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tracyrongyiUID: 2842378

Art, a vivid reflection of daily life, is everywhere and at anytime. It is a mirror to reflect reality, including revealing the concealed ideas, and in the meantime, expose impulses of the society unconsciously. Yet the major role lies in abstraction of explicit emotions and attitudes of folks.

Arts always serve as a tool to outlet one's inner feelings, usually outrageous and critical snarls, and it unconsciously represent the social hidden ideas and impulses. Many people suffer great pressure in a ever-smothering world, the speedy information high way, the overwhelming news, the endless conferences and etc, making them suffocated and gutless to confront. By various reasons, they cannot publicize their remonstrance aboveboard but psychologically need an approach to ventilate and catharsis, therefore, they choose art. We can come across many poses and cartoons embodied personal critiques and satirize on blogs, as a popular way to speak out one's deep voice. In some degree, arts free people living in the "closed wall" which is limited and refrained by laws and morality. Sometimes, when people want to live an abandoned life but they know they cannot as it conflicts with legal system, and ultimately, they resort to arts. Many masterworks are a tacit resist to the laws and regulations of that time like the Volga Boatmen, the three musketeers, destiny.

However, sometimes arts are not true voice of artists, so it can hardly mirror hidden social thoughts. As we know, scads of epics, annals, paintings are tasks performed by artists but imposed and created by authorities. They may come into being just out of someone's ostentation or self-abortion, instead a spontaneous reflection of the world. Like the Great Wall, a stupendous art, people gaped at its grand and spectacular outlook, and give compliments to Emperor Qin consequently, envisioning Qin dynasty was prosperous and blooming. But the hard and needy life of pariahs may overshadowed by Great Wall.

But arts do have its potential use in logging and abstracting explicit social ideas, which consists of civilization and is conducive for human beings having a better master of themselves. From stone to bronze, followed by emerald, iron and steel, it's an appreciable progress of human society, especially witnessing all these tools evacuated and showcased in a museum one by one. What's more, people begin to comment era by the arts belong to it. Experts draw conclusions of progress or stalemate of one time by analyzing its literature, music, paintings and etc. For instance, during the time of Renaissance, with the burst of idealisms and masterpieces, it stars in the galaxy of history as one of the fastest developing eras, in terms of art.

Art is a kind of tool, which can not only let off one's voice and emotion, but also keep down the vicissitudes of one's era. Whether it nurtures the ability to reveal the hidden ideas and impulses cannot be answered absolutely. It lies in the attitudes, status, and capacity of the artist, and sometimes, other elements should be taken into consideration, like authorities, power, social status. But as a whole, art is a ndispensable force to promote human civilization marching forward.








艺术揭露了社会暗藏的想法和冲动
1.艺术可以帮助人们宣泄情绪，是对生活在“围城”中的人们的一种free
1）在压力颇大的当今社会，很多人情绪暗藏心中，他们需要resort to一
种发泄的方式。于是他们找到了艺术。
2）人们的生活往往受到法律或道德的限制，就像是生活在closed wall一
样，很多人想表现对当下社会gov的不满，但又知道不该违反regulations
。于是选择了艺术。（很多文艺作品就是作者无声的反抗，伏尔加河上的
纤夫，三剑客，命运）
2.不是所有的艺术都可以反应社会的意识，因为不是所有艺术都是来自艺
术家自发的创作。
部分艺术是因统治阶级的要求应运而生，无法还原出社会真实的想法。例
如：帝王要求史学家写年鉴，但对于自己的朝代往往是褒过于贬。长城在
某种程度上也是艺术作品，人们对往往通过长城去评论秦朝一片盛世，而
忽略秦朝crueling sentences &疾苦民生。
3.艺术更大的作用是通过对社会上explict idea，action的一种抽象描述
来推动人类社会的进步。
1）艺术是文明的一部分，它记载了人类文明的进步，从而帮助人类更好的
了解自己。
从石器到青铜再到瓷器再到钢铁，emerald，从过这一件件出土的艺术品，
人们可以明显的感知时代进步的过程。
2）人们往往会通过一个时代的艺术去评价这个时代。
文艺复兴时期，各种意识流的出现，有多种艺术品表现出来。后人多把16
世纪评价为思想意识突飞猛进的时代。
4.艺术是一种工具，它可以让人们宣泄情感，又可以记录时代的变迁，能
不能表达潜藏的社会的意识和心理不仅仅取决于艺术家本身，还得看他所
处的地位和时代。但它通过对explict idea&impulse进行抽象给社会带来
的意义更加深远。

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

我觉得 lz的 文章 有些跑题。。 hidden idea and impulse..怎么也要点 下。
还有觉得lz 段落 内部的论证 不够。。应该像 推公式 那样，一步一步，扎实的推，要 讲清楚。
个人意见。

tracyrongyiUID: 2842378

我也有这个感觉，但是推公式那样太机械化了吧 总不能因为所以if then这样搞得太明显吧 而且我强调的多得是hidden 与之对比的是expLicit 不知道这样子会不会有问题 2# zxwhy825

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

先回答第二个问题。。it's controversial。。（类似，争议也有）hidden的反面 不一定，只是explicit。。
我觉得，保险就是在题目范围内。。写。。
问题一
我没说一定要if then 只是，觉得，lz，写文章就像，削皮，整个都削了一遍。缺乏整体的递进。（当然并列式的文章，北美范文也有不少）。个人比较喜欢，大口咬下去。。这样痛快。。
有兴趣。。pp 我的。。
ps:lz几号考？

As the one of the most highest features of human wisdom, art does reflect the ideas and impulses that words can hardly describe exactly, even more important value to the society.
The value of art is mostly significant to the laborers, lacking the opportunities to get education, thus unable to write. For instance, the low and exciting songs of the trackers in Volga River, demonstrate vividly their persistence, industry. Coupled with the famous painting "Volga trackers ", reveal not only the poor life of the laborers in the lowest class of their society but also their noble characters, never giving up to the miserable fate, opposite completely to their life. It is art give these people a chance to say their own sound and laud voice, which otherwise hidden in their short and ^life forever, to the rest of the world by painting and music. Unlike science emphasizing more on method and precise, art lay more stress on emotion and impulse, which is the human nature. This is the deeper and basis reason enabling the laborers make themselves understood.   
What's more, another feature of art, distractive, makes it the best way to propagate the ideas forbidden by the main stream. Recent years have witnessed more and more paintings bought in a surprisingly high price with the sound^ of auction. Most of the painters have been dead for years, even decades. It is a tragedy that the ideas and impulse of the painters embodied in their painting are recognized so late that they cannot get any comfort from these. However, it is fortunate that the spirit that was forbidden, at least not advocated, could be preserved by the way of painting. Van Gogh was dead, but his spirit rebellion to the force of the society hidden in his painting, has been revealed nowadays. So were the writers, such as Byron and Shelley.
However, the feature of the art not only reveal the hidden ideas and impulses but also reveal novel-new ideas of the readers, too. Because of the emotional and distractive feature of art , the value carried is flexible and vague ,just like gene mutating when it is transcend. "In one thousands of readers eyes, there are one thousands of Hamlet." This sentence illustrates the feature of art perfectly. Every time the readers' value is similar to the original author of the art work, it will result in resonance, revealing the hidden sound in the readers’ mind. Sometimes, the cumulative revealing of the personal hidden sound may constitute the symphony of the society, just like the example that with the song of revolution spreading across the Russia, the old monocracy was replaced with democracy.
In sum, the feature of art provides it a natural advantage to reveal the hidden value of laborers, authors, and readers. And with the process of revealing the hidden value may cause resonance around the world, making a huge impact to the society.

hyacinthUID: 2184492

in english there is no expression like "skip the title"

and honestly, i don't understand what are you trying to say...  from my experience with native english speakers, i can say they will have difficulties understanding your essay as well...

tracyrongyiUID: 2842378

我想 shi
没事 慢慢来 写作就是一纠结 是我的痼疾 哪里不明白呢 全文吗 总有看得懂的和看不懂的吧
问题在于提纲和中文的表达吗 5# hyacinth

tracyrongyiUID: 2842378

As the one of the most highest features of human wisdom, art does reflect the ideas and impulses that words can hardly describe exactly, even more important value to the society.
The value of art is mostly significant to the laborers, lacking the opportunities to get education, thus unable to write. For instance, the low and exciting songs of the trackers in Volga River, demonstrate vividly their persistence, industry. Coupled with the famous painting "Volga trackers ", reveal not only the poor life of the laborers in the lowest class of their society but also their noble characters, never giving up to the miserable fate, opposite completely to their life. It is art give these people a chance to say their own sound and laud voice, which otherwise hidden in their short and ^life forever, to the rest of the world by painting and music. Unlike science emphasizing more on method and precise, art lay more stress on emotion and impulse, which is the human nature. This is the deeper and basis reason enabling the laborers make themselves understood.   
What's more, another feature of art, distractive, makes it the best way to propagate the ideas forbidden by the main stream. Recent years have witnessed more and more paintings bought in a surprisingly high price with the sound^ of auction. Most of the painters have been dead for years, even decades. It is a tragedy that the ideas and impulse of the painters embodied in their painting are recognized so late that they cannot get any comfort from these. However, it is fortunate that the spirit that was forbidden, at least not advocated, could be preserved by the way of painting. Van Gogh was dead, but his spirit rebellion to the force of the society hidden in his painting, has been revealed nowadays. So were the writers, such as Byron and Shelley.
However, the feature of the art not only reveal the hidden ideas and impulses but also reveal novel-new ideas of the readers, too. Because of the emotional and distractive feature of art , the value carried is flexible and vague ,just like gene mutating when it is transcend. "In one thousands of readers eyes, there are one thousands of Hamlet." This sentence illustrates the feature of art perfectly. Every time the readers' value is similar to the original author of the art work, it will result in resonance, revealing the hidden sound in the readers’ mind. Sometimes, the cumulative revealing of the personal hidden sound may constitute the symphony of the society, just like the example that with the song of revolution spreading across the Russia, the old monocracy was replaced with democracy.
In sum, the feature of art provides it a natural advantage to reveal the hidden value of laborers, authors, and readers. And with the process of revealing the hidden value may cause resonance around the world, making a huge impact to the society.

从不同的角度来分析，确实写得比我靠题多了。用词也不错，只是是不是段落要分一下，感觉有一段好长啊
还有，你是怎么理解otherwise呢 我写时就觉得有点奇怪 后来看到个帖子，破题到时候说这个otherwise也要注意，就是说没有art，那hidden ideas 和impulse就不会reveal了 但我不知道该怎么样表达到文章中去

还有，我觉得你 有一部分 说like gene mutation，arts 可以带来vogue new ideas 这是art的作用不错了，但是是不是应在紧密的和题目联系起来呢
说实话，除了第一段，针对labor 的比较层层递进，其他的我还真没看出来

8 26考 你呢 我快急死了 4# zxwhy825

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

16号。。其实 lz时间还早。。我练了10才找到感觉。。慢慢来。。稳住心态。。 7# tracyrongyi

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

我是从art的内在特点出发，（3点吧，显示其对 不同人的value的揭露，没文化的，painter，even reader）由于是限时写，文章组织不太好。。之后，也没机会好好改。。可能我的表达，说理，不够。。这部分也在加强中。。
LZ可以看看 我最近写的，特别是字数多的。。或者是 别人的精华。。

说理的方法。。要自己体会。。

tracyrongyiUID: 2842378

THX  你帖子好多啊 我还是再好好想想再参考吧 三省吾身 9# zxwhy825

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

加油。
good  to better.
10# tracyrongyi