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兔子加油UID: 2908816

你好，我是昨晚分组补上的，你的作文我改好了，可是等级不够不能发附件，所以我QQ上传给你把， 我QQ：602781096

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你好，我是昨晚分组补上的，你的作文我改好了，可是等级不够不能发附件，所以我QQ上传给你把， 我QQ：602781096
兔子加油 发表于 2010-11-13 19:48

可以去灌灌水哈

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考完后的修改，迟了抱歉~

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Nowadays, the economy of most of museums is decreasing into abyss. Because just(only) having a few people are excited to visit museums, especially to learn about a country's culture. Some people hold that if people want to learn about a country, they can find abundant information in the museums. However, other people, like me, contend that there are substantial ways to understand a country, and they (are) all better than only visiting museums, and I have several reasons to support my viewpoint.

First and foremost, using Internet is more convenience than visiting museums, because its information can update(be updated) each moment and people can use it in(through? I’m not sure) each local connection. For example, if people want to know a country, they can use the Internet then visiting(“than visit”? Or “and then visit”?) its official. It has both latest and most accurate(st) information. On the contrast, if people only visit museums, neither convenience nor newest. As a result, we can draw the conclusion that using Internet to learn about a country is better than visiting museums, because Internet is quickly and exactly.

There is no doubt that when the weekend(s) coming(come), there are numerous people (that) will be frequently to visit museums. At the same time, most of museums will (be) free (of charge?) to absorb(attract) visitors. Consequently, visitors cannot pay attention to learn about a country. For instance, The Metropolitan Museum in New York will be usually free to travelers in weekend(s). When I guessed(??) that I could find a corner to zealous(it’s an adj.) study a country's culture, which was impossible. Because visitors always used camera and their noise were made me crazy. After that time, I promise that doing not attach to learn anything in museums, they will make people feel despair.

Of course, sometimes visiting museums have(has) also some advantages, like they have substantial exhibits. They can show different styles of other countries' achievements, such as Chinese china, Italian paintings and Germen cars. However, a close inspection of the argument would reveal how flimsy it is: refuting the reading material in a point-to-point way, I hold that my above examples can conquer all opposes.

In conclusion, although there are abundant advocates still contend(ing) their opinion: museums have plentiful foreign' exhibits, so visitors can be easy to know a country, I still trust myself: using Internet can study a country's knowledge which is the newest and rapidly.

希望你自己先用word自带的功能检查一下基本的语法和词法。如形容词和副词不要混用，名词不要误当作形容词用，be动词的使用。特别要注意there is sb. doing sth.

这个固定用法。祝好！

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加油～～

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1116小朋友教育好还是大学教育好.doc (30.5 KB, 下载次数: 20)

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改哩~~~

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改好

rysfUID: 2514937

这不是传说中的二少 吗？
我的那个little time 用的太挫了。完全没表达出我的意思 哎。。。
我水平有限 加油！

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路过 顶一下 加油！！