求P~ARGUMENT 220

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题目：ARGUMENT220 - The following appeared in an article in a magazine for writers.

"A recent study showed that in describing a typical day's conversation, people make an average of 23 references to watching television and only 1 reference to reading fiction. This result suggests that, compared with the television industry, the publishing and bookselling industries are likely to decline in profitability. Therefore, people who wish to have careers as writers should acquire training and experience in writing for television rather than for print media."
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Merely based on the unfounded assumption and dubious evidence the arguer make the conclusion that people will prefer to the writing careers would better acquire training and experience in writing for TV rather than for print media. To support the argument, the author cites the evidence that, the people make references to TV is much higher than that of reading fiction. Additionally, the arguer assumes that, the publishing and book selling industries are likely to decline in profitability. Furthermore, to strengthen the argument, the author cites the result of a recent study. At the first glance, the argument seems somehow appealing, but further reflection reveals that the argument omits some important information and laminations that should have been offered in the argument. Thus, the argument suffers 3 logical flaws.

The threshold problem of the argument is the dubious result of the study. The cited study cannot be of persuasion for the specimens of the study may be of weak representative considering the individual characteristic. The study cited in the argument doesn't tell the conditions of the people participate in the study, such as job and educational level. As it always acceptable that people with lower educational level will prefer talking more about watching to read the arguer’s conclusion is of little persuasion without ruling out the possibility mentioned above.

Even if the result of the survey is strong enough to strength the argument, the higher reference to watching TV can hardly ensure a more popularity for TV among people. As TV always have more current affairs and news that easily and more trending to me talked among people, the advantage in the reference cannot equals to the advantage of popularity. Even if TV is more popular comparing with fiction, the arguer's conclusion that the publishing and book selling industry will likely decline profitability, itself however, is presumptuous. The arguer falsely equals the fiction to the whole publishing and bookselling industries. The truth is always fiction only take part in several of the whole industries. Thus, TV may be far behind from the whole writing industry considering the discussion above.

Even TV is more profitable than the whole writing industry. The arguer wrongly assumes that the main propose, or even the only propose for writers to write is just to earn money. Only if the money writers made can cover the basic needs of themselves, many of them will choose a direction more attack them. The conclusion is of little worth as a consequence of the arguer's wrongly assumption.

To sum up, the arguer fails to substantiate his claim that more writers will choose TV instead of print media because the evidence cited in the analysis doesn't lend strong support what the arguer maintains. To make the argument more convincing and logical acceptable, the arguer would have to provide more information about people who participate in the survey. Additionally, the arguer must provide strong evidence to rule out other possibility of the chosen of writers. Therefore, if the argument had included the given features discussed above, it would be more thorough and logical acceptable.


第一篇ARGU 之前写过很多ISSUE 刚上完韦晓亮的作文课~23号就考作文了 希望大家帮忙批改一下~~谢谢了~~
同时问大家一个问题，就是ARGUMENT用韦晓亮的模板或者网上的某个模板可以么？会不会雷同或者低分？ 谢谢大家帮忙解答一下~！