issue50 求PP

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题目：ISSUE50 - "In order to improve the quality of instruction at the college and university level, all faculty should be required to spend time working outside the academic world in professions relevant to the courses they teach."
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日期：2010-8-1 下午 11:34:16

【原文】With the development of science and technology, with the exploding
of information, with more and more distinct opinions appearing in the Internet, the knowledge ,especially in science, are renewed more and more frequent than ever before.
So, the Information Age leave us a question,that for the sake of improvement of quality of instruction at the level of the university and college, should we order that all faculty should spend time working outside academia in professions relevant to the course they teach? Concerning with the society background, my answer is almost yes.
Firstly, the working experience will enhance teachers' understanding of their own courses,which elevate the level of instruction quality. Most teachers ,gain knowledge from their teachers, from books.Seldom of them have the opportunity to check the knowledge right or not, they have learned for decades, let alone the chance to exert the original idea ,they come up with. However, the working experience provides them the option ,they always dream of. With the experience, they can not only rebuild their own system of knowledge on the basis of reality, but also prove some innovative thought, that may change the view of collegue, which supply teachers with more refreshing knowledge to instruct.
Secondly,the working experience will, in some extent, prepare students for the future career, which demonstrate the development of quality of instruction in the long run. Admittedly, there are, definitely, some problems in faculty's working. However, it can be expected that after gradution, most students will choose a job ,relevant to their majors. The difficulties they will suffer , in their first working day, is exactly what our faculty will face in their working experience. With the experience , our faculty are able to offer practical suggestion about the preparation students have to follow in the next years, which enable they adapt to their career quickly and wisely.
Thirdly, the final purpose of education is to better the society.With the proper time of work experience in relevant profession will not only provide the society more original ideas teachers figuring out when working ,but also offer the society more talent ,who learn both the fundemantal knowledge
and the hi-tech used in industry , labs and so on.
However, as the threhold matter ,we should make some qualification:(1)the working time shoud be proper, leaving the teacher enough time to prepare instruction.(2)for some research college

【i修改】With the development of science and technology, with the exploding
of information, with more and more distinct opinions appearing in the Internet, the knowledge ,especially in science, are renewed more and more frequent than ever before.
So, the Information Age leave us a question, that for the sake of improvement of quality of instruction at the level of the university and college, should we order that all faculty should spend time working outside academia in professions relevant to the course they teach? Concerning with the society background, my answer is almost yes.
Firstly, the working experience will enhance teachers' understanding of their own courses, which elevate the level of instruction quality. Most teachers, gain knowledge from their teachers, from books. Seldom of them have the opportunity to check the knowledge right or not, they have learned for decades, let alone the chance to exert the original idea, they come up with. However, the working experience provides them the option, they always dream of. With the experience, they can not only rebuild their own system of knowledge on the basis of reality, but also prove some innovative thought, that may change the view of colleague, which supply teachers with more refreshing knowledge to instruct.
Secondly, the working experience will, in some extent, prepare students for the future career, which demonstrate the development of quality of instruction in the long run. Admittedly, there are, definitely, some problems in faculty's working. However, it can be expected that after graduation, most students will choose a job, relevant to their majors. The difficulties they will suffer, in their first working day, is exactly what our faculty will face in their working experience. With the experience, our faculties are able to offer practical suggestion about the preparation students have to follow in the next years, which enable they adapt to their career quickly and wisely.
Thirdly, the final purpose of education is to better the society. With the proper time of work experience in relevant profession will not only provide the society more original ideas teachers figuring out when working ,but also offer the society more talent ,who learn both the fundamental knowledge
and the hi-tech used in industry , labs and so on.
However, as the threshold matter, we should make some qualification:(1)the working time should be proper, leaving the teacher enough time to prepare instruction.(2)for some research college, where teachers are required to work in labs as well as give courses. There is no need to ask them to work outside academic field. Such as some professors in M.I.T（3）For some courses, such as philosophy, it is hard to find some work relevant. We can force faculties to do some irrelevant work instead.
In sum, for the development of quality of instruction .in short term and in long run, our college and university should urge our faculties to do appropriate work relevant to their major, unless it’s unavailable or unnecessary.

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

怎么也写不完啊。。怎么办呢

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

求 拍。

竹子落UID: 2797518

先申明一下哦 我也是个新手 我只是从我的角度去看 所以仅供参考而已

我觉得先不论论据组织，你的结论本身就有很大的漏洞
B1 你就在说没有work outside academic world的老师连自己的掌握的知识是对是错都不知道 都是胡乱教的... 这个显然是污蔑啊... 你所谓的论据都是你臆想出来的 老师的知识是学自自己的老师和书本 而且他们梦想着要去outside academic工 你怎么知道的呢？

B2 你完全把老师和学生摆在了同一水平线上 认为老师去工作和刚毕业的学生遇到的问题还是exactly the same 老师就是以身试法为学生探路 这和现实根本就不相符

PS 很多表达也都有些问题... 写的时候应该要注意一下

zxwhy825UID: 2668443

谢谢。。可能是我的表达有问题。和心里的提纲。不太有紧密联系。。谢谢。我会注意的 4# 竹子落