issue20 求改啊！~

hsyagathaUID：2998479

Do people really need to focus on the results of scholars and researchers rather than their methods when they pursue their own interests? According to the author, only through their interests can we learn the value, no matter how abnormal those interests are. From my perspective of view, as a social worker, one of the fundamental responsibilities is to contribute to contemporary society, so that results of their work probably should be concerned. In fact, we are surely able to learn much experience of aspiring interests from some effective scholars and researchers. However, any kind of unusual interests is benefit for the society; sometimes they have bad influence on social citizens.

First and foremost, no one can deny the fact that it is their job to gain some achievements from their study; otherwise their works may make no sense. Try to think, if every scholars and researchers in the world emphasize their interests in stead of their gains, than the society would be more fiction and less down- to- earth. As a result, the explosive development of our society must be substituted by a lag phase. Hence, a scholar or a researcher’s work itself has a great value. How can we look down upon the contribution to raise the position of interests?

Admittedly, when interests are not solitary and get achievements as a basic, the situation would be changed. As we all know that, parents always told us stories about how people can succeed by chasing their own hobby, like Copernicus. He always persists in his interest, regardless of others’ tease, and finally established the heliocentric theory when everyone else believed that our earth is the center of the cosmos. Interests can change into motive power and impel people to success. Maybe someone may give up their original target easily when they meet with troubles if they do not care so much about their hobbies.

Nevertheless, to insist on interests is not always good, especially when the interest is idiosyncratic. What if someone’s hobby is drugs, violence or alcohol? There is no denying the fact that negative interests usually have no profit for a person. So, only if someone’s interest is positive and afterwards get a result and do have contribution to the society, his/her interest would be going to have its value and be worthy to be learned and remembered.

In sum, though we may find that interest is extremely important during scholars and researchers’ study process, interests still not the factor we should focus on. People who only have interests cannot achieve success. The essential reason of scholars and researchers being so important in contemporary society is that they contribute many useful conclusions to the social development. People should pay close attention to what have they got and how can they made, not some useless stubborn interests.

GuessyUID：2184792

我实在不知道issue 20的topic是神马 没办法给太多建议。。。
好像你的论点是 科研工作中interest不是最重要的？

1. 没有合适的例子 就有一个例子还和没写一样 基本没有内容 文章欠说服力
2. 大概扫了一眼 倒数第二段比较弱 看那段的主旨句 说的是to insist on interests is not always good 结果你实际上说的是有些interest是bad的 这和insist不insist就没啥关系了 建议把主旨句再调整下
3. 在一个北美的作文培训教材上看到一个说法 用adv的时候要非常小心 觉得说的有道理 比如你最后一段第一句话 we may find that interest is extremely important 这个extreme显得很突兀 既然你都说了interest不总是最重要的 然后又说extremely important 总觉得口径不太一致 其实extremely important和important根本就是一个意思 你这个extremely对意思的表述根本没有帮助 建议以后用程度副词的时候慎重考虑
4. 小问题了 第二段你用了个first 然后读者总会期待个second 结果通篇都木有出现second或者类似的词 很让人伤心啊 呵呵

hsyagathaUID：2998479

额。。谢谢了。。刚刚开始练习。。多多指教。。 2# Guessy

咖啡盐UID：2973669

You ought to show us the title of the statement, or we are extremely confused.