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一定要坚持……

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? A job with more vacation time is better than a job with high salary but less vacation time.

Most of people have their working perceptions and preference ,some one like a job with more vocations while some one may choose the job with high salary even though it has less vocation time. as for me ,i do strongly sopport the idea that vocation is more important to salary for the folowing reasons.

Fist of all ,it is widely acknowledged that appropriate work and rest will be more efficient.in other words,to have a high work efficiency must first have a good holiday.as the saying goes“all work and no play make jack a dull boy”,having a break after several days of hard work can help us refresh our mind and relieve the press,we can keep our body in perfect condition by doing something like shopping,going on picnics or just have a good sleep.so that when we re-enter the work will be more energetic and efficient.

Apart from the one t have mentioned above,another important aspect is that the personal life can only be enjoyed adequently if there is enough time away from work.that is,more vocation means we have more time to accompany our friends or families.when i was a child my father was always too busy with his work to have even one day to hang out with me,that is really a pity for me as well as my dad .thus i will definitely choose a job with more vocation but not high salary in order to avoid such pity from happening again.

What's more, something else that i need to add is if i have worked for a long time without rest i will easily become tired and numb, even lose my passion and innovation ,hence i will not choose the work with less vocation.

In conclusion ,with so many reasons i comment on,i will be a supporter of more vocation without doubt.

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In this set of materials ,the reading passage mainly introduces about the reasons why salvage logging is beneficial both to a damaged forest and to the economy ,however, in the following lecture ,the professor closely reexamines the conclusion drawn in the reading passage by employing different evidence.

At first ,the professor claims that remove the dead trees do not benefit for tree growth ,which fully rejects the contends that salvage logging help fresh growth immediately mentioned in the reading material .according to the professor ,the dead trees can enrich the soil to make it more suitable for the generation of trees.

And then ,the professor identifies the reading's logical flaw in assuming that the dead trees offer a suitable habitat for insects such as the spruce bark beetle which will damage the healthy trees .she argues that in fact the spruce bark beetle live in the trees for a very long time without causing any damages, and some other tree-friendly insects like birds also need tree to live with. so she considers that salvage logging do more harm to the harm insects do .

Finally ,the professor disagree with the point salvage logging has economic benefits from the reading ,she comment the benefit from the forest was small, furthermore ,the work offered by salvage logging is always temporary.

In conclusion ,the professor believes salvage logging has no benefit for forest and economy ,which directly contradicts with the central standpoint of the passage.

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In this set of materials ,the reading passage mainly introduces about（删掉about） the reasons why salvage logging is beneficial both to a damaged forest and to the economy ,however, in the following lecture ,the professor closely reexamines（reexamine不合适吧，用反驳吧） the conclusion drawn in the reading passage by employing different evidence.( ~5 \+ x8 v  O" r, }

At first ,the professor claims that remove（removing） the dead trees do（dose） not benefit for tree growth ,which fully rejects the contends that salvage logging help fresh growth immediately mentioned in the reading material .according to the professor ,the dead trees can enrich the soil to make it more suitable for the generation of trees.2 m( o. P. D: k. A
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And then, the professor identifies the reading's logical flaw in assuming that the dead trees offer a suitable habitat for insects such as the spruce bark beetle which will damage the healthy trees .she argues that in fact the spruce bark beetle live in the trees for a very long time without causing any damages, and some other tree-friendly insects like birds also need tree to live with. so she considers that salvage logging do（dose） more harm than the harm insects do .
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Finally ,the professor disagree（disagrees） with the point that salvage logging has economic benefits from the reading ,she comment the benefit from the forest was small（可以详细说下）, furthermore ,the work offered by salvage logging is always temporary.第三个理由段相比于前两个理由段较少，最好能丰满点吧1 q0 B" P: N(
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In conclusion ,the professor believes salvage logging has no benefits for forest and economy ,which directly contradicts with the central standpoint of the passage.

我觉得你写的很好，逻辑清楚，倒是让我学到不少东西。但是似乎不是特别注意时态语法一些小问题，其实它们也很重要。

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改好了呢。
加油~
mua·

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Students who keep their rooms neat and organized will be more likely to succeed than students who do not.  

To mention the suject of success, different people have their unique ways to make it, someone believe hard-working will be  efficient ,someone wait for the oppotunities that suitable for them. but for the factor that students keep their rooms neat and organized some people may consider it does not affect on success, however ,as far as i am concered , it has a certain influence for the success of a person.

To begin with ,there is no denying that success will be always left to those who are well prepared （这句话的表达不知道有没有问题）.if one can keep his room clean and orderly ,it  shows that he is a diligent and organized person to work ,compared with those who do not pay attention to this chores ,he is more likely to do his work in perfect order .As the saying goes“details determine success or failure” ,if even such a trivial matter to clean the room are not doing well ,how can we trust the person would do other thing orgnized ?

Apart from what I have mentioned above ,there is another reason why I stick to my point of view .From the perspective of an outsider ,a tidy and orderly room can easily left a deep good impression on him ,and we all never know what day such an impression will work .I still remember that thing happened in my junior high school ,two of my classmates were in the running for the monitor ,they both had excellent performance and  finally our teacher choosed Jeff.She gave the justification that  Jeff's desk was always very tidy and his books were neatly placed , so she believe he would do his work with heart .Hence how can we say it does not matter to the success ?

In conclusion ,certainly not all the successful people will keep their room tidy ,and not all person who have a organized room can success（这两个部分否定不知道对不对） ,however ,I still believe that one who have the good habit of neat will have more opportunities to get the road to success .

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刚刚开始练作文，多谢大家的修改，加油加油~~！~

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非常谢谢你帮我改的作文，我才刚刚开始练，你改的是我写的第一篇，学到了很多东西，谢谢你~！么么~
5# 米爆爆

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谢谢你~好人呐~:handshake
8# wanderer_2011

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加油加油喽~~

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In this set of materials, the reading passage mainly introduces about the reasons why salvage logging is beneficial both to a damaged forest and to the economy, h However, in the following lecture, the professor closely reexamines the conclusion drawn in the reading passage by employing different evidence.

At first, the professor claims that remove the dead trees do not benefit for tree growth, which fully rejects the contends that salvage logging help fresh growth immediately mentioned in the reading material. According to the professor, the dead trees can enrich the soil to make it more suitable for the generation of trees.

And then, the professor identifies the reading's logical flaw in assuming that the dead trees offer a suitable habitat for insects such as the spruce bark beetle which will damage the healthy trees. She argues that, in fact, the spruce bark beetle live in the trees for a very long time without causing any damages, and some other tree-friendly insects like and birds also need tree to live with. So she considers that salvage logging do more harm to the harm insects do.
Insect不是birds可能打太快了

Finally, the professor disagree with the point salvage logging has economic benefits from the reading, she comment the benefit from the forest was small, furthermore, the work offered by salvage logging is always temporary. 花錢保養車 沒講

In conclusion, the professor believes salvage logging has no benefit for forest and economy, which directly contradicts with the central standpoint of the passage.

記得幫我改

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement: Playing sports teaches people more lessons about the life

Nowadays，more and more people have realized the significance of playing sports .someone play sports in order to relieve the stress from work and study ,someone hold the purpose of doing exercise and making their body stronger ,and also someone just for entertainment .But for the factor whether playing sports can teacher us more about the life different person may have their unique points ,as far as I am concerned ,I couldn't agree more with it for the following reasons .

First of all ,there is no denying that we can comprehended the meaning of cooperation and teamwork in a sport. That is to say ,we can learn about how to deal with our partners through playing sports ,which is of great importance in our daily life .Take basketball for example ,a wonderful shot is not a person's achievement or honor ,but the result of the whole team's effort and cooperation .This is the same truth in our work and daily interactions .


Apart from the one I have mentioned above ,another important aspect we can learn from the sports is persistence and diligence .The famous basketball star Kobe has said” do not touch the ball one day that have no grow one day(这样翻译不知道对不对？) " which is taken as the truth by a lot of basketball lovers ,however not only basketball but almost everything have the same reason ,thus persistent hard-working is what we should not forget in life time as well
in a sport .


What's more ,by playing sports can also temper our willpower which help us to be more suitable for the society .In a sports competition we can enjoy the happiness of win and feel the sad of lose ,and we will understand that victories and defeats are ordinary things in our long road of life .

With so many advantages of playing sports ,no wonder so many people are fond of it and it will remain popular in the following years .

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啊。。是我自己想的。。最后一句是有什么问题呀?..
哎！我的作文实在太不行了，请一定多多批评！。。 14# wanderer_2011