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Children are expected to have brilliant prospects, this lead to so many things being learned by children--kinds of science, literature and art courses, musical instruments and sports skills. However, some people argue against the heavy burden given to the children since these may do harms to them. One of the debates focuses on that children should study play, or they should help with household chores, and I believe both two are essential to the children.

Human are born with ignorant status, they need to acquire abilities about speaking, communicating with others, realizing themselves and knowledge about the world and humankind. After they enter schools, what they study is connected with whether they could receive admissions from famous colleges or universities, whether they could get higher paid jobs in their future. For example, pupils in China sometimes are busier in vocation than semester time, for they are send to learn the things I mentioned at begin of the essay.

Although play is the nature of a child, he/she is allowed to amuse himself/herself in fixed time. Via playing balls or chess, children can not only release themselves from the heavy study tasks, but also advance the physical strength and the intelligence. Some people may conclude here that study and play is enough for children.

While other argue that children should help to do some housework. Actually, the housework could benefit the children a lot. During the process of helping cooking, children could know series of vegetables, fruits, meats and flavorings. At the same time, they may search new ways for cooking and from which can relax themselves and stimulate their creating more new things. In fact, when people are in adulthood, they have to do many household chores for their families or others, so it is crucial for them learning how to do housework when they were young.

From all above, I can say study, play and doing household chores are playing important roles during the growth of children.

wyl_stevenUID: 2728535

Children are expected to have brilliant prospects, this(which更书面) leads to so many things being learned by children--kinds of science, literature and art courses, musical instruments and sports skills. However(Thus), some people argue against the heavy burden given to the children since these may do harms to them. One of the debates focuses on that children should study play, or they should help with household chores, and I believe both two are essential to the children.
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) g8 |6 t; I% I5 yHuman are born with ignorant status（有这个说法吗？ignorant 是贬义不太合适，Children ，like raw stones which should be shaped to gems ）  need to acquire abilities about speaking, communicating with others, realizing themselves and knowledge about the the world and humankind. After they enter schools, what they study is connected with （whether they could receive 语法错误）admissions from famous colleges or universities（ whether they could） getting higher paid jobs in their future. For example, pupils in China sometimes are busier in vocation than semester time, for they are send to learn the things I mentioned at begin of the essay.. s+ |0 Z  b. G& y& H% K6 R' F. Q8 q- D+ k* _
Although play is the nature of a child, he/she is allowed to amuse himself/herself in fixed time. Via playing balls or chess, children can not only release themselves from the heavy study tasks, but also advance(increase ) the physical strength and the intelligence. Some people may conclude here that study and play is enough for children.
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4 W; p2 E: K/ x! p0 B& wWhile others argue that children should help to do some housework. Actually, the housework could benefit the(去掉) children a lot. During the process of helping cooking, children could know series of vegetables, fruits, meats and flavorings. At the same time, they may search new ways for cooking and(去掉换，) from which they can relax themselves and stimulate them creating more new things. In fact, when people are in adulthood, they have to do many household chores for their families or others, so it is crucial for them learning how to do housework when they were young.
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0 s. B. l' |. V( _From all above, I can say study, play and doing household chores are playing important roles during the growth of children.

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你怎么改错文章啦！！ 晕~

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Children are expected to have brilliant prospects, this lead to so many things being learned by children--kinds of science, literature and art courses, musical instruments and sports skills. However, some people argue against the heavy burden given to the children since these may do harms to them. One of the debates focuses on that children should study【and】 play, or they should help with household chores, and【这里的逻辑关系应该是but吧……？】 I believe both two are essential to the children.! U' {' Q$ P% A5 H6 B4 ~. O

Human are born with ignorant status, they need to acquire abilities about speaking, communicating with others, realizing themselves and knowledge about the world and humankind. 【觉得开头有点遥远……楼主最近学了这种开头法么……？】After they enter schools, what they study is connected with whether they could receive admissions from famous colleges or universities, whether they could get higher paid jobs in their future. For example, pupils in China sometimes are busier in vocation than semester time, for they are send to learn the things I mentioned at begin【the beginning】 of the essay. 0 N0 ^" K% g; T8 h: u7 F- `' M

Although play is the nature of a child, he/she is allowed to amuse himself/herself in fixed time【这句……楼主要表达什么意思和什么逻辑关系……？】. Via playing balls or chess, children can not only release themselves from the heavy study tasks, but also advance the physical strength and the intelligence. Some people may conclude here that study and play is enough for children.【没有说清楚为什么enough呢】

While other argue that children should help to do some housework. Actually, the housework could benefit the children a lot. 【加个for example之类的连接会比较好】During the process of helping cooking【helping 和cooking之间好像缺了什么……】, children could know series of vegetables, fruits, meats and flavorings. At the same time, they may search new ways for cooking and from which can relax themselves and stimulate their creating more new things【more new things可以去掉，跟create意思重复了……或者stimulate them to create】. In fact, when people are in adulthood, they have to do many household chores for their families or others, so it is crucial for them learning how to do housework when they were young.& [+ E* k6 C" b# A" w6 c% L

From all above, I can say study【楼主是不是想说sturdy,这里是不是应该用它的副词形式……】, play and doing household chores are playing important roles during the growth of children. 【play play important roles……】

呃，楼主写这个题目/题材貌似很痛苦呢……同情一下……

canoe03UID: 2786666

知我者lycheee也，这个题目真的让人很歇菜，就是那种看起来什么都不用说的文章最难写了。。。悲剧一个。。。

又改错文章了吗？

canoe03UID: 2786666

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Historically, the commodities such as teas, chinas, silks, flavors and so on traded between eastern and western via Arabic countries performed an important role of human civilization. Not only had the trades promoted the cultural and economical exchanges but also stimulated the adventurers to search for new markets which eventually lead to the discovery of New Continent. Nowadays one characteristics of globalization is freely trading between nations cosmically whereas sometimes Trading Protectionism is gaining ground, some people even say that people should buy things made in their own country even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else. I strongly oppose this viewpoint for several reasons.

Let’s take account of the domestic purchasing firstly. Korea is a good example for against those who advocate this point of view. Some of the agricultural products in Korea are so expensive, even the price of apple may be more than 2.5 dollars per kilogram and at same time Korean government imposes heavy tax on the importing fruits which are cheaper, that the Koreans have to buy less fruits because of the protection of agriculture of their country. If people are told and forced to buy goods produced by their nation, I think it is not fair for the poor since they can’t afford the high price. In other circumstance, being lack of raw materials or corresponding technique, some of goods can not be made by a country, it is unbelievable that this country still don’t buy these things which may be vital for it. Series of mines are important raw materials for China’s industry; some of them in hard rocks and in remote areas which must be excavated in abominable weather, excavating machinery made by home could not withstand the terrible working environments but those produced by Japan or German, which are costly, are competent. Admittedly, buying foreign goods is reasonable for us.

Next, the so-called patriotism calls for buying home things is unfavorable for international trades which will harm us eventually. Through trades between nations, resources are distributed evenly all over the world: oils from Middle East or North Europe exchange dollars for their necessities. The less developed countries could improve their technical level by introducing into the advanced products. Thus, ceasing of trades hinders the circulation of economics and restricts the trades, leads to our civilization stay in a low stage.

To sum up, we all rely on the global trade, and it will deepen and broaden as the developing of economy.

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Historically, the commodities such as teas, chinas[单复数同型], silks, flavors and so on traded between eastern and western via Arabic countries performed an important role of human civilization. Not only had the trades promoted the cultural and economical exchanges but also stimulated the adventurers to search for new markets which eventually lead to the discovery of New Continent. Nowadays one characteristics of globalization is freely trading between nations cosmically whereas sometimes Trading Protectionism is gaining ground, some people even say that people should buy things made in their own country even the price is higher than same things made somewhere else. I strongly oppose this viewpoint for several reasons.【开头很有新意】

Let’s take account of the domestic purchasing firstly.【这个作为topic sentence还需要完善，要不别人多玩不知道你想说什么】 Korea is a good example for against those who advocate this point of view. Some of the agricultural products in Korea are so expensive, even the price of apple may be more than 2.5 dollars per kilogram and at same time Korean government imposes heavy tax on the importing fruits which are cheaper, that the Koreans have to buy less fruits because of the protection of agriculture of their country. If people are told and forced to buy goods produced by their nation, I think it is not fair for the poor since they can’t afford the high price. In other circumstance, being lack of raw materials or corresponding technique, some of goods can not be made by a country, it is unbelievable that this country still don’t buy these things which may be vital for it. Series of mines are important raw materials for China’s industry; some of them in hard rocks and in remote areas which must be excavated in abominable weather, excavating machinery made by home could not withstand the terrible working environments but those produced by Japan or German, which are costly, are competent. Admittedly, buying foreign goods is reasonable for us.4 c- y2 q( `! G8 ]+ @# n/ `. q5 r! V; N

Next, the so-called patriotism calls for buying home things is unfavorable for international trades which will harm us eventually. Through trades between nations, resources are distributed evenly all over the world: oils from Middle East or North Europe exchange dollars for their necessities. The less developed countries could improve their technical level by introducing into the advanced products. Thus, ceasing of trades hinders the circulation of economics and restricts the trades, leads to our civilization stay in a low stage.8 K9 u. h! _3 E& V" L0 @
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To sum up, we all rely on the global trade, and it will deepen and broaden as the developing of economy.
论证思路清晰，但是观点觉得过于激进，让人觉得必须就不能卖国货

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好好写吧，看不太懂，呵呵

canoe03UID: 2786666

Teacher, named as the engineer of human soul, is one of the noblest careers in the world. Students who are best perform and are with great achievement can bring lofty reputation to their teacher. This owns to teacher's delivering knowledge, helping develop good personality and giving much assistance to the students. Teachers are usually be paid for teaching or educating students, some of who get higher grade for the help from their teacher. Consequently, some people are grateful for the teacher's working, and they state that teachers should be paid according to how well their performing. But I don't think it is a good idea for both the teacher and the student.

Above all, it is the regular duty for a teacher to well educate the students. Just like the soldiers sometimes have to devote their life for defending their nation in battles. People are paid in jobs for paying out their energies and intelligence to finish the tasks. Whiles some are well paid for a good job. However, if teachers are paid based on how well the students do, consequently some bad things would come forth. Teachers may be inclined to those outstanding students, whom will perform better than those not so good, thus they will bring their teachers higher income. At the same time, the common students and less smart students may be ignored or not well taught and this is tragically for a nation’s juvenile. Thus, partial to outstanding students of teachers is not fair to other students.

Another significant factor is all the students should be treated equally but partial to outstanding students of teachers breach this principle. Some students are disabled on some subjects, just so they should be paid more attention and given more assistance to help them develop to a more advanced understanding of knowledge. Yet some geniuses are not taught by teachers who are higher paid. Johann Carl Friedrich Gauss, well known as German mathematician and scientist who contributed significantly to many fields, is taught by his mother and uncle. All these illustrate that no matters students are smart, or teachers are well paid, the goal of education is to develop potentialities of human by the greatest extent and found perfection of personality of a man.

In the end, we can say that achieve our respect to teachers is not paying them higher according the student’s performing, but relies on the nobility of the career as a teacher.

   

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