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The following recommendation was made by the Human Resources Manager to the board of directors of the Fancy Toy Company.

"In the last three quarters of this year, under the leadership of our president, Pat Salvo, our profits have fallen considerably. Thus, we should ask for her resignation in return for a generous severance package. In Pat's place, we should appoint Rosa Winnings. Rosa is currently president of Starlight Jewelry, a company whose profits have increased dramatically over the past several years. Although we will have to pay Rosa twice the salary that Pat has been receiving, it will be well worth it because we can soon expect our profits to increase considerably."


  The manager deduces the conclusion that it will be worth paying Rosa twice the salary that Pat has been receiving and dismissing Pat because we can soon expect our profits to increase considerably just based on the groundless supposition and unreliable evidence. To support his conclusion, the author indicates the evidence that the company's profits have fallen considerably under the leadership of Pat Salvo in the last three years, otherwise, he give an indication that the jewelry company whose profits have increased dramatically over the past several years was under the leadership of Rosa Salvo. At first glance, the argument seems conclusive, however, further demonstration discloses that it neglect some significant concerns which should be considered with in this argument.

The initial problem with the argument is that the author unreasonably ascribes the decline of profits of the Fancy Toy Company to the president, Pat Salvo, for he does not provide any evidences. It is most likely that there are numberless other reasons result in the fall of the profits. For instance, the fluctuation of monetary exchange rate, the depression of economic situation and local government's economic policy might influence the profits.

Even if it is the leadership of incumbent president that leads to the decline, the human recourses manager does not enumerate any evidence to prove that the decline of the profits will be durative. It is possible that the incumbent president has found the faults and reclaims them and the remedial measures come into force. A change in the presidency of company at this point might be more detrimental than helpful to the company. The author does not provide any evidence that the trend of the decline of the profits will continue nor that the change in the presidency will increase the company's profitability.

The last but not the least, the author suggests to replace the incumbent president with the current president of Starlight Jewelry, only based on the fact that the Starlight Jewelry's profits have increased dramatically over the past several years. There is no confirmation to indicate that its president make for the increase in the profits. What more, there is also no evidence to show that the president of a jewelry is good at running a toy company --- the jewelry business is completely different from the toy business, considering the different consumptive market and the different products. Furthermore, the hiring will require a doubling of the salary and the increase in profits should cover the huge cost in the presidential salary. This recommendation has no evidence to show that this will carry out.

To sum up, the author fails to demonstrate his claim that replacing the president will increase the profits, in respect that the evidences quoted do not lend strong support to the author's assertion. To make the conclusion more conclusive, the author should make sure the exact reason that leads to the decline of the profits. Additionally, he would have to provide more information concerning whether the Starlight's president has the ability to run the Fancy Toy Company. Hence, if his argument has involved the given aspects discussed before, it would have been more logically acceptable.

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