sticking on no.2

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1# yatezhimi

我改的是2号，第一次改，大家凑合看~
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Cause of some books rarely borrowed in the library have taken up the shelves permanently, some newly published books has no space to be placed with more copies. The arguer put out an solution is to replace【语法错，改为replacing】 the rarely borrowed books with the newly published novels, and in his mind the opposition is ignorable. However, the arguer has misunderstood the basic function of the library and has made his conclusion on incredible statistics.

First and foremost, for the function of the library, one way or another, is to provide the books for the readers, not only the recent novels, but also some old books and some precious copies for the particular readers. 【句子太长，建议删了插入语，有点生硬】If the library has made this replacement, it will be harmful for its basic function and will make the readers who need those books be very disappointed. 【这句的前半句有点在重复上句的意思，可以精简】【And if all the libraries have put out similar policy, then where should those readers who need the books,may be the scientists and social analysts, refer to,and it will eventually do great harm to the development of the whole society.】句子太长，建议分两句，第一个And可删。把“丧失图书馆基本功能”这点作为踩第一段非常赞同！

Moreover, the conclusion is not made on precise statistics and the arguer has not provide us with the exact ratio that how many people need to borrow the latest published books and can not find them.If the ratio is too small, which is of great possibility, will make the proposed solution seemed to be【可删】 ridiculous. To make his suggestion more credible the arguer should try to figure out the exact demands of the readers and try to get some useful suggestions from them.To a certain degree, the readers may be already to put out a feasible solution.

The last but not least, cause of only one organization of about thirty people has showed their oppoisite attitudes with the proposition, the arguer thought the opposition is not the main stream and can be ignored. 【前一句是题目的观点，此时应提出本段作者的观点，再接着后面的各种可能】However,to a certain degree, 【此处就别用了，或者换一种说法】the arguer has not made a survey in the readers, and the fact may be that the majority of the readers are against with the proposition , and only a small number of them have carried it out so far. If the fact is that【这是什么表达，这么怪】, this solution will not make most of the【可删】 readers contented.  

To sum up, with the description above, 【we can see that the arguer is too haste to make the conclusion and has misunderstood the basic function of the library and go to the extreme.】【复合的过头了，可改为the arguer,misunderstanding the basic function of the library，is too haste to make the conclusionand go to the extreme.】Besides without available and credible statistics, we can not figured out the precise attitude of the readers. To make a feasible and sustainable solution, more statics should be gathered and a wide survey is needed.