issue208<彼岸小组第五次作业> by melody-qu

melody-quUID: 2970250

208."The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."

The speaker asserts in the statement that since what people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, we can get to know a society’s ideas and values through observing its people’s appearance and behavior. As far as I am concerned, the statement points out a good way for us to observe a person and a society, while on the other hand, if we make our judgment simply by these aspects, then we may risk the danger of losing objectivity and all-sidedness.

To begin with, since actions and choices are directed by a person’s inner motions, I admit that we can tell a person’s interest and attitude mostly by ways like his appearance and behaviors. A person who is always well-dressed and keeps his environment tidy may be one likes order and arranges things one by one. A person who collects all the newest albums and always sings songs reveals that he is interested in music a lot, and perhaps is also a man likes following fashion. However, all of these are only reference for us to know a person and it is not always the real person that he looks like. There is great possibility that one collecting many antiques is not the one who is interested in history study but just considers it as a good investment. In other case, one who is always focusing on stocks and business may not be truly obsessed by money but probably only because this is related to his job. All the facts remind us that we cannot come to a conclusion only by the superficial appearance.

People constitute a major part of the society and they are the contributors and promoters of a nation. Since they get education and form their system of value from the society, it is inevitable that their appearance and behaviors reveal the society’s ideas and values. Life abounds with examples to aptly illustrate this point. In some Muslim countries where people believe in Islam, women always cover their faces with a black yashmak, and men are used to wear a little white hat on their head as a custom. What they eat are usually mutton and beef and they also drink a kind of milk tea. From the distinguishing dress and behaviors, we can get a general impression of a country’s value. Imagine a nation where most people like to wear delicately and elegantly, it is possible that this country advocates life quality and fashion. Imagine a nation in which people dress in loose and comfortable style and usually spend holidays out, then it indicates that this country may provide relatively good welfare and people can live an easy life.

However, some other factors need taking into account, otherwise, the perspective you get may be limited. First, it must be noticed that people in different places of a nation have more or less varies in their clothing and habits. If you can only cover a small part of areas, then it is hard for you to get a comprehensive awareness about a nation. Second, with the fast pace of globalization, the similarities of some dressing trends and behaviors among countries are more and more obvious, which may increase difficulties in judging a nation’s values and behaviors only by the appearance and behaviors of its people. The popularity of jeans sets a good example to demonstrate this point, because you can get no conclusion concerning a national value by people’s wearing jeans. Last but not least, a nation’s values and ideas are formed by many complete aspects such as history, cultural relics, social customs and the status quo, etc. Not all of these influences can be obtained simply through the appearances and behaviors of its people. Some thoughts and ideology of a nation require deep research and communication before you can truly understand.

To sum up, since the appearance and behaviors are normally the reflection of a person’s thoughts, we can get an effective access to explore a nation’s values and ideas though it. What’s more, a lot of other study about the related aspects such as history, culture and currant situations must take into consideration to guarantee a reliable awareness of a nation.

banglowUID: 2969783

The speaker asserts in the statement that since what people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, we can get to know a society’s ideas and values through observing its people’s appearance and behavior. As far as I am concerned, the statement points out a good way for us to observe a person and a society, while on the other hand, if we make our judgment simply by these aspects, then we may risk the danger of losing objectivity and all-sidedness.[明确的开头]

To begin with, since actions and choices are directed by a person’s inner motions, I admit that we can tell a person’s interest and attitude mostly by ways like his appearance and behaviors. A person who is always well-dressed and keeps his environment tidy may be one likes order and arranges things one by one. A person who collects all the newest albums and always sings songs reveals that he is interested in music a lot, and[or] perhaps is also a man likes following fashion. However, all of these are only reference for us to know a person and it is not always the real person that he looks like. There is great possibility that one collecting many antiques is not the one who is interested in history study but just considers it as a good investment. In other case[cases], one who is always focusing on stocks and business may not be truly obsessed by money but probably only because this is related to his job. All the facts remind us that we cannot come to a conclusion only by the superficial appearance.[举例太多，论证不足]

People constitute a major part of the society and they are the contributors and promoters of a nation. Since they get education and form their system of value from the society, it is inevitable that their appearance and behaviors reveal the society’s ideas and values. Life abounds with examples to aptly illustrate this point. In some Muslim countries where people believe in Islam, women always cover their faces with a black yashmak, and men are used to wear a little white hat on their head as a custom. What they eat are usually mutton and beef and they also drink a kind of milk tea. From the distinguishing dress and behaviors, we can get a general impression of a country’s value. Imagine a nation where most people like to wear delicately and elegantly, it is possible that this country advocates life quality and fashion. Imagine a nation in which people dress in loose and comfortable style and usually spend holidays out, then it indicates that this country may provide relatively good welfare and people can live an easy life.[穿着宽松舒适代表好的福利了吗，诡辩了吧]

However, some other factors need taking into account, otherwise, the perspective you get may be limited. First, it must be noticed that people in different places of a nation have more or less varies in their clothing and habits. If you can only cover a small part of areas[area], then it is hard for you to get a comprehensive awareness about a nation. Second, with the fast pace of globalization, the similarities of some dressing trends and behaviors among countries are more and more obvious, which may increase difficulties in judging a nation’s values and behaviors only by the appearance and behaviors of its people. The popularity of jeans sets a good example to demonstrate this point, because you can get no conclusion concerning a national value by people’s wearing jeans. Last but not least, a nation’s values and ideas are formed by many complete aspects such as history, cultural relics, social customs and the status quo, etc. Not all of these influences can be obtained simply through the appearances and behaviors of its people. Some thoughts and ideology of a nation require deep research and communication before you can truly understand. [这点论述比较好]

To sum up, since the appearance and behaviors are normally the reflection of a person’s thoughts, we can get an effective access to explore a nation’s values and ideas though it. What’s more, a lot of other study about the related aspects such as history, culture and currant situations must take into consideration to guarantee a reliable awareness of a nation.
1.小的错误比较小，叙述比较清晰
2.第二段例子太琐碎没有进行总结
3.反面的观点比较充分

choupgheadUID: 2969431

（字数很多啊，吓人）
The speaker asserts in the statement that since what people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, we can get to know a society’s ideas and values through observing its people’s appearance and behavior. As far as I am concerned, the statement points out a good way for us to observe a person and a society, while on the other hand, if we make our judgment simply by these aspects, then we may risk the danger of losing objectivity and all-sidedness（但是这个词没懂）.（后半段给出自己观点，鲜明有力）
To begin with, since actions and choices are directed by a person’s inner motions, I admit that we can tell a person’s interest and attitude mostly by ways like his appearance and behaviors. A person who is always well-dressed and keeps his environment tidy may be one likes order and arranges things one by one. （可以使用分号体现并列）A person who collects all the newest albums and always sings songs reveals that he is interested in music a lot, and perhaps is also a man likes following fashion. However, all of these are only reference for us to know a person and it is not always the real person that he looks like. There is great possibility that one collecting many antiques is not the one who is interested in history study but just considers it as a good investment. In other case（s）, one who is always focusing on stocks and business may not be truly obsessed by money but probably only because this is related to his job. All the facts remind us that we cannot come to a conclusion only by the superficial appearance.(正反例子都给的很充分)
People constitute a major part of the society and they are the contributors and promoters of a nation. Since they get education and form their system of value from the society, it is inevitable that their appearance and behaviors reveal the society’s ideas and values. Life abounds with examples to aptly illustrate this point. （我觉得最好简单说明一下你认为的社会价值观指的是什么，然后下面的例子贴近这个方面举，更有说服力，不然的话，读者怎么知道他们这么做就体现了社会的价值观了呢）In some Muslim countries where people believe in Islam, women always cover their faces with a black yashmak, and men are used to wear a little white hat on their head as a custom. What they eat are usually mutton and beef and they also drink a kind of milk tea. From the distinguishing dress and behaviors, we can get a general impression of a country’s value. Imagine a nation where most people like to wear delicately and elegantly, it is possible that this country advocates life quality and fashion. Imagine a nation in which people dress in loose and comfortable style and usually spend holidays out, then it indicates that this country may provide relatively good welfare and people can live an easy life.（用国家举例时，最好具体举，如果世界上没有你说的那样的one country呢，我们也不知道有没有）
However, some other factors need taking into account, otherwise, the perspective you get may be limited. First, it must be noticed that people in different places of a nation have more or less varies in their clothing and habits. If you can only cover a small part of areas, then it is hard for you to get a comprehensive awareness about a nation. Second, with the fast pace of globalization, the similarities of some dressing trends and behaviors among countries are more and more obvious, which may increase difficulties in judging a nation’s values and behaviors only by the appearance and behaviors of its people. The popularity of jeans sets a good example to demonstrate this point, because you can get no conclusion concerning a national value by people’s wearing jeans. Last but not least, a nation’s values and ideas are formed by many complete aspects such as history, cultural relics, social customs and the status quo, etc. Not all of these influences can be obtained simply through the appearances and behaviors of its people. Some thoughts and ideology of a nation require deep research and communication before you can truly understand（them）. （本段论证层次分明，例子举得有说服力）
To sum up, since the appearance and behaviors are normally the reflection of a person’s thoughts, we can get an effective access to explore a nation’s values and ideas though it. What’s more, a lot of other study about the related aspects such as history, culture and currant situations must take into consideration to guarantee a reliable awareness of a nation.
（内容饱满，对于题目的两个观点都进行了正反两方面的论证，有说服力）

muzhihao1UID: 2959675

208."The way people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its people."

The speaker asserts in the statement that since what people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes and interests, we can get to know a society’s ideas and values through observing its people’s appearance and behavior. As far as I am concerned, the statement points out a good way for us to observe a person and a society, while on the other hand, if we make our judgment simply by these aspects, then we may risk the danger of losing objectivity and all-sidedness.

To begin with, since actions and choices are directed by a person’s inner motions, I admit that we can tell a person’s interest and attitude mostly by ways like his appearance and behaviors. A person who is always well-dressed and keeps his environment tidy may be one likes order and arranges things one by one. A person who collects all the newest albums and always sings songs reveals that he is interested in music a lot, and perhaps is also a man likes following fashion. However, all of these are only reference for us to know a person and it is not always the real person that he looks like. There is great possibility that one collecting many antiques is not the one who is interested in history study but just considers it as a good investment. In other case, one who is always focusing on stocks and business may not be truly obsessed by money but probably only because this is related to his job. All the facts remind us that we cannot come to a conclusion only by the superficial appearance.

People constitute a major part of the society and they are the contributors and promoters of a nation. Since they get education and form their system of value from the society, it is inevitable that their appearance and behaviors reveal the society’s ideas and values. Life abounds with examples to aptly illustrate this point. In some Muslim countries where people believe in Islam, women always cover their faces with a black yashmak, and men are used to wear a little white hat on their head as a custom. What they eat are usually mutton and beef and they also drink a （very） kind of milk tea. From the distinguishing（distinguishable） dress and behaviors, we can get a general impression of a country’s value.（这里看不出muslim的value） Imagine a nation where most people like to wear delicately and elegantly, it is possible that this country advocates life quality and fashion. Imagine a nation in which people dress in loose and comfortable style and usually spend holidays out, then it （句式好像不对）indicates that this country may provide relatively good welfare and people can live an easy life.（行为反映的是社会的价值和观点，这个例子好像反映的是社会的状况吧）

However, some other factors need taking into account, otherwise, the perspective you get may be limited. First, it must be noticed that people in different places of a nation have more or less varies（difference） in their clothing and habits. If you can only cover a small part of areas, then it is hard for you to get a comprehensive awareness about a nation. Second, with the fast pace of globalization, the similarities of some dressing trends and behaviors among countries are more and more obvious, which may increase difficulties in judging a nation’s values and behaviors only by the appearance and behaviors of its people. The popularity of jeans sets a good example to demonstrate this point, because you can get no conclusion concerning a national value by people’s wearing jeans. Last but not least, a nation’s values and ideas are formed by many complete aspects such as history, cultural relics, social customs and the status quo, etc. Not all of these influences can be obtained simply through the appearances and behaviors of its people. Some thoughts and ideology of a nation require deep research and communication before you can truly understand.

To sum up, since the appearance and behaviors are normally the reflection of a person’s thoughts, we can get an effective access to explore a nation’s values and ideas though（through） it. What’s more, a lot of other study about the related aspects such as history, culture and currant situations must take（be taken） into consideration to guarantee a reliable awareness（cognition？） of a nation.


找不出什么错了，行文很流畅啊。。感觉这个观点找得也比较稳，还有例子举得比较多，感觉蛮充实的。第三段穆斯林的例子，记得他是说明女人的地位低

McNeilUID: 2272415

208."The way people look, dress, and  act reveals their attitudes and interests. You can tell much about a  society's ideas and values by observing the appearance and behavior of its  people." The speaker asserts in the  statement that since what people look, dress, and act reveals their attitudes  and interests, we can get to know a society’s ideas and values through  observing its people’s appearance and behavior. As far as I am concerned, the  statement points out a good way for us to observe a person and a society,  while on the other hand, if we make our judgment simply by these aspects,  then we may risk the danger of losing objectivity and all-sidedness.（观点很明确） To begin with, since actions and  choices are directed by a person’s inner motions, I admit that we can tell a  person’s interest and attitude mostly by ways like his appearance and  behaviors. A person who is always well-dressed and keeps his environment tidy  may be one likes order and arranges things one by one. A person who collects  all the newest albums and always sings songs reveals that he is interested in  music a lot, and perhaps is also a man likes following fashion. However, all  of these are only reference for us to know a person and it is not always the  real person that he looks like. There is great possibility that one  collecting many antiques is not the one who is interested in history study  but just considers it as a good investment. In other case, one who is always  focusing on stocks and business may not be truly obsessed by money but  probably only because this is related to his job. All the facts remind us  that we cannot come to a conclusion only by the superficial appearance.（要说明：个体方面情况下，通过外表判断失效） People constitute a major part of  the society and they are the contributors and promoters of a nation. Since  they get education and form their system of value（不太妥当） from  the society, it is inevitable that their appearance and behaviors reveal the  society’s ideas and values. Life abounds with examples to aptly illustrate this  point. In some Muslim countries where people believe in Islam, women always  cover their faces with a black yashmak, and men are used to wear a little  white hat on their head as a custom. What they eat are usually mutton and  beef and they also drink a kind of milk tea. From the distinguishing dress  and behaviors, we can get a general impression of a country’s value. Imagine  a nation where most people like to wear delicately and elegantly, it is  possible that this country advocates life quality and fashion. Imagine a  nation in which people dress in loose and comfortable style and usually spend  holidays out, then it indicates that this country may provide relatively good  welfare and people can live an easy life. However, some other factors need  taking into account, otherwise, the perspective you get may be limited.  First, it must be noticed that people in different places of a nation have  more or less varies in their clothing and habits. If you can only cover a  small part of areas, then it is hard for you to get a comprehensive awareness  about a nation. Second, with the fast pace of globalization, the similarities  of some dressing trends and behaviors among countries are more and more  obvious, which may increase difficulties in judging a nation’s values and  behaviors only by the appearance and behaviors of its people. The popularity  of jeans sets a good example to demonstrate this point, because you can get  no conclusion concerning a national value by people’s wearing jeans. Last but  not least, a nation’s values and ideas are formed by many complete aspects  such as history, cultural relics, social customs and the status quo, etc. Not  all of these influences can be obtained simply through the appearances and  behaviors of its people. Some thoughts and ideology of a nation require deep  research and communication before you can truly understand. 我认为相对于个人层面，也能有类似的这样一些论述，如果能有的话可能会更完整，更有层次感 To sum up, since the appearance and  behaviors are normally the reflection of a person’s thoughts, we can get an  effective access to explore a nation’s values and ideas though（？？应该是through吧？） it.  What’s more, a lot of other study about the related aspects such as history,  culture and currant situations must take into consideration to guarantee a  reliable awareness of a nation.

我不知道我在前面标注的那些是否妥当，我自己觉得我的归纳相对比较合理，同时我觉得最好能在文章某处给读者们一个明确的文章结构，最后是在主题句中有相对明确的后文分析，看起来可能比较明确
语言问题，我没有什么发言权，更多的是学习
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