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linlinUID: 137589

大家好！我是新手，写的不好还望各位大虾不要笑我，给我的文章提出猛烈的批评。最近真累我原来还以为背单词是最难的一关，谁知作文阅读哪一个都不容易，杨鹏男句和NO让我翻了个底掉阅读好歹比原来强了点，可作文提高太难了，但我相信好好写好好被会有收获的。以下是我的一篇ISSUE（随便挑了一偏写了2H才完）还有几片A怕各位累眼就没拿出来，呵呵。

[B]Issue15: “We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own. Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.”……([/B] 学习类)

Traditionally, some people strongly believe that the coincidence among individuals is superior to the contradiction, concerning the consequent stress and depression brought by the disagreement. In addition, they emphasis the negative effect the contradiction would bring about, the inhibition in learning, which seems possible at first sight. But after careful examination, you will find that plausible conclusion based on groundlessness. While raising the importance of sharing the same view, which they believe may cause much more reciprocating, they arbitrarily neglect the improvements and the orientation the contradiction brings us. In the point of mine, I believe that antithesis will give you more than the consensus. And there are several reasons below to prove my opinion.

In the first place, the contradiction, which attacks the several flaws of our (usually tentative) conclusion often contains at least one aspect of information that deserves cautious analysis. Because of our limit and difference in knowledge and experience, which may be caused by the culture, the profession, and the discipline, we cannot draw a flawless and comprehensive conclusion, so we need improvements. And in some aspect, the antithesis points to the weak of our conclusion, so the evaluation of the contradiction provides a chance to find and correct our mistakes. For instance, the vice manager of a chain of supermarket, which is the greatest in Beijing, attributed his success to a group of consultants asked to provide antithesis and suggestion about malfunction and repression emerging during the development of the corporation. And this contradiction obviously improved the performance of the supermarket. And another example came from a stature in America-- "filibuster". In the United States, it means an inhibition purposely constituted in the council to oppose the passage of new law. This impediments works as censuring implement to orient the law into the right direction.

Furthermore, antithesis plays a role of extending our scope of knowledge. Unlike the agreement based on the similarity of awareness, the contradiction origins from the observation from different angles. And the opponents often have divergence in method and acknowledgements. The careful examination of the antithesis is a process to study new methods and information. For instance, in the fields of science, many solution of problem came from absorbing and improving the antithesis. When you fully understand your opponent’s ideal, you may get the knowledge and new method at the same time. And this new method may extend our consideration in the future. So it is true that cautious evaluation of the disagreement is the key to stretch our knowledge.

Finally, The reception of antithesis can cultivate our merits. Successors are always magnanimous and receptive, which are the merits we often lack and neglect. The process of studying antithesis is a way to improve our magnanimous and receptive.

Generally, All ideal simultaneously comprises of two opposite aspect, positive and negative. Because of this duality, we need not only consensus to strengthen our conviction, but also contradiction for amelioration at the same time. Granted that agreement have it merit, for example they can give you encouragement and they are easy to accept, contradiction is more substantive to help you obtain new knowledge and correct mistakes. So I think the contradiction among people can contribute more than the coincidence in acquire information.

gteryyUID: 114434

Issue15: “We can usually learn much more from people whose views we share than from people whose views contradict our own. Disagreement can cause stress and inhibit learning.”……( 学习类)

Traditionally, some people strongly believe that the coincidence among individuals is superior to the contradiction, concerning the consequent stress and depression brought by the disagreementwhich will consequently inhibit learning. (In addition, they emphasis the negative effect the contradiction would bring about, the inhibition in learning, which seems possible at first sight. But after careful examination, you will find that plausible conclusion based on groundlessness. While raising the importance of sharing the same view, which they believe may cause much more reciprocating, they arbitrarily neglect the improvements and the orientation the contradiction brings us. In the point of mine, I believe that antithesis will give you more than the consensus. ) here present your opinion concisely and connect fluently with the concession at the top will be ok And there are several reasons below to prove my opinion.
this first paragraph is a bit long and not attractive though with so many words

In the first place, the contradiction, which attacks the several flaws of our (usually tentative) conclusion often contains at least one aspect of information that deserves cautious analysis. Because of our limit and difference in knowledge and experience, which may be caused bycan be substitute by ‘result from’ thedifferent culture, the profession, and the discipline, we cannot draw a flawless and comprehensive conclusion, soterrible mistake!!! Notice you have used ‘because of’ before we need improvements. And in some aspects, the antithesis pointsmatch wrongly to the weakness of our conclusion, so the evaluation of the contradiction provides a chance to find and correct our mistakes. For instance, the vice manager of a chain of supermarket, which is the greatest in Beijing, attributed his success to a group of consultants asked to provide antithesis and suggestion about malfunction and repression emerging during the development of the corporation. And this contradiction obviously improved the performance of the supermarket. And another example came from a stature??? in America-- "filibuster". In the United States, it means an inhibition purposely constituted in the council to oppose the passage of new laws. This impediments works as censuring implement to orient the law into the right direction.
几乎你用了antithesis代替所表达的contradiction的意思。我认为是不妥的，这俩词之间是有变化的。Antithesis的对立就好比是黑与白，绝对相对的，相反的；而contradiction是相冲突，不协调，不一致，比如黑和红，白和红。这样说能明白吗？

Furthermore, antithesis plays a role of extending our scope of knowledge. Unlike the agreement based on the similarity of awareness, the contradiction originsoriginates from the observation from different angles. And the opponents often have divergence in method and acknowledgements. The careful examination of the antithesis is a process to study new methods and information. For instance, in the fields of science, many solution of problem came from absorbing and improving the antithesis. When you fully understand your opponent’s ideal, you may get the knowledge and new method at the same time. And this new method may extend our consideration in the future. So it is true that cautious evaluation of the disagreement is the key to stretch our knowledge.
you’ve argued well in this paragraph

Finally, The reception of antithesis can cultivate our merits. Successors are always magnanimous and receptive, which are the merits we often lack and neglect. The process of studying antithesis is a way to improve our magnanimous and receptive.
这段论述太简单，太短了。

Generally, All ideals simultaneously comprises of two opposite aspects, positive and negative. Because of this duality, we need not only consensus to strengthen our conviction, but also contradiction for amelioration at the same time. Granted that agreement have it merit, for example they can give you encouragement and they are easy to accept, contradiction is more substantive to help you obtain new knowledge and correct mistakes. So I think the contradiction among people can contribute more than the coincidence in acquire information.
结尾也罗嗦了一点。

总的来说，观点什么都是很好的。具体的问题我每段都指出了，不赘述。小的语法错误，如单复数之类，以后自己修改时注意。中间论述详细些，开头结尾若不是有特别吸引人的想法尽量简单化。还有注意同义词之间的微妙的区别。

linlinUID: 137589

谢谢了，你说的我以后会注意。有些观点我表达的不清楚主要是因为我的语言表达能力还不够。我现在正在被《概4》，准备9月3日靠作文（有点紧了，呵呵）、10月25靠笔试。以后还真需要你们这帮牛人来给我们指点。也祝愿你们杀机成功。

paisleyUID: 64183

咳，错咯。这里的斑竹好象都已经考过G了。