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今天开始加入Daily Writing逼自己写啊
欢迎大家拍
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这是我第一次写TOEFL essay...没有限时,写了近两个小时，汗！语言还挺高中的吧……
望大家狂拍！谢谢！
（PS请问怎么传附件呢？如WORD文档）


8-30
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?  Some people think making sure that others (influential people or potential employers) know about your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed, if you do not do this, you won’t have a successful life.



You may have come across someone complaining: "How can he fire me? He can hardly recognize how worthy I am!" Indeed, it is not all the boss's fault. In my opinion, he/she should take up the responsibility for missing a step, which is essential to succeed -- making sure that others know about your strengths and accomplishments.

Exposing your strengths and accomplishments to others may bring you more chances to succeed. To find an employment, you have to convince the potential employer that you are competent for the position by listing and explaining your advantages and achievements, just like selling goods. My cousin sister failed to get a job with her first resume. But after modifying her resume according to the advisor, removing the ordinary hobbies and highlighting her strengths for the job, she received three offers and finally stepped in the accounting firm her longed for. Having got a dream job, to an extent, is getting an opportunity to succeed.

What if starting your own business or studying academical problems? It is just the same, although these job seems to be more independent. We are now living in the information era, in which information greatly influences our decisions. Getting the recognition of your business or academic partners, you may get up-dated information while chatting or sharing, which may help you a lot in career. Moreover, by exposing nice qualities, one can make deeper impressions on others or even win appreciation. As a result, they will feel like chatting, cooperating and studying with you.

However, making sure others know about your strengths and accomplishments means not only introducing your strong qualities, but also showing these strong points in work. Otherwise, your demonstration will just gain hatred and destroy confidence.

To be successful, you need not only strengths and accomplishments but also the recognitions of them. In brief, I insist on the opinion that making sure that others know about your strengths and accomplishments can help you succeed, otherwise you won't have a successful life.

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谢谢！

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8-31
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:　
　Parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than determine their children’s future for them.

Many parents prefer to determine their children's future according to their wills and life experience, for they regard it as the best access to success. However, I hold the opinion that parents should allow children to make their own choices rather than select future for them.

Children, although they are young and lack experience, should have rights to determine their future for the reason that it belongs to them but not their parents, after all. Admittedly, the intension of parents is undoubtedly good. What the parents consider perfect, however, may be dull and boring in the kids' eyes. Since they are not living in the same era and consider problems from different aspects, they will go into to dissimilar opinions. Parents are likely to regard stable jobs as the best while children may prefer challenging work, instead. Perhaps what parents interested in can hardly attract their kids. William Gates, a lawyer in Seattle, for instance, designed a perfect access for his son Bill Gates -- becoming a lawyer after graduating from Harvard Law School. Nevertheless, Bill Gates was crazy about computer rather than law.

Furthermore, children benefits a lot from making choices by themselves. They have to think about a number of problems and even go into investigation. In order to select a major, a kid need to gather a great deal of information. Am I suitable for doing science research or studying art? What is the development of this major now? How is the employment situation? All these problems should be taken into consideration. Such process will strengthen one's ability in solving problems. Also, he have to learn to take up responsibility for his decision, which is a indispensable virtue. On the other hand, if parents take place of children to design their future, kids may lose an opportunity to think about their own life. They are also easier to find an excuse to give up.

What parents should do is to guide their children, provide advice and help to collect information. All in all, kids are kids. They are not so mature as adults while considering problems and they lack experience. As a result, they need parents help. Some suggestions may play an important role in choosing. But don't forget the final decision ought to be made by children themselves.

It is children that live their future life, not anyone else so that I insist that children should be allowed to design their own future.

第二篇 求拍..历时1H  407词...
逐渐缩短作文时间中……
PS 求教上传附件！！

minnielilyUID：2879008

个人意见，仅供参考哈，请回改~谢谢

多灌水攒够分就能传附件了，很快的

MELODYSKIINGUID：2841950

谢谢！已回改

MELODYSKIINGUID：2841950

这个那个，我终于写完了。巨烂无比…还是放上来吧…求拍...下次再也不写it depends的了
Some people hold the opinion that governments should donate more money on health-care issues in order to improve health condition while others argue that environmental problems should be paid more attention. In my opinion, however, both health-care issues and environmental issues need the

Health-care issues, which related directly to the healthy condition, would definitely need enough attention. The support of the governments promotes the development of health care and medical science. Let's take Japan, where government donate a great deal of money to develop health-care, for example. Japanese usually get married late and give birth to children even over 45, but as we known, baring babies over 38 years old is considered dangerous. Owing to the advanced technique, however, pregnant women at an advanced age in Japan are seldom afraid of dystocia. On the other hand, many women in Africa lost their lives giving birth to their children because of the poor medical technique.

The people can benefit a lot from the promotion of health-care in short term, indeed. Nevertheless, solving environmental problems, which may cause different kinds of diseases, brings long-term benefit. With the development, a lot of environmental problems arose and brought types of diseases. For instance, after having fish from the sea, into which factories poured water pollutant with mercury, villagers trembled, screamed and finally jumped into the sea. Cleaning up the water prevents cholera. Controlling the air pollution may decrease the possibility to get cough. As a result, environmental issues cannot be little accounted of.

In brief, neither health-care issues nor environmental issues can be ignored. They need almost equal attention.

niunianUID：2864048

8.31 改好了  请回改  10楼
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1145335&extra=&page=1

stoptalkingUID：2807919

9.1改好了
求回改~
https://bbs.gter.net/viewthread.php?tid=1142754&pid=1774323914&page=4&extra=

另外，楼主到寄托新兵等级后就可以上传附件啦

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9-2独立..欢迎拍砖
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
        It is more important for the government to spend money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds.
       

Both art museums and recreational facilities such as swimming pools and playgrounds are public facilities, but which is worthy of more investment from the government? Different people hold different opinions. From my point of view, government should spend more money on art museums and concert halls than on recreational facilities.

As public facilities to exhibit art works, art museums and concert halls are definitely needed. Since music can relax and even pure one's mind and art works can cultivate ones characteristic, concert halls and art museums are places to exercise one's mind. Governments can never neglect the effect of mind exercise, which may protect people from suffering from mental diseases and prevent them committing crime. Furthermore, art museums and concert halls not only provide a place for populace to enjoy art, but also exhibit the artistic level, even the civil quality of a city or a country. Art works displayed in the museum reveal the history and culture of one country. After listening to African music, we may have an emotional recognition that Africa is a place full of vigor. Traveling to a new country, we would like to visit the museums in order to get more knowledge about it. In all, art museums and concerts are symbols of a country.

What about recreational facilities? Dissimilar from art museums and concert halls, they provides a place for body building. Government donates more money on museums and concert halls instead of recreational facilities, which does not mean that body building is less important. As individuals have the ability to construct a swimming pool, a tennis court and many clubs will provide playgrounds and golf courses, however, there is no need for governments to spend money on them. The responsibility of the government is to accomplish something that cannot be done by individuals and enterprises, but necessary. On the contrary, it is hard for individuals to build a museum or a concert halls, let along to say to run it well.

Based on the reasons above, I insist that governments should spend more money on art museums and concert halls and encourage individuals and enterprises to construct recreation facilities.

louisa427UID：2458920

9/1/2010,independent writing

superchaosUID：2863434

作文给你改好啦……

belinda_777UID：2669901

我也改好了哦

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12# louisa427 谢谢！
PS take sth. for example 与  take sth as an example 同义为“ 以XX为例”