欢迎拍作文小组----issue 153

crazyjooUID: 2805124

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question
what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
WORDS: 562        

  Should we students bring a certain skepticism to whatever we learn? The speaker claim so for the reason that  through this way can we  learn actively rather than passively. I concede that skepticism is a  key to study, critical thinking and innovation. Otherwise, undue  skepticism, as the speaker asserts so, would diminish our interest in  acquiring new knowledge and finally impede learning.
To begin with, skepticism is certainly a driving force in the scientific areas. Scientific research, in itself, is an exploration of unknown for true answers to our question, and for lasting solutions to our enduring problems. However, it is  hardly to find such a lasting solution in the sciences. With the rapid development and further understanding of a specific project, many once correct principles are proven to be ill-conceived and limited ones. In fact, it is primarily through such consistent skepticism that human acknowledge advances. One apt illustration of this point involves the  three laws of motion created by Issac Newton. Admittedly, it  is the three laws of motion that set up the foundation of modern physics, considering a myraid of other physical principles and laws are  deduced from them and countless physical experiments are essentialy the reflection of themselves. The big three seemed to dominate the physical academic area forever becuase no one dare to question its  validity and relevance because of its long establishment and startling authority. This situation did not come to the end until the presence of Albert Einstein, with his "Relativity" theory, which claims thatAlthough the three laws of motions work well in most cases, its practicality and functionality are dubious and susceptible when it comes to the research of micro world. In this respect, Albert  Einstein turned a new page of the modern physic study by question the once undisputable study.  
   On the other hand, however, undue skepticism would be counterproductive to learning. Because skepticism or critical thinking are beneficial only if the skeptic has got enough understanding of  the object to which he or she bring a certain skepticism. Otherwise,  people risk squandering valuable time and energy. For instances,pupils learn little about algorithm by doubting the correctness of  their math teacher. Or a student knows little about the movement of  planets by querying the validity of his or her science textbook. Understandably, students with undue skepticism would learn nothing meaningful and would even lose their confidence and interest in learning, for the very reason that they are very likely to suspect anything, even themselves, all of which lead to chaotic and inconsistent mind. To be more specifically, had our doctors suspected and refused to  accept the ''circulation of blood' theory created by AV , we would have  to sleep in the bed and wait for the impending death ,once we got a  serious disease, since there are no surgeon or pharmacology derived from that theory. In other words, we can not and should not place  skepticism ahead of our desire for new knowledge. Yet the intent of  skepticism is to analyze a possible new theory more comprehensively in order to accept it or deny it more certainly.  
    In sum, skepticism, as well as critical thinking, is beneficial as long as the skeptic has adequate background knowledge and deep understanding of the ''suspectible'' object. Otherwise, skepticism, the spirit of a seemingly active learning process would serve to be a path way to agnosticism.

figuechenUID: 2850619

TOPIC: ISSUE153 - "Students should bring a certain skepticism to whatever they study. They should question
what they are taught instead of accepting it passively."
WORDS: 562



Should we students bring a certain skepticism to whatever we learn? The speaker claim [claims]so for the reason that through this way can we
learn actively rather than passively. I concede that skepticism is a key to study, critical thinking and innovation. Otherwise, undue skepticism, as the speaker asserts so, would diminish our interest in acquiring new knowledge and finally impede learning.
[第一段表明观点，部分同意作者的观点。这个otherwise用的，好像有点奇怪。不知道otherwise可不可以直接用在转折上？它做连接词的意思是“否则”，用在这里并不合适。]

To begin with, skepticism is certainly a driving force in the scientific areas. [fields是不是好一些？不知道领域能不能用area表达，求教。]Scientific research, in itself, is an exploration of unknown for true answers to our question, and for lasting solutions to our enduring problems. However, it is hardly [hardly是很少的意思，貌似hard更好？]to find such a lasting solution in the sciences. With the rapid development and further understanding of a specific project, many once correct principles [好别扭。。。principles that are once correct]are proven to be ill-conceived and limited ones. In fact, it is primarily through such consistent skepticism that human acknowledge [acknowledge是承认的意思。。。]advances. One apt illustration of this point involves the three laws of motion created by Issac Newton. Admittedly, it is the three laws of motion that set up the foundation of modern physics, considering a myraid [myriad，拼错了]of other physical principles and laws are
deduced from them and countless physical experiments are essentialy [essentially，拼错了]the reflection of themselves. The big three seemed to dominate the physical academic area forever becuase no one dare to question its validity and relevance because of its long establishment and startling authority. This situation did not come to the end until the presence of Albert Einstein, with his "Relativity" theory, which claims that although the three laws of motions work well in most cases, its practicality and functionality are dubious and susceptible when it comes to the research of micro world. In this respect, Albert Einstein turned a new page of the modern physic study by question the once undisputable study.

[用例子的时候可以更加简洁一些，与其写了一大段话把例子详细地阐释了一遍，不如用两到三句话把例子概括，然后适当地加以分析。]


On the other hand, however, undue skepticism would be counterproductive to learning. Because skepticism or critical thinking are beneficial only if the skeptic has got enough understanding of the object to which he or she bring a certain skepticism. Otherwise, people risk squandering valuable time and energy. For instances, pupils learn little about algorithm by doubting the correctness of their math teacher. Or a student knows little about the movement of planets by querying the validity of his or her science textbook. [这两句话有问题，想说明学生质疑课本不能进步？可是为什么呢？他们不能通过质疑自然科学课本来掌握行星运动的知识，但是可以掌握其它知识呀。]Understandably, students with undue skepticism would learn nothing meaningful [这句太绝对了吧，和上一段的论点矛盾了]and would even lose their confidence and interest in learning, for the very reason that they are very likely to suspect anything, [肯定句不用anything，改成everything]even themselves, all of which lead to chaotic and inconsistent mind. To be more specifically, had our doctors suspected and refused to accept the ''circulation of blood' theory created by AV, we would have to sleep in the bed and wait for the impending death ,once we got a serious disease, since there are no surgeon or pharmacology derived from that theory. [这个例子不太好，那些医生又不是无缘无故地相信这个理论，肯定是这个理论本身有说服力嘛。Skepticism并不是毫无根据地不相信，而是提出疑问。那些医生也许曾经疑问过，但都被完美地解答了。这个不行么？]In other words, we can not and should not place skepticism ahead of our desire for new knowledge. Yet the intent of skepticism is to analyze a possible new theory more comprehensively in order to accept it or deny it more certainly.

In sum, skepticism, as well as critical thinking, is beneficial as long as the skeptic has adequate background knowledge and deep understanding of the ''suspectible'' [拼错了, suspectable]object. Otherwise, skepticism, the spirit of a seemingly active learning process would serve to be a path way to agnosticism.

总的来说语法和单词拼写的问题比较大，建议写完以后把它贴到Word里查查错，老改单词和语法的错不应该是互改作文的主要内容。但这些错误很影响对文章的综合理解。

文章的思路和主题都没有问题，例子也大多比较合适，有几个我觉得有点问题的例子都在文章中指出了。

祝共同进步~

Eileen312UID: 2648750

Should we students bring a certain skepticism to whatever we learn? The speaker claim so for the reason that  through this way can we  learn actively rather than passively. I concede[concede表示勉强承认、不情愿地承认，不建议这样用] that skepticism is a  key to study, critical thinking and innovation. Otherwise, undue  skepticism, as the speaker asserts so[去掉so], would diminish our interest in  acquiring new knowledge and finally impede learning.

To begin with, skepticism is certainly a driving force in the scientific areas. Scientific research, in itself, is an exploration of unknown for true answers to our question, and for lasting solutions to our enduring problems. However, it is  hardly[adv.不可以这样用] to find such a lasting solution in the sciences. With the rapid development and further understanding of a specific project, many once correct principles are proven to be ill-conceived and limited ones[去掉ones]. In fact, it is primarily through such consistent skepticism that human acknowledge advances. One apt illustration of this point involves the  three laws of motion created by Issac Newton. Admittedly, it  is the three laws of motion that set up[不能当“组成”] the foundation of modern physics, considering a myraid of other physical principles and laws are  deduced from them and countless physical experiments are essentialy the reflection of themselves. The big three seemed to dominate the physical academic area forever becuase no one dare to question its  validity and relevance because of its long establishment and startling authority. This situation did not come to the end until the presence of Albert Einstein, with his "Relativity" theory, which claims thatAlthough the three laws of motions work well in most cases, its practicality and functionality are dubious and susceptible when it comes to the research of micro world. In this respect, Albert  Einstein turned a new page of the modern physic study by question the once undisputable study.  [例子分分析很到位,但是“skepticism is certainly a driving force in the scientific areas”领起的整段都与学生学习无关，建议加几句话点名联系]

On the other hand, however, undue skepticism would be counterproductive to learning. Because skepticism or critical thinking are beneficial only if the skeptic has got enough understanding of  the object to which he or she bring a certain skepticism. Otherwise,  people risk squandering valuable time and energy. For instances,pupils learn little about algorithm by doubting the correctness of  their math teacher. Or a student knows little about the movement of  planets by querying the validity of his or her science textbook. Understandably, students with undue skepticism would learn nothing meaningful and would even lose their confidence and interest in learning, for the very reason that they are very likely to suspect anything, even themselves, all of which lead to chaotic and inconsistent mind. To be more specifically, had our doctors suspected and refused to  accept the ''circulation of blood' theory created by AV [if省略的倒装句，赞], we would have  to sleep in the bed and wait for the impending death ,once we got a  serious disease, since there are no surgeon or pharmacology derived from that theory. In other words, we can not and should not place  skepticism ahead of our desire for new knowledge. Yet the intent of  skepticism is to analyze a possible new theory more comprehensively in order to accept it or deny it more certainly.  

In sum, skepticism, as well as critical thinking, is beneficial as long as the skeptic has adequate background knowledge and deep understanding of the ''suspectible'' object. Otherwise, skepticism, the spirit of a seemingly active learning process would serve to be a path way to agnosticism.[总结也是脱离了学生学习]

[不严重的用词和语法错误我就不改了。]
[一气呵成，说理透彻。但是某些句子和例子好眼熟啊……]
[有一半甚至更多的内容与学生学习无关，要么对后面的正文进行限定，要么在开头对“students&study”进行扩充]