Joyce's Daily Writting~~~4.20独立

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5.1独立
When asked about whether it is a sensible choice to learn broad knowledge of academic subjects than to specialized in one specific subject, opinions differentiates from people to people. Some people claim that acquiring various kinds of knowledge is superior to specializing in one field, whereas others declare opposite view point. From my perspective, it is too hasty to say which one is better in that the two ways function differently in different period.

On one hand, there is no denying the fact that nothing can outweigh the significance of absorbing diverse knowledge when people just begin to learn. When we are in primary schools and high schools, our understanding of knowledge and recognition of world are superficial and shallow. So urgent and crucial is it for us to attain knowledge from all respective aspects. First, it is beneficial for people's well-rounded development. Conspicuously, a growing demand of versatile talents prevails in modern society. However, overall development does not necessarily mean we are supposed to be expert in every respect, which is impossible as well. In contrast, comprehending of basic knowledge is dispensable if a person long for outstanding elite. Second, only by learning a range of subjects can we find out the one suits and attracts us most. For instance, frequently, we realize which one is the field that we want to investigate more after we finish all the curriculum in high schools. Trying all the possible academic domains enable us to discover and choose one as a lifetime pursuit.

On the other hand, specialization is of equal importance, especially when people move to advance studies. If one craves for being an outstanding expert in a certain arena, he or she must be adept in it. Imagine that people knew little about relevant knowledge about his career, how could they deal with bewildering problems? How could they cope with all kinds of accidents? How could they earn respect from others and attain self-esteem for themselves, which are two essential character people should have? Besides, it is universally acknowledged that advance education endow us with profound theories and cutting-edge techniques, which really pose a gigantic challenges for us. Impossibly, we could manage all the disciplines covering all field. Even if we tried so, we eventually may find we were not able to master anyone of them. An apt example is the following case. There were a student on our university endeavored to study three distinct majors and selected overloaded curriculum. He struggle really hard that semester. Sure enough, he failed all most of his classes.

To sum up, both of the two genres of studying approaches are critical. Grasping as many as subjects serves as cornerstone of one's overall development, which mastering a specific subject contributes directly to one's success in future vocation. Therefore, we may safely draw the conclusion that learning broad knowledge of many subjects specializing in one specific subject is as important as specializing in one specific subject, although they dominates different states.

JoyceJingYangUID: 3052237

5.1 综合
In the lecture, the speaker maintains that the merits of private ownership of fossils far outweigh its drawbacks. However, this is different from the reading passage, which contends that great losses have caused by owning fossils personally. Thus, the view of the two are divergent.

First of all, the speaker claims the fact the fossils have more opportunities to expose publically. According to her, public institutions such as public schools and public libraries play a great proportion of buyers in that the fossils are for purchase. In that case, there will have much more public exhibitions and displays of fossils. On the contrary, the reading, rather deviating from the listening, demonstrates that the private owner decline to showcasing the fossil in the public and consequently, public will lose interests in fossils.

Moreover, the lecturer asserts that scientists are more likely to study a variety of fossils. From her perspective, all the deals must go through the process of indentifying fossils, which is bound to be completed by professional scientists. It is experts in the archeology fields that have the ability to execute the detail examinations. So, scientists are the first people to investigate the fossils and they do not miss anything important. In contrast, the reading passage holds the view that scientists lose accesses to some of most vital fossils and miss out on potentially critical discoveries about extinct life forms. This point is contradicted the counterpart in the lecture.

Finally, the listening part points out that nothing can be more urgent than the undiscovered fossils. Prior to individual's participation, much less collecting cooperations take part in the discoveries. Nonetheless, with the involvement of commercial fossils collectors, more fossil, undoubtedly, can be located and found. In this regard, the reading passage challenges the speaker with the fact that commercial collectors may destroy valuable scientific evidence concerned with fossils they reveal by paying no attention about the documentation and smaller fossils which around the bigger ones.

In retrospect, the points made in the listening run counter to the reading by showing that public and scientists as well as commercial fossil collectors will accelerate the exposure of fossils to pubic, promote further study about fossils and foster more discoveries of fossils.

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5月1日 独立 修改昨天貌似没分组，只有我们两个写了，我们互改吧。

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4.27独立修改
改的太太太晚了，羞愧shi了。。。望海涵~


Nowadays, education plays an integral role in the soaring development of a country and has caused wide public concerns these days(因前面有nowadays可以省去) all over the world. One of the questions under debate is whether the best way to improve the quality of education is to increase teachers' salaries. Some people are in favor of the statement, whereas, others express suspicious suspicion about the claim. From my perspective, improving increasing the faculty's salaries is indeed a significant way to enhance the quality of education, but it is too hasty to say it is the best one.

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On one hand, there is no denying that increasing the teachers' salaries is helpful to enhance the quality of education. (总觉得enhance the quality of education比较别扭,improve 肯定没错) Firstly, the advancement of teachers' compensation may assure painstaking teachers a more comfortable life and can alleviate the pressure of life. With more money in hand, teachers are able to lead a desirable life, physically materially as well as mentally. Consequently, the sufficiency of their life will bring about more pleasure and more passion for their work. They can devote themselves into the crucial education cause (我不明白什么叫crucial education cause) more thoroughly, which benefits the breakthrough of education remarkably (which may generate the breakthrough of education 原句我觉得很别扭，但是也说不出错). Secondly, the increasing payment may appeal attract more people to education. With the intense driving of money Driven by the desire to earn more money, a growing number of people are likely to choose teachers as their vocation. For example, provided that the salaries improved, it is not hard to draw the picture that elite graduates from colleges may choose to become teachers. (It is easy to conjure up a picture in which elite college graduates choose to become teachers due to the improved salaries. – 我能想到的改法)
Undoubtedly, with the participation of excellent talents（excellent talents不重复吗）, the educational field would make soaring development. It is conspicuous that a favorable choice to improve the quality of education is that increasing teachers' compensation.' h) }
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On the other hand, although increasing the salaries does exert positive impact on education, still, it does not necessarily mean that it is the best way. A variety of optional measures can be adopted by the authorities to foster promote the development of education. An apt example is the following case. Through twenty years' of persistent, consistent and systematic training of teachers, Chinese education has made gigantic progress, which can be partly exemplified by the increasing number of Chinese students who become champions of diverse international competitions. Further lending credence to my position (不明白)is that Chinese government augments the proportion of fund to guarantee the construction of underlying yet essential infrastructure and facilities. Consequently, those effective and far-reaching measures bring about more opportunities for students to be exposed to the state-of-the-art product and technology such as computer and Internet, which definitely equip students with vast horizon and invaluable knowledge. Thus, these, indirectly, to a large extent, nurture the advancement of education. 5 A( f# X! T( J# C5 S, ~
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Admittedly, increasing teachers' payment is of great importance to develop education. However, without the essential improvement of the quality of teachers, which mostly relies on the regular training, and the advancement with the infrastructures, how can education fulfill its real growth?

To sum up, to improve the quality of education, increasing the teachers' salaries is not necessarily the best method, though it is also critical and urgent. Only combining with various approaches simultaneously can we achieve genuine advancement in education.
总结：1. 层次很分明，思路很清晰，向你学习~
2. 有一些词的用法和表达比较令人迷惑，我试着改了，也不知对否。

luyandaUID: 2564608

我感觉楼主的作文问题很大啊，为何底下都是一片夸奖赞叹之声

楼主的作文给我最大的感觉遣词造句故作繁复，一些很容易讲清楚的问题，用各种句型绕着弯说，尤其是每篇文章的开关，基本上有价值的就只有最后一句观点，前面全是绕着弯的废话，你这样考官看了开头就没兴趣看你的文章了。

我觉得如果要改楼主的作文，不应该像楼上各位，改些词汇啊，语法啊，应该是从整个结构上做一个彻底的改变。

我看了你大多数文章，有感而发，有可能言重了，我只是就事论事，楼主别往心里去