【六人行】AW作文小组 7.25作业byD

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Issue No.130【六人行】by D

WORDS: 416          TIME: 00:42:36          DATE: 2010-7-25 13:19:58
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According to the statement, the speakers says that the destiny of society depends on how children are socialized today, but we don't know how to bring the children up to bring out a better society, I disagree with that for the following reasons.
I think that the way to teach the children is important, but obviously , there are the other factors have an effect on the building of the society. What the best society? More advanced, more peaceful .That's a target to everyone in this society , so we have try our best to built it and find the way to educate the children .In the school, the teachers not only tell the knowledge of the books ,they also train the wonderful  virtue of being a man. In the rest time of the class ,the children could learn to cooperate with others and train the quality of brave and honesty when they in games. They are all the outstanding quality of a person when they step into the society.
And I don't think that the education to the children would decide the destiny of society. That is only a small part of all the reasons. There are other factors would reflect the good or bad of a society, such as the institution of law , the level of the science, and the create ability. And in this world ,there are too many people didn't get any attention when they grew up, but they made important contribution when they were adults .For example , Oprah Winfrey gat a suffering childhood which could hardly image.  An African-American girl was born by the woman who even get married. Growing up in poor family, drinking, smoking, and even taking drugs when she was only 14. She didn't get any love from the society,  she even thought it is a sucking world with hopeless. but after her own effort ,she is one of the most effective women in the world. What happened to her is the most value thing in her life ,and the suffering time mould  her quality. That's not the what the perfect education could give to her.
In sum, it is true that there are some defects in the education , but I don't think that would effect the whole trend of the development of the world. So I really don't think that the claim of the speaker that we haven't ideas to build a better society. We have found it and we are stepping to it.



Issue No.提纲【六人行】by D
I159 TG
1.人类按照自己的意愿去制造机器，机器的思维是局限在人类思维里面的
2.人类有情感，喜怒哀乐，有创造力
3.机器虽然运算能力强，执行能力强，但在人类的思想下去工作，没有主动权，没有感情
4.人类不能过分依赖机器，也会给我们带来害处，不自己运动而变的不健康，病毒弄丢重要资料，带来损失
I218 TG
1.流行艺术不一定有很高的艺术价值，但可以带来可观的收入，艺术思想的超前不一定被同一时代人所认可，但后人会明白其精髓，其艺术价值远远大于收入，举例：梵高同学。法国的马赛尔普鲁斯特同学
2.艺术不一定要被人完全理解，只要给人带来美感则足以，比如音乐，也许我们并不能懂它用的什么旋律节奏，但是我们感觉愉快就够了
3.流行艺术的价值只是短期被人们所喜欢，长时间会淡忘，历史铭记的都是那些少数艺术
I190 TG
物质与精神的重要性比较：
1.无论什么时候，这个社会都是有穷人的，如果一味把资金投入这方面，艺术永远得不到发展，例如每个时期，无论多么贫穷，都是有艺术家出现的
2.艺术是给人带来快乐的，虽然人饥饿贫穷状态下很难产生创造艺术的欲望，但其实艺术也可以作为穷人谋生的手段，比如社会中很多的穷人艺术家，靠在街上卖艺维持生计
3.艺术可以筹集比直接捐款更大的资金，如赈灾义演，艺术节
4.艺术是人的精神食粮，不可或缺，只要在温饱线以上，都可以的

I203 TG
群众与个人
1.承认某些英雄的作用，既然是被社会认同的，那么他身上也必定有这个社会的共性或者社会在追求什么
2.有些可以反映社会的愿望：马丁路德金,人人平等；甘地：印度的渴望统一
3.当然了解社会还有很多方法：教育机制，福利机制

I59  TG
模仿与根据自身条件改变
1.社会曾经大卖成功学书籍，不会适应每一个人，智力，本身的素质，我们可以去借鉴，但不能照搬
2.多元化世界，比如音乐界，某位歌手不会美声唱法，不会高音，但根据自身条件的R&B唱法大受欢迎  当年美国淘金大热潮，全国无数人蜂拥而至，寻找财富，而有一个人来到这里，不淘金，而是买水给淘金者，而后成为百万富翁
3.好的不一定就是适合你的，不走寻常路。。。领会精神是主旨

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Issue No.130【六人行】by D corrected by Echo

WORDS: 416          TIME: 00:42:36          DATE: 2010-7-25 13:19:58
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In sum, it is true that there are some defects in the education , but I don't think that would effect the whole trend of the development of the world. So I really don't think that the claim of the speaker that we haven't ideas to build a better society. We have found it and we are stepping to it.你想表达什么？最后一句google上没有这种表达，我也不太了解，step to 是敲门砖的意思

逻辑感觉基本清晰，但是例证感觉不是很到位，语法上有很多不太合理的地方，你自己在完善下吧。