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Competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.

Along with the rapid advance of the society,the living rhythm getting much faster than before.some new regulations and rules
comes with the tendency of the competition.the issue asserts that Competition is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.in my opinion.competition is a double edged sword that affords individuals not only challenges but also opportunities.

To begin with,competition is a count-part of the cooporation. competition stress on thinking alone,making determinition all by oneself while cooporation focus on team work ,gathering together ,and making decitions with the all the termer’s opnion.compared with coorporation,competition cuiltivate the self-confidence and determine ability.because in the coororation,individuals are easily rely on others ,in fact,coororation offers someone without real ability a chance to cheat,in addition, new era ask for individuality.if everone is similar with others,how can we distinguish one form others.however,coororation misses this ability cause it ask for obey with the leaders.in short,competition is a ability that comply the new tendency.

Competition is shown in the education.educations ask for the creativety.in order to encourage students, the universitys offers a varieties forms of scholarship,students with different specilities can compete
those scholarship.i think it is a right way to encourage students to learning skills passionly.

In a company,competition is also suitable .the bonus is allocated through the comparsion of the employers productivity.in order to get a promotion, labors can be more responsible to their works,then make a progress to the company productity.

In our daily life,the competition canbe found everywhere.the business part,the idividual part even for the animal world.it has been reasearched that competition is the original reason to the world revolution.the stronger live and the weaker died.it is suitable for not only animals but also human beings.the society is teemed with challenge and opportunity,the competition is the momentum for us to keep moving.people under this fierce competite tendency canwork spare no efforts.it is a promotion not only to the indiduals but also the the whole world,isn”t it?

However,competition also brings some nagetive influences such as crimes and triffic accidents.take the normal phenomenon tax evation as a sample.it is because the competition among companies even individuals,in order to profit in a upmost degree.companies even take some unjustified measures such as demage the market balance,and make a unqulified products to cheat consumers.sometimes comepetion can be a interruption to the friendship.for instance,when two friends are facing with a profitable business, it is unneccessary to compete.

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Along with(为啥是Along with?) the rapid advance of the society,the living rhythm getting much faster than before.some(Some) new regulations and rules comes with the tendency of the competition.the issue asserts that Competition(competition) is ultimately more beneficial than detrimental to society.in(I大写,个人感觉前面加一个And读起来连贯) my opinion.(不懂为什么要一个句号?)competition is a double edged sword that affords individuals not only challenges but also opportunities.

To begin with,competition is a count-part of the cooporation. competition stress on thinking alone,making determinition all by oneself while cooporation focus on team work ,gathering together ,and making decitions with the all the termer’s opnion.compared with coorporation,competition cuiltivate the self-confidence and determine ability.because in the coororation,individuals are easily rely on others ,in fact,coororation offers someone without real ability a chance to cheat,in addition, new era ask for individuality.if everone is similar with others,how can we distinguish one form others.however,coororation misses this ability cause it ask for obey with the leaders.in short,competition is a ability that comply the new tendency.

Competition is shown in the education.educations ask for the creativety.in order to encourage students, the universitys offers a varieties forms of scholarship,students with different specilities can compete those scholarship.i think it is a right way to encourage students to learning skills passionly.

In a company,competition is also suitable .the bonus is allocated through the comparsion of the employers productivity.in order to get a promotion, labors can be more responsible to their works,then make a progress to the company productity.

In our daily life,the competition canbe found everywhere.the business part,the idividual part even for the animal world.it has been reasearched that competition is the original reason to the world revolution.the stronger live and the weaker died.it is suitable for not only animals but also human beings.the society is teemed with challenge and opportunity,the competition is the momentum for us to keep moving.people under this fierce competite tendency canwork spare no efforts.it is a promotion not only to the indiduals but also the the whole world,isn”t it?

However,competition also brings some nagetive influences such as crimes and triffic accidents.take the normal phenomenon tax evation as a sample.it is because the competition among companies even(很奇怪) individuals,in order to profit in a upmost degree.companies even take some unjustified measures such as demage the market balance,and make a unqulified products to cheat consumers.sometimes comepetion can be a interruption to the friendship.for instance,when two friends are facing with a profitable business, it is unneccessary to compete.


不好意思啊,你的低级错误会导致别人没有兴趣往下看的,感觉都在修改标点或者大小写.再好的文章小错误超过3个就废了阿.而且后面你举了公司和生活的2个例子却少了总起句,感觉有些唐突,没有什么过度,2段篇幅都不大并在一起写吧,而且你段落间忽长忽短很不舒服,结尾呢?文章我没有看完,因为我改第一段的时候太多大小写的纠结,扫了下后面还有拼写错误,态度阿,不能因为急或者没有时间摒弃态度.Attitude is everything!
纯属个人意见,不要介意.