issue 69 求拍

upcdanielUID: 2982350

69：Government should place few, if any, restrictions on scientific research and development.

The speaker claims that government should place restriction as few as possible on scientific research and development. As far as i am concerned, however, I disagree with the speaker for some obvious reasons that many technologies would cause disaster to the whole society and therefore should be restricted.

Scientific research and development is a double--edged sword for the whole society. Even while enjoying the results of scientific research and development, we are meeting increasingly sever problems such as nuclear dangers and ethical problems raised by cloning. Although advances in computer technology increased our work efficiency, on the other hand, we have more pressures and live lack of privacy. Advances in engineering improve the structure integrity of our building, roads and vehicles, but it have also brought environmental problems. The development of chemistry has provides us with new materials and various of additional agent for industry products, however, the chemicals which has dumped into water supplies may cause cancer and birth defects.

How to solve this problem is one of the most important tasks of government. Government should neither pay too many or too few restrictions on scientific research and development. Some areas of research should be restricted otherwise scientific research will be disequilibrium. Because some of the research can cause direct profit for some group. Take soft engineering as an example, they can get direct profits by write a new software. While some researches such as astronomy and biology are short of direct profits, and the results of these research cannot generate direct economic effectiveness. There will be lesser people would like to engage in this kind of research if the government don`t make any restriction and therefore all of the researches as a whole will be disequilibrium.

The restriction placed by government on scientific research should be judged according to different nature of various research projects. Researches which are still remain largely theoretical stage should be support rather than be restrained , since whether it is harmful or useful for the society is unclear. The nature of the electricity, for example, was studied by researchers past. Few of these researchers could imagine that their experiments carried on because of merely intellectual curiosity lead to modern electrical technology without which we can scarcely conceive of contemporary life.
On the other hand, when the theories are going to applied by others government should consider that whether the technology would cause severe problems to the society. Genetic engineering enables to prevent birth defects, however, when it is used to clone it would result in ethical and moral problems. Therefore, it should be restricted.

Consequently, due to analysis and reasons mentioned above, we may finally draw the conclusion that government should place restrictions on the technologies which would result in problems to our society, while researches still remains theoretical stage should be supported.

写的第二篇文章，花了将近2个小时， 求拍

DriverEntryUID: 143979

第一帖？欢迎下。

看完了，总的来说感觉还可以。不过写了2个小时，以后还是要尽量缩短时间。

挑一些比较明显的错误说下：
第二段：sever problems，应该是 SEVERE 吧？主要是意思都变了，让读者第一眼看的时候一愣。。。
第三段：soft engineering应该是 SOFTWARE ENGINEERING.

在后面你的论述中，RESTRICTION变成了强迫某些科研进行下去的意思，比如天文，生物。这个和RESTRICTION的一般含义有点不一样，最好先解释下。（一般RESTRICTION是限制某些事情，不要超过一定范围的意思）

pay too many or too few restrictions，应该是PLACE

Few of these researchers could imagine that their experiments carried on because of merely intellectual curiosity lead to modern electrical technology without which we can scarcely conceive of contemporary life. 这句长了点，可以加1,2个逗号，读着费劲。其他有几个句子也是类似。

个人意见，仅供参考。

upcdanielUID: 2982350

2# DriverEntry
谢谢啦~
第二段我改了一下，你看看这样写合适不。
How to solve this problem is one of the most important tasks of government. Government should neither pay too many or too few restrictions on scientific research and development. Some areas of research would result in direct profits and therefore many scientists would like to engage in this kind of research. However, many of them would cause severe problems to the whole society once the products of these technologies. Take the transgenic plants as an example, may countries are competing to develop this technology, because it can improve the production of crops and help to prevent them from being damaged by pest, and therefore could generate large amount of economic profits. Yet, lots of environmental groups appeal to restrict this technology for the reason that these products may cause genetic diseases to human body. If our government don`t restrict it but support, it would be a disaster to us.

DriverEntryUID: 143979

pay too many or too，应该是PLACE吧？之前提过一次了。。。。

once the products of these technologies. 可以在后面加个 BECOME POPULAR.

may countries -》MANY

government don`t restrict it but support, -》doesn't。 后面写成 SUPPORT IT 比较好。

for the reason that these products may cause genetic diseases to human body.  去掉THE REASON THAT.

例子比之前的是更加贴切些。。。

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4# DriverEntry
嗯，谢谢啦，版主好人啊~~
我也发了两篇argu，一直都没有人拍，哎

DriverEntryUID: 143979

你可以先改一下别人的ARGU, 然后再留下自己的ARGU链接。这样互相改多了就好了。