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发表于 2010-9-7 22:19:45 |只看该作者
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  改好啦

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发表于 2010-9-7 22:34:05 |只看该作者
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综合 tpo2

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我:不写谓语。例子重复,长句控不住,啰嗦不说正事。

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发表于 2010-9-7 22:40:54 |只看该作者
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谢谢!好砖~
我:不写谓语。例子重复,长句控不住,啰嗦不说正事。

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发表于 2010-9-8 07:19:54 |只看该作者
改好了哦

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发表于 2010-9-8 20:15:27 |只看该作者
本帖最后由 dukenunee 于 2010-9-8 22:31 编辑

9.8  独立综合

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我:不写谓语。例子重复,长句控不住,啰嗦不说正事。

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发表于 2010-9-8 20:39:55 |只看该作者
不好意思迟到了这是我的  23楼


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发表于 2010-9-9 00:10:34 |只看该作者
tpo 2 综合。


The lecture completely refuses this passage.

First, in the passage, it is said that it will be quicker for the team to finish the work. However, as the lecture stated, there are so many meetings before the team can reach a consensus. Consequently, people may find the process is fairly slow. So the speaker's opinion is contradicted to the opinion of the passage. 1.我很不能理解为什么要用过去时。因为你后面也有用现在时。


Second, the speaker concerned that people in the team will not be happy. For the reason that people did not contribute to the successful of the project will get benefit of the result, which made the people will insightful ideas not feeling well just as the opposite to the prediction in the passage. people will insightful ideas?  will的用法貌似只有动词和名词。insightful 是形容词。而idea 是名词。翻译起来就是人民会用意志驱使深刻的思想感到不舒服。我觉得好别扭、。。。不知道是不是这样翻译的。


Third, the passage also stated that people working in the team may feel good, because there are chances for them to make a difference of the final result of the project. So, the passage said there will be more creative ideas in the team. However, the speaker said not all the member in the team are influential to the result. Once the idea is considered as a useless one, the idea will soon drop without fully discussion on it. What is more, people in the team might be ignored by the others when they give some considerable ideas, for example the project will not work well. But when the project ends up with failure, all the member in the team will be blamed. Therefore, the speaker cast doubt to the passage's statement.  这段写得不错。就是我不懂为什么一定得用过去时+现在时+将来时。

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发表于 2010-9-9 11:29:48 |只看该作者
The lecture completely refuses the passage.(太简单了,不推荐。可由阅读添加内容,将意思变反即可。而且,我相信你应该听到research by several years,加上这个会让考官觉得不错的。)

First, it is stated in the passage that the dress of the lady combination (换成insistence好一些,阅读提过嘛)of the cloth belong to a servant and the fur collar belong to rich person is the evidence which represents the painting is not painted by A(名字必须得写,否则会扣分的). However, the speaker said that after carefully studying by X-rays on the pigments of the painting, it shows that in the original one the lady is not wearing the black fur collar. And it is after hundreds of years later that someone painted the collar on the painting in order to create a aristocracy lady that the painting is looks like this now.

Second, the passage pointed that the face of the lady does not reflect the skill of A in light and shadow.(这里可没有转折哦) It is a kind of mistake that A will never make. But the speaker said that in the original one, the collar of the lady is white. And in this way, the face of the lady is more realistic by reflecting the effect of light and shadow well.

Third, the speaker stated that the panel of the painting belongs to a big panel made of wood. And one piece of the panel is the same as A's another painting. This evidence casted doubt on the conclusion by contrasting the statement in the passage that A never paint on panel made up of small pieces.
1、        字数还可以增加,毕竟有阅读在那里嘛;
2、        动词时态须注意,要么全部过去时,要么全部现在时,混用的话易扣分;
3、        转折词、连词的储备须加强,比如把third 换成furthermore,老用数字连词显得有些枯燥;
4、        听力内容似乎还可以完善一点,特别是第二段听到的内容明显不够,加强听力练习吧;
5、        言语直接,还望见谅,祝楼主成功:-D。
小个子也有大梦想。。。  

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发表于 2010-9-9 18:46:41 |只看该作者
9-8 独立 改

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