11.18综合作文

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请指教 11.18
The speaker raises serious counterargumentsagainst the issue in the reading passage by providing the evidences regardingon more exposures to the public, little negative effects on the scientificresearch and the increasing discoveries of the fossils.

First, the speaker challenges the point ofthe reading passage that private trades could decrease the exposures of thefossils to the public. She believes that commercial fossil hunting makes a lotof fossils available for purchasing so that even the low level of the schoolcould buy them and then expose them to the public.

Second, the speaker casts doubt on the viewthat scientists would have fewer opportunities to study the fossils. She saysthat the persons who could find out the fossils are scientists themselves.What' more, the fossils would pass the hands of the scientists' before theprivate trades. That is to say, scientists would not miss anything.

Lastly, the speaker demonstrates that manyfossils are undiscovered without the commercial fossil hunters. That is moreimportant than the little damage they do to the fossils.

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这是11.17号的，请指教The speaker raises serious counterargumentsagainst the points in the reading passage by providing the evidence regardingon the uncertainty of the Austen family members, possibility of the girl beingthe relatives of Jane Austen and the used time of the canvas of the painting.

First, the speaker begins with the issuethat Austen's family gave the permission to use the portrait as an illustrationin an edition of her letters when Jane Austen has bee dead for almost 70 years.The family members might not know what Jane Austen look like or be uncertain ofthe painting portraying Jane.

In addition, the speaker goes on to arguethat the resemblance cannot confirm people as the teenage in the painting mightbe relatives of Jane Austen. It is known that Austen's family is so big thatthe possibility is high.

Finally, the speaker casts doubt on thepoint that the style of the painting links the painting to Ozias Humphrey,which could substantiate the period when Jane Austen was a teenage. The speakerpoints out that the canvas used in the painting began to be sold in London since Jane Austenwas older than the teenager.

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请问你是写作小组的么？ 如果是的话可以跟应该帮你改作文的人联系一下  一天了都没人改？

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Second, the speaker casts doubt on the viewthat scientists would have fewer opportunities to study the fossils. She saysthat the persons who could find out the fossils are scientists themselves.What' more, the fossils would pass the hands of the scientists' before theprivate trades. That is to say, scientists would not miss anything.
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Lastly, the speaker demonstrates that manyfossils are undiscovered without the commercial fossil hunters. That is moreimportant than the little damage they do to the fossils.5 H% x+ （）b: M( h" }, U!
（）[（）（这一个论证可能听的不仔细，我也是自己听的结果，我感觉那个教授是说，尽管人人都说商人会毁坏她们，但科学家也会碰触化石，否则就不能被挖掘）


其中一些拼写以及没有空格的地方，我们暂且忽略，你自己去修改外，其他方面，我感觉你第一段再多侃侃文中内容，后面的论据方面，我们都一样，就是抓住那个点，然后自己用自己的话写，一句命中要点，但不晓得是不是要想得高分，要多记些笔记，尽量跟文中例子一致，让文章再丰满点。总之，挺对我胃口的，我跟你的写作差不多的思路，赞一个。

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改好了