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[1010G]8月中旬上海YY作文进阶小组I130作业回收上海, YY进阶, 作文, 作业 本帖最后由 cant0577 于 2010-5-24 08:09 编辑 [1010G]8月中旬上海YY作文进阶小组 周三晚11:00 之前交 ISSUE 48 48"The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten." [1]cant0577 改    [2]elvisxiao （稻草人）    [2]elvisxiao 改 西西多小姐      [5]西西多小姐 改 [4]四月小薇(四月小薇) [4]四月小薇(四月小薇)  改 cant0577 楼上的把自己的I 以WORD 的形式传给楼下的    次日下午2:00 前 楼下的把楼上的修改文发给楼上，                楼上在贴里贴上他人改的作业，                然后再贴上自改文，根据别人建议修改自己的文 请组员自己在交作业的前一天晚上去占楼。一人占两楼。一楼发自己的作文，和自己的改文。一楼发别人的改文（请注明是改的谁的）。楼下改楼上的，楼上的把自己的稿子和改好的稿子QQ传给楼下的 形式如下 第一楼： 提纲 思路 逻辑树                   习作      ···················································       自己修改的文 第二楼：   楼下帮忙改的文          指出逻辑，语法上的问题，例子

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TOPIC: ISSUE48 - "The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."
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I fundamentally agree with the speaker's broad assertion that the study of history places too less attention to the group of people who maybe made the most significant events and trends in history. However, considering the responsibilities placed on individuals who impersonate the chief and important leaders in significant events, I do be favor of more emphasis being placed to them, which is essential, as the following discussed.

Admittedly, so few study of history focusing on group of people who are evolved in the historical significant affairs, is quiet partial. Any informed person knows that one event or trend which can push the development of history mostly depends on the power coming from people. Just like the army. Even though one country has an extremely preeminent captain, having got win in a lot of vital battles, it will still be beaten if it fails to gain a solider, which means to lose the huge and substantial support coming from soldiers. Hereby, when a campaign achieves a great and outstanding result, such as the Nomandie Battle 诺曼底登陆  没查到词, speaking highly  with the group of people who take an inignore affect in the process is doubtlessly necessary.

Yet, I have two points of contention with the speakers involving the difficult responsibilities taken by the leaders, as individuals. Firstly, it is always filled with the unimaginable hardship that exists in most historical crucial events and trends. The fellow group of people are eager to possess a admire individual, as their leader, giving their mental support and the bright prospects, especially at the time when they just suffer vast pains. An apt illustration is the Indian leader, Mahatma Gandhi, who giving the fellow people vast mental support to overcome countless predicaments. In other words, the spoken highly individual is chosen by the group of people from their inner needs.

Moreover, the individual, taking the role as the leader in a significant campaign, are doubtless placed important and vital duties, such as leading his or her fellow to come over the difficulties, establishing the right, effective plans and methods of innovation, or maintain their rights. One of such famous person is ??想不起来人名了, who struggle for the rights of homosexual. In the process of running for representative, he suffers a huge amount of condemns from society, and after he gained the position, as the representative of homosexual, he should ask for the rights from the government, and argued with those anti-homosexual politics. Meanwhile, he sustained the pressure from the government and society, and the requirement from his fellow. Besides, he took the high risk of being murdered to lead the significant campaign.
   
In sum, the huge process of history is both based on individuals and group of people. If lacking any one of them, the history would be likely still in the last century. Hereby, in my observation, I quiet agree with the speaker's opinion that study of history should place more emphasis on the group of people. But paying emphasis on individuals is also necessary for the study of history considering the vital and crucial roles they acted.

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“The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possibly not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.”

We are all fully convinced without a shadow of doubt that the great times are the masterpieces of the great people. It is because of their outstanding courage, concept, wisdom and ability that we human beings made the breakthroughs one after another on our way towards a glory future of mankind. Although the consensus have been reached that the heroes’ achievement and heroes themselves are immortal, a calling for more attention to the dedication of the nameless and faceless groups in the history emerges these days. The speakers above obviously support the new idea. He criticized that the tradition methodology of history studies----big men theory as well as claimed that the groups of unidentified people played bigger role than the famous few in the history,
        Progressive and more humanistic it seems, however, it is not the true story. As far as I am concerned, the significant events and trend in history can not be achieved without either the elites or the messes. Additionally, it is more feasible, theoretically correct and proved better to lay more emphasis on studies of great historical figures.
       
When talking about the history of English and American literature, we cannot help to thinking of William Shakespeare, Lord Byron and Hemingway; just as when talking about the history of music, we cannot skip Beethoven, Mozart and Bach. Equally, it is impossible to study of the Renaissance without mention Michaelangelo, Rafael and Leonardo Da Vinci.; study the Second World War without the mention of Churchill, Roosevelt and Stalin; study the independence of America without the mention of Abraham Lincoln and Benjamin Franklin. Those great names link so tightly with the historical events that even transferred into the icons of its corresponding events. It is not surprising for it is them who talented created or fully-represent the ideology and appreciation tendency of their times. In other words, they serves as the main driving force or key factor to push forward the development of the events.

Take Michaelangelo, one of the three outstanding artists of Renaissance. Michaelangelo, who adored the elegance and clarity of Greek arts and was aware of the beauty of human body and the importance of human mind, advocated the revitalization of the value of human race in arts. He painted the naked masculine bodies vividly without shame after careful research or even dissection ,which is completely against the idea of the church that human being are sinful and human body are evil. His representative work , the David is the embodiment of his point of views. His concept then widely spread to other spheres and generate the wide-ranged movement of Renaissance. It is entirely possibly that other artists involve in the great renaissance movement but have been forgotten. Meichaelangelo otherwise is remembered for his pioneering and peerless talent.

Meanwhile, the power of the messes is undeniable. The triumph of the Second World War cannot do without the thousands of brave soldiers. The honors of Nobel Prize usually belong to the whole research group. On the glorious road of the development of democracy laid the unnamed martyrs. Obscure their dedications maybe, they tried their best. And each of them represents one step toward the final success, critical though small step.

However, I hold no different opinions on today’s history study methodology which focus on the key individuals. That does not mean neglect the large groups. Instead, we get familiar with the main characters the groups of that time by study the representatives. Practicability, on the other hand, is anther factor. Only the most naïve historians would agree that the study of the elite group involve nothing about the other studies such as the study of the background, the remains and the statistics. Only the most priggish would not consider it is an easy task to find adequate research materials on the messes. The famous few are so typical after all that we get the knowledge of the American Dream by study the American model---Benjamin Franklin and the valuable information of Renaissance by study Meichaelangelo. It’s a effective and practical history study method.

The elites as well as the common people shape the history. With the monuments built in various nations in memory of their unnamed national heroes, we found a way to express our respect and admire to them. It is a big step forward in the process of civilization. However it is not the time to change the history study methodology. Perhaps, as the historic study goes further, it is possible in the future.

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We are all fully convinced without a shadow of doubt that the great times are the masterpieces of the great people. It is because of their outstanding courage, concept, wisdom and ability that we human beings made the breakthroughs one after another on our way towards a glory future of mankind. Although the consensus have been reached that the heroes’ achievement and heroes themselves are immortal, a calling for more attention to the dedication of the nameless and faceless groups in the history emerges these days. The speakers above obviously support the new idea. He criticized that the tradition methodology of history studies----big men theory as well as claimed that the groups of unidentified people played bigger role than the famous few in the history, 感觉第一段是不是太长了，前面描写精英的句子非常不错，后面又提及作者的观点，但是感觉第一段里看不到你的观点，让人有些混淆，
        Progressive and more humanistic it seems倒装 学习, however, it is not the true story. As far as I am concerned, the significant events and trend in history can not be achieved without either the elites or the messes. Additionally, it is more feasible, theoretically correct and proved better to lay more emphasis on studies of great historical figures. 观点终于出来了，在写了近1000字的时候~~我等的好辛苦啊。呵呵 下面都是围绕这个观点展开的吧
        
When talking about the history of English and American literature we cannot help to thinking of William Shakespeare, Lord Byron and Hemingway; just as when talking about the history of music, we cannot skip Beethoven, Mozart and Bach. Equally, it is impossible to study of the Renaissance without mention Michaelangelo, Rafael and Leonardo Da Vinci.; study the Second World War without the mention of Churchill, Roosevelt and Stalin; study the independence of America without the mention of Abraham Lincoln and Benjamin Franklin. Those great names link so tightly with the historical events that even transferred into the icons of its corresponding events. It is not surprising for it is them who talented created or fully-represent the ideology and appreciation tendency of their times. In other words, they serve as the main driving force or key factor to push forward the development of the events. 语句非常好，例子也非常好，可是是不是太长了啊，这一段有700多呢，再加上你下面一段是重点写Michaelangelo，恩，觉得例子占了太多了。你可以开篇就说 精英代表一个时代，然后简单举例子就可以了

Take Michaelangelo, one of the three outstanding artists of Renaissance. Michaelangelo, who adored the elegance and clarity of Greek arts and was aware of the beauty of human body and the importance of human mind, advocated the revitalization of the value of human race in arts. He painted the naked masculine bodies vividly without shame after careful research or even dissection ,which is completely against the idea of the church that human being are sinful and human body are evil. His representative work, the David is the embodiment of his point of views. His concept then widely spread to other spheres and generate the wide-ranged movement of Renaissance. It is entirely possibly that other artists involve in the great renaissance movement but have been forgotten. Meichaelangelo otherwise is remembered for his pioneering and peerless talent. 这一段想写Michaelangelo 是为了突出 精英的影响吧，但是感觉记述他的生平事迹比较多呢

Meanwhile, the power of the messes is undeniable. The triumph of the Second World War cannot do without the thousands of brave soldiers. The honors of Nobel Prize usually belong to the whole research group. On the glorious road of the development of democracy laid the unnamed martyrs. Obscure their dedications maybe, they tried their best. And each of them represents one step toward the final success, critical though small step.

However, I hold no different opinions on today’s history study methodology which focus on the key individuals. That does not mean neglect the large groups. Instead, we get familiar with the main characters the groups of that time by study the representatives. Practicability, on the other hand, is anther factor. Only the most naïve？？ historians would agree that the study of the elite group involve nothing about the other studies such as the study of the background, the remains and the statistics. Only the most priggish would not consider it is an easy task to find adequate research materials on the messes. The famous few are so typical after all that we get the knowledge of the American Dream by study the American model---Benjamin Franklin and the valuable information of Renaissance by study Meichaelangelo. It’s an effective and practical history study method.

The elites as well as the common people shape the history. With the monuments built in various nations in memory of their unnamed national heroes, we found a way to express our respect and admire to them. It is a big step forward in the process of civilization. However it is not the time to change the history study methodology. Perhaps, as the historic study goes further, it is possible in the future.感觉没有前文的例证啊 why it is not the time 因为精英代表一个时代？
我的感觉：
开篇写精英的与众不同，然后反对作者观点，提出 精英代表一个时代 接着举例 再是提及群众的重要性 但是精英更具代表性，再提到历史的研究方法。我觉得 如果把例子缩短一点 再加几个关于精英的重要性的观点可能会个好些

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啊~~谢谢组长~~收到了~收到的有点晚……不过很有收获啊