心情极度焦虑中！6号考试，心理素质太差，不晓得这种文章有没有3分……求拍！

zee_ccUID: 2849524

我心态一直特别差，一遇到考试就慌，准备AW也挺长时间了。但是确实不知道自己是个啥水平。AW要求也不高，有个3，5 就知足了……
今天早上和中午分别写了一篇，期望有人可以说说我文章到底是个啥水平……现在我是睡觉都在想考试。。快崩溃了。

这篇Issue写的特别不顺，不但逻辑混乱而且内容空洞，自我感觉很不好。
A字数第一次上500，不知道质量如何。
唉，希望有人能理一下我……




TOPIC: ARGUMENT99 - The following appeared in a memo from the economic minister of the small country Paucia.

"Using a newly developed variety of seed, farmers in our neighboring country Abundia produced 80 percent more rice last year than in any previous year. To increase the income of farmers in our own country, we should encourage them to cultivate this new variety of rice rather than some of their traditional crops. Such high yields of rice will also improve our country's balance of trade by enabling us to begin exporting it."
WORDS: 516
TIME: 00:29:47
DATE: 2010-9-3 14:14:46

In this argument, the author claims that in order to increase the income of farmers and improve the balance of trade, farmers should cultivate new variety of rice instead of some of their traditional crops. To justify this argument, the author points out farmers in Abundia produced 80 percent more rice last year by cultivating this new rice. However, none of these assertions and assumptions is well supported by sufficient evidence or reasonable demonstration. A further and careful reflection would reveal us several critical flaws as follow.

To begin with, the most obvious problem of this argument is that the author assumes farmers in Abundia really got more incomes last year by cultivating the newly developed variety of seed. Firstly, we have no idea about the basic number of how many rice these farmers have harvested in previous year. It is entirely possible that these farmers have lower rice than farmers in Paucia before. An absolute number should be offered by author. Secondly, even if farmers in Abundia have got more incomes than before, it is not necessary depend on the new seed, perhaps the climate was more suitable for rice last year or farmers pay more attention to rice and treat them more careful than before.

Next, even if it is true that the farmers in Abundia have got more incomes by the newly developed of seed, it is not warranted that the farmers in Paucia should imitate them. The author fails to consider the differences between the two countries which may cause opposite result. Perhaps the soil and the climate in Paucia are not suitable for cultivating rice, or perhaps the farmers in Paucia are better at cultivating traditional crops and have no special skills for rice, or traditional crops can bring more profits for farmers in the future actually.

Thirdly, even if the author could explain all of the assumptions foregoing, another flaw of this argument is the author asserts that Paucia could ameliorate the balance of trade by the high yields of rice. On one hand, we have no information about how many rice the farmers will harvest exactly, perhaps the number of rice is not big enough to export to other countries. On the other hand, even if Paucia can export rice to other countries, it is not mean that other crops such as maize, or electronic products like TV and computers are also capable for exporting. If the exporting numbers of these modifies will reduce, the balance of trade is not definitely improved too. The author uses a mere fact to generalize a whole situation.

To sum up, judging from all of the evidence and analysis offered above, this argument is not well-reasoned. To strengthen this argument, the author should offer more persuasive and detailed information about the yields of rice these farmers in Abundia have got and figure out the true reason for us. What's more, more differences between these two countries need to be considered as well. Furthermore, the author needs to substantiate that high yields of rice will really ameliorate the balance of trade of Paucia.

TOPIC: ISSUE203 - "The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its heroines."
WORDS: 641
TIME: 00:44:36
DATE: 2010-9-3 6:27:48

There is no consensus when it comes to talk about what is the best way to understand the character of a society. Many people hold the same idea that observing the character of heroes or heroines which were chosen by people is the answer. Various facts suggest that heroes or heroines actually can represent the character of a society, no matter in war time in the past or in our peace time now. However, it seems that the author overstates the assertion at the same time.

To begin with, I absolutely concede that heroes or heroines are one of the best way to comprehend the character of a society during war time in the past, for heroes or heroines is a way to express the citizens' inner thoughts or have abilities to fight against enemies with numerous courage. On one hand, expressing inner thoughts or insights about the society was tough in war time because the government prohibited the ways and pays more attention to wars and battles. Under this kind of circumstance, men and women only to chose hero or heroine which was capable of passing their thoughts to the leaders and as a result, making the society more beneficial to them. On the other hand, the most brave persons in war was usually regarded as heroes or heroines, since they possessed abundant characters which a society needed but most people lack of, such as perseverance, boldness, loyalty as well as confidence. Besides, during war time, it is undeniable that men and women needed guidance and inspirations which come from heroes or heroines. In my opinions, from some aspects, whether a society could get the final success in a war mostly depended on the the character of heroes or heroines, because they reflected the attitudes of citizens and therefore, they have entitled to enhance the morale of people. Just as Chenyi, Zhude, Liuhulan in the history of the China revolution. All of them were called heroes and heroines due to their courage.

Secondly, even in our modern society, when we living in peaceful time, it is inevitable and indisputable that examining the character of heroes and heroines
are considered as an useful and beneficial way to understand the character of our society. Firstly, in business world, the leaders who execute their company best and make more profits for their stockholders or employees are always called as heroes and heroines, for their have more brilliant business practices and distinguished judgment than ordinary people. For instance, we think Steve Jobs is a hero in selling tools of communications not only because the productions such as IPone or IPod have high sales but also he represent a desire that our people want to connect with each other more conveniently and promptly, which is one character of our modern society. Secondly, in technology realm, some heroes such as Yuan Longping, who invented hybrid rice in twenty century, is a way to express the inner requirement of government to solve the basic problems of those poor people.

However, we should realize that some other ways can also be used for us when we try to understand the character of a society, such as arts, politics and so forth. Through the painting created by Picasso----Geurnica, we can feel the unrest and instabilities during World War Two. Besides, the attitudes of political leaders will also be changed as the character of the society varying.

To sum up, due to all of the discussions above, a conclusion can be drawn that there is no doubt that examining the character of heroes or heroines can be regarded as a vital way to understand the character of a society. Nevertheless, as society is a complex consequence of many different factors, in order to comprehend the character more clearly and correctly, other useful ways should be considered by us as well.

歆芋柠乐UID: 2861338

楼主莫急啊，我也六号考，ISsue 感觉是几乎废了，没写过几篇，加油啊，你肯定比我行的~~~

maozj168UID: 2862696

要考试了不要急呀，正常发挥就行了，帮你改了下argument，仅仅是我个人的观点，有错误欢迎指出。

TOPIC: ARGUMENT99 - The following appeared in a memo from the economic minister of the small country Paucia.
"Using a newly developed variety of seed, farmers in our neighboring country Abundia produced 80 percent more rice last year than in any previous year. To increase the income of farmers in our own country, we should encourage them to cultivate this new variety of rice rather than some of their traditional crops. Such high yields of rice will also improve our country's balance of trade by enabling us to begin exporting it."
WORDS: 516
TIME: 00:29:47
DATE: 2010-9-3 14:14:46

In this argument, the author claims that in order to increase the income of farmers and improve the balance of trade, farmers should cultivate new variety of rice instead of some of their traditional crops. To justify this argument, the author points out farmers in Abundia produced 80 percent more rice last year by cultivating this new rice. However, none of these assertions and assumptions is well supported by sufficient evidence or reasonable demonstration. A further and careful reflection would reveal us several critical flaws as follow.
To begin with, the most obvious problem of this argument is that the author assumes farmers in Abundia really got more incomes last year by cultivating the newly developed variety of seed. Firstly, we have no idea about the basic number of how many rice these farmers have harvested in previous year. It is entirely possible that these farmers have lower rice than farmers in Paucia before. (作者之前并未暗示A国与P国粮食的产量比较，如此比较有点唐突，可以改为It is entirely possible that Abundia is a low yielding country in food while a 80 percent increasing is simply a small amount.) An absolute number should be offered by author. Secondly, even if farmers in Abundia have got more incomes than before, it is not necessary depend on the new seed, perhaps the climate was more suitable for rice last year or farmers pay more attention to rice and treat them more careful than before. (其实第一段的攻击点该针对A国是否从提升的大幅度的产量中获利，而非他产量多少的比较。例如，我可以写：The arguer fails to mention that whether or not the profits of farmers in A have increased by cultivating this newly developed variety of seed. Firstly, the cost of developing variety of seed is unknown; secondly, the percentage of income from these new seeds in the total production unknown. What if farmers in A have made excessive efforts in order to increase the small amount of yield? Or...)
Next, even if it is true that the farmers in Abundia have got more incomes by the newly developed of seed, it is not warranted that the farmers in Paucia should imitate them. The author fails to consider the differences between the two countries which may cause opposite result. Perhaps the soil and the climate in Paucia are not suitable for cultivating rice, or perhaps the farmers in Paucia are better at cultivating traditional crops and have no special skills for rice, or traditional crops can bring more profits for farmers in the future actually. (这段是对第二句话的攻击，如果直接讨论A与P的异地不可模仿性质略显片面，你只写到了一点环境因素可能给new seed造成的disadvantage，其实还有与traditional crops的各个方面的对比，比如 the quality, the productivity of new seeds and traditional crops; the comparison efficiency such as cost of money, time and labor of the two. 这些对比可能有些有环境因素，但也有可能是new seed本来就具有的缺点。)

Thirdly, even if the author could explain all of the assumptions foregoing, (这句话有点笼统，给人一种不想写的感觉，让考官还要思考你前面都做了些什么假设。推荐要是条理清晰点就直接写even this new variety of rice presents several advantages than some of traditional crops in P country,) another flaw of this argument is the author asserts that Paucia could ameliorate the balance of trade by the high yields of rice. On one hand, we have no information about how many rice the farmers will harvest exactly, perhaps the number of rice is not big enough to export to other countries. On the other hand, even if Paucia can export rice to other countries,
it is not mean(it means little) that other crops such as maize, or electronic products like TV and computers are also capable for exporting. (缺乏一个总结，仅仅给了例子，可以在前面加上a country's balance of trade decided by several factors but not barely by exporting rice.) If the exporting numbers of these modifies will reduce, the balance of trade is not definitely improved too. The author uses a (mere fact to generalize a whole)(好) situation.
To sum up, judging from all of the evidence and analysis offered above, this argument is not well-reasoned. To strengthen this argument, the author should offer more persuasive and detailed information about the yields of(有点模板的痕迹，建议用自己特色的句子，实在没时间了简单的说说就行，太格式化了容易让考官反感) rice these farmers in Abundia have got and figure out the true reason for us. What's more, more differences between these two countries need to be considered as well. Furthermore, the author needs to substantiate that high yields of rice will really ameliorate the balance of trade of Paucia.
(其实考argument的语言不用特别好，关键是逻辑严密就行了，字数不在多，在于精，看到argument先不急下笔吧，把思路想好了在写效果会更好的！)

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2# 歆芋柠乐

啊！战友！一起好运！！

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3# maozj168


谢谢！！！
我现在要调整心态迎接考试！！不知道为啥心里素质这么差！！