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Argument 6



The following was written as a part of an applicationfor a small business loan by a group of developers in the city of Monroe.

"A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendouslyprofitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, our proposed club, the C Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer, several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe, and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. It is clear that the C Note cannot help but make money."






In this loan application the author claim that a jazz music club in Monroe will be profitable by the reason of a distant range from the nearest jazz club and an abundant amount of statistics showing that jazz is popular in Monroe. He also cites other evidence that jazz fan will spends lots of money on jazz entertainment.However,close scrutiny of this evidence and of the editorial's lines of reasoning reveals that they provide little credible support for the editorial's conclusion.


  To begin with,the application claims that a distant range from the nearest jazz club about 65miles away will hand over the local market all to their proposed club,the C Note.However,the author provide no evidence to support this claim.It is just as possible that the club 65miles away is so well-known ,for some influential singers perform there,that people perfer to drive 65 miles to there.Besides,this argument assumes that the C Note will take all the local market.Experience informs,however, that this is not the case,especially under the condition that the nearest jazz club is well arranged.


  The argument also unfairly cites that jazz is extremely popular in Monday.At the first glance,the facts that over 100,000 people attended Monroe's jazz festival last summer,and several well-known jazz musicians live in Monday seems to be convincing, but further reflection reveals that these evidences is unconvincing and senseless.First of all,since people who enjoyed to the festival could be from diverse place in the country,the local number of these 100,000 people might be thin.Secondly,the jazz musicians who lives in Monroe perhaps wok in other cities.The house in Monroe is just a place to sleep or an invest of estate for them.Plus people may tend to listen to music rather than news during their driving time. is 'Jazz Nightly,' The highest-rated radio program in Monroe,which airs every weeknight,may be the only choice drivers can make.In a word,whether jazz music is popular in Monroe or not is unknown for us from this applicant.


  Even if jazz is really prevalent in Monroe,non-profitable possibility may occur in the new club.Accroding to the nation-wide data given by the author, a jazz fan will spend $1,000 in jazz entertainment.People in Monroe may expend less comparing to fans in other cities for their economic reasons.And it is conceivable for fans to spend most of their money on albums and instruments instead of staying in a jazz club.Moreover,if the management and atmosphere are in a mess,customers will not pay a visit as well.

  In sum,the loan applicant is unpersuasive as it stands.To bolster the applicant the author must provide clear evidence that the accurate statistics shows that people in Monroe attend jazz festival .To better assess the argument I would need to know the amount of stars who play in Monroe is larger than other cities .I would also need the degree of favor about the radio program. Finally,I would need to consider the local expenses people spend every year in jazz club and management of the new club.