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3.10 revised
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WThe reading passage raises the claim that  an(the) increasing number of human population and the misuse of pesticide will lead to a decrease in the population of birds. However, the conclusion is strongly deny(denied) by the lecture which provides evidences that the number of birds is indeed increasing.7 _- f' r& N! j- n  u' ^3 S

1 k' G- m& e6 [) a( @" DThe professor begins by pointing out that although there was a negative situation for birds to live in , nowadays it has become an ideal（只是说birds在城市里居住，好像还不是ideal吧） habitat. Besides, it is a common phenomenon that we can discover some kinds of birds in the city. Therefore, the number of birds is gaining an increase.(信息不准确)
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Second, the professor maintain（s） that there is an obvious decline in using the land for the purpose of agriculture. In addition , some new productive crops are being planted which can will be more productive and will not do harm to the rural areas.（只是省土地，没说有没有harm的问题）
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Finally, the professor states that it is（people are） no longer using the tradition(traditional) pesticides. Two breakthroughs have been taken place in the using of pesticides. For one thing, a new and less poison(poisonous) pesticide is being（has been） invented .For another, pest resistance crops are gaining more and more popularity. These two methods could ensure the population of birds in an increase.- Q1 h; m; V) O! z2 G- w2 ?, l1 ]+ ~

: A6 q0 ?( f. _3 eIn conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.14 TPO1 综合
The reading passage raises the claim that some employees desire to a four-day workweek and they regard it could bring great effects on company profits, the economic condition of the whole country and the employees' lives. However, the idea is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences.

First, the professor points out that it may cost the companies to pay much more rather than gaining profits. As hiring more employees, the companies need to pay much money on training and medical benefits. In addition, the cost of health insurance is in the same amount no matter they work for four days or five days. Besides, more spaces and computers are also required. Thus, it could decrease the companies' profits and put great financial pressure on companies.

Second, the professor maintains that it has nothing to do with the unemployment rate. The companies may assume that the workers have the abilities to finish the same tasks in four days rather than in five days. In this case, no more jobs are available and unemployment rate will not go down. Finally, the employees may have overload tasks and live in a great burden.

Finally, the professor states that the option of a four-day workweek would make the employees in great risks. For instance, their working abilities may be decreased and they are likely to lose their jobs as well as missing the opportunity to get promotions. That is because the supervisors prefer the employees who work for five days in a week.

In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.14 TPO1 综合
The reading passage raises the claim that some employees desire to a four-day workweek and they regard it could bring great effects on company profits, the economic condition of the whole country and the employees' lives. However, the idea is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences.

First, the professor points out that it may cost the companies to pay much more rather than gaining profits. As hiring more employees, the companies need to pay much money on training and medical benefits. In addition, the cost of health insurance is in the same amount no matter they work for four days or five days. Besides, more spaces and computers are also required. Thus, it could decrease the companies' profits and put great financial pressure on companies.

Second, the professor maintains that it has nothing to do with the unemployment rate. The companies may assume that the workers have the abilities to finish the same tasks in four days rather than in five days. In this case, no more jobs are available and unemployment rate will not go down. Finally, the employees may have overload tasks and live in a great burden.

Finally, the professor states that the option of a four-day workweek would make the employees in great risks. For instance, their working abilities may be decreased and they are likely to lose their jobs as well as missing the opportunity to get promotions. That is because the supervisors prefer the employees who work for five days in a week.

In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.14 独立
With the rapid development of international trade, nowadays, people have the opportunity to purchase things either domestic or foreign-made. It is no doubt that the price is the major consideration when people purchasing goods. From my perspective, I will definitely buy things made in my own country no matter how high the prices are. First, choosing to buy domestic things can enhance the employment rate and secure our own country’s safety. In this case, people will not lose their job and they can make their own livings by their hard working. For instance, the cost of agricultural products is higher in my country but we still purchase this kind of products .therefore it could ensure the farmers to have income to support their families. Besides, there are less and less crime would happen due to the flourish in the agricultural products.

Second, it can stimulate my own country’s economic by doing so. Purchasing domestic things means the money will flow into our own country’s market. For example, if we buy all cars which are made domestically regardless their prices and it could lead to thrive in the car market as well as some related markets. In addition, the GDP of our country will grow up at a remarkable rate. Therefore, the economic condition of our own country will be much satisfactory.

Admittedly, high prices will cost people to pay much more on objects and it is a great burden to them. According to a survey, 62% of the respondent say they will choose to by foreign-made goods in the circumstance that the prices of domestic goods are too high to afford.

In conclusion, the advantages of purchasing domestic things are outweigh the disadvantages. If buying domestic things can bring great benefits to people’s lives and the whole country’s economic, why not purchasing domestic goods?

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综合修改

The reading passage raises the claim that some employees desire to a four-day workweek and they regard it could bring great effects on company profits, the economic condition of the whole country and the employees' lives. However, the idea is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences.5 C; p: u& M:
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First, the professor points out that it may costcause(cost sb. some moeny) the companies to pay much more rather than gaining profits. As hiring more employees, the companies need to pay much money on training and medical benefits. In addition, the cost of health insurance is in the same amount no matter they work for four days or five days. Besides, more spaces and computers are also required. Thus, it could decrease the companies' profits and put great financial pressure on companies.



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Second, the professor maintains that it has nothing to do with the unemployment rate. The companies may assume that the workers have the abilities to finish the same tasks in four days rather than in five days. In this case, no more jobs are available and unemployment rate will not go down. Finally, the employees may have overload tasks and live in a great burden.



Finally, the professor states that the option of a four-day workweek would makekeep the employees in great risks. For instance, their working abilities may be decreased and they are likely to lose their jobs as well as 注意前后谓语一致missing the opportunity to get promotions. That is because the supervisors prefer the employees who work for five days in a week.



In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

听力信息点非常全 学习了
想请教LZ听的时候是每句都要记下几个词还是要怎么take notes才时间来得及也能写全

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3.14 独立修改
( J" ^6 s. n. p5 ^' b) MWith the rapid development of international trade, nowadays, people have the opportunity to purchase things either domestic or foreign-made. It is no doubt that the price is the major consideration when people purchasing goods. From my perspective, I will definitely buy things made in my own country no matter how high the prices are.
First, choosing to buy domestic things can enhance the employment rate and secure our own country’s safety. In this case, people will not lose their job and they can make their own livings by their hard working. For instance, the cost of agricultural products is higher in my country but we still purchase this kind of products .Therefore it could ensure the farmers to have income to support their families. Besides, there are less and less crime would happen due to the flourish in the agricultural products.（感觉这个因果关系有点突然，如果要照应前文中提到的secure our country’s safety的话，似乎添加一些关于国防、粮食储备的内容更合适些）
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; Y4 R/ B/ g. [) ]* C& C% ?Second, it can stimulate my own country’s economic by doing so. （似乎employment rate也应当属于economic的部分，是不是放在第二段更合适些？）Purchasing domestic things means the money will flow into our own country’s market. For example, if we buy all cars which are made domestically regardless their prices and it could lead to thrive in the car market as well as some related markets. In addition, the GDP of our country will grow up at a remarkable rate. Therefore, the economic condition of our own country will be much satisfactory. 9 W! ^! l& k5 ?3 N8 A/ l
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Admittedly, high prices will cost people to pay much more on objects and it is a great burden to them. According to a survey, 62% of the respondents say they will choose to by foreign-made goods in the circumstance that the prices of domestic goods are too high to afford.
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% e5 P$ b# ]3 p  r1 Q2 `4 yIn conclusion, the advantages of purchasing domestic things are （outweigh是动词，应当去掉are）outweigh the disadvantages. If buying domestic things can bring great benefits to people’s lives and the whole country’s economic, why not purchasing domestic goods?

结构、语言和用词都很好，但有些地方逻辑稍稍有点不太清晰，加油！

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3.14 TPO1 综合
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First, the professor points out that it may cost the companies to pay much more rather than gaining profits. As hiring more employees, the companies need to pay much money on training and medical benefits. In addition（感觉这里不是递进关系，而是在解释前面的medical benefits）, the cost of health insurance is in the same amount no matter they work for four days or five days. Besides, more spaces and computers are also required. Thus, it could decrease the companies' profits and put great financial pressure on companies.
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Second, the professor maintains that it has nothing to do with the unemployment rate. The companies may assume that the workers have the abilities to finish the same tasks in four days rather than in five days. In this case, no more jobs are available and unemployment rate will not go down. Finally, the employees may have overload tasks and live in a great burden.（这一段用自己的话概括了文章的观点，很全面，学习了）" U+ T1 d' n3 P; e: f& N$ C

: m/ V& \* m) m( S/ u* J+ qFinally, the professor states that the option of a four-day workweek would make the employees in great risks. For instance, their working abilities may be decreased and they are likely to lose their jobs as well as missing the opportunity to get promotions. That is because the supervisors prefer the employees who work for five days in a week.（漏掉了“公司更希望经理阶层能够工作五天，以便更好地管理公司事务”这个点） - z$ R! W: j9 m. l# ]" M7 v; d! s
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In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.15 综合 tpo2
The reading passage raises the claims that it has some advantages to set up a team to work on the new project. However, the measures are strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences and argues that it may not work as the reading suggested.

first, the professor points out that some members in the group will have free ride and they do not contribute to the work. However, when the group is highly praised by others they will also receive recognition as well. And this is unfair to those who work harder  and get great insights on the work . It is because the recognition is to the whole team, not especially for someone.

second, the professor maintains that team-work will not be proceed quickly. So many meetings should be held in order to get agreement with all the members and long consensus. What is worse, one or two influential members may sometimes disrupt the working process and they have the final decision on some issues, regardless other members opinions. In this case, if there is any error or mistake the whole team will be blame . Also, it is unjust to those who does not make any trouble.

In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

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3.15 综合 tpo2  修改 The reading passage raises the claims that it has some advantages to set up a team to work on the new project. However, the measures are strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences and argues that it may not work as the reading suggested. first, the professor points out that some members in the group will have free ride and(while) they do not contribute to the work. However, when the group is highly praised by others they will also receive recognition as well. And this is unfair to those who work harder  and get great insights on the work . It is because the recognition is to the whole team, not especially for someone. second, the professor maintains that team-work will not be proceed quickly. So many meetings should be held in order to get agreement with all the members and long consensus. What is worse, one or two influential members may sometimes disrupt the working process and they have the final decision on some issues, regardless other members opinions. In this case, if there is any error or mistake the whole team will be blame . Also, it is unjust to those who does not make any trouble. In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading. 该写的点都写到了，如果可能的话，你可以稍微多写一点点，这样文章会更饱满。

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.16 独立
As the international competition become more and more fierce, nowadays, every country desires to gain significant development. From my perspective, Improving school is a shortcut and effective way to achieve their goals but not the most significant factor in develop the country successfully.

Admittedly, the importance of school education can not be exaggerated. Schools can provide wide ranges of knowledge as well as useful skills to the citizens. Only in this way, can people arm themselves with knowledge and put what they learn at schools into practice. For instance, a doctor can use medicine to cure diseases, a scientist can use technology to make great invention, a teacher can pass on his or her knowledge to the students and so on. All the members in the country can be benefited in school education. Finally, the whole country can move forward in a great speed and gain rapid progress.

However, the economic condition also counts to the development of a country. As we all know, economy is the basic of a country and its significance can not be ignored. The rapid development in economy can have manifest influence in a country in numerous ways. School facilities, educational qualities ,high-technology and public services can be improved by given sufficient money and will lead to the prosperity in whole country .

Last but not least, a successful development in a country can not live without the strong military power. With the guarantee provided by military power, a country can get improvement in its growth. If a country was invaded by its enemies, it may lose a peaceful environment to develop and its main focus would be how to defend itself in order to keep its mainland in unity. How could it have chances to develop well ?
To improve a country in a successful way , school education , economic condition and military power are crucial and they can never be challenged. A wise government should balance all the factors so that the country’s future is promising.

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.16 综合 tpo3
The reading passage raises the claims that one of Rembrandt's painting is not his work. However, the thought is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences and argues that the painting is indeed a work that done by Rembrandt.

first, the professor points out that the fur collar is not a part of the original painting.
It has been added into the painting by someone 100 years after the painting was created in order to make it more valuable .Therefore, Rembrandt should not be blame for the inconsistence in his work.

second, the professor maintains that the light and shadow of the original painting are realistic and they are omething that Rembrandt did not make people disappointed. The professor says if the added color was removed, then the woman wears
simple collar with light color cloth would found. Also, the light color of the cloth reflects light on the woman's face and her face is illuminated.

Finally, the professor states that several pieces of wood are glued into the work so that its bigger size can make it more valuable. In fact , Rembrandt used only one wood panel to accomplish this work instead of several pieces as the reading says. In addition, the wood panel used in this work is the same as what he used in his self portrait with a hat.

In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading.

qianhuangUID: 2766587

3.16 综合 tpo3" The reading passage raises the claims that one of Rembrandt's painting is not his work. However, the thought is strongly questioned by the lecture which provides drastically evidences and argues that the painting is indeed a work that done by Rembrandt. first, the professor points out that the fur collar is not a part of the original painting.  i% w' @6 n/ _ It has been added into the painting by someone 100 years after the painting was created in order to make it more valuable .Therefore, Rembrandt should not be blame for the inconsistence in his work. $ S' R: Y3 a( l second, the professor maintains that the light and shadow of the original painting are realistic and they are omething that Rembrandt did not make people disappointed. The professor says if the added color was removed, then the woman wears1 `1 {0 t, {/ s. a6 E. ] simple collar with light color cloth would found. Also, the light color of the cloth reflects light on the woman's face and her face is illuminated. $ `, g" ]4 l, N5 `2 T Finally, the professor states that several pieces of wood are glued into the work so that its bigger size can make it more valuable. In fact , Rembrandt used only one wood panel to accomplish this work instead of several pieces as the reading says. In addition, the wood panel used in this work is the same as what he used in his self portrait with a hat. In conclusion, the contents of the reading passage are disputed by the speaker and the speaker has totally different ideas on the topic made in the reading. 你听的非常全，很棒。表达也没问题。

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改3.16 独立
As the international competition become more and more fierce, nowadays, every country desires to gain significant development. From my perspective, Improving school is a shortcut and effective way to achieve their goals but not the most significant factor in develop the country successfully.( z3 w* q1 r6 E7 h* u+ q


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Admittedly, the importance of school education can not be exaggerated. Schools can provide wide ranges of knowledge as well as useful skills to the citizens. Only in this way, can people arm themselves with knowledge and put what they learn at schools into practice. For instance, a doctor can use medicine to cure diseases, a scientist can use technology to make great invention, a teacher can pass on his or her knowledge to the students and so on. All the members in the country can be benefited in school education. Finally, the whole country can move forward in a great speed and gain rapid progress., J% W# a( v% f

However, the economic condition also counts to the development of a country. As we all know, economy is the basic of a country and its significance can not be ignored. The rapid development in economy can have manifest influence in a country in numerous ways. School facilities, educational qualities ,high-technology and public services can be improved by given sufficient money and will lead to the prosperity in whole country .& g2 H; J5 O9 G& `




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Last but not least, a successful development in a country can not live without the strong military power. With the guarantee provided by military power, a country can get improvement in its growth. If a country was invaded by its enemies, it may lose a peaceful environment to develop and its main focus would be how to defend itself in order to keep its mainland in unity. How could it have chances to develop well ?5 g% {. z% V6 [8 u  Q6 l' q





To improve a country in a successful way , school education , economic condition and military power are crucial and they can never be challenged. A wise government should balance all the factors so that the country’s future is promising.


语言很流畅，用词也很到位，学习了！
在论述经济和军事对国家发展的重要性时，要是就上一些国家的实例就好了。（可以不点出具体国家的名字，但是可以就某些具体事件来谈国家的发展问题。）

corrine97UID: 2868974

3.17 独立

Have you ever been asked a question that when you face hardships and difficulties and you seek for some advice, who will you turn for help ? It is no doubt that some people may ask the older people for suggestion, from my perspective, seeking advice from older people is feasible.

Admittedly, older people are more sophisticated and have more valuable experience in solving certain problems. They could once face the same difficulties as what we currently encounter, in this case, they could understand the plight we are facing and offer useful advice. Take my personal experience for example , when I was in high school , my study pressure became so high that I could not handle. Hopefully, my mother discovering that and told me how she coped with the same problem as well as gave me encouragement. Finally , I made progress and achieved my goals. In this case , the usefulness of advice come from older people can never be exaggerated.

Generally speaking ,older people could be more patient in giving advice to others. Of course, they are kind-hearted and they would not be annoyed by some questions which are regarded meaningless by youngster. They would listen carefully on your problems and analysis the difficulties thoroughly. Only after their deep thought on effective measures to solve the problems will they give you the suggestion. In this circumstance, receiving advice from older people is a wise choice that we could not deny.

However , disadvantages of asking advice from the people who are at the same age with us are obvious. Because of their young age and the lack of long-term vision, they may give us some erroneous guidance. Just imagine that you have hesitation on whether to leave the company for another one or not, then one of your peer tells you that you should resign the current position and for a better one and you take his or her advice. Unfortunately, you can not find an ideal position even a job after you left the previous corporation. How can we trust our peers’ advice and follow their instructions?

On day, if some one interview me again on the question that who would I turn for help when I face problems, I would say “the older people”. Because of their rich experience and patience, their suggestion are of great value to me .