1000被拒，移民倾向，贴上学习计划，请大家帮我分析分析

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StudyPlan

My name is XXX. Iplan to study the MBA program of University of Saskatchewan. Beloware my study plan in Canada and my career plan in China.


1.
My education and professional backgrounds
In2006, I obtained a diploma in Computer Technology from East China NormalUniversity, worked as a data operator at the current American-invested companythat mainly engages in the development and sales of software products and startedto study at Shanghai International Studies University majoring in English. I waspromoted to the project manager in 2010. I develop project plans, calculateproject cost/time, cultivate and strengthen co-worker and client relationships,and manage a team of analysts and data operators to accomplish various projects.In 2010, I obtained my Bachelor of Arts degree in English from ShanghaiInternational Studies University. The English proficiency credentials increasemy strength and the competitiveness in the company.

2.
Why I choose this country, school and the program?

MBAoriginates from North America. Canada is rich in educational resources and outstandingin educational quality. It is a more cozy and harmonious environment than othercountries for intensive studying. These are quite essential for me to study ina peaceful and trustful environment.
The University of Saskatchewan is a public institution inCanada. The MBA degree that it offers is recognized internationally. Furthermore, the career-based and multi-disciplinarycourses provide students a comprehensive understanding of business fields groundedin practice. The highly international faculty team includes award winningteachers who have practical experiences from global companies. The diversified instructionmethods such as case studies have direct linkages to real organizationalpractice. These opportunities and academic resources are exactly what I need torealize my career goal as a senior manager in China.
The MBA International program of Universityof Saskatchewan requires tuition fees as affordable as $29,000 for internationalstudents. Besides, the program can be completed within 2 years and even oneyear depending on a student’s study pace. Thus, the MBA International programof University of Saskatchewan is undoubtedly a right choice for me.


3.
My overall educational objective
My educational objectiveis to construct and possess a systematic and practical knowledge system ofbusiness fields such as international business, finance, accounting, marketing andmanagement information system. I will take 3 courses per semester and completethe program in two years. Besides studying advanced management knowledge andskills, I will grasp the wonderful opportunity to cultivate a global thinkingway. I will combine my previous professional experience with the advancedknowledge and skills to generate my own management discipline and skills. Thus,I will be prepared to realize my career goal in China. Below is my study planfrom this fall to 2013.

Sep, 2011	Sep-Dec 2011	Jan-Apr 2012	May-Jun 2012	July-Aug 2012	Sep-Dec 2012	Jan-Apr 2013
MBA 830 Social Issues in Business	MBA 817 Global Organizational  Behaviour	MBA 835 International  Business	MBA 841 International  Marketing	MBA 848 AA-ZZ Travel Study Tour	MBA 810 Statistics &  Quantitative Methods for Business	MBA 815 Business Policy  and Strategy
	MBA 866 Managing  Information Systems	MBA 840 Strategic  Marketing	MBA 891  International Financial Management	MBA 865 Project  Management	MBA 816 Production and  Operations Management	MBA 833 Financial  Management
		MBA 843 Strategic Human  Resource Management			MBA 832 Accounting  for Managers

4.
Why I am not pursuing less expensive alternatives in China
The MBA education inChina is as young as 10 years, while it has been over 100 years in NorthAmerica. The MBA education in China tends to apply a lecturing teaching style,while the MBA education in North America applies various methods such as interactivediscussion, student analysis and real case studies, etc. The MBA program isconducted by leading industry experts worldwide and is taken by students with differentcultural backgrounds. Obviously, the more diversified in background thestudents have, the more they learn from their differences.


5.
The ties I have in China that will lead me to return to China following mycompletion of studies
The family bonding always matters most. My parents arearound 55 years old now. As the single child of the family, I have the firmwish and responsibility to accompany and take care of them after my graduation.My root is in China. Here I have already developed long standing client andcoworkers relationships. These are my strong supporters and valuable human resourcesin China. What’s more, I harvested plenty of friendship which can providefavorable and familiar circumstances for my career and life. These preciousresources are the bases for me to accomplish my career objective to be a seniormanager in China.


6.
The importance of this Canadian degree that will increase my chances in theChinese labor market
The industry and economy in China are developing at ahigh speed. Observing the industrial and technical labor intensive marketsituation, I realize there is a tendency that senior managers who haveexcellent management skills will be in high demand in China.
Although China has a lot of
senior managers, it still lacks excellent seniormanagers with international background who embrace global thinking ways andunderstand current business practices. According to a survey from DHDConsulting, China has a strong demand of MBA students with internationalbackground, as many as 75,000 people in the next 10 years. The competitivenessof entering recognized business schools in North America makes the supply ofthe MBA students far less than the demand of those students. Therefore, the MBAdegree will definitely increase my competitive strength in China.




7.
Futurecareer plan when return
AfterI graduate from the University of Saskatchewan , since I am familiar with the ITindustry and the city of Shanghai, I will seek jobs in the top IT or electronicproducts companies such as Intel and Philips in the Pudong financial districtin Shanghai. I will take full advantage of my human relationships resources inShanghai to develop my career plan to be a senior manager by obtaining latestand most advanced technical knowledge and experience as well as making friendswith the elites in the industry.

easonchanchhUID: 2846002

不清楚啊 PAT一下
除了My overall educational objective那段我不太看明白lz想说什么之外 其他都觉得还好..
BLESS LZ 2000过

poiulkjhmnbvUID: 3087733

刚递签的人看到这种帖子桑不起啊...内心忐忑了

bless lz 2000顺利通过！

太傻的聪明人UID: 3077443

恶心,写这么多.签证官觉得你这样说这么清楚会不会直接就认为你目的不大纯啊,你这个是MBA不是其他专业的master会比较吃亏.去看下档案看看他们VO怎么说吧,我之前也去查了你看下我的那个帖子上面的拒签具体原因你参考下吧

mikeandmoreUID: 2731645

看了一下，我觉得应该是其他什么东西让对方觉得lz有倾向吧。。。

同送了13个工作日的表示紧张……

cici_57UID: 3006381

我已经15个工作日了 哭...

brycholeUID: 2997885

分了好多个点啊。官方的不是只列出三个点么？

“The ties I have in China that will lead me to return to China following my completion of studies”

我觉得这句有点刻意... 我觉得按照使馆要求分三点写好了...  BLESS!

easonchanchhUID: 2846002

7# brychole

是三点吗？怎么我看的提纲是和lz一样的....

brycholeUID: 2997885

7# brychole

是三点吗？怎么我看的提纲是和lz一样的....
easonchanchh 发表于 2011-6-10 18:29

啊？？？你们在哪里看的啊？ 我只看过下面的：


You must attach a study plan to the application, written by you. It will normally be 1 page in length. It should address the following issues:
• Why you wish to come to Canada to study at the school and in the program for which you have been accepted;
• Your overall educational goal;
• and How this Canadian diploma/degree will increase your employment chances.

easonchanchhUID: 2846002

Plan of Studies
It will normally be 1-2 pages in length
It should address the following issues
        Why you wish to come to Canada to study at the school and in the program for which you have been accepted
        What is your overall educational goal
        Why you are not pursuing less expensive alternatives in China (what are those alternatives? have you investigated them?)
        What ties do you have to China that will lead you to return to China following your course of studies?
        How will this Canadian diploma/degree increase your chances in the Chinese labor market?

这个是中介给的 但是我记得我去翻过 也是这个，，很多之前的童鞋们都是这个写的吧...难道是更新了
现在只要一页 那我不是写太多了

brycholeUID: 2997885

10# easonchanchh
应该是更新了吧。

bombuebueUID: 3011256

LZ的资金有问题么？

alicecarolUID: 2598586

我发表一下我的观点：

第五条，tie太弱了，写的比较模糊，这个理由谁都有啊

————纯属个人观点，仅供参考

sallyspaUID: 3102667

LZ的资金有问题么？
bombuebue 发表于 2011-6-10 20:45

资金没有被勾出来，存款历史，数额都足够，也解释得清楚。主要还是学习计划的问题吧。

bombuebueUID: 3011256

楼主还提到了国内的不好，虽然就那么一句。。。但是感觉还是不要提这个比较好吧。。。