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发表于 2010-6-23 19:59:42 |显示全部楼层
48."The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."

Along with the civilizition of the society.more and more attention is paid on the history reasearch.history is normal reflection to the culture of a nation.the issue asserts that The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals., The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten.in my opinion,the reasearch to the history is a debating issue.however,in some respects, individuals are merely one part of the group,it can be the reflection to the history too.

First of all,with the time elapsing,some historic sites are buried and destoried,which we can obtain is some fragment literature and some individuals’ personal stuffs.what the historian can do is make a catelogy and then do some deep reasearch.sometimes,historians can come to a reliable conclution that is confirm by numberous experts with specific knowledge about those piece of evidence.certainly.without some accurate evidence,those conclution can be really the
same with history .nevertheless,we should show a possitive attitute to those history conclution,it is useful for us to know the history and culture better.


Secondly,as for us , we should know the chief point to study history is that we can learn the advantage from history and reform the disadvantages
in order to make a progress to the new society. Whether to
places emphasis on individuals or on groups is not important ,but what can we learn is the chief purpose.
For example,chinese people places a significant
emphasis on
the former china chief leader,mao zedong,who is the founder of the people’s republic of china.the study of the history focus on studying the characteristic of mao zedong.it is because he is a core among this piece of history. Nevertheless, the study of the group might be too blind and hard to undertake.

In addition,there is no doubt that The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few.a majority of the history events are cause by the groups not by single individual. thorectically speaking ,it is more reliable to emphsis on the groups thorectically speaking.however.the study of the groups make experts blindness.for example,the world second war, if the historian concentrate on the groups ,a large number of details would be missed.on the contrary.the constrate on individual study make us know how the war arised better.

In conclution .individuals constitute groups.so the study to individuals is helpful to know history.sometimes the learn of group can be blindness and difficult.

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发表于 2010-6-23 20:03:32 |显示全部楼层
让自己的作文被改主要有以下几种途径:
1、参与/组建互助小组;
2、主动出击,到别人的习作中改别人的文章,然后留下连接请求回拍,绝大部分情况下版友都会很负责的回拍的;
3、斑竹定期会开习作修改铺,在里面占位置就可以让斑竹修改你的习作;
4、同主题写作时会规定参与的版友按照一定的回贴顺序进行互改;
5、坐等别人来拍,由于习作量很大,这种概率很小,所以效率也很低,建议不要采用。

在互改前,建议先自行修改语法、标点、拼写错误,这些要自己总结否则屡写屡错。

P.S.建议楼主把字体调大点方便别人看
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发表于 2010-6-23 21:58:07 |显示全部楼层
看到你的考期临近就把你的文章贴下来了
首先得感觉是一片红,想必是你敲完之后贴上来的,有很多错的词,大概这数目不在阅卷人忍受的范围内了,建议你写得时候手脑一致想清楚,这样可以尽量避免这种问题,还有就是从我的经验来看错的总是那几个词,注意就会好很多。
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