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王亚冉UID: 2758328

7月29日交

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people should try several different jobs before they take a long term career
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There are numerous chioces to choose in our life. For example, someone like single mindness of their career,but I agree with the opinion that young people should try several jobs before they take a long career.There are three reasons.

First of all, the students who left their college just right now have not any experience about the major. So a sizeble percentage of them still do not quite understand which is their favorite direction. It would be so unfortunate that if they choose a wrong one and work on it for the whole life. It is just like go shoping, before deciding which to buy, we always compare productions of a few manufacturers.Yet, if wrong, the thing could buy a new one, our lives could not start all over again.

moreover, as the development of the economy of the society, the companies are all facing enormous challenges. Nobady could make sure that the first job you choose is suitable for you continuously. If your ability become higher than the requirement of your job, you would better find another occupation or even another company. As the saying goes" man struggles upwards; the water to flow."


The last but not the least, trying several jobs could not only accumulate the rich experience about your major but also the relationship with different kinds of people. As a member of the society, the connection with others play an important role in our lives. Therefore, the more friends, the more roads. Trying several jobs can contribute to your success.

To sum up, I consist that young people try several jobs before they take a long career. However, there is a limit, if one changes his or her job frequently, he or she could just stay in the rudmentary level, in other words, he or she could not have a further development about the career.

candyleenUID: 2709520

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王亚冉UID: 2758328

我的第二篇新鲜出炉啦~
731作业

梦的弃儿UID: 2840846

改晚了啊，sorry哎

王亚冉UID: 2758328

谢谢你的批改，第三人称单数的问题我下次会注意的，知道自己的差距还很大~ 4# 梦的弃儿

rainyashleyUID: 2538965

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王亚冉UID: 2758328

收到，谢谢哈~ 6# rainyashley

王亚冉UID: 2758328

第三篇习作803

darkathrunUID: 2813505

改好请验收~

王亚冉UID: 2758328

收到，谢谢你哈~ 9# darkathrun

王亚冉UID: 2758328

痛苦的805啊~

FannieHsuUID: 2861996

楼主，我不能上传附件，要怎么给你作文

王亚冉UID: 2758328

直接在页面上改吧，
就是占的地方比较大，
不过没关系的啦，先谢谢啦~ 12# FannieHsu

王亚冉UID: 2758328

补交作业
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FannieHsuUID: 2861996

“Histories make men wise, poets witty, the mathematics subtle, natural philosophy deep, moral grave, logic and rhetoric able to contend” said by Francis Bacon (1561—1626). I strongly agree with the statement that younger school children (ages five to ten) should be required to study art and music in addition to math, science, history and language.

Firstly, let me demonstrate about the propose of art and music. They want to exploit students’ potential, cultivate students’ abilities of creativity and improve students’ development of personality. Through eyes and ears, we observe and feel the circumstance, obtain abundant experience of emotion. No matter what Confucius listened the music of Shao country, 3 months cannot recollect the taste of meat, or the legend of artist Zhang, who drew the eyes of dragon, then he flied out of the wall. No matter the eminent Mona Lisa smile painted by Leonardo Da Vinci, or Beethoven Symphony No. 5. Both of them reveal the profound magical charm and express the owner’s inner world.(这里说了艺术的重要性，但是没有说对孩子有什么影响)

In addition, all subjects interact with each other closely. For example, on one hand, learning about art could contribute to geometry. After mastering sketch, I understand the 3- dimensions better than before. Make perspective of cones, cylinders or any other shapes of objects more easily. On the other hand, music can help me jump from those tedious equations, after playing the violin, I usually change another method to solve the tough problem just like Einstein.

Last but not least, art and music not only emphasis students’ distinguishing features but also pay attention to the consciousness of cooperation. For instance, students who are in different parts of the chorus should learn how to act in accord to attain the wonderful result.

To sum up, I consider that children should be required to study art and music as well as math, science, history and language since they can make them become all- round.

楼主的文化底蕴是在深厚，让我无比佩服。不过，我觉得文章着重写了艺术的重要性，以及艺术发生在楼主身上的影响，但是没有强调艺术对younger children究竟有什么作用，为什么你会同意这个观点？只是因为他重要吗？（呵呵，以上纯属个人观点，楼主参考之~）