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+y$ S, w/ G1 O& M4 V- O0 qIt is more important to reserve land for humanbeings than for endangered animals.

Overpopulation causes crisis on the earth, for instance, shrinkingof the natural resource, worsening environment, shortage of food and water,heavy burden of welfare of the governments and so on. On the other hand, humanactivities cause disastrous impact on the animal world: extinction of them isat a terrific speed. There is a fierce discussion on that whether it is moreimportant to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals. For mypart, I don’t think neither side is of more important.

Firstly, there is no gainsaying the necessity of reservation ofland for human. It can be imagined that being lack of land for human dwellingor planting food will lead to disastrous consequence. However, humankind is notthe exclusive species on the earth which is composed of plants, animals and us.We human beings have well developed brain than any other lives and are thewisest species on the world. It is our responsibility to reserve land for theanimals that strongly rely on the environment they inhabit, and some of theanimals have resided on the earth for a longer time than human.

We could also say that protecting the endangered animals equalsprotect ourselves. Over the entire ecological environment, a closely innerrelation is present in all the species. Humankind not only occupies in the foodchain but also is on the top. A kind of animals dying out cause the break ofthe food chain may bring forth chain reaction, which means the extinction ofmore species. In the same way, it is the biodiversity sustaining a harmonyecological environment on our planet. Our daily life depends on the otherspecies, for example, we maintain our life by eating the meat of animals andextract drug from animals or plants. More importantly, we could develop a kindof emotion of peace, comprehension and love. They are the strongest power forhumankind.

In conclusion, to avoid us stepping into a deteriorating environmentwhich is only suitable for us, we should keep the land both for ourselves andanimals.


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Overpopulation causes crisis on the earth, for instance, shrinkingof the natural resource, worsening environment, shortage of food and water,heavy burden of welfare of the governments and so on. (这句不错，学习)On the other hand, humanactivities(应该是不当的human activities, 一概而论太绝对了 ) cause disastrous impact on the animal world: extinction of them isat a terrific speed. There is a fierce discussion on that whether it is moreimportant to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals. For mypart, I don’t think neither side is of（去掉） more important.
Firstly, there is no gain（这啥意思啊， 是 there is no doubt吗？）saying the necessity of reservation ofland for human. It can be imagined that being lack of land for human dwellingor(这看不懂) planting food will lead to disastrous consequence. However, humankind is notthe exclusive species on the earth which is composed of plants, animals and us.We human beings have well（BETTER） developed brain than any other lives and are thewisest species on the world. It is our responsibility to reserve land for theanimals that strongly rely on the environment they inhabit, and some of theanimals have resided on the earth for a longer time than human.(这段感觉应举个例子)

We could also say that protecting the endangered animals equalsprotect （语法有错误，可改成is equally important to）ourselves. Over the entire ecological environment, a closely innerrelation is present in all the species. Humankind not only occupies(这词感觉用的不恰当) in the foodchain but also is on the top. A kind of animals dying out cause the break ofthe food chain may bring forth chain reaction,（这句话好多动词啊） which means the extinction ofmore species. In the same way, it is the biodiversity sustaining a harmonyecological environment on our planet. Our daily life depends on the otherspecies, for example, we maintain our life by eating the meat of animals andextract drug from animals or plants. More importantly, we could develop a kindof emotion of peace, comprehension and love. They are the strongest power forhumankind.

In conclusion, to avoid us stepping into a deteriorating environmentwhich is only suitable for us, we should keep the land both for ourselves andanimals.
楼主用词造句还得多斟酌，内容还是比较充实的，但是好像写得太大了，reserve land方面的涉及的不多啊。。

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Mostpeople prefer others making decision for them than making a decision forthemselves.

Wealways jest people of Libra who are hesitating on making decisions. It is truethat many people could not decide for themselves. However, should others makedecision for them? As for me, I reckon that people should make decisions forthemselves. The following are some reasonable explanations.

Primarily,we all firmly believe people are born with freedom, which endows the right offreely doing or not doing something. As the development of modern philosophy, thecontent of freedom and personal responsibility are more detailedly defined. Forexample, the famous French philosopher Jean-Paul Sartre, whose main idea isthat we are, as humans, “condemned to be free”. In other words, all must learn tomake decisions and take actions that take responsibility for self and forrelations to others in the world. Thus, it is fitting for us, rather thanothers, making decisions, especially the ones which are essential for our lifestages.

Secondly,just like I have mentioned above, since there is no one being responsible for aperson’s whole life process, a man has the power to choose for himself/herself.For instance, a man must determine which person he should marry for an individualwould live with the spouse all the life. The one who choose to marry with is avital decision that bore upon the happiness of an individual. Under the very circumstance,it is not appropriate for others to make a decision for a man.

Anotherfactor is that men who always make their own decisions could better understandthemselves or what they experienced. In turn, the good comprehension of self,others and the world benefits people’s choice. Sometimes we may make a wrong decision;however, we would turn to another way when we fail in doing something.

Inconclusion, people should make decisions for themselves. Not only it isdetermined by the essence of human but also the merit it brings to people.

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We always jest people of Libra who are hesitating on making decisions. It is truethat many people could not decide for themselves. However, should others make decision for them? As for me, I reckon that people should make decisions forthemselves. The following are some reasonable explanations.


Primarily,we all firmly believe people are born with freedom, which endows the right of freely doing or not doing something. As the development of modern philosophy, the content concept of freedom and personal responsibility are more detailedly defined.----the concept of freedom and personal responsibility are defined in a more detailed way. For example, the famous French philosopher Jean-Paul Sartre, whose main idea is that we are, as humans, “condemned to be free”. In other words, all must learn to make decisions and take that take responsibility for self and for relations to others in the world. Thus, it is fitting better  for us, rather than others, making decisions, especially the ones which are essential for in our life stages. 4 H5 ]6 F# y' |
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Secondly,just like I have mentioned above, since there is no one being responsible for aperson’s whole life process, a man  person has the power right to choose for himself/herself.For instance, a man must determine which person he should marry for an individual would live with the spouse all the life. 你想表达什么呢？The one who choose to marry with is a vital decision that bores upon the happiness of an individual. Under the very circumstance,it is not appropriate for others  someone else to make such a decision for a man. 
  
Another factor is that men who always make their own decisions could better understand themselves or what they experienced. In turn, the good comprehension of self,others and the world benefits people’s choice. Sometimes we may make a wrong decision;however, we would turn to another way when we fail in doing something. 不懂

In conclusion, people should make decisions for themselves. Not only it is determined by the essence of human but also the merits it brings to people.

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终于熬着写完了作文，刚德国4：0完胜阿根廷，首先happy一下。

In order to solve the problems of the presentand future, it is necessary to understand the past.

History as a basic and essential course islearned by human from their childhood to college days, sometimes even throughall a person’s life. History not only provides us the knowledge of anindividual’s past but also narrates the development, prosperity or decay of amass of person, such as a nation or all the human being. When we are attemptedto solve the present or future problems, I endorse the view that it isnecessary to understand past.

As what says in the Ecclesiastes ‘there isnothing new under the sun’. Some times the events, which happened in someone’slife, might also reoccur in another one’s life. The youngsters always ask forhelp from the elders, for instance how to deal the interpersonal relationship.What the elders have experience offer good examples for the young men. Becauseunderstanding of the past from the elders or by the youth stimulates theconfused ones inquiring ways of figuring out the problems.

In the same way, it is crucial for a man tounderstand what he has experienced, especially those matters an individual hasfailed in. That would be of the essence for the future success. I triumphantlyfinished a study on finding a proper energy-saving material for the building. Ifailed lots of times at first and almost when I was so desperate that I had togive up the study, my classmate suggested that I should what lead to thefailure. After I re-analyzed the data I got from the experiments, I totallyunderstand where the problems came out. Without the reviewing of the past, Iwould never finish the study.

Look into the past helps us comprehend bothourselves and others. We could say the history is a mirror, from which we cansee the defects of what have taken place, and, by analyzing of which we mightavoid those things happen again. Thus understanding past can not be tooimportant when we try to solve the current or future problems.


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It is more important to reserve land for humanbeings than for endangered animals.

Overpopulation causes crisis on the earth, for instance, shrinkingof the natural resource, worsened environment, shortage of food and water,heavy burden of welfare of the governments and so on. On the other hand, humanactivities cause disastrous impact on the animal world: extinction of them isat a terrific speed. There is a fierce discussion on that whether it is moreimportant to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals. For mypart, I don’t think neither side is of more important.

Firstly, there is no gainsaying the necessity of reservation ofland for human. It can be imagined that being lack of land for human dwellingor planting food will lead to disastrous consequence. However, humankind is notthe exclusive species on the earth which is composed of plants, animals and us.We human beings have well developed brain than any other lives and are thewisest species on the world. It is our responsibility to reserve land for theanimals that strongly rely on the environment they inhabit, and some of theanimals have resided on the earth for a longer time than human.

We could also say that protecting the endangered animals equalsprotect ourselves. Over the entire ecological environment, a closely innerrelation is present in all the species. Humankind not only occupies in the foodchain but also hold the top position. Dying out of the animals would cause thebreak of the food chain may bring forth chain reaction, which means the extinctionof more species. In the same way, it is the biodiversity sustaining a harmonyecological environment on our planet. Our daily life depends on the otherspecies, for example, we maintain our life by eating the meat of animals andextract drug from animals or plants. More importantly, we could develop a kindof emotion of peace, comprehension and love, which are the strongest power for humankind.

In conclusion, to avoid us stepping into a deteriorating environmentwhich is only suitable for us, we should keep the land both for ourselves andanimals.

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Overpopulation causes crisis on the earth, for instance, shrinkingof the natural resource, worsened environment, shortage of food and water（跟资源短缺重复）,heavy burden of welfare of the governments and so on. On the other hand, humanactivities cause disastrous impact on the animal world: extinction of them is at a terrific （这个词貌似是褒义词啊）speed. There is a fierce discussion on that （多余）whether it is moreimportant to reserve land for human beings than for endangered animals. For mypart, I don’t think neither side is of more important.（双重否定用错了~~您的意思应该是我认为没有任何一方比另一方更重要，所以要删掉don’t）
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3 I7 U7 r4 w8 s5 F1 B) x: O, _Firstly, there is no gainsaying the necessity of reservation ofland for human. It can be imagined that being lack of land for human dwellingor planting food will lead to disastrous consequence. However, humankind is not the exclusive species on the earth which is composed of plants, animals and us.We human beings have well (比较级)developed brain than any other lives and are the wisest species on the world. It is our responsibility to reserve land for the animals that strongly rely on the environment they inhabit, and some of the animals have resided on the earth for a longer time than human.（这句用意不明显，要解释清楚这些动物比人类存在时间长和人类不应占它们地的关系）) y. G8 l* G4 l) ~, `3 W5 M8 a

' K5 R; q: C& W2 C4 b6 vWe could also say that protecting the endangered animals equals protect ourselves. Over the entire ecological environment, a closely innerrelation is present in all the species. Humankind not only
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in the foodchain but also hold the top position. Dying out of the animals would cause the break of the food chain and may bring forth chain reaction, which means the extinction of more species. In the same way, it is the biodiversity sustaining a harmonyecological environment on our planet. Our daily life depends on the other species, for example, we maintain our life by eating the meat of animals and extract (+ing) drug from animals or plants. More importantly, we could develop a kind of emotion of peace, comprehension and love, which are the strongest power for humankind.(联系和前文不紧密且意思表达不清楚)' j- [8 t! n- R0 E  t- ^) a

" ?/ K; B. }3 V5 g2 `In conclusion, to avoid us stepping into a deteriorating environment which is only suitable for us, we should keep the land both for ourselves and animals.

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It’sbetter to watch serious movies that help people think than to watch movies thatcould amuse and entertain people.

Alarge a amount of movies are produced each year, which cover varies of themes,such as love, wars, social problems, humanity and so on. Some people hold thepoint of view that we should watch those serious ones that help people thinkthan to those could only amuse and entertain people. As for me, the formerperspective is coincidental with mine for the following reasons.

Firstly,one of the basic functions of the movies is to amuse and entertain people, nomatter which type of the movie is. Thus, both the brisk comedies and the seriousmovies which reflect the severe problems of the world and individuals couldhelp people to relax themselves. The good examples are those movies won theOscar, “Forest Gump” is one of them which was a comedy told a disabled boysucceeded by the accumulation of small and lasting effort. The movie was shotat a humorous angle, and I could remember we watched the movie with laughs. However,the very movie gives voice to us that patience, braveness and kindness of thesuccess of ordinary people. Obviously, we could say this film not only amuse usbut also convey some serious merits to us. Nevertheless, the pure recreationalfilms only deliver us the content of entertainment but without any deepmeanings.

Anotherimportant factor is that, those serious movies provide us materials could causeus to deeply think about the essence of the whole life. Some films are of elaborateshooting techniques which employ the advanced scientific technologies. Take thefilm “Crash” as an example, which is composed of detached stories referringdifferent persons. Kin relationship, racialism, problems of the adolescents,and even wars are discussed in this film. We make a deep reflection of thoseevents of the films and we may change our society toward a better direction.Last year, there was a heat discussion about the 3D film “Avantar” whichstimulates the directors use more advanced technologies to produce films withmore grand vision effects.

Accordingto I have mentioned above, those serious films have more merits than thosecould only entertain us. The serious ones offer us the mental and physicalenjoyments.

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真是不好意思，前几天有点事没有及时改作文，今天补上！！！望楼主见谅
A large amount of movies are produced each year, which cover varies of themes,such as love, wars, social problems, humanity and so on. Some people hold the point of view that we should watch those serious ones that help people think than to those could only amuse and entertain people. As for me, the former（一般用在之前有论述2个事物的情况下，指前者，而你这里之前只论述了一个观点） perspective is coincidental with mine for the following reasons.
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Firstly,one of the basic functions of the movies is to amuse and entertain people, no matter which type of the movie is. Thus, both the brisk comedies and the serious movies which reflect the severe problems of the world and individuals could help people to relax themselves. The good examples are those movies won the Oscar, “Forest Gump” is one of them which was a comedy told a disabled boy succeeded by the accumulation of small and lasting effort. The movie was shot at a humorous angle, and I could remember we watched the movie with laughs. However,the very movie gives voice to us that patience, braveness and kindness of the success of ordinary people.（that 后面怎么没动词啊~~不明白这句话的意思）
Obviously, we could say this film not only amuse us but also convey some serious meritsto us. Nevertheless, the pure recreational films only deliver us the content of entertainment but（后面的短语是修饰content吧~~那么but可以省了）
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Another important factor is that, those serious movies provide us materials could cause us to（没有cause sb to do sth） deeply think about the essence of the whole life. （用特技和思考人生有什么联系？是不是要过渡一下）Some films are of elaborate shooting techniques which employ the advanced scientific technologies. Take the film “Crash” as an example, which is composed of detached stories referring different persons. Kin relationship, racialism, problems of the adolescents,and even wars are discussed in this film. We make a deep reflection of those events of the films and we may change our society toward a better direction.(we是谁？？这句话不明白)Last year, there was a heat discussion about the 3D film “Avantar” which stimulates the directors use more advanced technologies to produce films with more grand vision effects.（这段完全偏离主题,为什么除了第一句后面都是特技了）
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According to （what）I have mentioned above, those serious films have more merits than those could only entertain us. The serious ones offer us the mental and physical enjoyments.
大概看懂了楼主的思路，第一段想说严肃和喜剧都可以娱乐大家，第二段是讲严肃好于戏剧在内容深刻上。但是尤其是第一段，观点不是很明显，最好强调严肃剧也可以放松身心，因为大家的普遍观念是喜剧更能使人放松。第二段论述有些混乱。还有就是文章有些语法错误，语句连贯性不好，不过有用些高级词汇。

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Doyou agree or disagree with the following statement? Advertising is the mostimportant cause of unhealthy eating habits.

It can’t deny that advertising causes too much impact on our lives. Some people mightargue that it has done more problems rather than goods for us, especially onour diet, because advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. As for me, I don’t agree with the point of view for the following reasons.

Firstly,although the advertising propagandizes varies of food on the public medium suchas TV, newspapers, magazines or websites, not all the food are doing harms to people. We could see both the KFC’s advertisements on TV and the advertisement of commonweal shown on TV. Sometimes the companies who proclaim the unhealthy way of eating habits even are punished for their wrong doings. As we know that KFC was fined for its conducting the unhealthy way of eating recently. We sometimes get some beneficial information for the public medium. And here we could get a conclusion that the advertising does not do such great amount of harms that cause itself the most important reason for our unhealthy eating habits.

Another important factor is that the unhealthy eating habits were attributed to someother ways. As the development of our society, people are inclined to take more time on working and amusements, and less time are spent on eating. The fastfood they buy from the supermarkets or fast-food restaurant contains too much fat or carbohydrates which could lead to obesity. At the same time, people do less exercises and the fat are stored in their bodies may cause diseases.

Also,the unhealthy eating habits are related to individuals, who easily plunge themselves into eating too much or the unhealthy food. Take women as an example,they used to live under stress of their work or family. To relieve themselves from the stress, snacking or eating too much seems to be good ways. However,some of the women become fat and they complaints too much.

Form what I have mentioned above, we could safely say that not the advertising, but many factors cause the unhealthy way of eating. We might take several strategies to resolve the problems.

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It can’t (be)deny that advertising causes too much impact on our lives. Some people mightargue that it has done more problems rather than goods for us, especially onour diet, because advertising is the most important cause of unhealthy eating habits. As for me, I don’t agree with the point of view for the following reasons.
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Firstly,although the advertising propagandizes varies of food on the public medium suchas TV, newspapers, magazines or websites, not all the food are doing harms to people. We could see both the KFC’s advertisements on TV and the advertisement of commonweal shown on TV. Sometimes the companies who proclaim the unhealthy way of eating habits even are punished for their wrong doings. As we know that KFC was fined for its conducting the unhealthy way of eating recently. We sometimes get some beneficial information for the public medium. And here we could get a conclusion that the advertising does not do such great amount of harms that cause itself the most important reason for our unhealthy eating habits.

Another important factor is that the unhealthy eating habits were attributed to someother ways. As the development of our society, people are inclined to take more time(take time to do sth,一般用spend time on doing.至于你写的take time on 不清楚，觉得有点别扭) on working and amusements, and less time are（is） spent on eating. The fastfood they buy from the supermarkets or fast-food restaurant contains too much fat or carbohydrates which could lead to obesity. At the same time, people do less exercises and the fat are stored in their bodies may cause diseases.( L+ b! A6 W' R) v

Also,the unhealthy eating habits are related to individuals, who easily plunge themselves into eating too much or the unhealthy food. Take women as an example,they used to live under stress of their work or family. To relieve themselves from the stress, snacking or eating too much seems to be good ways. However,some of the women become fat and they complaints too much.& N9 Y1 g& w# p' I

Form what I have mentioned above, we could safely say that not the advertising, but many factors cause the unhealthy way of eating. We might take several strategies to resolve the problems.
楼主有时刻意使用一些难的词汇，比如propagandizes，本人觉得没有太大必要（也许由于我的词汇量较小的缘故），重要的是文章的观点和支持的东西。第一个论点支持部分可以，后两个论点支持显得单薄。另外，第一个论点是广告里的食物不是全有害的，那后面应该重点阐述哪些是不有害的，而你貌似论证的有点偏。。。。。。

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time.

As the development of economy, nowadays people are living a more and more busy life than ever before. Because they spend too much time on their jobs, there is little time for them to relax and amuse. And recently a fashionable view says a job with more vacation time but a low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation time. This perspective fits my opinion well because of the following reasons.

Firstly, some people might argue that the vacation could show the value of an individual’s life. It is the vocation, or business offers people an opportunity to success or to achieve their lives’ goals. However, more things, such as affection with friends and family members, looking after animals or environmental protection, are welcomed by individuals for they represent human’s virtues. While we have to take more times on the non-vocational business, we turn to the low salary jobs but with more vacation time, by which we spend to achieve our dreams we long for. Personally, I would like to have a trip in another city or return to my hometown to stay with my parents for several days.

Some of the researchers has pointed out that people work under heavy stress would cause severe impact on human’s health such as heart disease or blood pressure illness. At the same time, as we know, some high salary jobs require people spend too much time on working. Thus they have less time to amuse themselves, such as doing exercises, eating meals punctually or staying with family members. We know that fatness, to some extent, attributes to less sport or eating too much, and the soaring divorce rate might be caused by little communication between couple, whom probably works too diligent to have enough time with their spouse.

To live a colorful or meaningful life, or care more about self or others, I would choose to get a position with less salary but more vacation time, by which I could do something more interesting and as important as my job.

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