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Currently,some people believe the individuals born with special talents. Others argue that anyone can learn skills, becoming a singer or artist,etc. This essay will discuss both views and give my opinion.


It is manifest that children would be educated in various areas so that they can be professional ones in their fields in the future. What is meant by this is that our education system can teach every child who is born with talents or not. For example, with the right directions and consistently practies, most child can be sports person or artist,etc. What is more, the studies shows continuting practices play pivotal role in the process of succed. Therefore, the majority of children would become successful person.


Nevertheless, somebody argue that individuals who born with natural talents are more likely to succeed. It can make their course much easy and quick to learn,especially compared with the general students. Furthermore, these skills tend to give increasing confidence and power for them. As a consequence, it directly enhance the possiblties of succeed. From our experience, we can find many evidences to support it. Many children show the talents of singing such justin biber. So there certain talents enable them to become professional ones in some extent.


In final analysis , i personally think that to be a really great one in special fields, one need talents and consistently practies

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