14号的T，求大大们批一下作文

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题目是：Do you agree or disagree: Advertisements waste money and time of companies

because consumers know what they want to buy.

Currently, the issues of advertisement is much concerned to a point where a wide discussion has been aroused. A common belief is that advertisements waste money and time of companies
because consumers know what they want to buy. In taking various factors into consideration, to large extent, I stand on the opposite of this claim and reckon that it assumes a distortedly narrow view.
I have to concede that the bad influence of too many advertisement, at a certain degree, should not be overlooked. But there are three reasons certainly contribute to support my point.
In the first place, the inherited nature of against advertisement determined a multitude of fatal defects that run the risk of messing up our lives. It is almost a impossible mission to image a world no advertisement available.
As it is known to all, with the ever-accelerated updating of science and technology, the upgrade of electronic products is rapidly. For people who want to buy a new model of mobile phone, it is ridiculous to go to the factory, which may located in UK, to ask if it has been produced already. According to a survey by News Weekly, 75% of people claimed that they benefit a lot from advertisements.
In the second place, people against advertisement seem to fail to take into account the fact that advertisements always serve as the key of sales. Companies will get nowhere if they only rely on consumers to find out what they want and if they have been produced already. Take computer for instance, consumers will not be inspired to but a iPhone4 if they totally don’t know whether it has been produced, which mean the company will probably not benefit from new inventions.
The last but not the least, there is no denying the fact that advertisement is not only a method of rising sales but also a method to improve a company’s impression on consumers. A good advertisement of their products will put companies in a favorable place in the competitive market, which means they will probably have a much more considerable returns than those not. This is why a lot of large companies such as IBM, Microsoft and BMW, place so much emphasize on advertisements.
From what have been discussed above, we can safely draw the conclusion that the claim
advertisements waste money and time of companies because consumers know what they want to buy is ridiculous. What’s more, it is high time for us to took the importance of advertisement into consideration.


自己水平有限，实在是不知道怎么改了，还请高手指教，小弟先谢过了

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不好意思，粘贴过来的，好像第一段和最后一段有断开的地方，从I have to concede 之前都是第一段，From what have been 是最后一段，抱歉了