巫婆和果冻鱼的作文帖~~呵呵

巫婆和果冻鱼UID: 2944431

刚加入进来，不晓得怎么上传文档。。只能先贴在下面了，呵呵~~拜托大家帮我改改了~~

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement:
To achieve successful development of a country, a government should focus its budget more on young children’s education rather than on universities.

In this highly competitive world, how to obtain successful development of a country has become one of the most heated topics in 21st century. We all agree that one of the most important factors is education. However, there is still hot debate over how to assign the budget between primary education for children and senior education for university students. From my perspective, a government should put more funds in universities, instead of education of young children. Here I will reason my statement with concrete evidence as follows.

Indubitably, I concede the crucial role that primary education plays in today’s world. People may argue that it is a guarantee of basic education for the majority of one country’s dwellers, and also deserves certain amount of financial support. But commonly, elementary schools do not need excessive complicated facilities and professors with top academic backgrounds. Hence it is not a wise decision to use too much money to develop their learning conditions. Compared with elementary schools or middle schools, university students do not only need many advanced instruments to assist their study, but also a group of professional people to conduct their further study. Only in this way, can the students have good environment to continue their science research. Therefore, students in college need more funds than children in schools.

Besides, there is no way around the fact that universities contribute enormously to one country’s science research and technology development. Universities enable a myriad of scientists, engineers, and other professionals to do their studies and experiments. Their science reports and achievements may magnificently improve one country’s technology competence, which is an indicator of comprehensive development. What is more, the students under these people’s guidance probably will become tomorrow’s scientific giants. This again adds up the significance of university education. It explains why one responsible government should focus its budget more on senior education, rather than initial studies of children.

Another reason is that primary education also enjoys the economic benefit from the decision when we view it from a different perspective. For one thing, if we put aside more money for university’s operation, there will be greater possibility that universities spawn more scientific achievements. By trading these patents and intangible assets, the country can obtain more funds, which again can be allocated to primary education in the future. Consequently, it will be a win-win decision if we currently focus more money on universities.

Above all, it is safe to draw the conclusion that a wise government should pay more attention to high level education rather to initial education for children when it confronts the demand of one country’s development. Though we should not neglect the importance of young children’s learning environment, the merits of perfecting universities, such as its research potential and economic benefit, apparently weigh more.

嘉木香草UID: 2805584

嗯，麻烦问下，你的独立是不是写错题目了呀？我写好了，辛苦修改了！https://bbs.gter.net/viewth ... e%3D1#pid1774583539
在32楼^_^

巫婆和果冻鱼UID: 2944431

2# 嘉木香草
嗯，不好意思啊，我一开始不知道这个是要布置作业题目的，我以为是自己可以任意写的，呵呵，不过可不可以也帮我看看呢？我今天一定按照要求写~谢谢你啊，呵呵，正在改你的呢~

嘉木香草UID: 2805584

3# 巫婆和果冻鱼
嗯，好的~~题目就在第一页上，周日没有作业，不过我可以今天写你这篇，然后你写我这篇的题目，这样我们今天就有题目可以写，还可以相互再看一下，你觉得怎么样？

嘉木香草UID: 2805584

你的这篇题目的作文我已经写好了，辛苦修改了，关于文章的结尾部分总是不知道该怎么写，希望能给予指导，还有关于文章的结构逻辑上，也希望能提出意见及建议。
一篇文章写了50分钟，哎……效率啊~~这个该怎么提高呢？

bananasliceUID: 2628141

改好了~

嘉木香草UID: 2805584

6# bananaslice
请查收^_^