蜂巢小组 I51 by <11菜鸟上路>

菜鸟上路UID: 2847628

Issue51　　"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
    People today place much more expectation on public eduction than they used to do. Insofar as the cultivation of the interest has served as the paramount role in growth of one individual,it has been regarded as the most rational avenue to educate students from this point of view. It also make some persons to claim that eduction should be specially designed to each student.As far as I am concerned,education should have some freedom to cultivate students in terms of their different characterisitic,which must base on the inculcating of the universal values regardless of whether they are interested in it.
    The purpose of the public eduction is not only to allow students to be able to handle whatever life may present including all the unknowns in the future,but also to  spread the universal values,ideas and standard which are shared by human being.Through education,students are capable of adapting themselves to the sociaty activity and become a member of it.
    There is no denying the fact of the necessity for the educators to pay attention to the characteristic of each individual.As the Bacon said,interest is the best teacher.Encouraging every student to find their hobbies and guiding the students to cultivate them is the responsibility of teachers.Interest will not only increase the enthusiasm of learn,but also rise the efficiency of study.However,overrating the effect of the personal characteristic during the process of eduction and reaching the conclusion that eduction should be specially design to each individual is biased and infeasible.
     First of all,the recouce of the education is limited.In order to satisfy the diverse student's need,the government has to offer an additional public expenditure ,which should be spent on the more necessary area such as eliminating the poverty and improving the midical treatment , to all the public eduction institutions to improve the facilities and extend the number of faculy. Also,a great number of specialists are required to teach in the junior eduction as the level of specialization of the contemporary teacher jn junior schools are not high enough to meet the needs of the interest of diverse student.These specialists should have searched in their own field and make much more contributions to our society.Such ideas like that will plummet the efficiency of the whole system of the society.
      What is more important is that there are some precious ideas and values which are the wisdom of human being should be inculcated to all the students regardless of their interest.Boil down to the specially designed courses,students will be busy boring holes for themselvs,aquiring their favourite knowledge and skills,that in later life,they might astonishingly find that they have little in common in the way of ideas,values and standards.What they lack of is the most commom emotion of mankind.Simply eduction based on the interests of individual will prevent the universal values from being spread and lead to a psychological displacement of our students.Madison once wrote that,the competing,balancing of interests of diverse people ensure the suvival of the liberty.but there are values that all American citizens shared should want all students to kown and to make their own honesty,fairness,selfdiscipline,loyaltytotasks.friends,families,personal responsibility,love of a coutry.and belief in principle of liberty,equality and the freedom to practice one's faith.
       What the educator are supposed to do is find out a balance between individual's interest and widespread of universal values.Only by means of this could the young generation grow in both moral and faculities.That is the most effeciency way in which we teach the students.

uxshenUID: 2577519

Issue51　　"Education will be truly effective only when it is specifically designed to meet the individual needs and interests of each student."
    People today place much more expectation on public education than they used to do. Insofar as the cultivation of the interest has served as the paramount role in the growth of one individual,it has been regarded as the most rational avenue to educate students from this point of view(最后这个词组无太大意义，是否有些累赘). It also make some persons to claim that education should be specially designed to each student.As far as I am concerned,education should have some freedom to cultivate students in terms of their different characteristics, which must base on the inculcating of the universal values regardless of whether they are interested in it.（开头很简洁且观点很明确，值得学习）
    The purpose of the public education is not only to allow students to be able to handle whatever life may present including all the unknowns in the future,but also to  spread the universal values,ideas and standards which are shared by human being.Through education,students are capable of adapting themselves to the social activity and become a member of it.（最后一句话主语和宾语单复数不一致）
    There is no denying the fact of the necessity for the educators to pay attention to the characteristic of each individual.As Bacon said,interest is the best teacher.（额，貌似爱因斯坦说的这句吧？咱们再查查）Encouraging every student to find their hobbies and guiding the students to cultivate them is the responsibility of teachers.Interest will not only increase the enthusiasm of learn, but also rise the efficiency of study.However,overrating the effect of the personal characteristic during the process of education and reaching the conclusion that education should be specially design to each individual is biased and infeasible.
     First of all,the recouce of the education is limited.In order to satisfy the diverse student's needs, the government has to offer an additional public expenditure ,which should be spent on the more necessary areas such as eliminating the poverty and improving the medical treatment , to all the public education institutions to improve the facilities and extend the number of faculty. Also,a great number of specialists are required to teach in the junior education as the level of specialization of the contemporary teacher in junior schools are not high enough to meet the needs of the interests of diverse students.These specialists should have searched in their own field and make much more contributions to our society.Such ideas like that（like that是否有些多余？） will plummet the efficiency of the whole system of the society.
      What is more important is that there are some precious ideas and values which are the wisdom of human being should be inculcated to all the students regardless of their interest.（语法有些错误，删去there are，另外interests）Boil down to the specially designed courses,students will be busy boring holes for themselves, acquiring their favourite knowledge and skills,which in later life,they might astonishingly find that they have little in common in the way of ideas,values and standards.What they lack of is the most commom emotion of mankind.Simply education based on the interests of individual will prevent the universal values from being spread and lead to a psychological displacement of our students.Madison once wrote that,the competing,balancing (这个地方我不是很理解你想表达的意思,balancing是配平？)of interests of diverse people ensure the suvival of the liberty.but there are values that all American citizens shared should want all students to know and to make their own honesty,fairness,self-discipline,loyaltytotasks.friends,families,personal responsibility,love of a coutry.and belief in principle of liberty（这一部分有些混乱）,equality and the freedom to practice one's faith.
       What the educators are supposed to do is to find out a balance between individual's interests and widespread of universal values.Only by means of this could the young generation grow in both moral and facilities. That is the most efficient way in teaching students.
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语言：开头结尾我尤其喜欢。长短句结合，但是注意一下长句的时候语法问题。单词拼写错误较多。另外有些句子我没有很懂，希望我们再讨论
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结构：结构完整，条理较清晰

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论证：正反方的论证很平衡，论据充足

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逻辑：无逻辑错误

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思路：很清晰

总体而言我觉得写的蛮好的啊让我受益匪浅，在一些细节上的地方还有待斟酌。希望咱们在一起讨论研究中总共同进步。加油

zwcelestaUID: 2941559

People today place much more expectation on public eduction than they used to do. Insofar as the cultivation of the interest has served as the paramount role in growth of one individual,it has been regarded as the most rational avenue to educate students from this point of view. It also make some persons to claim that eduction should be specially designed to each student.As far as I am concerned,education should have some freedom to cultivate students in terms of their different characterisitic,which must base on the inculcating of the universal values regardless of whether they are interested in it.(我应该学习这个开头！)
    The purpose of the public eduction is not only to allow students to be able to handle whatever life may present including all the unknowns in the future,but also to  spread the universal values,ideas and standard which are shared by human being.Through education,students are capable of adapting themselves to the sociaty activity and become a member of it.
    There is no denying the fact of the necessity for the educators to pay attention to the characteristic of each individual.As the Bacon said,interest is the best teacher（我也用了这句。可是也不知道是谁说的）.Encouraging every student to find their hobbies and guiding the students to cultivate them is the responsibility of teachers.Interest will not only increase the enthusiasm of learn,but also rise the efficiency of study.However,overrating the effect of the personal characteristic during the process of eduction and reaching the conclusion that eduction should be specially design to each individual is biased and infeasible.
     First of all,the recouce of the education is limited.In order to satisfy the diverse student's need,the government has to offer an additional public expenditure ,which should be spent on the more necessary area such as eliminating the poverty and improving the midical treatment , to all the public eduction institutions to improve the facilities and extend the number of faculy. Also,a great number of specialists are required to teach in the junior eduction as the level of specialization of the contemporary teacher jn junior schools are not high enough to meet the needs of the interest of diverse student.These specialists should have searched in their own field and make much more contributions to our society.Such ideas like that （like that 应该用得还好）will plummet the efficiency of the whole system of the society.
      What is more important is that there are （there are 应该去掉）some precious ideas and values which are the wisdom of human being should be inculcated to all the students regardless of their interest.Boil down to the specially designed courses,students will be busy boring holes for themselvs,aquiring their favourite knowledge and skills,that in later life,they might astonishingly find that they have little in common in the way of ideas,values and standards.What they lack of is the most commom emotion of mankind.Simply eduction based on the interests of individual will prevent the universal values from being spread and lead to a psychological displacement of our students.Madison once wrote that,the competing,balancing of interests of diverse people ensure the suvival of the liberty.but there are values that all American citizens shared should want all students to kown and to make their own honesty,fairness,selfdiscipline,loyaltytotasks.friends,families,personal responsibility,love of a coutry.and belief in principle of liberty,equality and the freedom to practice one's faith.
       What the educator are supposed to do is find out a balance between individual's interest and widespread of universal values.Only by means of this could the young generation grow in both moral and faculities.That is the most effeciency way in which we teach the students.（这个结尾我也喜欢！）
1．语言：整篇文章的语言很好。额。想起自己的。感到很失败啊！呵呵。我学到了很多啊。希望有些长句最好还是写得容易读懂一些。
2．结构：结构完整，条理较清晰，

3．论证：论证平衡，论据也足够。
4．逻辑：无逻辑错误

5．思路：很清晰呵呵。我觉得这篇文章写的很好！很值得学习。吼吼！我要进步！