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题目：ARGUMENT114 - A recently completed study shows that people dwelling in stairs-only apartment buildings (that is, buildings without elevators) live an average of three years longer than do people who live in buildings with both elevators and stairs. A second study shows that elderly residents of buildings with elevators make, on average, twice as many visits to doctors each year as do elderly residents of buildings without elevators. These findings suggest that even a very moderate amount of daily exercise, such as that required to use the stairs leading to and from one's apartment, can increase people's health and longevity. The findings also suggest that new apartment buildings should be constructed with as few elevators as possible.
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日期：2010-8-4 下午 04:55:42

【a原文】Based on two study, which shows people live longer and visit doctor less without elevators, the arguer conclude,that proper daily exercise increases people's health and longevity,and to attracting more residents, apartment buildings should be built with as few elevators as possible.

It is honorable that the arguer think for the residents and apartment.However, some fallacies in the reason do not be masked because of that.
One of the most important flaw, is the validity of the two study. When and where were the studies finished? Who do the studies focus? Whether are the people involved representive for the whole? Do the studies completed with other conditions same,expect the elevator element? Without providing more information,
to response to the question above, proving the stuties widespread and valid, every conclusion based on them is in vain.^^julizi

What's more, the arguer overlook some alternatives to the problem.Even if the both the study
show that a moderate amount of daily exercise can increase people's health and longevity, removing elevators is not the only solution. On the contrary, we can
utilize the saving time by elevators, to exercise, which also solve the problem.

Finally, whatever field^lichang the arguer stand, there is no need to construct apartment buildings with as fewer elevators as possible.For the sake of resident, elevators provide convienence as well as potential risk of health.However,resident have the right to choose whether have the elevators or not, with deliberation both the advantage and disadvantage.For the sake of the builder of the apartments, elevator has its goodness and badness to profit. Apartment with elevator charges more,however maybe seeming unattractive.
Without a deep analysis of the cost and revenue, we should not make a hasty decision.
In sum, before giving such suggestion, teh arguer need to provide more proof to pr

感觉，逻辑简单。错误不多
【a修改】Based on two study, which shows people live longer and visit doctor less without elevators, the arguer conclude, that proper daily exercise increases people's health and longevity, and to attracting more residents, apartment buildings should be built with as few elevators as possible.

It is honorable that the arguer thinks for the residents and apartment. However, some fallacies in the reason do not be masked because of that.
One of the most important flaws is the validity of the two studies. When and where were the studies finished? Who do the studies focus? Are people involved representative for the whole? Do the studies completed with other conditions same, expect the elevator element? Perhaps, the longevity of the experimental and control group are different before the study or the longevity changes randomly in that area because of rapid moving in and moving out .Without providing more information, to response to the question above, proving the studies widespread and valid, every conclusion based on them is in vain.

What's more, the arguer overlooks some alternatives to the problem. Even if the both the study show that a moderate amount of daily exercise can increase people's health and longevity, removing elevators is not the only solution. On the contrary, we can utilize the saving time by elevators, to exercise, which also solve the problem.

Finally, whatever standpoint the arguer stand, there is no need to construct apartment buildings with as fewer elevators as possible. For the sake of resident, elevators provide convenience as well as potential risk of health. However, residents have the right to choose whether have the elevators or not, with deliberation both the advantage and disadvantage. For the sake of the builder of the apartments, elevator has its goodness and badness to profit. Apartment with elevator charges more, however maybe seeming unattractive. Without a deep analysis of the cost and revenue, we should not make an imprudent decision.

In sum, before giving such suggestion, the arguer needs to provide more proof to prove the validity of the studies. In addition, before making a decision, the arguer should deliberate both sides of the problem, to make the residents or builders determine wisely.(366)

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