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Argument 23
While a new seafood restaurant seems to be moneymaking based on the studies and the circumstances in Bay City, one should also investigate further into these evidences before deciding to embark on the business of restaurant specializing in seafood. The sudden seafood-fever could be accounted for by other explanations and might not last long, and the eating habit in Bay City might also be quite different from the nationwide situation.

The recent sales study is weak at proving Bay City enjoys and would continue to enjoy an increasing market of seafood dishes. The argument compares the current situation with that of the past five years but fails to clarify the analytical approach of statistics, which might be a contrast of consumptions between the recent month's and the average months’ of the past; and at the same time, the present sales of seafood are probably at the summit of the year. Under such cases, the 30 percent increment in seafood dishes does not essentially amount to the increasing need of consumers, let alone the opportunity to open a profitable seafood restaurant.

Nonetheless, even assuming the statistics are accurate and reasonable, the ascent in seafood consumption lends no credence to the proposal of building a new restaurant specializing in seafood, which will be popular and profitable. Perhaps the ordinary restaurants could fully satisfy the increasing demand of seafood dishes; or people in Bay City prefer to go to certain time-honored restaurants to have meals. Thus, the emergence of a new seafood restaurant might not make a fortune at all. Moreover, the argument states that no operating seafood restaurants exist in Bay City, so there might be some constructing seafood restaurants, which will open in the near future and will surely affect the business of the author's.

Thirdly, the result of the nationwide study might not be true in Bay City. Though the majority of families in Bay City are double income families, they probably are more traditional and still cook meals at home; or perhaps they just have meals at workplaces without going out to restaurants. In either case, the new seafood restaurant would not earn money from these families. Furthermore, the author unwarrantedly equates eating seafood with eating healthily, so health-conscious people may not visit the proposed seafood restaurant, unless definite evidences that eating seafood is responsible for healthier body are found.

Finally, even the working families dine out in restaurants and seafood is beneficial to people's health, those families might not necessarily choose restaurants specializing in seafood to have meals but go to the ordinary restaurants nearby their workplaces to eat seafood. In other words, only one seafood restaurant cannot attract all of the consumers considering the situation that working places disperse around the city.

In conclusion, the author should provide accurate study statistics, objective surveys of the catering industry and the actual eating habits of the two-income families in Bay City to defend this argument; otherwise, the proposal that a new seafood restaurant would make a profit cannot hold enough water.

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Argument 147
The prediction that the sales of Whirlwind video games would increase drastically in the near future is well-presented but seems farfetched merely based on the survey of video-game players and the strategies that Whirlwind Company adopts according to the survey results. The author should reinvestigate the potential video-game clients as well as the overall video-game industry.

The survey which plays a vital role in the argument is questionable in itself, for its subjects are limited to video-game players, whose considerations might not typify the 10 to 25 years old potential players’, and the question about what features these players concern most sounds less relevant with how to attract people to play Whirlwind video games but seems more likely to improve the experience of these players. Meanwhile, the result might not reflect the real thought of those respondents providing the possible situation that the survey fixes certain answers to each question and asks those players to choose only one response. Resultantly, the unconvincing survey directly leads to the conclusion unwarranted.

Nonetheless, even assuming the Whirlwind conducts the survey scientifically and reasonably concludes that lifelike graphics would attract more clients, the introduction of several such games and the extensive advertising campaign still could not bring large sales to the company. Perhaps the video-game industry flourishes in the local area, and there are a number of other companies competing with Whirlwind and they also have introduced this kind of video games; in other words, Whirlwind might enjoy fewer advantages compared with the others. Or perhaps the youngsters impressed by the advertisements of Whirlwind and intending to purchase the video games cannot afford to buy the most up-to-date computers to play. Consequently, Whirlwind may not increase its sales under the possible conditions mentioned above.

Finally, unless the author finds out the true reason why the sales of Whirlwind video games declined over the past two years, the prediction will not hold enough water with the only consideration to increase the lifelike experience of the players in the games. Perhaps people realize video games take up their too much time and energy, they discipline themselves not to play those games; or the population of youngsters might have declined. The piracy could also contribute to the decreasing sales of Whirlwind video games. Without ruling out these factors, the sales of Whirlwind seem not likely to increase remarkably in the next few months.

Overall, the survey in the argument fails to investigate the potential players and raise appropriate questions; the steps Whirlwind adopts could not necessarily attract teenagers to buy its products; and other explanations might also lead to the sales declination. The author should reconsider these aspects; otherwise, the result probably turns out to be the opposite to what Whirlwind expects.

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Education, broadly defined as the combination of teaching of learning, is limited in the confinement of schooling in this issue. Responsible though it seems from the perspective of teachers and parents, individual education neglects the complexity and difficulty of discovering what each students needs and interests as well as the learning initiatives in the student. Thus, education should endow learners with sufficient freedom to explore their potentials and avoid misleading the students with its own defects.

Customized education to individual advances further than traditional education does. Though both of them emphasize the teaching process, personal education considers the distinction between students and then turns out to be more effective. Helen Keller, the first deafblind person earning a Bachelor of Arts Degree, obtained her education primarily from his tutor, Anne Sullivan, who acutely sensed the special needs and interests from Keller and helped her to learn speaking and writing. The instance is special but could adequately clarify the point. In traditional education, children like Keller, who might be special in certain other aspects, would probably be asked to modify their behaviors or be defined as incurable without too much consideration of the individuality or personal characteristics. However, education specially designed to cater the needs and interests of each student could enlighten a larger group of people more profoundly.

Nonetheless, special needs and interests of students usually appear less obvious with mere observation and inquisition of the learner. With this condition unfounded, truly effective education would be scarce in terms of the statement, but actually this is not the case. For example, Abraham Lincoln, one of the greatest presidents of America, spent only 18 months in formal schooling but succeeded later in his life. Admittedly, nobody designed special education to meet his needs and interests, but Lincoln found his own interests and taught himself through reading, practicing and other channels. The Gettysburg Address, one of the most eminent speeches in United States history, proved Lincoln’s profound thinking and excellent performance. Thus, education could also be truly effective when the individuals educate themselves actively and seriously; in other words, efficient learning supports education as well.

Furthermore, over-emphasis on individuality education might be counterproductive, for one of essences of education is sharing and inheriting rather than innovating and single-minded. Undoubtedly, there are a lot in common among human beings, such as language, customs and life styles and all of these could be educated universally and students could learn with freedom mutually. On the other hand, personal education could possibly produce talents expert in certain areas, but also it could create isolated entities bearing only self-needs and self-interests in their minds and probably bringing about terrorism to the world.

Overall, rearing students’ individuality has more merits than the traditional common education, but, meanwhile, we should also notice that self-education could also promote individuals to succeed besides specially designed teaching-model education as mentioned in the statement. Moreover, individual education could breed severe side effect to the society, which requires people live in harmony and compromise. Resultantly, we should critically reexamine the problem of effective education, after all, it matters the development of both the current and the future of the world.

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越写越没手感了，写得又慢，又痛苦。不过加油！坚持就是胜利。
下面这篇有点不成章法，不过凑够字数了，句子读起来有点奇怪，思路也不是很清楚，后来写作变成了机械运动，刚才发现不打字的时候，左手食指是抖着的，晕死，希望自己没事。

3. 48"The study of history places too much emphasis on individuals. The most significant events and trends in history were made possible not by the famous few, but by groups of people whose identities have long been forgotten."


Laden with diverse events and figures, history like the galaxy seems boundless, but the history study simplifies its various details and compresses it into lists of names and some descriptions behind them. Do historians put too much emphasis on individuals?
Who created the turns and trends in history, the famous figures or the masses?

Ordinary people play a significant role in the process of history, though most of their names vanish with time. Pyramid in Egypt, one of the miracles of the world, was constructed by numerous unknown slaves; Storming of Bastille in France, the overthrow of the monarchy, was raged by the mass nameless French people; Industrial Revolution in Britain, the milestone in human history, was accomplished by a large number of unfamed engineers, manual workers and capitalists. Although historians tend to describe these events with the title of the Egyptian King, the political activists, or the inventor like James Watt, few of them would attribute all these improvements and reforms to individuals.

Generally, average people influence history from two aspects: breeding seminal thoughts and determining the outcomes. Most significant events and trends need time and circumstances to be created and nurtured like what infants need from their mothers, so then they could grow up to change the world or innovate new records. Accordingly, the study of history usually positions specific event in certain background, mainly from the perspective of social masses, exploring the original reasons and processes to learn the truth of happening. Secondly, it is the common people who vote for the final result of the historical event or trend. From slavery to capitalism, history follows the majority’s benefits and willingness striving forwards equality and justice. Only when most people welcome the ideas of reform or modification could the event or trend be accomplished.

Nonetheless, the notable figures also exert their influence on history but in a different manner. Frequently, they representing certain groups of people stimulate the situation and promote the wheels of history to move. Besides history, legends, folk stories and even myths also prefer to record celebrities’ deeds and achievement, for they feature certain qualities respectable, such as braveness, wisdom and perseverance and they serve as the leaders prestigious at their decades. George Washington, the first president of the United States, could be taken to illustrate this point perfectly. He was initially a tobacco farmer and plantation owner; after the Boston Tea Party and fighting against Britain breaking out, Washington chose to participate in the war and was appointed to be the Major General leading the America’s Continental Army to win the battle over Britain successfully. Now when mentioning Washington, we would probably think of the history when American Revolution happened and the establishment of the United States. Celebrities with their different characters and diverse experiences marked their periods lively and concretely, which just satisfies the requirements of historical records.

Overall, frequently though the notable names appear in history books, it does not mean historian put too much emphasis on them. Like language, symbols or numbers, they are representations of certain history. Meanwhile, both the masses and the renowned figures make the most significant events and trends possible, and that is what history should talk about.

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乱写了一通，慎入吧！因为，赶速度的缘故 质量让自己非常不满，不过字数搞定了，唉，加油 。
How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.

Once people become parents, most of their casual talking with others would be about children, education and the future of society. They frequently feel helpless to figure out perfect plans for their sons and daughters and guarantee them to live in a better society, so they leave them to schooling hoping formal education would work out better answers. While schools, accepting the tuition and the children from parents, fulfill their task professionally but routinely; they hire qualified teachers, obtain syllabus from education agencies or educators and make the children sit in the classroom learning knowledge and get them socialized. It seems everything goes all right in this way.
              
However, children fail to cooperate with what we consider is on the behalf of them. They dislike schools, fight with their classmates, contradict their teachers and skip classes they consider useless. At home, their performances are even worse: playing video-games, lying to their parents and even smoking or drugging with bad companies. What kind of society would it be with these hopeless youngsters? We may wonder. But obviously simple schooling could not rear children who can help bring about a better society, for they are not appropriately educated either academically and socially.

Actually, if we analyze this phenomenon further, we could discover the ossification is the main reason failing to socialize and educate those curious and active creatures. The problem above could be solved through flexible education designed specifically to cater the features of children, such as impatient, playful and imaginative. The story about Edison could give us some hints on this point concretely. One day, little Edison was sitting on the ground quietly. When his father saw him, he felt very strange and asked Edison what he was doing. Then Edison answered he was hatching an egg like the hen. Without laughing at his ignorance, Edison’s father patiently explained the truth about egg hatching and encouraged him to raise more questions. Later in his life, Edison had become a great inventor in America bring the world light and convenience. So we can conclude education should focus on children as the subject in the both the teaching and learning process, then it could be truly effective to them.

Furthermore, socialization, as one aspect of children education, impacts the destiny of society rather than determine it. Children should learn how to communicate with others and cooperate with them, but there is no necessity to become social experts, which may be required in politics and business world. Besides, socialization could be self-trained, if they think it necessary to learn, such as Abraham Lincoln, who is not a born speaker but after hard training, he became one of the greatest speaker of America. So obviously how children are socialized today might be irrelevant to the society’s tomorrow, as long as we teach them the ability of independent thinking and learning.

Overall, though the quotation reflects some facts in education nowadays, we could turn over the situation by adopting flexible education methods specially designed to cater feathers of children. Besides, how children are socialized today affects the future of society but not essentially, for children could adapt themselves through self-learning.