后天考了，水平大概就这个样子ISSUE130超级高频，求各种牛人看看

saybia1993UID: 2625112

Issue130 “How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. Unfortunately, we have not yet learned how to raise children who can help bring about a better society.”


Education considered as a crucial part of human society, plays an important role in our progress of whole world. Recently, someone say that the degree of how children are socialized today can determine the future of our society, but we have not yet learned how to teach our children to make contribution to bring about a better society. As far as I’m concern, I totally disagree with this statement. Generally speaking, socialization of our children is merely a fraction compared to the factors of social progress and our education system turned out to be a success.

Contemporary people often complain about the society they lived in right now. Undeniable, our world has so many problems still out of people’s control. Local wars can be heard every day. Hunger, poverty threatens most of the people in Africa. Many deadly diseases still cannot be cured. These issues are surely demanding prompt solution. However, we need to face problems in both sides. Comparing to the people in the old times, our lives has changed greatly. In the 16th century, our average life span was only 35. Till 20th century, it has increased greatly to 60. Scientists have already made assumptions that people’s average life span can reach 100 years in the 23th century. How did this happen? The reasons are complex due to the whole progress of our society. Right now, most people won’t worry about their basic needs in daily lives compare to the old people. We have enough clothes to resist harsh weather. We can choose variety food to satisfy our daily demand. Our houses keep constant temperature duo to the air conditioning system. The fast development of technology brings us an unprecedented level of subsistence of all parts. Great tolerance of different viewpoints, great respects of individual rights can also make contribution to our better society. All the aspects what I said above show an incontestable changing society day by day, what’s more ,the changing towards less problems and more happiness. Great progress won’t be made only due to one or two generation people. Computer first appeared in 1942 in Upenn. After dozens of generation’s struggle, more and more people choose their career as computer science and right now, computer technology is the indispensable tools in all parts of lives. All these can happen because of our successfully education system, there can be generation after generation wise people who received knowledge and complex ability to devote their intelligence and diligence to build this wonderful world. Better society is not a result but a process and we are surely on the right way.

Another problem of the issue is the socialization. I admitted it was very important for children in today’s world. Communication skills and leadership of socialization act as an effective cooperation living mode show their great impact of living in groups, such as human beings. Nevertheless, socialization of people is not the only key point of progress. There are also many important qualities like knowledge, independence, foresight, moral character and so on to be the determinant factor. What’s more, some prodigious achievement can be attained only through narrow edge. Many great scientists, artists and statesmen are unsociable and paranoiac. An excellent example is Van Gogh. As everyone knows, Van Gogh was an eccentric people, he was dissocial and crankiness. To be considered as an extreme completist, Van Gogh could not bear any disagreement with the truth what he thought about. This crazy pursuit of ideality made Van Gogh addicted to his own virtual world and finally, he created such extraordinary masterpiece like “The potato eaters” and “Sunflowers”.

To put all the nuts in a shell, I suppose our society will become happier in the future due to the constant perfection. Tomorrow, we will surely see a diversity world around us. Our methods to raise children, or rather, the education will be more and more important and suitable for our baby.


实际上考场的水平应该比这篇要低，3分有吗？。。
求各种打击

咖啡盐UID: 2973669

SF nd bless~~

saybia1993UID: 2625112

没事的，楼上的大神评价一下吧

咖啡盐UID: 2973669

偶不是大神....还木有经历过考试....乃还走在了前面。
130实在不敢说神马，我也很纠结这一片，理解的范围太广泛了我觉得。

嗯，说说我现在的理解吧
首先要讨论的是How children are socialized today determines the destiny of society. 我觉得这里可以当社会事实来陈述下，这是未来的一方面，孩子如何社会化，那么有正反面之分。
显然他不是决定性因素，因为我们的社会在不断进步，不单单只靠社会化吧
之后再是关于如何社会化，我们究竟有没有掌握孩子的社会教育。

唉~~这篇我打算过几天好好写写，争取背下来，实在纠结

yzl_1988UID: 2372248

你需要看看官方范文的三分版，各种自信啊。

sleepyjijiUID: 2833982

as far as i'm concerned。。。on both sides。。。comparing with。。。
对不住了lz。。。我自己很怕在临场的情况下会语法、拼写错误爆棚 所以看到就顺手了

然后如果是我的话 可能会讨论some features that children who are socialized present and whether these features can lead a better future to both children and society or not 然后focus on how to deal with negative influence and how to protect children grow up naturally  然后说other things will determine the destiny of society然后总结是儿童社会化会正反两面影响社会发展，建立一个良好社会的不仅仅要在儿童社会化上扬长避短，并且要对影响社会发展的问题要面面观……

果然写个提纲要死人……快考试了都没有写几篇 同求点评……

溴气雪花膏UID: 2937218

5# yzl_1988 总觉得那个有点不靠谱，那么多人3分，莫非都写成了那个鸟样子？？