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9.13 特训独立作文

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综合作文9.13占座~~要断网了~

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顶啊顶啊~~

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9.15 特训组综合作文

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9.15 特训组 综合加独立

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我的作文在 https://bbs.gter.net/thread-1155390-1-1.html

别忘了改啊

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迟交了~请批。。。。

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10.09综合~~写了半个多小时。。。。

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TPO12

The professor suggests that the viewpoint given in the passage,
a painting own by the Austen family is the portrait of Jane Austen, all fail in proving the facticity of the assume. The professor has showed three points to argue against the passsage.

First of the all, according to the passage, Jane Austen’s family used this portrait as the illustration of Jane in a book of her. This opinion has been casted doubts on when thw professor points out that the book was published 17 years after Jean’s death, so many of her family had no idea what Jane looked like, so the illustration can not be a reliable proof.
不对
是说JANE死后
家族才开始用portrait
Secondly, the passage puts emphasis on the fact that the portrait has many aspects in common with a sketch of Cassandra which provide a depiction of adult Jane Austen. However, the professor says that the Austen family is a very large family , Jane Austen had a lot relatives that the portrait is
probably for one of her cousins or distant nieces, so it is too rough to draw a conclusion the girl in the portrait is Jane Austen.
不对
是说家族很多人
所以总有一些人侄女长的像的
Last, the final statement in the passage that the style of the portrait was very popular at that time, as it might be the work of Ozias whom can only be hired by a rich family as the Austen. While this point has been criticized by the professor, since it apparently neglects that the picture might be other’s work, and a stamp in back of the portrait show that it maght be draw when Jane was no longer the young girl as in the portrait.
不对 是说卖帆布的  在JANE27岁后才开始在英国卖帆布 因为画像有注明这块帆布是向谁买的

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41# ttuuttuu
同学，我弱弱的问一下，第一和第二点我说的不是和你写的一样吗？？为什么说我不对呢？？？第三点我是没怎么挺清楚，帆布这个词什么的真不懂。
你有听力原文吗？我想要一份~~

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引用ttuuttuu ， 顺便问下你们有TPO听力的原文吗？ 有空也帮我改改文章
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0 x1 y" k& i, m' ?3 l% m$ Q" CThe professor suggests that the viewpoint given in the passage,
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: G0 w- @) {2 ^First of the all, according to the passage, Jane Austen’s family used this portrait as the illustration of Jane in a book of her. This opinion has been casted doubts on when thw professor points out that the book was published 17 years after Jean’s death, so many of her family had no idea what Jane looked like, so the illustration can not be a reliable proof.; h* P7 F* ^4 w1 p
不对
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Secondly, the passage puts emphasis on the fact that the portrait has many aspects in common with a sketch of Cassandra which provide a depiction of adult Jane Austen. However, the professor says that the Austen family is a very large family , Jane Austen had a lot relatives that the portrait is
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是说家族很多人
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Last, the final statement in the passage that the style of the portrait was very popular at that time, as it might be the work of Ozias whom can only be hired by a rich family as the Austen. While this point has been criticized by the professor, since it apparently neglects that the picture might be other’s work, and a stamp in back of the portrait show that it maght be draw when Jane was no longer the young girl as in the portrait.
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第二还再加一个细节， 就是many critics think the portait should be Mary, one of Jane's distant nieces.
第三点是， the speaker agrued that it is chronically mistaken, it should be a late time. There is a stampl on the back the canvas which trace the source of such canvas,  salesman of the canvas William . But he didn't sell the canvas until Jane was 27 year old when she already passed the teenage time.

哥们，你最后最好再加一个总结句，参考我的文章

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The lecture ismainly discussing that although there are some negative effects of the privatecollector the fossil , but this effect is exaggerating. In fact the benefitbrought by the price collecting outweighs the disadvantage, contradicting whatis stated by the writing that the all effects of the private collecting aredisadvantageous.

First, the speakerthinks that it is the private collector that appeal more interest of the fossilfrom the public, rather than reduce that. The private collector can spend a lotof money on the purchase of rare or precious fossil even though the smallinstitution or library can’t afford to buy the fossil and then display it tothe public. In contrast, the writing asserts that the fossil fluxes into thepersonal gallery of the fossil collector, consequently the public lose a lotchange to appreciate the fossil in the public session, and diminish theinterest of fossil. So the lecture has totally disagreed with the view made inthe writing.

Secondly, thespeaker discusses that it is inaccurate that scientists are lost opportunity todo research on the fossil. Because the fossil is put to the counter of selling,it has to be identified. The only expert who can complete the identificationjob is the scientist. He or she will do some examination and test to check thefossil. Even before the fossil is sold to the private collector, this fossilmust has been passed to the scientist for identification so that the scientistexpert won’t miss any importance of the fossil. This point challenges what isstated in the writing that scientists are getting limited to study the fossildue to interfere of the private collector.

Finally, the speakerraises the question that the it is more important and preferable to excavatemore fossil with the help from the private collector than to keep fossil buriedunderground without any damage. Although the private collector will increasethe possibility of the fossil break or damage the excavation spot, but thebenefit that more fossils are uncovered is more important. The speaker don’tthink we should let the many fossils still keep secret, and lying under theground. This point disagrees what is demonstrated in the writing that theprivate collecting is not welcome due to its damage to the fossil or the fossilspot.

In sum, the contentof the writing is totally jeopardized by the lecture. And the speaker hastotally different ideas on the topics made in the reading.

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40# kimi海纳

各个细节都讲到了，但请再加最后一个结尾段。

TPO13
In the passage , the author talks about hisworry about the phenomena that fossils trades have become more and more flourishrecent years. Quite different from what has been stated in the passage, theprofessor thinks that the fossils trade will make benefits to the public andscientists who want to get access to the precious fossils.






Firstly, it’s believed in the passage thatthe fossils bought by private collectors will likely be closed off from thepublic. The professor immediately refutes this viewpoint, she says that manyfossils are bought from the universities by private schools and these tradeswill make the fossils have greater exposure to the public, because they canonly be seen by a few people if they were collected by the univerities.

Secondly, the passage declares thatscientists are deprived of the right to studying on the fossils collected byprivate buyers, thus they could not operate the successful study on thefossils. However, the professor shows optimism in this point, as the buyershave to estimate the value of the fossils, they will surely pass the fossilsthrough the scientists to make clear the importance of the fossils that willgive the scientists a opportunity to make their researchs.

The last statement in the passage is thatbecause most private collectors are untrained or uninterested, so the trades mightdo harm to the value of the scientific evidences of the fossils. Professoragree this point with the passage to a certain degree, but on the fact that manyof them own corporations that run by universities , only with the financialhelp of these buyers can the universitise complete the undiscovery of many rarefossils.
再加一点，speaker 认为宁愿有更多的化石被挖掘出来，尽管会有一点的损坏，但是这样肯定比这些化石永远埋藏在地底下好。
In sum, the contentof the writing is totally jeopardized by the lecture. And the speaker hastotally different ideas on the topics made in the reading.