time, he/she ignores to understandthe socialization itself. In my opinion, the socialization can be described asa phenomenon and the progression of one’s participating the social group andplaying a rule in it. So, we should concentrate on the content not the form.Obviously, with the booming of development of technology especially theinternet and the new media, the children can join in variety of socialactivities positively, which hardly need a place where people converge. theprevailing of electronic forum can be a good example. As a consequence, the content not the form of socialization is the point.

All in all, on one hand, it is admitted that the socialization of children play a consequential rule in hastening theprosperity of society. On the other hand, it is not necessary for us to worry about that “we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bringabout a better society”. After all, as being proved by history, the society always finds it route herself.（根据上次作业战友的点评意见，这次在句子的表达上力求更加的简洁，第一次尝试在issue出用比喻，感觉用的很“搓”，大家不要见笑

寂寞公路UID: 2759715

算了算了，交吧，憋了一天，也没什么好说的感觉……我都不忍心看了……
主要分几个方面：
1、对社会化进行简单的定义
2、对社会化进行简单的肯定
3、对第一句社会化能够决定社会命运进行批判
4、对第二句我们没有很好的培养孩子进行批判
5、小总结

No country for children? I have to put some disagreements on the arguer’s opinion that the destiny of society is determined by the extent to which children are socialized.

In my point of view, socialization involves in two different aspects: to the society, it is one way to teach an individual who am I; from the individual point of view, we develop physical and mental health, learn basic skills and forge a tight bond with the society through the process of being socialized.

I have to concede that without any socialization hardly could an individual make achievements, thus contributing to a better society. Lack of communication skills, we could only dwell in our own world and never make our voice heard. Lack of primary knowledge of a specific profession, we could only jump to the zenith of the science skyscraper without the help of ladder. Lack of basic sense of laws and norms, we could not help but do harm to our society. Lack of target formed by society, we could only live without purpose and devalue our life and time.

However, socialization is not the only factor, at least is not the most important one, that influence the contribution to a better society by individuals. Taking many fabulous leaders and artists into consideration, it is quite true. Martin Luther King is more influence by his parents whose strong religious strength leads to Martin’s contribution than socialization. Vincent van Gogh, who suffered from anxiety increasingly, and could never be a member of the society of his era, gave birth to a lot of immortal works of painting, and had a far-reaching influence on 20th century art for its vivid colors and emotional impact.

The second claim of the speaker is still questionable. I still wonder the exact definition of a “better society”. As far as I considered, society is a group of people with some bonds to live together and sharing the same culture, norms and customs. A better society involves a better standard of life to the majority of people, a more tolerant to different voice, a more colorful culture and a more wholesome law. In this way we are actually aware of the method of bringing up a child to be a better contributor to society. What they need is not only socialized pattern but diligence, honesty, persistence, kindness and so on which are the core content of many of our schools and moral courses. It is also the way these workers, doctors, lawyers, engineers and artists being brought up, who are making or have made a better society by enhancing our living standard, diversifying our culture and protecting our legal rights.

In sum, socialization may be one factor of whether a child grows up to contribute to a better society. Parent influence, religious impact and intelligence count more than socialization. Plus, it is not necessary to put much worry to our education of how to cultivate our children. “Better society” is related to more aspects than we can imagine. Every educated child has his way to draw a dulcet picture. So, the tragedy of the old man could be not replayed on our children.

maggie-jiangUID: 2666877

占130
申请迟交。。。感觉写走题了
在重写中。。。。

missingqiqiUID: 2688720

哎，憋了3天，总算憋出了一篇完整的ISSUE。ARGU写了不少，套路模式感觉有点有自己的东西了，不过相比之下发现ISSUE真的很难写，写好就更难了，其实也没有什么奢望，毕竟汉语作文也就是刚及格的level。。。
      这次按照计划写了第一篇ISSUE130，就是第一高频，果真是名不虚传，真的很难，或者是我认为很难。。。额，汉语都写出了长句，带插入语，汗一个。。。
       其实，当时看题目都晕了，社会化？社会发展？培养孩子？建立更好的社会？什么嘛，这跟我的生活貌似完全不搭边，当然更不知道如何下手。于是。。看范文，想例子，再看，再想，浑浑噩噩的三天什么也没有，结果只是一个框架出来了，surely，however，as is to say。。。一些无关痛痒的话语。
        今天铁下心来，终于完成了一篇。估计写得也不咋地，立个碑就当一个里程碑吧。那个词叫什么来着，哦对了，叫做milestone。哎，都有职业病了。。。


opinion：基本不同意
1.（让步）的确，孩子的社会化是社会教育的一项重要任务。 比如微软的建立正是两人合作的结果
2.但是，孩子的社会化程度并不代表会更好的提高社会。比如古代很多科学家，都是一个人改变了世界，举例陈景润独立研究哥德巴赫猜想。
3.我们其实已经建立了相比过去比较好的社会了，而不是Speaker所说的还没有学会。

In recent years, many educators focus their eyes on the problem of socializing children. Some people claim that socialization determines the destiny of society and criticize that people have not find a way for better education today. From my point of view, I fundamentally disagree with this opinion.

Surely, how to socialize children becomes an important mission of our education. With the fast development of society, the children in present period are more indispensable and not willing to play or work with other mates, which can be a big difference compared with the last generation. However, no matter how outstanding and excellent people are, we are just a member of society and that is impossible to avoid contacting with other people. No one can live with themselves. So learning how to cooperate with others and get well with mates is the first step for a child to get into society. As the two founders, for instance, Bill Gates and kaj Paul Allen establish the giant Microsoft. They work in team and help each other. Just because of their cooperation and team-spirit, they gain a huge success in today's computer software field. Therefore, it is necessary to take effective actions to socialize our children.

However, even though the function of socialization cannot be ignored, it does not mean it will decide the way of out society's developing. Socialization require us to cooperate and work and even live with others but this doe not fit for each child who is much more likely to stay alone and do things or experiments all by themselves. For others may cause to assimilate the individuality of a child and get rid of his creativity which is the original source of social improvement. Consider a famous scientist in old age, such as a Chinese mathematician called Chen Jingrun, he made big advances in research on the conjecture of the German mathematician Goldbach 200 years ago that "every given integer than four is a sum of two odd primes", and made a breakthrough in that branch of mathematics. Everyone knows that he never take part in the social activities and has not experienced the process of socialization, he still made a success by his talent and diligence. He himself is enough and socialization is useless to do with his work. And worse still, large numbers of unnecessary may disturb his correct thoughts on this research. Also have innumerous examples in history have proved that it is individuality, rather than socialization, advances the development of history.

As to the speaker's assertion that we have not yet learned how to raise children to bring about a better society, it is obvious that the speaker does not consider the current situation of society. In the past years our society never stops developing, but even faster and faster. Now the country has given us equal opportunities for all the children to accept the compulsory education and have more chances to practice in a lot of famous cooperations than before. The modern current society is full of creativity and vigor. According to this, I think it is clear that the society present is better than ever before. So, even though I cannot define a way of raising children to a better society, but I am sure the movement of society is progressing and has improved a lot. Take my own experience for example, last year as an intern for the DELL Company, seeing students from different places are exchanging ideas and technological works enthusiastically, I can strongly feel that today’s youngsters not only have personal capacity of innovation, but also do well in interacting with other people. So we believe our education, though not perfect enough, is a successful as a whole.

In conclusion, the speaker’s statement is too biased because it overstates the function of socializing children but underestimates the value of developing children’s individual talent. Through taking effective efforts we have indeed realize the correct way to educate children and we are also confident that we can cultivate person with ability for future society.

rosanna1029UID: 2318257

1.
孩子融入社会的能力不能决定社会的命运。
How the children were trained to adatp to a social environment只是影响社会命运的一个原因
孩子的道德，价值观values，教育背景等综合 才能决定社会的命运
2.
我们不用担心不知道如何培养孩子
现在的教育发达
我们的以身作则给孩子一个道德典范
孩子有足够多的途径去接触到更多东西。比如通过网络学习观看一些专门针对孩子的心理和法制方面的节目
我们用与时俱进的要求去衡量孩子是否对社会有益

The are so many factors besides socializiation for children to determine the destiny of society, and we don’t need to worried about how to bing up children.

How children are socialized means how the children were trained to adapt to a social environment, which is indispensable for them live in the society well today. A child not socialized can hardly communicate with other people and difficult to have a way to contribute to the society. Take the people with autism for an instance, they can’t talk to people sometimes, not to say delivering their achievement if they have and communicate for progress.

On the other hand, the moral, values, as well as educational backgrounds and so on of children also have influence on the destiny of a society. Suppose we didn’t tell our children the standard of moral, given rise to a widespread lack of legal sense, there’re abosolutely a large number of criminality and lead to a tumultuous society. As to the educational backgrounds, the technology will be at a standsitll with insufficiently educated children.

We don’t need to worried about learning how to raise children. First of all, the daily work of educators like the teachers is expected to help bringing up children, while the minister of the education department take most educational problems into account. The educational condition is impressive and getting better now with more facilities and instruments. Some biology phenomenon is hard to explain with only words in class, however, the children can even see the whole progree with modern apparatus.

Secondly, we could set good examples for children to follow, like we show our filial piety to our parents and then have a pretty good chance to have dutiful children.

Furthermore, abundant resources provided to children nowadays from which they could learn a lot. They can receive programs from online websites like youtube in fields like psychology and legal system and study regulating their behavior.

Finally, we should use critera that keeps pace with the times to judge whether the way we raise children can help bring about a better society. Maybe children have less sence of competion and lack the duty to bear the responsibility. These phnonemon is probably adaptive features for them to fit the conditions nowaday. When the society oppse the competition and advocate a modest way of life, we can’t say our modest children is not benefit for the society, however, quite the reverse is true.


I don’t think how children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Instead, it’s only one of the decisive factors. We should take into consideration the way of socializiaion , moral , educational background and so on. I also don’t approve that we haven’t yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society. With more advanced technology and more resources online, they could learn more than we originally proposed. After we evaluate them in a modern way, we may be pleasantly surprised that our children can contribute to a better society.


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In recent years, many educators focus their eyes on the problem of socializing children. Some people claim that socialization determines the destiny of society and criticize that people have not find a way for better education today. From my point of view, I fundamentally disagree with this opinion.

Surely, how to socialize children becomes an important mission of our education. With the fast development of society, the children in present period are more indispensable and not willing to play or work with other mates, which can be a big difference compared with the last generation. However, no matter how outstanding and excellent people are, we are just a member of society and that is impossible to avoid contacting with other people. No one can live with themselves. So learning how to cooperate with others and get well with mates is the first step for a child to get into society. As the two founders, for instance, Bill Gates and kaj Paul Allen establish the giant Microsoft. They work in team and help each other. Just because of their cooperation and team-spirit, they gain a huge success in today's computer software field. Therefore, it is necessary to take effective actions to socialize our children.

However, even though the function of socialization cannot be ignored, it does not mean it will decide the way of out（笔误our） society's developing. Socialization require us to cooperate and work and even live with others but this doe not fit for each child who is much more likely to stay alone and do things or experiments all by themselves（前面是单数的，这里应himself或herself）. For others may cause to assimilate（可以直接接people表示同化某人，而这里是同化个性，不知道合不合适） the individuality of a child and get rid of his creativity which is the original source of social improvement. Consider（应用considering或in view of） a famous scientist in old age, such as a Chinese mathematician called Chen Jingrun, he made big advances in research on the conjecture of the German mathematician Goldbach 200 years ago that "every given integer than four is a sum of two odd primes", and made a breakthrough in that branch of mathematics. （整个句子可以不要前面的著名的老年科学家。看这样行不行：considering Chen Jingrun, a famous mathematician in China, who……）Everyone knows that he never take(took) part in the social activities and has not(hadn’t) experienced the process of socialization, he still made a success by his talent and diligence. He himself is enough and socialization is useless to do with his work. And worse still, large numbers of unnecessary may disturb his correct thoughts on this research. Also have innumerous examples in history have proved that it is individuality, rather than socialization, advances the development of history.

As to the speaker's assertion that we have not yet learned how to raise children to bring about a better society, it is obvious that the speaker does not consider the current situation of society. In the past years our society never stops developing, but(换成and) even faster and faster. Now the country has given us（去掉us，给所有孩子平等的机会） equal opportunities for all the children to accept the compulsory education and have more chances（后半句主语不详，若是all the children，则应该在have前加to与前面的不定式并列） to practice in a lot of famous cooperations than before. The modern current society is full of creativity and vigor. According to this, I think it is clear that the society present is better than ever before. So, even though I cannot define a way of raising children to a better society, but I am sure the movement of society is progressing and has improved a lot. Take my own experience for example, last year as an intern for the DELL Company, seeing students from different places are exchanging ideas and technological works enthusiastically, I can strongly feel that today’s youngsters not only have personal capacity of innovation, but also do well in interacting with other people. So we believe our education, though not perfect enough, is a successful as a whole.

In conclusion, the speaker’s statement is too biased because it overstates the function of socializing children but underestimates the value of developing children’s individual talent. Through taking effective efforts we have indeed realize（realized） the correct way to educate children and we are also confident that we can cultivate person with ability for future society.

寂寞公路UID: 2759715

Many universities believe knowledge combined with practice is knowledge. In order to improve abilities in their own professions, the faculty are sent to work outside. I have to confess that knowledge can’t get rid of practice. However, not all professions are appropriate to this kind of internship. What’s more, I don’t think all the teachers can balance the relationship between working outside and teaching in the campus.

It is quite useful for some professors to have a working experience. This kind of experience gives them chances to approach how their knowledge is applied to products making. The valuable lesson also makes the teachers not only focus on the 2 plus 3 equaling 5 but how to make the equation useful and practical. Take the embedded system as an example. If the professor only focus on the pure theory by imparting how to make the system more complicated and multi-functional, it is quite easy for his students to leave the hardware limitation and saving cost alone. However these two factors are vital for developing a successful embedded system. Plus, as far as I concerned, teacher can make his teaching vivid by presenting numerous examples to the college students which is one of the best ways to make the knowledge comprehensible. Concerning the advantages above, this new attempt is practical.

However it costs teachers a lot of time, and distract them from imparting knowledge to the students. Many of them may prefer to work outside to earn money rather than repeat the same thing in the classroom. That is quite detrimental to students and dangerous to the university. Professor’s working and earning money outside also keeps them away from deep research and further study. That is bad not only to students and university but to the development of science and the whole society.

What’s more, it is presumptuous to argue that all faculty are involved. Some professors devoted to subjects such as math, chemistry and the like are free from outside internship. There is no use for their working outside the campus but wasting time when they can research deeper and further. Also it is impossible for all of them finding a proper job. It would cause a lot of chaos when the majority of the teachers are kept away from their working places. So this is nowhere more ridiculous than on the argument of forcing all teachers find jobs outside their academic world.

In sum, it is beneficial in some aspects for professors’ working outside. It can propel education level and make teaching practical in some subjects that relevant to marketing and real life closely. As is known to us all, knowledge can’t be separate with practice. But its defects could not be neglected. Many of them are unable to handle the problems caused by this change. They are distracted from daily teaching by money, fame and other temptations. So they should realize that classroom is where they came from and where they should devoted to. Every individual needs to make a suitable decision both profitable to himself and to the society.

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In order to propel the academic level,should the university education be a insularity or land on the field of socialpractice? However, that a question puzzles us. Is it utter tenable that the speakerasserts that all faculty should study their academic field along with relativeworking practice? After all, in term of this issue, there is no unreservedsolution. While confronting this thesis, it is desirable to consider thingsconditional.

However, the speaker's proposal is somehow in favor of some deep development of several subjects such as architecture andcity planning. In light of the historic developing trace of these subjects,time witnesses them accomplishment on a basis of integration between theory andpractice. Moreover, through studying the case of various architectures and
urban planning’s in ancient Euro, ancient China and so forth, we can find that people always learned the universal empires of constructdesign and city planning in the procession of construction and continuous adjustment of city' formation. For instance, such questions as "which materialcan maintain seemly temperature? Which form of city hasten the city' prosperity?", will be hardly answered if the scholars only sit in the drawing room.

Of course, those specific cases cannotcertify the notion that all subjects should consider being emerged into workingoutside the academic fields. To some subjects, it is no necessarily, even difficult,to do that. Consider, one study theory math, chemistry cannot find efficientpath to do well in practice. Controversially, it is more suitable that they dosome scientific research in laboratory or experiment room.

Simple put, the essential problem is howcan we improve the quality of academic research level and university'.Therefore, one should focus on the content of issue.

So, I think, one can take the measuresbelow to fulfill the aim.

Firstly, one should change his/her mind totackle these issues concerning with the construction of those theory subjects. Onone hand, it is desirable that some other measures are taken into account: onecan enhance the academic ambience, and strengthen the connection of nationwidediverse libraries or research centers, and also reinforce the corporationbetween the domestic research institutes and foreign ones or universities. Onethe other hand, local governments should benefit evolvement of those subjects,along with providing them with excellent study facilities. Likewise, throughconcentrate on the cultivating of the teaching capital the universities alsocan improve the level of them soft waves.

Secondly, it is encouraged that weintensify the studying-and-working relationship for some subjects asarchitecture, engine, clothes designing and so forth. Taking architecture forexample, working practice is a highly significant procedure. When educating thestudents or cultivating relative teachers and professors of such subject, theeducators should deepen the corporation-relationship between the college andsocial institutions, designing studios, even the companies and so forth. Through such activity as art practice, participating to constructing a building, exchanging minds with the architectures andplanners, both students and teachers can learn more knowledge besides book. Consequently,it is obviously advantageous for the evolvement of such disciplines.

In sum, such question—how to augment the qualityof education and level of institute and university--- virtually converts tosuch question---how to treat the relation between different subjects andworking practice on specific conditions. Thus, all subjects will find owndeveloping trace, just as history told us.

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The author makes a conclusion that  it is necessary for all the teachers in university to work outside the academic world .In my opinion , working experience of teachers  can surely  improve the quality of the instruction in college ,however,it does not mean that all faculty should be required to work outside the academic world .
       Practical working experience in professions relevant to the faculty's major will undoubtedly improve the quality of instruction . First of all,working experience might prompt a teacher to understand the courses they teach more thoroughly .Theories must be put to the test of practice because through practice one can have a profound understanding of the theories from books . What is more ,teachers' working experience might make the class more exciting and therefore students may concentrate more attention on what the teachers say.Take myself as a example,I was  often  attentive to what my teacher of Applied Optics said but I always distracted in my class of Quantum mechanics .I think it is partly because the teacher of Applied Optics had several years of experience working in a factory which produce optical instruments and he usually told us how a optical instrument was made .
        In addition to improving the quality of instruction ,teachers' working experience may help students make their career plans and adjust from campus to the job market.A lot of college students fail to know what they really like or what they can do .After graduation many of them may immediately face an unemployment crisis, as the number of graduates who cannot find jobs steadily increases.Teachers' sharing working experience with students may help students know what profession they would like to choose and how to make a practical career plan . After all ,teachers have the responsibility to inform  their students something about the professions they may choose after graduation and inspire their interest .
        However,requiring all faculty to work outside the academic world goes too far.To start with,teachers of pure science such as Quantum mechanics and Pure mathematics may find it difficult to find a job.Even if they find a job,it is possible that the job have little to do with what they teach and therefore will not benefit the students .Moreover,too many teachers pouring into the job market may make it more difficult for other job hunters to get a job.Those who fail to find a job may include the college students  ,therefore we can probably say that the teachers rob their students of job opportunities .Last but not least ,there are some teachers who are not willing to work outside the academic world.All in all, it is not necessary for all faculty to work off campus.
        To sum up,working experience can definitely improve the quality of the quality of the introduction and teachers can make their decision whether to go out of their academic world or  stay .In this case,both teachers and students will be happy .


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In order to propel the academic level,should the university education be a insularity or land on the field of socialpractice? However(此处与上面是转折吗), that a question puzzles us. Is it utter（多余） tenable that the speaker
asserts that all faculty should study their academic field along with relative
working practice? After all, in
term of this issue, there is no unreserved
solution. While confronting this thesis, it is desirable to consider things
conditional（要用副词）.

However,（此处有转折吗？） the speaker's proposal is somehow in favor of some deep development of several subjects such as architecture andcity planning. In light of the historic developing trace of these subjects,time witnesses them accomplishment on a basis of integration between theory andpractice. Moreover, through studying the case of various architectures and
urban planning’s in ancient Euro, ancient China and so forth, we can find that people always learned the universal empires of constructdesign and city planning in the procession of construction and continuous adjustment of city' formation. For instance, such questions as "which materialcan maintain seemly temperature? Which form of city hasten the city' prosperity?", will be hardly answered if the scholars only sit in the drawing room.(看不懂略过了)

Of course, those specific cases cannot
certify the notion that all subjects should consider being emerged into workingoutside the academic fields. To some subjects, it is no necessarily（not necessary）, even difficult,to do that. Consider, one study theory math, chemistry cannot find efficientpath to do well in practice. Controversially, it is more suitable that they dosome scientific research in laboratory or experiment room.

Simple put, the essential problem is howcan we improve the quality of academic research level and university'.Therefore, one should focus on the content of issue.

So,(这里是从上面推出来的吗？) I think, one can take the measuresbelow to fulfill the aim.

Firstly, one should change his/her mind totackle these issues concerning with the construction of those theory subjects. Onone hand, it is desirable that some other measures are taken into account: onecan enhance the academic ambience, and strengthen the connection of nationwidediverse libraries or research centers, and also reinforce the corporationbetween the domestic research institutes and foreign ones or universities. Onethe other hand, local governments should benefit evolvement of those subjects,along with providing them with excellent study facilities. Likewise, throughconcentrate on the cultivating of the teaching capital the universities alsocan improve the level of them soft waves.

Secondly, it is encouraged that weintensify the studying-and-working relationship for some subjects asarchitecture, engine, clothes designing and so forth. Taking architecture forexample, working practice is a highly significant procedure. When educating thestudents or cultivating relative teachers and professors of such subject, theeducators should deepen the corporation-relationship between the college andsocial institutions, designing studios, even the companies and so forth. Through such activity as art practice, participating to constructing a building, exchanging minds with the architectures andplanners, both students and teachers can learn more knowledge besides book. Consequently,it is obviously advantageous for the evolvement of such disciplines.

In sum, such question—how to augment the qualityof education and level of institute and university--- virtually converts tosuch （加a）question---how to treat the relation between different subjects andworking practice on specific conditions. Thus, all subjects will find owndeveloping trace, just as history told us.(看得有点头大，很多句子不是很懂，而且逻辑词有点滥用，只是个人意见，改得不好之处包涵)

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The change of leaders in a certain years isan approach to ensure revitalization of any enterprise, no matter in businessor politics, education or government. Admittedly, new leaders will bring newenergy to the enterprise, yet in some area, too frequent change in leaderposition may bring harm to the community.

In the political arena, the step-down ofold leaders after being in charge for a certain period of time can indeedrevitalize the enterprise to some degree. The changeof leaders may bring new energy and forbid corruption especially in the realmof politics and government. In many countries in theworld, political leaders are reelected every four or five, and sometimes sevenyears, and this has been one of the fundamental parts of democratic government.History has proved that life-long political leaders are easy to render dangerto the whole country. For example, in ancient China,people have no concept of the change of emperors and officers, thus theseofficial workers is very likely to commit to bribe and lack of efficiency. Forthem, there is no need to concern about the achievement in their officialcareer--just pay attention not to obviously violate the law and caught by theirhead officer is enough. No wonder political corruption is frequent in ancientChina.

However, there is an exception. The judge if Supreme Court of a country is necessary to belife-long. This is because judges, in order to keep fair and just, should notbe interfered by other branches of government. This is the essence of the checksand balances in power of government in the United States.

Nevertheless, in some field likeeducation and business, frequently changing leaders will be dangerous. These realms ask for the continuity of policies, but the change ofleaders is always accompanied by the change of policies and concentrations. Theprincipal of universities and colleges are seldom changing, and the supremeexecutives in any large companies do not step down every five years. Theseareas, compared with the political arena, have less risk of corruption, andless need for revitalization. Rather, new leadershipwill cost the enterprise rather long time to know about, and then be familiarwith the leading style and policy, yet it is likely that even before the entireenterprise be accustomed to the change in style and policy, another five-yearcomes, and they have to welcome another brand new leader together with herbrand new idea and policy. This is dangerous to the development of thecommunity.
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Therefore, in some areas, whererevitalization is vital to their development, leaders should step down afterseveral years; yet the exact number of the years can be decided according tothe specific situation of one realm. However, there are still some fields, suchas the education and business, where preservation is more important thanrevitalization, leaders can stay in power for a longer, or even life-long time.

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Issue 7（欢迎拍砖）
        Consider the following cases: if you are going to record the American presidential election  and you have two different forms of documentation,a video camera and  pen  and paper,which form will you choose ?if you are going to record what you think about the presidential election ,which form would be your preference . For me ,I will choose the video for the first case but not the second case.Video camera plays a significant role in recording information for its vividness and effectiveness .However,video camera can not compare with written records when it comes to preserve your thoughts and emotions and it is also less common.

        Video camera is a very important tool to record what happens in our life and it is used widely. Video record  images  and sounds which are very necessary to build a vivid perception and it urge us to use our eyes and ears at the same time to understand something new or profound .It has been applied in many fields . Businessmen use it to persuade customers to buy their products .Rather than the salesperson trying to give a mental image of the company, video can do it with pictures, music and exciting special effects.Video can show the product in action, something brochures can't do. It can bring the product's features and benefits to life. School teachers use it to aid teaching ,applicants use it to introduce themselves to employers,museums use it to show visitors some cultural relics . As far as I am concerned,I like  to  watch president Obama's speech because his voice is so powerful and through his eyes one can see his confidence and extraordinary determination .however ,when I read his speech text I have no special feelings. As a product of high technology ,video plays a indispensable role in our life .

        However ,video camera can not take the place of written records as the most significant  form of documentation .  First of all,video camera can not match written records when recording what one is thinking . Meanwhile , written records can be created with little expense while to make a video one need to have either a video camera or a cameraphone . Perhaps in developed countries almost everyone has a  cameraphone ,but in undeveloped or developing countries only a fraction of people have got such tools . How can video be called the most vital form of documentation when so many people have no access to the instruments that make them. We have used pen and paper for so many years and  they are available  all over the world .what is more,it is hard to use video to record  knowledge which are now carried in books . Therefore ,it is too early to say that video camera is a more important form of  documentation than written records .
      No doubt that video camera is a important form of documentation and it has many advantages when compared with written records but it is not the most significant form of documentation. Maybe one day when video camera become more popular and more powerful video will defeat written records ,but now it is not that strong.

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人们希望节能+新产品的推出+新技术（用于隔热与采暖）------》论者主张认为家庭采暖、制冷等所需电能会得到控制-----》1 电能总的需求不增反降


+纵向类比（过于20年满足需求）-------》2不需要建新厂

提纲：
1、
论者判断总的电能不会增长的依据是几处逻辑问题的，首先，推出的新产品如电冰箱、空调本身就是高耗能，具体两倍的节能能减少多少用电消耗，未知。其次，新技术只是一种可能性，论者似乎将可能=运用？ 即使用，新技术=高成本，多少家庭能用。
2、
即使，这些用电做到节能，也不能说总的电能会得到控制：列举他因（其他家庭用电未考虑，如-----）还有，公共建筑的用电，工业建筑用电（高耗能，作者回避）
3、
论者综上+与过去20年的用电情况进行不当的纵向类比，提出不需建新厂-------错误的纵向类比（过去的情况=现在的情况？ 过去的情况能准确的推测未来的情况？）列举他因，20年的运行可能导致---设备老化。。。。。


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The arguer proposes that the consumption ofelectricity will be well controlled and it is not necessary to construct a newdynamic plant. To support these viewpoints, the arguer cites some surveys andalso takes into account the influence of now technology about home insulationand solar heating system. Of course, the arguer does consider several objectiveevidences to certify his/her proposal. However, this article suffers from a fewlogical fallacies.

On one hand, it is quite doubtable that thearguer claims that the electric consumption will not exceed, but mightdecrease. Firstly, it is widely known that such appliances as refrigerators andair-conditioners consume a large amount of electricity energy. Thus, thatenergy-efficient of those appliance doubles does not mean a appreciable savedaccount of electricity. Secondly, such new technology, more effectivecontaining of home temperature and advanced solar heating fittings, is not yetput into practice but merely a possibility. In spite of these, even thoughthose solution can significantly reduce relative electricity, it is quiteprobable that high price of such newly released products can weaken the motiveto accept them for common people. What is more, even though the consumption ofelectricity of heating and air-conditioning can decrease considerably, thesefactors driving the augmentation of home demand for electricity, includingpeople' applying electricity to cooking appliances, media devices, mobileelectronic devices, cannot be dismissed. Unfortunately, the arguer fails tomention it.


On the other hand, the arguer appears toequate a regional total demand of electricity to only household demand.Obviously, the commune building as libraries, shopping malls, hostels alongwith the industrial constructions can readily exhaust enormous electricityenergy. Thus, because of these factors mentioned above, it is not admitted thatthe overall demand for electricity will not increase.

Moreover, uncertain background of thesurvey quoted by the arguer also weakens it reliability. for instance, the arguerdoes not support such information as " who conducted the survey, how didthose statistics be deal with, who participated those survey " to theaudiences.

Besides, with a historical analogycomparing the productive ability of three exist electric generating plants forthe past 20 years with contemporary needs for electricity, the arguer assertsthat it is no need to construct a new plant. However, such standview is nottenable. Obviously, the past precedent cannot explain contemporary conditionand predict future diverse possibilities.