issue56

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TOPIC: ISSUE56 - "Governments should focus more on solving the immediate problems of today rather than trying to solve the anticipated problems of the future."
WORDS: 421
TIME: 00:45:00
DATE: 2010-7-22 21:14:58

Should governments focus more on solving the immediate problems nowadays instead of trying to solve the anticipated ones in the future? In general, I agree with this opinion that immediate problems need to be handled without hesitation. However, after careful consideration, I think that the anticipated problems should be taken into account as well.

Firstly, it is governments' responsibility to focus on solving the contemporary problems. Since the problems have formed and are already recognizable, immediate actions are needed to prevent them from worsening into far more serious ones. Unemployment, a problem most modern nations are facing, calls for governments' attention and correspondent policies. If not dealt with properly and actively, it may involve into a more complicated one, just like a bomb buried in social, economic, political realms. As a result, a variety of methods is introduced to reduce unemployment. Such methods may include expanding the inflation, building new constructive projects, and the like.

On the other hand, it is inevitable for governments to shoulder the duty to solve the anticipated problems as well. As an old Chinese adage goes, the costs spent on precaution equal ten times to repair. Eliminating the buds of danger may save a great amount of energy and money. More importantly, it may avoid the problems from happening. which in some cases could be irreversible regardless of the expenses. <Kyoto Protocol Agreement> was drafted and signed by several nations to control the release amount of the carbon, which may lead to
global warming, oxygen-zone expansion, iceberg melting, and a series of other devastating environmental problems. Provided authority and resource, the governments should not escape their responsibilities which ensure the society to be sustainable and healthy.

Finally, both contemporary and anticipated problems should be taken into account by governments. In reality, maintaining the balance point through a thorough examination and a predicting sense may benefit not only society nowadays but also society in the future. Education is the first lesson in the Human Resources Management lessons, and is also the fundamental factor to enrich a nation and accelerate the pace of development. By doing so the immediate problems such as adolescent crimes, and the anticipated problems such as a lack of social pillar are eliminated at one shot.

To sum up, it should not be concerned with which is more significant between the immediate and anticipated problems, yet should be with how to maintain the balance between them. Because both of them are important and to abjure either indicates a great loss to the nation and its people.

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1# Ocean~Spray
Should governments focus more on solving the immediate problems nowadays（这里用这个词不能表现出是of today的意思） instead of trying to solve the anticipated ones in the future? In general, I agree with this opinion that immediate problems need to be handled without hesitation. However, after careful consideration, I think that the anticipated problems should be taken into account as well.
Firstly, it is governments' responsibility（the responsibility of goernment that作为强调句表达可以突出重点） to focus on solving the contemporary problems. Since the problems have formed and are already recognizable, immediate actions are needed to prevent（ing） them from worsening into far more serious ones. Unemployment, a problem （which）most modern nations are facing, calls for governments' attention and correspondent policies. If not dealt with properly and actively, it may involve into a more complicated one, just like a bomb buried in social, economic, political realms. As a result, a variety of methods is introduced to reduce unemployment. Such methods may include expanding the inflation, building new constructive projects, and the like.（这个result正如你所说的是methods，而不是你这段的论点responsibility，还有你突然提出个关于失业这个问题，例子很不错，但是很唐突，逻辑关系应该是失业是政府面临的当前问题，如果不解决可能引起更大的问题比如失业了钱就少了，有的人因为嫉妒去偷盗或迫于生活去犯罪，又造成新的社会问题，所以政府解决当前社会问题是很有必要的，因为这也是政府作为公众领导的责任。）
On the other hand, it is inevitable for governments to shoulder the duty to solve the anticipated problems as well. As an old Chinese adage goes, the costs spent on precaution equal ten times to repair. Eliminating the buds of danger may save a great amount of energy and money. More importantly, it may avoid the problems from happening. which in some cases could be irreversible regardless of the expenses. <Kyoto Protocol Agreement> was drafted and signed by several nations to control the release amount of the carbon, which may lead to
global warming, oxygen-zone expansion, iceberg melting, and a series of other devastating environmental problems. Provided authority and resource, the governments should not escape their responsibilities which ensure the society to be sustainable and healthy.（这个例子不是很好，感觉也是当下问题。）
Finally, both contemporary and anticipated problems should be taken into account by governments. In reality, maintaining the balance point through a thorough examination and a predicting sense may benefit not only society nowadays but also society in the future. Education is the first lesson in the Human Resources Management lessons, and is also the fundamental factor to enrich a nation and accelerate the pace of development. By doing so the immediate problems such as adolescent crimes, and the anticipated problems such as a lack of social pillar（不懂） are eliminated at one shot.
To sum up, it should not be concerned with which is more significant between the immediate and anticipated problems, yet should be with how to maintain the balance between them. Because both of them are important and to abjure either indicates a great loss to the nation and its people.
我总结下，你总论为：觉得2者都是有必要的。
然后分论点为
1、解决当下问题是政府职责。
2、解决未来问题是政府职责。
3、2者政府皆应考虑。
本题为should 类题目，然后又有一个more为比较累题目，通过揭示focus on 各个problems的重要性来比较哪个更为有必要，得出同样有必要的观点。论证结构应为正说反说，本人也写这篇文章可是时间问题比较惭愧，没有写完，现在看了你的文章能总结下思路对日后写作有很大帮助。不过个人感觉，这篇文章也很仓促，第三段和第四段完全是一个概念也就是说分论点只有2个，逻辑论证上不是很全面，引用的例子比较唐突，语言的表达有待提高。个人浊见。

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