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TOPIC: ARGUMENT37 - Woven baskets characterized by a particular distinctive pattern have previously been found only in the immediate vicinity of the prehistoric village of Palea and therefore were believed to have been unique to the Palean people. Recently, however, archaeologists discovered such a "Palean" basket in Lithos, an ancient village across the Brim River from Palea. The Brim River is very deep and broad, and so the ancient Paleans could only have crossed it by boat, but there is no evidence that the Paleans had boats. And boats capable of carrying groups of people and cargo were not developed until thousands of years after the Palean people disappeared. Moreover, Paleans would have had no need to cross the river-the woods around Palea are full of nuts, berries, and small game. It follows that the so-called Palean baskets were not unique to Palea.
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TIME: 00:45:11
DATE: 2000-7-21 10:11:07



The arguer claims that Palean baskets were not unique to Palea. To make this assertion more substantial, the arguer points out the fact that Palean basket was also found in Lithos. In addition, the arguer renders that ancient Paleans cannot and have no need to visit Lithos. However, this argument suffers from several flaws.
  

Firstly, the argument is based on a dubious assumption. By citing the tremendous depth and width of Brim River, the argument concludes that Palean had not means to get to Lithos. However, the requisite of this reasoning is a poor one. Few things remain the same over extend time. It is very likely that the geographic situation of Brim River has changed greatly over the thousands of years. Perhaps the prehistoric Brim River is shallow and narrow thus Paleans could walk across the stream. Or perhaps at that time the Brim River did not lay between Palea and Lithos while the existing Brim River was formed hundreds of years after the disappearance of Palean people.

Secondly, the arguer fails to take other factors into consideration. Even we concede that the Brim River was as deep and broad as nowadays. Without pointing out that Palea was surrounded Brim River, that is to say, Palea was totally isolated to some extend, it is presumptuous to claim that Palean people had no means of getting to Lithos because the fact that Paleans at that time cannot build a boat to cross the river. Perhaps there existed commercial relationship between Palea and Lithos. Businessmen could make rafts to cross the river for the sake of the operation of business. It is equal possible that they choose a route to Lithos which is much farther than the direct distance between Palea and Lithos in order to avoid this natural obstacle.

Thirdly, the claim that Paleans have not need to cross the river because of the prosperity of Palea is rather ill-conceived. The arguer ignores the possibility that Lithos might be much richer than Palea. However, even we agree with the arguer assumption that Palea was a palmy place, it is also dubious to come to a conclusion that Paleans  wished to stay in Palea all their lives. It is tempting to think that some of Paleans go to Lithos in the purpose of business or job opportunity. Some of the Paleans earned huge profit by selling products which were rich in Palea but somehow sparse in Lithos. And it is very likely that such products included the so called Palean baskets. And some other Paleans chose to imigrate to Lithos for its broader space for development and lower competitiveness since Lithos was relatively backward.


To sum up, this argument is well present, but not thoroughly reasoned. To make it more logical acceptable, the arguer should do a comprehensive scientific analyze about the geographic situation of the Brim River. Moreover, the statement would be more valuable if the arguer rule out the possibility that Palean basket could be brought to Lithos by people who are not Paleans.

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朱德同学很给力嘛~语法错误少很多，让步结构也不错~

“To make this assertion more substantial"这个地方substantial感觉有些不恰当，应该是substantiated吧~

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